My name is Teresa. I used to write a lot of fanfic. I still do, and I'm working on posting new stuff.
I loved this fic. It was such an interesting take on how to describe the future of the trio.
The fic was so interesting, even though it was in textbook form. It's great that you can read into the words on the page, to find deeper meaning in them. It's not something you read a lot; it was a great change to read something like that. It added something to the reading experience; I don’t think that I would have enjoyed it as much if it were in a different format.
The curse on the DADA job was brilliant. It sounded exactly like something Voldemort would think about doing. I would have never come up with an idea like that. I also really enjoyed that Bill was the one to discover it. You would never think that Bill would be the one to discover, but it makes sense. He was a curse breaker, after all. (And a demiwolf!)
I loved the idea of the Donec Mors Charm. It really described the power of love well. Living on without your true love has to be hard; I love the idea of dying minutes after your husband or wife does. It makes perfect sense that Harry would cast a spell like this. Harry relies on love; it is probably his defining feature, more so over courage. The spell sounds exactly like Harry. I love that Hermione used it too. It really showed how much Ron and Hermione loved each other.
“I have a well-ordered mind” - one of my favorite lines from any fic I've ever read. It's such a Hermione-ish phrase. Only someone really near to her would be able to understand it. It also reflects Dumbledore's idea that death is the next great adventure. I think it's Hermione's way of recognizing Dumbledore, though I could be completely off here.
Just one minor little nit-picks. The dates in parentheses after everyone’s name were a bit confusing. I know it's a big history book thing, but I think it would have been a little clearer if it were only birth date-death date. It's not a huge thing, though.
Also, I love that Binns was the major contributor of all the knowledge. He's probably the only person who was alive though everything, so it would make sense that he would write it. Also, we know how much he loves history. The only thing is that I'm not sure how Binns would have known all this, like how Ron and Hermione died within minutes of each other. Was all of this publicly known, or did Binns just have happen to know all these obscure facts from overhearing conversations?
Great job, though. I love most of your fics, and this one is just as great.
Author's Response: Thank you, Teresa. What a wonderful, detailed review!
I\'m glad you liked my use of the \"textbook\" form. This was actually the first fic I ever wrote, back in August-September of 2006; it was on SIYE for a few months before I started posting on MNFF. I\'m an academic by profession, and so using this \"dry\" voice was a way for me to \"ease\" myself into fiction writing. (Sorry about the excessive dates, by the way -- I was trying to make the voice as dry as I could, and I thought they dried it out quite a bit. ;))
I\'m not sure how Binns found these things out. The dates and times of Ron & Hermione\'s deaths were probably matters of public record; he is, after all, an historian. As for Hermione\'s last words, there must have been some document in which they were recorded. (I doubt that Binns would stoop to actually interviewing a witness!)
I\'m so glad you liked the DADA curse. I\'m rather proud of it. Keep your eyes peeled on my other fics, and you may see it again...
Here’s my review for the first three chapters. I'll have another for the last two later.
It's interesting the dynamic between Percy and Susan. They both are very different in the way they interact with people; Susan is more open with people, while Percy is a bit anti-social. The one thing that they seem to have in common is that bond to family. Susan is extremely close with family, as you can see by the way she is devastated by Amelia's death. Percy is also very close to his family, though his relationship is extremely strained. Susan is the way he finally is able to reunite with his family. It's interesting to see how much Percy relies on Susan. But in a way, Susan also relies on Percy. His friendship is extremely important to her; she's able to talk about anything with him.
It's interesting how Percy and Susan meet at the Ministry. It's such a central part of both of their lives. For Percy, it's everything he has. With Susan, its importance is through her aunt Amelia, who means a lot to Susan. It's also intriguing how Percy attempts to use Susan as a way to spy on Hogwarts. I don't think he meant it to offend her; he geniunely seemed to like her when they first met. I think it shows Percy's lack of knowledge and common sense. I love how Susan managed to pick up on it in his letter. It really shows her strength.
