Been writing for: some time now.
is actually going to post her stories: really soon. I promise. ^_____^ Only I still want to fine tune them a bit.
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I'd try to guess,, but I really can't say it. This is a wonderful story, a very realistic take, and beautifully written. I could aso write an essay instead of a review, but I'll resist. :-) Fantastic, marvelous story. It deserves more than just 'tear-jerker' but that is a perfect spot for this story. Thanks for writing it! It's been my favorite Dramione for a year and it shall still be! Only sorry it took me so long to review.... :-( Oh! Wait - is that one drop meaning they'll be someone else in Hermione's life? Ack. Hope not. That'd be kind of sad.... Haha, anyway, thanks again, and wonderful story!
It;s very interesting. I never thought of it from the book's/memory's point of view. Very interesting. I'm very curious, is there any chance you can expand this into a story of all of Ginny's and Tom's times in book together?
(oh I almost forgot to add:) Great job!
Beautifully written. :-) I must admit, the heavy religious aspect of it scared me a bit, I'm not very used to it (atheist here), but the writing is so original and fantastic I got over myself. Depressing, but thoroughly amazing story! I'm glad I found it. :-)
It's Voldemort's world now: a world of corruption, betrayal, greed, and violence. A world of evil thoughts and evil deeds, where no one can be trusted, especially those closest to you.
But through it all, there must be strength. There must exist those who will stand up to totalitarian rule, who will say no when others submit, who must survive despite their condition. There must exist the resilient.
Eventual Draco/Hermione with plenty of plot. Very dark, so read at your own risk!
Hermione seems to display Stockholm syndrome like no other, and to be honest it's rather off-putting. Going for a darker story is great and can be executed very well, but in my opinion this one loses the scope of thing by devaluing somethings and then stressing other points but failing to back it up with personality changes in hermione. I was a fan of a large part of your portrayal of her in the first part of the series, but this version is incredible different--to the point that all she really seems to have in common is her name and a claim of intelligence. While she used to be strong and have a sturdy sense of self and loyalty to friends, she's rather weaker here and submits almost instantaneously and seems to have little reaction to the death of her friends--I mean, your draco was about half the reason two of her best friends are dead, possibly more, and her entire race is subjected to cruelty like rape, murder, and generally subhuman treatment but she doesn't seem to hold much against him?
in addition, the way the rape scenes were handled are sorta unsettling. She seemed to accept her fate within days and then admire the man who does it? Regardless of her situation, I think this is devaluing her own character to an extreme, and while i think that maybe can be interesting if you portray it as a development because of her being prisoner so long, it comes off more as just vaguely handled and then passed off.
I really hate flames and I'd never write one, I hope you know, and I've never expressed dislike for how a story is made before but I wanted to voice my disappointment I guess since I enjoyed a lot of what you did in the first story. The characters are too shallow here, maybe since you're focusing on plot too much to devote much time to that angle, but also the nature of it sort of turns me off to this story I guess. Maybe I"m just vindictive but that so much of what Draco's done seemed to be accepted by Hermione puts me off. :P Furthermore, the huge difference between hermione's character in the stories is a major component.
Your writing is lovely to read and I really admire how you inserted the twist in the first tale and continued it here, so I can't deny you a wonderful job there. =] my two cents, dear
Author's Response: First, I don't consider this a flame because it's full of concrit, so don't worry your head about that. Your points are well made, but I am compelled to defend against a few, so bear with me. :)
Regarding Brannon's treatment of Hermione, I think she realized quickly that fighting and resisting this man who has complete control over her will get her nothing. Her situation will not change because of it. She adapts because that's who she is (strong and with a sturdy sense of self, to use your words) and that's what she has to do. As for the "one day rape, the next day admire" claim, maybe I did not make that clear that a significant amount of time had passed between the two, which is where the Stockholm-y stuff sets in.
Another short point about your first paragraph, Hermione has gone through so many severe changes in such a short amount of time that it would be nearly impossible to deal with them all at once. So as a result, she compartmentalizes. When she was in Azkaban, it was about staying sane. When she was with Brannon, it was about staying on his good side. Survival both times, essentially. But now that she's with Draco, who knows? Those walls will eventually have to crumble and she'll have to deal with all that's been done to her by his hand. It's unavoidable.
Though it sounds like you've made up your mind about whether to continue reading or not, the next chapter I post may help to clear up some of your misgivings. But if I haven't convinced you here, then thank you so much for reading, and I really appreciate your insight.
All the best,