Right, so something about me. I'm 19, I'm about to begin my second year at University, and I am a Politics student. Hobbies? Well I love to read, I like rock climbing, gig-going (but for a select few bands), drinking tea (earl grey, milk - no sugar) and writing.
I am a Snape addict, a circumstance introduced and encouraged by the writings of Vocalion, EllieK and Grainne.
I am the proud beta of the following authors:
the nutty imp
I'm sorry if I haven't included you and I beta for you - I will add you!
AS for writting heres how the updates go for the stories I have posted:
Between The Realm of Dreams And Reality: I recently posted a chapter... however, nothing has been written since, I'll start working on it as soon as an idea pops into my head.
To Shatter the Soul of a Slytherin: I have most of chapter two written, its awaits an ending, but will probably be up soon.
Play the Game... of Love: Doesn't have anything written for the next chapter, I'm afraid. Though I've had a little inspiration.
Lost in Time: Is moving along nicely, I have part of the next chapter written, I'm just deciding how something should happen, and where it should go from there, The stroy itself is actually coming to a close and will probably have two or three more chapters left.
Alas! I thought we had an end to such undescribable acts! Snape going grey? Never. And You have Dumbledore down to a dot! You do as ever have me entralled in your stories... I hope this won the contest... if it didn't I'd just love to see the winner! *Bows* You have my complete admiration Ms Grainne, as ever I must thank you most graciously for reducing me to tears of laughter... I really, really enjoyed that one!
Author's Response: *Curtsies* Thank you, Orlaith! I did not get it entered properly in time for judging; it was more just for fun like. The honors went to the fabulous LariLee. If you want to be reduced to tears even further (and are over 18), go read her works (and all the other entries) archived at Sycophant Hex (Occlumency Archive) under the "TPMM Challenges: Snape's Birthday" category.
That was incredibly sad, that he only saw the error in his ways at the very last moment. I liked the way you illustrated the poetry with sections of conversation inbetween. You successfully showed the depth of tehir bond and how far it went.
There were several spelling mistakes and grammatical errors, but it was wonderfully thought out.
I like the last stanza very much tears prickled in my eyes as I read:
"I once told you that I am not brave. I never knew that I was wrong, I stood tall and your life I saved. To you my brother, I bid thee so long."
Well done, I rather enjoyed that!
Brilliant. The stark and seemingly bluntness that fare so jaggedly but so damningly beautiful throughout, really drew me into this. I rather liked this take on Dementors. The dark nature just echoes so perfectly from start to finish. Again I'm at a loss looking for punctuation, though it is undoubtedly well structured. This one has a set amount of lines in each stanza, a hidden depth to its words, though, the poem talks of emptiness, we're looking at the unexplored depths of dementor personality - fabulous!
Oh bravo! This was absolutely beautiful! Wonderfully structured, I thought the subtelty that courses through was great. The descriptive depth is good considering the length. I particularly liked the last two lines:
"Ahead may lie unruly waters, foaming against their forging prow But finally love, victorious, rises, above them both, to take a bow.
A very smooth ending indeed!
There appears to be a lack of punctuation, but that may not be a problem, I really enjoyed this one.
The Ties That Bind:
This reminded me somewhat of the poem on the doors of Gringotts! Particularly the 2nd stanza which made me think it was almost dagger like in your choice of vocabulary. The rhyme is very tasteful! Again a lack of punctuation, but it really doesnt take much from the way the poem is presented - well done!
I think here you have captured death by the curse with terrifying beauty;
"And death will die a thousand times While I will face it one time only And as I hear the gentle chimes Of a bell discordant, ringing lonely"
Particularly jumped out at me, it was really quite touching. I noticed a return of punctuation - Wonderful. I really enjoyed all three - Cheers!
The Log-in issue is driving me mad. I'm here to judge and review. I liked the poem its free style leaves little room for critism as such, but it did leave me feeling a little disorientated - it struck me by the end that it was supposed to, matching the furiously jerky movement of the bus itself (I laughed myself silly then). My favourite stanza was: " A few more bumps and a close collision with an old dear and you can get off to have your much-needed butter beer." I think if I'd travelled on the bus that I could relate to that need...
