Thus far, my only forays into fanfic have centered on Snape--barring Harry, I find him the most interesting, complex character JKR has created. I welcome feedback of any kind, as do most authors, so go read a story and review!
What a wonderful premise--I like how you have gone back and forth between Harry & Snape's POVs. Well-written, and I can't wait to see where things go...
Aw, Snape's got a kitty...and I bet he is just dying thinking of Potter going through all of his stuff! Very funny.
Loved the bit with the hair!
And, yet again, I must say that I loved the bit about the hair! If Snape and Harry can understand one another's coiffure woes, then there is hope for them after all!
Ah, hilarious! Good old McG. I , however, would not want to find out what the real Snape would do were he called "Snapeypoo" to his face! Cheers for this story!
Vocalion, I am standing in the front row, clapping! You truly have a brilliant ear for dialogue (and you slur Latin beautifully). I have frightened most of the inhabitants of my house by laughing madly at this chapter (not to mention the clapping). And beneath all of the hilarity, the story of Snape (as your typical guy bollixing up the first time) and Clancy (woman struggling with attraction, compassion & disappointment) remains utterly human (or wizard!) and charming.
Author's Response: Thanks, Grainne. Slurring Latin is easy; finding the proper translation is the hard part. Thank heavens I had a little help. ;) I'm very glad the humanity came through. Your encouraging words are very much appreciated.
Ma'sh allah! After the second (okay, 3rd or fourth) read-through, I am struck by the aptness of your depiction of Dumbledore as playwright/director...all of Hogwarts as a stage, and poor Snape and Clancy merely players. I also give you all sorts of praise for putting Snape in physically uncomfortable situations (e.g. the carpet-smashing!) For all of his stalking and smirking and robe-billowing, he (as written) does not seem a man at ease with his own physicality. Your story highlights this beautifully (and hysterically), but gives him Clancy's loving attentions to soften to awkwardness...well, not at the moment, but she'll come round, won't she? I will mention no more Jarvey names here, as I feel I've already submitted my share, but I would encourage other readers to do so--Vocalion's poems are something special. They have been known to sway the hearts of men and/or make women want to pee their pants laughing!
Author's Response: Thank you, Grainne, and for today, at least, I seem to be able to respond to reviews. Hope it lasts!
The Great Snapini and his darling Clancy
have convinced me to take a chance-y.
I'll bare my toes and get them wet
by venturing onto Mugglenet!
I offer my poor rhyme as thanks for the tip about this site; now I can read you in two places while waiting for updates--hooray!
Author's Response: Welcome aboard, I'm glad you're here. The water's fine, so have no fear. Squidbait Returns and Potter's Bar, will be among the best, by far! So readers, kindly have a read, of Grainne's fine work; it's great, indeed!
And "highly" time to see this gem of a story featured on Mugglenet! BRAVA! *doffs cap to Ms. Clancy Norgard, occasionally kilt-clad and whipped cream-covered Snape, and their RUE TRUE DAFT HUG ;) * [However do you do it? It takes me ages and I can't even make a proper phrase!]
Author's Response: I am responding to this two weeks late, but thanks for being the first to notice this and alert me!
You've added a lovely little moment into canon, with a great twist of humor at the end--well done!
Very amusing--and I am so pleased to see the squid getting in on the fun! I'm rather partial to the overgrown cephalopod. Brill!
Having a horrid day & needed a laugh, so decided to revisit your sublime offering. I think you succeeded in the challenge, and then some. Delightfully naughty rhymes...tender scene with the toy train...wicked fun with the hexes....Vocalion, you have mastered the greasy git; The Great Snapini is a hit!
Author's Response: Sorry to hear you're having a horrid day, but I'm glad you popped in to have another read. Thanks, Grainne!
Oy, Obadiah--I didn't know this was over here! You should keep posting...go on, do...this site needs more Snape, and everyone could use a little (or lot of, as Snape's case may be) Rosie in their lives.
Author's Response: Oy, Grainne - what are *you* doing here?? Lol, apologies, couldn't resist one of those wonderful, cliched comedy moments! Yes, Mugglenet-Snape does need some more Rosie - he's sent me an email complaining and everything! I'll do my best to update! Thanks, Grainne!
Atta girl, Rosie! You're in for a bumpy ride, but you won't have to worry about losing him to those tarts in Coventry (right?) *“They say sarcasm is the lowest form of wit."* Well, I'm crawling along on my belly then, but laughing all the while. Glad you decided to update here!
Author's Response: Oh, the irony...it's bizarre that there seem to be three separate Rosies floating around, all leading scarily similar lives. Who said fate doesn't exist? No, no tarts from Coventry, Grainne *whistles through her teeth* (Bloody hell, how did you find out about the upcoming plot twist??)
Ta failte romhat!
Author's Response: Aww, go raibh mile maith agat. (this could go on for a while...)
Lovely satire! I'm so pleased you gave in to the urge to write it...and I will forever remember to put marshmallows in Voldemort's cocoa.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Voldie's very happy with you. btw, my sister's name is Grainne too, when I saw your name I was like, "Woah, how did she find my story?!!!" Well, I'm sure you don't care much about that....thanks for the review!
Well, you tell your sister that she has a fine name...and that she SHOULD be reading your stories! They are good for the gut muscles, and besides, what are sisters for?
Author's Response: Well she's only ten.....I don't think she even knows how to use this....what is it again? A computer? That sounds weird..... Anyway glad to hear I'm good for the gut muscles! One more thing off the list.......
Maith thu! The scene with Lupin, Snape, Ron, etc. was brilliant. Poor thick chaps! I will be sad to see this end, but am eagerly awaiting what I know will be a grand, grand finale.
Author's Response: Thank you - phew, I better start planning a grand finale then! lol
Another howler! (As in, howling with laughter, not the bad kind from the books). I adore brat-Harry and learning of the Order's true mission...and who knew DADA stood for "Dancing Against the Dark Arts"? Brilliant...and likely just as effective as wand-waving...you know how Dark Wizards HATE anything with a catchy beat!
Author's Response: YAAAY!!!!!! I'm so glad you caught on to the dancing against the dark arts - it's a big part of chapter four...which means....chapter three has been submitted!!! Thank you so much - I'm really glad you're enjoying this.
And what more could we want out of this chapter than what you gave us? The long-awaited DADA lesson (hilarious!) and Snape with marshmallow goo in his hair teasing wee potty Potter...Death Eaters loose in the streets singing the cookie song. I'm so happy to see this bit of fun updated!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you. I was a bit worried that my wonderful reviewers (sighs dreamily) wouldn't really like this chapter as it's a bit different to the ones before.... but this so called plot must advance! Thank you.