Hey all! I'm a hyperactive girl named Laila who loves music, reading, and playing soccer.
Age: Finally 13. Took long enough.
Favorite ship: Well, I'm an avid Lily/Marauder era character (besides Peter) shipper. I also enjoy D/Hr, Severus/Lily, Neville/Luna, and many other unconventional ships.
Fav HP character: I really like Regulus, Sirius, Remus, Draco, Tonks, and Hermione. There isn't much on Regulus, but I like him anyways.
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Colorful and slightly philophetic (this isn't a word, is it? Meaning having to do with philosophy... In my little world, anyways). A nice insight into Violdemort's life. Great job!
Author's Response: I believe the word is philosphical, But bleh, you should ask Remus. Thank you for reading my fic!
Aww, this is so very sweet! Er, but was it intentional that half of this became italicized? Or am I just missing something?
I love your characterization of Remus and Sirius. They're just so... excellent. You show their faults as well as their strengths. This is just so sweet. Great job!!!
Thank you so much!
The italicization (?) was a mistake and is now corrected. Thanks for pointing it out!
This is a great poem! It has wonderful rhythm and lovely flow. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Woohoo! You updated! I've been waiting impatiently for this (even though it wasn't a very long wait).
I liked how you made Draco. He was not the least bit OOC.
But there was one thing I noticed. In the sentence 'I knelt with the rest kissed the Dark Lord’s cloak with the rest of the Death Eaters', you repeated rest twice. andyou didn't have an and between the first rest and 'kissed'. But other than that, everything looked good.
I don't want to end this on a bad note, because it was really good. Awesomeful job!
Author's Response: Yeah - sorry about that sentence; that whole paragraph got re-written and I messed up, but I\'ll fix it.
*winces* Oooh, Draco's in for a rough time; everybody's going to give him absolute hell!
Well, I must say, you have kept the flow of this story going superbly. The idea is so fresh and original, and it is just marvelous! Excellent work on your part!
Author's Response: *grins and shrugs shoulders bashfully* Thank you.
Wow, this is so painful and powerful. I nearly began to cry by the end. You captured the scenes perfectly and with such emotion, too. I felt as though I was watching it all happen *shudders* .
I loved your characterization of Cho. However, I was slightly surprised that she wasn't ever crying hysterically. We learned she let her 'sad' emotions get the better of her in the fifth book. Did she grow out of it?
I'm so glad I clicked the link to this on your siggie. I was blown away by the extravagance of it all. All in all, excellent work!
Author's Response: I can\'t believe the siggy thing actually works...About Cho, I guess you could say she has used up all her tears ;). Thanks so much for the review!
*sobs unabashedly* This is just so wonderfully sad yet sweet, especially for a first fic.
I love how you made Roxanne very believable. She has her faults along with her strengths, and you made her a Slytherin instead of having Draco end up with a Gryffindor (because if he's good, he must be a Gryffindor, say some authors).
However, there was a part where you repeated yourself. "Draco smiled slightly at the memory, but was snapped back to reality when Roxanne started to cough and shake violently." this is a great sentence, but when you repeat 'cough and shake in the next paragraph: "Her eyes were squeezed shut as she fought to make herself stop shaking and coughing" it sounds a bit odd. Also, when you say, "His scream, which was blood-chilling, erupted from him as his eyes filled up with tears", you don't have to add the 'which was'. It makes the sentence sound a bit strange. Other than that, the story goes along smoothly.
This is such a lovely fic, and I can't wait to read more like this by you! Excellent job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review, darling! *goes and edits some words* Yeah... I do tend to do that, but I\'m going to avoid it from now on! I\'m sorry I made you sob... :D Thanks again, Laila! ~Priz, from the MNFF Toaster Trio
Wow. This is just so powerful. Amazing.... I was so sad when Ginny died, but I liked the way you chose her to die. I have never read a story where she died in labor.
I noticed you spelled labor with no 'u'. The British way is with a u (ah, Briticisms, my Boggart.)
However, I don't want to end this on a bad note. I really liked how you made Lily Ginevra's eyes brown instead of green. God, in every fanfic in which Harry and Ginny have a girl, her name is Lily with red hair and green eyes. Thank you for avoiding the cliche. :D
Awesome job! An amzing piece, and I commemorate your work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That really brightened my day! :D
*giggles* Oh, this was just too cute and funny! Imagine, Rita Skeeter's assistant and Remus hooking up! Very adorable....
I'll start with my limited nitpicks ;) . “A bit of humor wouldn’t hurt anything either.” His eyes were twinkling, and I think he was only humoring me." Nice line, but in England, 'humor' is spelled 'humour'.
“You’re my favourite quality so far." I just lurved that quote. It was just hilarious. It was so honest and made me laugh insanely.
All in all, very well-written. It was humourous and fluffy without Remus being OOC. In a word, great!
Author's Response: LOL! Thank so much! I\'m glad for the nit-picking, it helps me out a lot for future references. This story actually just popped into my mind [where plot bunnies go on rampages] during a l-o-n-g day of testing. I\'m glad you enoyed it so much!
Author's Response: enjoyed*
Ron and Hermione discover this in a little bundle—or ball—of joy and hair.~This is especially written for my mongrel, Jego, and all doggies and dog-lovers in the HP Universe.