I'm not sure how Susan would know about the rift between Percy and his family. I don't think Ron and his brothers talked about it a lot, and I'm not sure if this was hot gossip throughout the Ministry. Unless Amelia was extremely close to Arthur or Percy, I don't think she'd know. It seems like something the Weasley didn't talk about to anyone except for close friends and family.
I love Percy and Susan's interaction at the funeral. You definitely can see Percy's pride and Susan's temper. They both have strong personalities, and it really comes out here. It shows both their faults, which is great. I loved Percy's letter. It was nice to see Percy get over his pride. You know that it was probably hard for Percy, so made the letter even sweeter.
Percy is definitely growing; you can see this a lot in Chapter 3. I love the idea of Percy choking out an apology; it's completely unPercy-like, but it makes sense in way. It's hard for Percy to admit he's wrong; the apology shows how hard it is. I love how Susan's stack of letters from Percy seems to increase; it really shows how their friendship is growing. I also adore the idea of their having lunch every so often. It's good for both Percy and Susan because they both seem extremely lonely.
Susan blinked and tried not to smile at the image. “Perhaps things have changed,” she said quietly, remembering her thoughts at Dumbledore’s funeral. Impulsively, she grabbed Percy’s hand. “Oh, Percy, don’t you remember what I said? We need as many allies as we can get! Can’t you see that your family is the best allie you can have?”
I love this line. It shows Susan's wisdom, and it's a perfect thing to say to get Percy to go back to his family. Percy likes having friends to support him, so the image of his family as his ally would make him want to return to his family. (One minor thing. Allie should probably be ally.)
I love the idea of Susan being the force that reunites Percy with the Weasleys. Percy needs someone to motivate him to return to his family. Between his pride and fear of being rejected by them, it's hard for Percy to go and talk to them. I love how Susan does that for him; it really adds to the relationship.
Good job so far, and hopefully I'll have another review up soon.
Author's Response: This is an amazing review, Teresa! Thank you! It means a lot to me when people really think about my characters and their motivations, and you really understand what\'s going on with these two! I think the way Percy and Arthur didn\'t talk to each other at the Ministry was pretty obvious, and I could expect Susan to overhear someone (i.e., Ron to Hermione) complaining about Percy. I\'m glad you like the story. Or at least that you thought I did a good job. Thank you! *D*
I really liked this. Susan/Draco is an odd pairing, but I think you pulled it off nicely.
I loved how Susan and Draco were kept in character for most of it. I hate reading about fluffy, romantic Draco. I liked that Draco was still his sacastic, bullying self. It sounds Draco-ish for him to sit down and taunt Susan. The only thing is I don't think Draco would go so far when tanuting Susan. I didn't really mind that, though, because it worked with the story. Susan, I felt, was perfect in terms of her characterization. She was tough, very much like her aunt Amelia. I loved how she apologized to Draco about the comment about his father. It really brought out the Hufflepuff in her.
I loved the kiss in the library. It was so awkward and clumsy; it fit the scene perfectly. The second, in the hallway, was a lot less awkward; it was very romantic.
I liked how even after Draco kissed Susan, he could still be his sacastic self. I liked his apology; Draco isn't the type to outright admit he is wrong. I also like Susan's reaction to it all. She is so uncertain of what to think of Draco. It makes sense that she would struggle with the kiss, considering that she grew up hating the Malfoys.
I really liked it overall. I thought that Draco and Susan were both IC, and the romance was nice and not overdone. Good job!
Author's Response: Wow. Thanks! I hardly know what to say after such a nice, perfect review except- you rock and thanks!
I don't ever read H/G fics. I just don't like the general tone of the category. But I love this fic. It is the one H/G that just seems to work for me.
I love the time period you write this in. Seeing an older Harry being so excited to see his wife is a heart warming image. Towards the beginning, I was smiling because of how sweet it was. Not overly sweet, but sweet enough.
