Well first of all, my name is Christine . I'm fifteen years old (fifty one, if you're dyslexic), and I live in Ontario. I am also in need of an author's page update.
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Chapter Three is in the Queue!
I have a brand new story that you should check out if its accepted... The Key to my Heart a Lily and Harry fic... I'm sure you'd all like it!
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i loved this chapter! I can see why this story is so well loved! I'm teary eyed!
Author's Response: :)
AHHH!!!! I love it!!! ♥ ♥
Author's Response: Good!
OOOOHHHH!!!!!! YAYAYAYAYAYAYYYYY!!! GO HARRY!
Author's Response: This remains one of my favorite chapters. Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: I know!
oh burrnrnnnn dick!
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Author's Response: Haha, exactly!
I want Arthur to tell us what his idea is.
Author's Response: Then you better go on to the next chapter!
oh darn... i didn't even think of that! *headdesk*
Author's Response: Not many people guessed it. Thanks for the review!
i really like it! lilys had a hard life!
Author's Response: She has!
ooh! sequels are always a good idea! I can't wait. erotic moan lol
Author's Response: They are. . . . And poor Lily!
thanks so much for writing this story! Are you on the beta boards? This was awesome! It was a truly great reading experience. So goodbye, Lily, Annie, Sirius, Aunt Hermione, Uncle ron, Molly, Grandma, Grandpa, James, Leah, Uncle George, Aunt Katie, Aunt Angie, Uncle Charlie, Aunt Hannah, Neville, Luna, Richard Neverfield, and Uncle Fred...who called him Dick.
Author's Response: Thank you for all the wonderful reviews -- including this one! I\'m glad you like the story; no, I\'m not on the beta boards.
good, but I think that charlotte is a bit boring. However, that is what makes her so different from most of the OCs here at MNFF. Thoguh she's plain, she's differnt and stands out.
Author's Response: She\'s gonna get interesting soon...there\'s a twist with Charlotte heading your way. I hope you liked the story, and thanks for your review! Charlotte is one of my favorite OCs, and I personally think she is different. Thanks again!
oooh! who is it???
NOOOO!!!! you can't read your hogwarts letter to a muggle!!
this sounds great! its on my faves
aww! I never really saw Luius that deep! (cough) Correction... I have! But you portrayed his deepness so well I thought that I didn't lol! I don't even follow what I'm saying here!
Voldemort seemed really choppy. He was too quick and not very Voldy-ish. You might (and might not) want to look into that to make it better.
Otherwise, I thought it was great.
Well, no actually - Lucius - I felt didn't grieve enough. If I had just lost the two people I loved most, I probably would have asked to be killed as well. Lucius may not be like that, but I feel that you should have made him be a little bit sadder than what he was. . . d'you catch my drift?
Again, I feel that you changed subjects within conversations unnaturally.
Also, I feel that Harry would have put up a bit more of a fight when Ginny asked to leave with them. Harry is really protective, and I don't think that he would change his mind that easily.
I don't mean to criticize, but I think your story was a bit too Fanfictiony if you know what I mean. Many stories that I have read have seemed very real to me, but this one sort of seemed like fake Crocs, or Presidents Choice Coke. Not the real thing, sort of like a cheapo re-make.
Your story has a great plotline by the way, and I think it will go far.
ok... weird... but I promise that my review won't be as long as my last one.
I was just totally taken aback, when Aunt P. was glaring at Harry one minute, and being all polite and showing him pictures the next. And Dudley? A Wizzard? That was so unexplainable that my mouth dropped. Excuse this but... were you high when you wrote that???? Because there are reasons why Dudley could NOT be a Wizard.
#1. He can't see Dementors.
#2. He's never made strange things happen before.
#3. He just. . . COULDN'T!
I mean... he's DUDLEY!
I think all of your characters are really OOC, and even if you will explain later, that unless the story is supposed to be non canon, there is not an excuse for characters being OOC.
I'm surprised the mods actually activated this.
If I were your Beta (no offense to your Beta or you), and I read your story, I think I would litterally rip my hair out in frustration.
Sincerely Balded By You,
P.S: I know you said that nothing would be taken into offense but I believe that I might discourage you in some way or another. I really do not mean any offense, and I'm truly sorry for being such a harsh critic.
I guess I lied. That was probably the longest review in all of MNFF History. (excusing one that took up half a page for "From Abomination to Adoration" by grape_2010) Once again, I'm sorry for critcizing so much. I didn't realize it was your first fic. I promise that when my story gets approved, that you can butcher my thoughts to your hearts content.
Author's Response: If you are so against characters acting OOC, go write to JKR and complain about OotP! I should also tell you that authors do not appreciate their stories being compared to fake Crocs. ~Ginny Potter101 P.S If you have any other comments, email me.