Aww, this is just so adorable! A different kind of story, I must say; this is very original. I can't wait to read about the mischief this puppy gets into!
Incidentally, I was drawn to this story by the wonderful banner you have. The puppy in it is just too cute!!
Author's Response: Thank you, Laila! And *shh* about the mischief! ^_^ Aww, the cute banner, kudos would be to my friend Edwina (Wulfric Brian Dumbledore), she makes them real fab.
Finally, something for those who have short attention spans! *grins* Love the haikus., especially The Vanishing Glass, The Sorting Hat, and Through The Trapdoor. *loves* You should definitely write more. These were so fun to read!
Author's Response: Oh, I have a feeling that I like you. :) I do plan to write more, hopefully within the next two weeks, so watch for it! Toodles, Alanna
Yes! A Lily/Sirius story! *happydance*
Ahem, okay, now that I'm done celebrating that... I love this story! It's so realistic, and neither character was OOC. Sweet without being too fluffy, this was definitely an excellent one-shot! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it!
This was just amazing. You really outdid yourself. I must say, the emotions and dialogue were perfect. Two hours??? I couldn't write like this in seven! Excellent work!
However, I felt Lily seemed a bit OOC when James insulted her. I mean, I would expect her to cry, but where was her fiery hotheadedness? She's Lily Evans! She stood up to James when he was a Gryffindor, why did she cower when he was a Slytherin? But I did like how she reacted to his more... how can I say this... playful (?) banter. She had the right amount of shyness, and my heart broke when James dissed her outright.
Also, when you said, "His feet drug against the stone floor as he found Evans amongst the black and scarlet mass", drug isn't a word (at least not in that context :D ). I'm assuming you meant dragged, though (blast those typos!).
However, not to end on a nitpicky note, this was extremely well written. Hope you win the challenge, because this fic certainly deserves it!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yes, I know I made Lily seem a bit OOC, but I was trying to make this seem as if this was the reason she became so defense in the later years...savvy? Thanks for the grammar tip as well. As I said, two hours with no beta...not a good combination LOL!
Sorry for the second review, but I noticed something else. When James said, “As if I would ever touch a Mudblood like her, no matter how good looking she is," you didn't mention that was a quote by Blaise Zabini in the sixth book. Just mentioning that little bit I forgot to add....
Great story, btw!
Author's Response: Thanks for reminding me! I knew there was something I had forgotten in my author notes!
*squishes fellow Gryffindor* Hey! I was so excited that someone wrote a Lucius/Narcissa Rondeau (one of my favorite ships), and even more excited when I read it. This is excellent! It totally seemed to describe their relationship, though I have to agree with Kate when she said it seemed sudden. Then again, it is a Rondeau, and considering how short it is, it's hard to slow down the pace. Anyways, other than that, it was beautiful, a true work of art. Good luck with the challenge!
Author's Response: Thanks, Laila! I\'m glad you liked it! CJ
I have never read a Vincent Crabbe story before. I've never even seen one before, for that matter. I never even expected to read a good one. I never have read a good one. The only one I have read was excellent.
This was that one Crabbe story I;ve read. It was so... serene. The words flowed elegantly, and for the first time I felt I understood Crabbe. Your characterizations were brilliant. You took what we knew about Crabbe and fitted them into your own fic perfectly. Draco and Snape were also masterfully done. I loved the 'Slytherin view' of Snape. It was so very realistic; he wasn't completely harsh, but he wasn't handing out homemade cookies, either.
Superbly done. You took a little-known and little-cared about character and turned him into someone I want to read more about.
XD I must say, I saw the conversation that started this, but I didn't think anyone would actually write the story. I was really surprised when someone did, but was glad that someone who could really make it entertaining wrote it. This is written so well, I love how Snape responded to her. Selina was very innocent with her, 'I think I'm dying'. This was very cute and funny!
However, I want to warn you that some people would find this offensive. Some people find this matter inappropriate, though it is a fact of life. I would suggest just mentioning it in your author's note, just in case someone who isn't prepared to see something like this gets upset by it.
Other than that, though, I found this very enjoyable. I loved when Snape had to explain how babies were made. You kept him very IC; his answers were very realistic. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind words. I do understand that people may find the material offensive despite my attempt to handle it delicatly, and hope that the warnings and ratings will serve to remind them of what the piece may contain. I\'m glad that the characters remained IC and thanks again!
*shakes head* Olivia, you still surprise me, even after the story is up. I loved your choice to switch Hermione with an OC. Not only did it help make the story longer, but it kept Hermione from being OOC. (I love Loralie, by the way. She's attractive enough, but has enough flaws to make her realistic.)
The part where little Draco and Loralie were talking was just too cute. 'She was a very pretty girl.' That just seems as though you took it straight from Draco's thoughts. I also loved the part when Draco says, “Me too! I’m five too!” It was so cute how excited they got.
All I can say about this story is that I am so proud to have been your beta. *salutes*
Author's Response: Oh, thank you Laila! I\'ve loved working with you! You\'re an amazing Beta. And to anyone else who might be reading this, pureblood.princess is a phenomenal beta, so look to her the next time you need one!
Dear, this is just excellent! *huggles* It seems even better than the first time I read it.
Author's Response: Thanks, Laila!