When Ron asked Harry to come over, I started to get a bit suspicious. Why would Ron be so surprised that Harry had his date with Ginny?
As soon as you got into the graveyard, I started sobbing. I don't normally cry when reading fanfics, but this one made me. It is so touching that Harry would continue this tradition all years, even after her death.
I loved the roses. They symbolized their love. It was so sweet how Harry had three white roses, one for every year after her death.
I really loved this fic. It shows something about H/G that not very many authors can show.
Wow. Remus/Tonks is my OTP, and I love reading fics about them. This was one of my favorites.
I love your characterization of Remus. He seems exactly like how I would imagine him. I love the quote below because it really shows Remus's lack of self confindence, and it shows how he is feeling.
“ I have told you a million times, I am too old, too poor, too dangerous…” And his mind is screaming, I am a coward, I am a werewolf, I am dead.
The first scene was great. I love how you use no dialogue there, and how it alternates from Tonk's and Remus's POV. It is very dark.
The scene in the Hospital Wing was good also. The flashback to the night when he was bitten fit perfectly in with the story.
Somewhere he is the only child, doomed to a life of prejudice and greyness and he knows only one thing could have changed all that and that he had just let it slip away.
I loved the last line. It was so powerful, and it fit the story perfectly.
I like reading poetry sometimes, and I'm glad I found yours.
You did a great job potraying Sirius in here. His hopelessness and anger felt very real. Sirius' stay at Azkaban is a great subject for a dark poem, and I don't think this poem would have worked as well if written from the POV of a different character.
The tone was perfect. The despair and hopelessness of it fit Sirius's story perfectly. He had such a horrible life since the Potters' death, and you can see how horrible it was for him. After reading, I feel a bit sad and hopeless myself, which shows how powerful it is.
Under the curse of his own taunts,
He curled up on the floor.
Demons appeared to push him down
Until he fought no more.
Farewell, to strength; forget courage!
It faded and soon died
And his righteous spirit did emit
A shrill, anguished cry.
These two stanzas together was my favorite part of the poem. The image you get here – of Sirius slowly decaying and losing himself in Azkaban – is powerful. The language fits with the mood perfectly; it’s simple and complex at the same time. I got chills after reading this.
The rhythm was great; it flowed very nicely when I read it out loud. The rhyme was good except for once. In the third stanza, the rhyme of "sleepin’" and "weaken’d" doesn't sound right; it was a bit stretched here. For most of it, the ends of the second and fourth lines rhymed nicely, so this stanza felt out of place.
Overall, I enjoyed this poem. I don't usually read a lot about Sirius, and this was a nice change.
I loved this poem. It has a nice flow to it. While there isn't an exact meter, it still has a good, continuous flow. The rhyme is very nicely used. It doesn't have an exact pattern, but you can still sense its presence there. Its use really reflects Harry's state of mind at the time; confused and lost. It went well with the theme of the poem.
This poem shows Harry's sadness, his fear and his hope. It is a very powerful poem that really makes you think when you read it.
We drift apart,
Can’t help ourselves.
All light fades to black-blue,
And it flows, on icicle-ornamented clouds
From tense to tense, from present to past.
I loved this stanza. The imagery in there is beautiful. The picture of clouds and light fits very well with the poem. The last line shows how powerful this poem is. It really has a nice, deep meaning. It shows how their relationship is fading away.
Overall, this was amazing poem. I can't wait to read more from you.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, tis very insightful. Glad you liked it.
This was amazing.
The first paragraph about the Deathly Hallows caught my attention immediately. As I read on, I became even more curious about what Snape was talking about. Harry seems so cold and distant, after all that has happened. I never imagined that Harry would go over to the Dark Arts, but reading this made it seem so realistic.
The idea that the Deathly Hallows are part of the mind is so fascinating. Where did you get it from? It fits so perfectly with the story. I can see why it won first place.