I'm going to be a bit picky here - feel free to give me a virtual slap - but you call it "Ode of the Knight Bus, By Stan Shunpike, I don't think that was necessary, particularly as it doesn't really use a great deal of Stan's vocabulary... I did how ever like the rhymes, and the structure very much. A well written poem throughout!
Alas - I found the childish insulting nature of this poem amusing! Here you have your traditional rhyming poem with a hint of grease and trouble, it was great.
I found it became a little bumpy after your superb opening stanza, but you picked up the pattern nearing the end. I would have liked to hear more of the Maurauders exploits in their on going torure of Severus, I particularly liked your mentioning of the chair!
I can almost vision them writing something like this, though no doubt Moony would be a little ruffled by it all! Well done - Good Job!
I'm afraid that was bloody hilarious! I'm still laughing. Oh god, I don't know what else to say, that was great. I'm still sniggering ... Cheers dan, you've made my day.
Author's Response: Ta Petal. xxx
Right - I'm here to judge! I found this to be a rather unusual poem, though I enjoyed it immensly. I like the narrative types, and the story you depicted was stunning. I couldnt help but notice it's shape was rather like the UK's population pyramid, but forgive a geographer for noticing that sort of thing... it doesnt take away from my opinion or this poem.
I think that its well written and is epic in its own right, though, I noticed a lack of punctuation, and often a few spelling errors. You have each stanza fine tuned to reflect the type of emotion you would have us belive is taking place - an aspect I rather liked, as well as your style, writing this in a mysterious and possesive centaur fashion. Lovely work!
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and enjoyed its style. Thank you for the lovely review!
This is a rather curious poem and does indeed leave you guessing. With each stanza you can see a different aspect of this characters being, it’s interesting to see that perspective. Each line rings with guilty power, giving off a meaning that is unique yet you feel the sense that you know the feeling all too well. Bravo!
You’ve written this extremely well, and I applaud the mystery – though I find myself wanting to know who this is about. I think I know, but I could be very wrong. It flows rigidly but well, I like the descriptive nature of it, though in fact it describes more than just one thing. Very well done!
Oh brilliant! This is very much a Harry view! Very in line of how I see Harry at least. I’m at a loss as to who the other half is though. Reading it again, I think I have a clue…
I like the way that it gets a little more intense with each line of each stanza, the passion runs rampant throughout. The wording is well put and the way you repeat phrases has a positive impact on the way the poem is received. I was able to feel the desperation, almost that lingers every time its says “I can only love you - in silence.” It really adds to the compelling nature of the piece.
I think you've made a great start. I like the character you introduce as Deidre - I think it'll be interesting to find out whats really behing that all. Also, I think it woudld be good to see the rest of that letter to Lucius, how far does Draco take it? Well done, I must say, the commas look lovely ;) Well done!
I like this very much! That its being told from Lavenders point of view, to Tonks's mysterious secret. I'm still guessing I can't put my finger on it, but it triggers a hok, and I'm stuck. The characterisation for lavender is great. Its a shame they couldn't send Hermione to Beaubatons.... Well done, Patrick! I very much enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thank you! Tonk's secret... well, you'll have to wait a while... she won't be found out for a little bit. :-) Thanks for reviewing!
Oh I really like this - quite original really, expanding on the Wagga Wagga Werewolf. I absolutely loved the toilet scene - the description was great, I found much humour in a humourless place... I'd definately like to see more. Nicely done!
I finally got around to reading this! (Though I have to go back to work in a minute so this might be brief) Absolutely fantastic, I think you described the emptiness, worry and desperation of Pansy extrordinarily well! I think its interesting to see things this way, we're all so accustomed to seeing her as a cold, heartless b**** and to see her weakened is portrayed perfectly here.
As you knwo I'ma nut to description and I absoluetely adores the flashes of Draco/Pansy moments, the minute details and intimacy that they shared despite their relative youth seems so right for people of their standing and right down to the colours and curtains, and even her friendship with the House Elf was top notch! I'll have to read more later! Well done and keep it up!
