I decided to deleate my fanfictions and rewrite them. Thanks for the support.
I'm about to read your chapter but I wanted to say glad it got accepted. I'm on the fifth day waiting fo rmy Marauder one :(
Author's Response: don't worry... it took forever for them to get to this one. They'll get to yours eventually you just gotta be patient.
Review the chapter, It is a really good story and I like the color thing with Snape. I want to see more of the storyline where James finds out about Lupin though. After all, twenty five eyars boy is that young.
When are you going to post...
Author's Response: I've submitted a new chapter but I'm waiting for it to be rejected or put up... takes the mods such a bloody long time. I'm greatly annoyed with this site. :(
Ever since the new rules...
I've submitted a fic and I am still waiting for a response. If yours gets approved, I can't wait to read.
Author's Response: Thanks... at least someone agrees with me. Everyone else seems to get offended when I comment on how they run this site. :) Here's to hopin' they hurry up.
Where is the whole fic located?????
Author's Response: lol, www.fanfiction.net/~hfan2002, enjoy but please review if you read it there. Or you could wait until I post the rest here either way. :)
Please udate when you get the chance and if you have the time please check out "Letters from Heaven." which is my Remus Lupin fanfiction.
I loved Sirius reaction. It's different than any I have ever read.
Everything was so much in character that it is scary. It's not scary that they were in character, though most fics I read weren't which is why I dislike them so much, but it's amzing that I was reading it and thinking about how it shuld have been longer. The description of the wedding scene was so beautiful that I wished it wasn't a dream. I didn't catch any errors, though i asn't paying attention because your writing and details were unbelievable. I found an author that I like on the site besides maybe five or six others. Hope this helps you make your chapters longer. This is amzing. Great job. I loved the veil part and where Percy is missing.
Author's Response: Hehe, when I said review one of my stories cause they're short, I didn't mean the 70 chaptered one :) But, thanks anyways. Such a wonderful and glowing review - I'm very appreciative. This is the first chapter of anything I ever wrote, so yes, it is very short. Now I average 2500 words :) Thanks again, Binxy :) *smiles at new nickname for Binks*
Finally you post again, I need soemthing to read. P.S This is silver by the way just so you know.
Why must you tourment people with a cookie? Why can't you throw in the whole jar?
Don't worry, I've seen that same person write that same review on another story with James in it. Don't take it personally. They are just being a git. Somebody who only wants to flame a story.
Author's Response: I know. I guess I was just blowing off steam. ;)
This story, even with a lack of description, was very well written. You should congradulate yourself not many people could pull off a great story without messing up with too little descriptions. I liek the mystery with S.B and the fact Harry couldn't see her eyes. That way he couldn't be captured by them or mesmerized like other writers tend to write about. I don't know how he could write in italics, maybe slante,d but other then that it was a decent story. I'll give it 9/10 because while it was good without too much desriptions alittle bit more would have made it better.
Again another chapter with a lack of description but still a good storyline. Sarah isn't a Mary-Sue, at least as the reader can tell. The fact that Harry doesn't know her, and she's not in Gryffindor, is a lot better than some fics. Some description would be better but other than that 9/10.
The first thing I want to tell you is that in the start of it you're kind of repeating the same information stated in the books, and most people would rather read the books than a fanfic with the same information. I'm saying this because it's true. Also when you change to a dream try and descibe the scene some more, you want to feel what the character feels, hear what they hear, and see what they see. You want to make some emotion from the reader. That might be hard to do but keep on making your writing skills better. I can't tell you how many times I wanted to forget about writing a story because nobdoy really liked it but I've gotten better and now I get great reviews. You can get better to if you try harder. Keep trying to make your writing skills better.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. really the only thing i have to say is doesn't J.K. Recap on things she writes in the earlier books?
Don't read if you are offended with rape and abuse. Contains events that will be quite offensive and possibly "disgusting". You have been warned.
Runner Up in the Dangerous Liaisons Awards and He Had It Coming Awards.
~The story is now Complete!~
Thanks for reading!
She wished she could tell someone. Anyone but she couldn't. She was threatened. She was scared. She was helpless. There was nothing left in her. No reason to fight. She simply endured the pain, made up lies and basically ran her life through a thick happy mask where underneath she felt as though some was slowly poisoning her. (I assume you mean someone or somebody) Your story paints a picture of the things people don't normally see. YOu always hear about this subject but most people don't know what it's like for the victim (in this case Hermione) having to tell lies or fake smiles if they chose. Making Hermione the character I think was a smart move because in ways she's like your average girl: Determined, smart, and able to kick your butt if you mess with her. The way the story is described is in a way where I could and maybe other people could feel the emotional pain and confusion Hermione is going through which is brilliant. For once I read fic where I didn't hate Hermione's character for being too this or too that because she's going through such a tough subject. Draco...I don't know about him except that his attitude is in character but I don't think his actions are but that's me. Once again great way of putting a tough subject across the boards so people can see how truly confusing it is to be hurt like that.
Besides it was futile to try to get him to stop. He already took away my innocence, my reputation, my pride, my everything. What more was left? He took it all. Maybe that would be better, but I'm a coward. No, that's not it. I'm not a coward. I guess I'm still waiting for that day when this would stop. Maybe someday he'd see there isn't anything left in me and he'll stop coming. Let go. There's still hope...Somewhere. No, who am I kidding. This will never stop. This paragraph caught my attention because it shows some of the feelings certain victims feel as far as being lost and confused. Your description is fantastic even down to making the reader feel everything emotionally that Hermione is feeling. I know from reading that paragraph just how deep that feeling goes. I don't know ho this made it through but it's very descripted and gets a message to cross about how terrible things can be and how a victim feels and how they keep silent.
Actually to the last post wizards can live way over one hundred years.
Author's Response: Indeed, but since they have to be back for their fourth year...
The concept could be pulled off if it is down in a right way, if you need another Beta Reader I could help you out there.
Author's Response: Thanks.But...Ok.I could always use another beta-reader.Crap.I just sent in a new story.If only you cam earlier.Well. thanks.!
If you ever do need one my email is email@example.com
You're a Desperate Housewife fan too lol. Well you better update real soon.