Author's Response: To be honest, I have no idea where it came from. When I was reading the prompts, I imediately knew I wanted to make them a metaphor and something intangible. And then I was thinking of things for Snape to say to Harry in my other story \"The History of Those We Thought We Knew\" and came up with that, and thought it worked better here. :)
This poem was so pretty. I love how Snape describes his relationship with Lily. It is so tragic and beauty how you describe his relationship with Lily. I love to read poetry, yet I rarely have anytime to read it. This is one of my favorite poems on MNFF.
My plea for life accompanied by her screams.
In penance, now for her child's sake I toil.
These are my favorite lines. The image of Severus watching over Harry, the daughter of the woman he loves, is very interesting. Overall, loved it.
I really liked this fic. The bond between Harry and his daughter was perfectly written. It was very creepy, yet sweet at the same time. The erkling was creepy, and their relationship was so sweet. It was an amazing read.
Author's Response: thank you. It was hard to write a child that young being injured but I had insporation for it.
It's up. Congrats! I can't wait to see the next chaper.
This is so sad. I read your other fics about Lily's Healer career, and I loved those. But this is by far my favorite.
I love Alexander's character. He is such a believable person. Even though I knew all along he was going to die, it still made me upset when he did. I love how much he cared for his wife and unborn child.
The spell was the most interesting thing for me. I love the way the spell worked. In the books it was described as extremely powerful magic. You can see that it is from the way this is written.
I thought that this was so well written. It's great that you were able to write about your uncle's death with this. Sorry about your loss. I really enjoyed reading this.
Author's Response: OMG! Teresa! Thank you! I don\'t know how to begin! (My friend who is sitting here can testify. I am gawpping...) Thank you so so so much! I\'m really happy you enjoyed it. Really I do. I\'ll PM you later with a better response once I am no longer incapable of thinking.... ~Sunray
I loved the beginning. The romance was so good. It really lured me into the story.
I adore Lucius in this fic. He is just how I would imagine him. I loved his initial reaction to the fact that Grace is a half-blood. He is a very prejudiced man, and it makes sense that he would not be that accepting of a half-blood. I liked how his idea of love changed from the beginning of the chapter to the end. Grace's character really played a nice role here. She was his first real love, his first experience with.
To Lucius, marriage was an act of necessity, to produce children to be new links in the chain of pure-bloods. He could understand that a man would wish for his wife to be faithful, but only because of the damage a scandal could do to a respected family name. Love was a word unknown to him, and one he had no interest in adding to his vocabulary.
I thought that this showed Lucius' character very well. This is how I would picture from the books. He seems to have ulterior motives for everything he does, and this opinion fits him well.
I adored your characterization of Grace. She felt very realistic. You could relate to her. I loved her half-Veela heritage. We don't here a lot about half-Veelas in the books, except for Fleur. I could easily imagine them having a high status just for the fact that they have such stunning natural beauty. I thought that Grace fit her role very nicely. She seems like the perfect person for Lucius. I love her desire to keep her independence.
“A husband? I can’t think of a single thing I care for less than marriage.” To his great relief, she still looked more amused than anything else. “Oh no,” she continued, “a woman of my fortune and connections needn’t bother with husbands. On my own I am whomever I choose to be, while as some man’s wife I would never reach further than he did. Even if he would become the very Minister of Magic I would still have to hover in his shadow. So no thank you, Mr. Malfoy, I prefer to remain a free woman, owned by no one.”
I thought that this really showed off her character and independence. I like seeing characters like Lucius being in a relationship with a woman who is very much their equal. It fits his character much better, in my opinion, when the woman he is with is his equal.
I loved the romance in here. It just sucked me in, making me want to read more. I thought that it was a great way to start the fic out. It leaves you hanging, wanting to read more about Grace and Lucius.
Overall, I really liked this. I can't wait to finish the rest of the fic.
Author's Response: Hi Teresa! Thank you for such an amazing review!
I’m sorry to say that the story will be a bit lacking in romance after this chapter, as it’s going to be more about love in a platonic way. However, I have considered writing a one-shot or two about Grace and Lucius – I just have to find the time to do so! =)
That was brilliant.