Author's Response: Hi, Orlaith! Glad you stopped by to check this story out. I know your busy with your FYMOC reports. (*sniggers*) Yes, in my opinon, Pansy is just a pure-blood, Syltherin with all the hopes and dreams of a young witch. Those Draco/Pansy flashbacks are fun to write. There will be more in later chapters. Thanks for the flattering comments. I hope you do read the rest. - SIW
This is really good! I like the fact you've stuck to your guns and decided Snape is a goodie (I'm of that opinion too!) This is extremely well written, the scene and atmosphere are set with ample description and you really can see past the words into the situation.
Your characterisation is well founded, Snape's dialogue, though more 'frivolous' than we're used to is really well done - as we normally see him speak as a teacher, I imagine that his dialogue ourside with perfectly in sync with yours. One think I did notice was a thought of Snape's that he thought he still was to be put to some use, really thoughst should be put in italics. Bellatrix is well written too!
Well done on a fantastic first chapter, I'll definitely read on!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. I am glad you like my characterization of Snape. There are so many different ways that he could be portrayed, and I am sure everybody has been offended in some way by someones portrayal. I like my Snape, but I have to keep a tight rein on him sometimes. He tends to want to get away from me and do his own thing. I think that what people tend to forget when reading my story, is that Snape has been locked in this house for over a year, all alone, with only infrequent visits from someone who only wants to use him to elevate herself. That amount of time alone would tend to change, and I think, soften a personality, even one as rough as Snape\'s. (I am trying not to give anything away, because once I have written a chapter I tend to assume that you all have seen it too. But chapter 7 is still with my beta.) So I guess what I am counting on is for readers to understand that Snape has undergone a bit of a change. He hasn\'t had anyone to snark at in a very long time and I think he is a bit off balance, and confused by the fact that he actually wants, ney, desires the company of another. You will see. Keep reading. ;)
I am... so impressed! This is possible one of the best pieces I've read in a long time! I love the merging of wizarding and muggle society - and an almost flawless knowledge of London itself! The little comments by Mr. Malfoy and Dumbledore were a stroke of brilliance - you managed to represent Dumbledore in that one line down to a toe!
Author's Response: Thanks! I love getting reviews on the little aside stories like this one -- especially such a nice review! And I must confess that I\'ve never been anywhere near London; everything came from the lovely links Jan posted with the challenge. Research is a fine and wonderful thing...
Author's Response: In fact, Jan\'s links bunnied the story in the first place.
Geronimo! I seriously laughed so hard reading this! It's like your worst nightmare rolled into something hilarious - and it really is fantastic!
There's not much to be said other than that the title is perfect (as is the punctuation and grammar usage! Hurrah!) I really found Angry Harry hilarious, more of him in chapter to come please!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Yes, I quite like the title, it\'s a bounce off \'Fast Food Nation\' actually, a non-fiction book about (can you guess?) the American fast food epidemic. Angsty Harry is a large part of chapter 3, which will be sent to The Queue soon. Did you read chapter two? I see this review is for chapter one... anyway, glad you liked it! :)
This is very interesting... I like the idea's you put forward here. Wandless magic is supposed to be difficult, but this seems like a magical ability - like being a metamorphamagus - and it definitely suits Draco's nature and character. I really like the way you demonstrated his torn state of mind - that he's arguing with himself certainly fits with the canon portrayal of his 6th year, and then how a the end you show the human part of him - his love for his mother and feelings for Pansy - it shows the uncertainty we as readers feel about Draco.
I definitely think you should consider carrying this on - it's got enourmous potential as a chaptered piece!
Really well done! I thoroughly enjoyed that!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! A chaptered piece...maybe...I\'ll think about it.
That is gorgeous! It sent a tickle of goosepimples up my arms and down my back... I really like your portrayal of Regulus, as we see him in canon theres a lot of uncertainty in rRegulus himself and you show that and almost give reasons for it... Sirius seemed very much himself, but you can't help but think why after so many years Sirius remained negative of his little brother - well apart from the fact he was a DE.
You set the atmosphere, it was beautifully sad, melancholy, and you weave this just by describing the interactions between Regulus, Sirius and their surrounds and it's really very successful!
I'm really glad I found this!
i love the song, which was what made me read it, but you've bent it well to your own plot and it carries the reflective *sadness/thoughtfulness* of the song really well - and of course Ron is perfectly suited to having that sort of forgetfulness. Really well written! I thoroughly enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. That is so sweet. Green Day absolutely rules!