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A Blues for My Father by Tabletop_Joe
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 34]

Summary: Set post-HBP. Hermione hasn't seen her parents since the Quidditch World Cup. Now an enigmatic letter has sent her back to London, alone, without Harry or Ron... Will she be able to come to terms with her past as the Order makes its first moves against the rising darkness? Rated Professors for drinking, fighting, swearing, and other grown-up stuff.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 54577 Chapters: 12 Completed: No
06/29/06 Updated: 09/27/11

Reviewer: paracelsus Signed
Date: 11/19/07 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Everything Happens To Me

The story is progressing well. I was disappointed that JKR disposed of Hermione's parents so summarily in HPDH. I felt that Hermione's character development suffered as a result. You are raising some of the issues that JKR glossed over.

However, this chapter was not one of your better ones. The scene where Maude sits and reviews her relationship with her daughter was too long. You should keep the action moving and give us the back story in bits and flashes. You did much better with Travis.

Author's Response: That was something I struggled with. The problem is that there\'s not much happening with Maude at this point. She\'s a captive, left sitting in the dark, so of course she\'s going to think. Much more of the story involves Travis and Hermione\'s interaction and relationship, and so I\'m able to spread things out across several chapters. With Maude\'s plotline, there\'s much less movement and action. She\'ll show up again later, and she still has a pivotal role to play. The mid-story hump is pretty much out of the way now. Thanks for taking the time out to review. In the words of Groucho Marx, \"They can\'t all be gems, folks. You just have to follow along.\"

Reviewer: paracelsus Signed
Date: 02/08/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Criss Cross

This is a wonderful story. I like the way you have filled out some of the canon characters like Kingsley and Tonks.Your backstory of Hermione's family is perfect. Now that I've read it, it's hard for me to imagine her coming from any other kind of home.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. This is why I like fanficition so much: you get to fill in the holes JKR leaves in her narrative. And I\'m very glad I was able to make something you find so believable.


A Stolen Past by nuw255
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 428]

Summary: Past Featured StoryFifteen-year-old Harry Potter wakes up in his cupboard under the stairs at number four, Privet Drive with no memory of the past five years of his life. What happened to his memory? What do his strange dreams mean? And most importantly, how will he survive in a school for incurably criminal boys?

This is primarily a mystery, with a bit of shippiness thrown in here and there. Of course, if I told you WHO is involved in the shippiness, that would ruin part of the mystery, wouldn’t it?

This story takes place immediately after OotP (and thus disregards HBP).

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 61496 Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
10/06/06 Updated: 11/15/06

Reviewer: paracelsus Signed
Date: 11/10/06 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Confrontation

Of course it had to be the Pink Toad! Who else would have just the right mixture of malevolence and incompetence? You even mentionned her name at least twice in previous chapters. Very nice work.

Author's Response: Thanks! I really tried to hint at who it was without being totally obvious. I think I might have actually accomplished it. *pats self on back* Thanks for the feedback.

Reviewer: paracelsus Signed
Date: 11/07/06 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Questions and Answers

Congratulations on a well written story. Your characterization and suspense building is excellent. I think is know "whodunnit." Vernon obviously had a hand in it but he would need a witch or wizard to cast the charm. So, who is there in the magical world who might actually get along with Vernon?

Author's Response: You have just asked the question of the day! Will it be answered in the next chapter? Only time will tell....


A Past Reclaimed by nuw255
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 1455]

Summary: Sequel to A Stolen Past. Please read that story first, as this one really won’t make sense if you don’t.

Harry Potter has rejoined the Wizarding world after a year-long absence, but still has no memory of his time at Hogwarts. Will he ever get his memory back? Will he be able to pass his classes without it? And most importantly, will he ever be able to defeat Lord Voldemort? Read on as the last of the mysteries introduced in A Stolen Past are finally revealed.

This is a story of friendship and mystery, with a healthy dose of H/G thrown in for good measure.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 129677 Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes
11/15/06 Updated: 03/17/07

Reviewer: paracelsus Signed
Date: 03/16/07 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34: Battle at the Ministry

Well written but a bit disappointing. Harry deserved a more dignified death. A tragic hero shouldn't meet his end through a minor slip up and die thinking , "Oops, I shouldn't have done that." He should be crushed by overwhelming odds or undone by a serious mistake which flows from a tragic flaw in his character.

Author's Response: You put it so eloquently: \"Oops, I shouldn\'t have done that.\" All I can say is that I hope chapter 35 will alleviate your disappointment.

Reviewer: paracelsus Signed
Date: 12/16/06 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Trial

An excellent chapter, but I do have one small quibble. Dumbledore is very strict about addressing people with proper respect. (He insists that Harry refer to Snape as Professor Snape.) He would not have addressed Fudge by his first name during a trial. He would have used 'Minister' or 'Mr. Fudge.'

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I understand what you\'re saying about Dumbledore using Fudge\'s first name, but it actually is something I did on purpose as a somewhat subtle method of reminding Fudge of his place. Of course, you\'re free to disagree with me on that one, as it\'s really a matter of opinion. I\'m glad you\'re reading carefully enough to notice that sort of thing, though.

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