I loved the first part. It just sucked you in. You could see how innocent Sirius was; he feels like a real eight-year-old. In so many fics, Sirius seems to made up his mind about hating pure-blood ideals at the age of six. It's nice to see that he has some doubt about it, but isn't quite sure what to think. He seemed to look up to his mother a lot in the first part. I loved that. It makes sense that he would look up to her a lot.
The Muggles go against Sirius’s family. This is why they should not live.
Sirius does not understand this.
I loved that line. It's so simple, yet perfect. It sounds like something an eight-year-old would say.
The second part was so sweet and heart-warming. It really showed how close the Marauders were. It was great to Sirius so genuinely happy. The bonds of friendship you showed here really helped make Peter's betrayal at the end seem much sadder.
With the third part, you knew everything was going to get much darker. It was such a contrast from the second part, which made it all more shocking. I loved the sad, depressed side of Sirius you showed here. He was like that a lot during OotP especially, so I can see him being like that in his youth. The only thing is that during Lily and James's wedding, he was supposed to be happy. He was smiling in the picture Harry saw. But apart from that, it worked out well.
The last part was so sad. I cried when I was reading it. Sirius felt really realistic here; he didn't seem false. His sadness was real, and you could relate to him. I loved the effect Peter's betrayal had on him. Could the boy who had laughed at the fate of those men be the same person he had faced in those last moments on the street, the man who had hissed that the downfall of Voldemort didn’t mean a thing? This summoned up how Sirius felt really well. It reflects his opinion of Peter in POA, and it fits with his anger at Peter then.
I loved how you used the metaphor of a star's life for Sirius. Sirius is the name of a star, and his life seems to fit perfectly there. The darkness here was also great; parts of it sent chills down my spine.
Overall, this was a really amazing fic. I can't believe more people haven't reviewed it.
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you for such a great review. I didn\'t expect that at all. I have to admit that the first part is my favorite; it was the spontaneous part that I started with, and I actually think it\'s much better than the rest. I did try to show that confusion and uncertainty, and I\'m glad it got through. And I\'d agree with you about those fics where he hates his parent\'s ideals from the start; it doesn\'t make sense at all. After all, he’s a child, not some miniature teenager. The third part was supposed to be dark and sad, so I\'m glad that worked out. About Lily and James\'s wedding—I\'d imagine that there were a few months between the time that they announced their engagement and when they got married, and I\'m quite certain that between the fact that he would have had time to think about James getting married (and realize that it was a good thing, even if they were very young) and the fact that it would have been a wedding (I\'d imagine all the happiness and enthusiasm would be catching) he\'d have ended up being very happy at the actual wedding, even if he was rather depressed when they first got engaged. As for the fourth part, you actually cried? That makes me really, really happy. Thank you! (It’s a wonderful compliment.) I’m glad it made sense and didn’t seem over the top—I was really worried it would be. Thanks again for the lovely review! I really, really appreciate it. Tree
I like this. It is very different from a lot of your earlier stuff. It's nice to see a sweet Rodolphus for a change.
I love the opening scene. Bella was perfect. She does have a temper, and it makes sense that she would throw stuff at him. I probably would too if I were her. Rodolphus is so tactless and clueless. He only want Bella to happy. You can tell he doesn't understand women; who asks their finace to go to a party with their brother? He is very sweet, though - typical confused teenage boy.
I like how Cissy and Rabastan work together to get their brother and sister to stop fighting. I love how in the end, they go to Rabastan's graduation party together. It was a nice little subplot, and it added a nice touch to the story.
I like the ending scene for the most part. I thought that Rodolphus's apology was a bit too forced; it didn't seem natural. Apart from that, it was pretty good.
I really liked this. I can't wait to read more of your Bella/Rodolphus.
Author's Response: *smiles* Yes, this is something different for me. I don\'t usually write light stuff, but this came to me when I was given the prompt \"Seven\" for SPEW 007.
