Harry is slowly weakening because something is meddling with his past. He can only be saved if he is sent back, on borrowed time, to correct it. But is there more than his own life at stake?
And when he returns, will everything be the same as when he left? A story about trust, friendship, romance, and second chances.
Harry's seizure in Potions Class sounds a bit like an anxiety attack. I'm curious to see what manner of affliction is causing his weakness, because certainly, "frail" has never been a word used to describe Harry in the series. Especially curious is Snape's involvement in this. The exchange with Lucius sounds very much parallel to the Spinner's End chapter in HBP.
I think that, apart from some grammatical and stylistic changes (sorry, I'm nitpicky), the chapter is very engaging. I hope you come up with a next chapter soon.
Author's Response: I hope you enjoyed the chapter! I have to admit, I really can\'t remember the Spinner\'s End chapter, it\'s a long time since I read HBP! I have a few ideas about where this story is going, but nothing concrete yet. I haven\'t got plans of updating soon, at least not at the moment! I\'d be interested to know what grammatical and other problems you think the chapter had? I tend to get stuck in my ways, and probably a bit lazy with my writing, and I\'d love to have your opinion! Thank you for reviewing! Jen :o)