Kk... My name's Katrina, I'm all about soccer, running, volleyball, horses, being a band geek, backpacking&canoeing, and of course, HP... I also have a fondness for Phantom of the Opera...
13 1/13 inch, ebony and mercury. Interesting and unusual are severe understatements for this Gregorovitch wand. You've got your own style and your own opinions, and you probably live in your own world as well. Join us down here in the real world sometimes, will you?
Wowie... I'm impressed, which takes a lot. I love how it was serious and funny at the same time... (A chocolate frog, mate!) And that made it realistic because I can't imagine them being completely sad.
Strange enough, my story is also Draco/Luna, but I haven't gotten to that part in the story... so no telling. If you have a sec, you might want to check it out, it's called "Child of the Raven."
Hey! Good job, I am reallly picky with my complements, but I found your characters acting ecactly as they should, and the plot realistic so far. My one complaint (and this is a rather personal thing) Is that you should use just a few less exclamation points. Other than that, keep up the good work.
Author of "Child of the Raven"
OK... so Avonmora and Ana are sisters and nieces of Snape? Right?
Very interesting... from what I've read it sounds like Draco's already desperately in love with Ana and Mora.... and he'll have a hard time hiding it. Can't wait to read the rest!
Author of "Child of the Raven"
Haha! This is cute, and I love how you did the charaters. Also, even though Charlotte is and OC, she still manages to have her place in the story with a defined personality.
Ohh haha.. how sweet. That made me smile, however unlikely it is.
Btw, Connor is the name of one of my best friends... I just noticed that.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading, and I\'m glad you liked it! Yeah, a couple years ago, my best friend and I were fighting over the name \"Connor Landon\". We each wanted to name a future son that name, so I thought I\'d take it first and use it as a fanfiction name! Yea, I like it too!
Hmm. Your letter definately flowed very well, starting almost formally, then ending with such anguish. That's often more than most people can, so I liked that. However, it is somewhat repetitive (perhaps if you'd taken out all references of 'Miss Me' previous to the last line?) And I can understand you don't have a lot to work with.
So good job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! I\'m glad you liked what you did... maybe I should look at the repetetiveness again, eh? :D
Haha.. the names make me laugh, however unrealistic they are...
Author's Response: Glad I got a giggle. =)
Interesting and very well developed... I like how you brought an OC into the story, and managed to get all of his feelings and hopes down in just one story.
If you ever have a spare moment, take a glance at my story, "Child of the Raven."
Author's Response: Thank you! I will.
OK... umm... this may sound critical, but these are a few things you could do to fix it up a bit:
Definately don't use Avada Kedavera with the kids. Where would they have learned it? Harry, Ron, and Hermione certainly wouldn't tell them.
The dialouge from the adults is a little kiddish too, but the kids talk alright.
Also isn't it a little odd that Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Draco (if that is Jack's father) all live in the same place? And have kids the same age?
Also, unless Draco had some sort of revelation, it must have taken alot for him to marry a muggle woman. And to name a kid Jack... that's really American.
I also noticed a few run-ons and grammatical errors. If you want a beta I'd be happy to help.
I'd like to see where this story ends up.
Author of "Child of the Raven
Author's Response: thanks for the review. also it says that draco moved to America to get away from the war, so he marreid an american muggle so jack is an ok name. also i guess that you\'re suppose to think that harry, ron, and neville wanted to live near each other, so they bought houses close by
Author's Response: ok, i will admit it. i deserved the criticism. they told me i need a beta. will you do it? please please please??
hey,, thanks for the review
i'm a little on-the-go right now but from what i read, i like your style a lot..
keep it up!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks a lot! :]! I ♥ your story as well! I\'m waiting on my humor story to be approved, then when that\'s over, a three-shot is to come, and then another chapter story! So hopefully you\'ll enjoy those if you happen to stop by again! :] ♥