I tried to make Bella and Rodolphus seem like a typical couple, with typical, stupid problems. They\'re always shown as being so dark, but they really are just human.
I\'m glad you liked my Cissy/Rabastan pairing. I kinda like the idea of the two of them. I have no idea why.
As for Rodolphus, I didn\'t mean for his apology to sound forced, but now that I think about it. How much would a pureblood snob really want to apologize? However, I will try to give that part another read through.
Anyway, thank you so much for the lovely review. :D
I really liked this fic. It was really powerful and touching.
Neville is great in here. He's one of my favorite characters, and I think that he just shines through here. You really showed his strength here. I love how he is the first the one to stand up to go and fight. People underestimate Neville, but here you really see that Neville is just as brave as Harry.
I loved seeing all of Hogwarts uniting to fight against the Death Eaters. Seeing all the DA and even Blaise and Dennis Creevey stand up was really sweet. Seeing all the houses unite was great. We didn't really get that as much in DH, so I really liked seeing it here.
Professor Sprout’s beautiful, treasured greenhouses were a wreck. Half the glass panes were gone, a Death Eater lay sprawled there with mask half ripped off, and most of the plants were overturned.
I adored this line. I could really picture the fallen greenhouses, all the glass lying around it. The greenhouses were almost like a second home to Neville while he was at Hogwarts; seeing it destroyed would really hurt him. I'm glad you showed this.
Neville's reaction to Ned's death was perfect. Something like that would really affect Neville, and you really showed this. Even though Neville didn't know Ned well, he still took Ned's body back to the castle. It's so brave and noble of Neville; I just want to give him a hug.
Harry himself would tell this to Neville, adding that it was a good thing Voldemort couldn’t feel his soul, a remark which Neville puzzled over for some time.
I'm not sure what you mean by this. Is Voldemort already dead? Or did Harry just destroy all his Horcruxes? I can see why Neville was puzzled by this, especially because I don't think he knew about the Horcruxes.
Neville took a deep breath. “It was the greatest insult to life and humanity and green growing things that I’ve ever seen.”
This line was my favorite from the entire fic. It's really amazing how much Neville can care about a greenhouse. Most people wouldn't be bothered by it. It really shows Neville's understanding and caring, and how much he values life.
Overall, I really enjoyed. Great job!
Author's Response: Hooray, I love good reviews! That line about Voldemort\'s soul--I know it\'s a bit awkward, but I was trying to get Voldemort out of the way without getting too much into that. So...Voldemort\'s Horcruxes are gone and he is dead, both. I\'m so glad you liked that ending line! That was actually what I started with when writing this--the rest came from there. Again, thanks so much for your lovely review!
This is such a cute romance. I love reading Narcissa/Lucius, and this was a great snippet into her relationship.
I loved the dialogue between Narcissa and Bellatrix. Bella's bragging about the Black Family Tree was very much in character, and I loved how much she seemed to care for Cissy. Family was always important to Bellatrix, and it's realistic to think that she would care about her sister's happiness. She wasn’t always a cruel, slightly sadistic Death Eater, and it’s nice to see her show compassion.
Narcissa's fear and insecurity is easy to relate to. Her doubts about Lucius and her fears that Andromeda's eloping ruined her reputation are realistic and fit in with the character already established in canon. Cissy cares a lot about her family and appearance, and being separate from Lucius would be unbearable for her.
I loved Lucius's character; he was my favorite here. I love how you made him a kind and loving person rather than cruel and insensitive. Lucius cares a lot for his family, and his proposal to Narcissa shows this.
I loved the ending. It was very sweet; it's so cute that Narcissa thought Lucius was breaking up with her. Lucius and Narcissa are such an interesting couple to read. It's great to see stories where the two married for love and not because they were forced to.
Overall, it was a cute romance. It made me smile.
Wow. That was amazing
I loved that Harry took the incentive to give Snape a proper burial. I thought that it was odd that no one seemed to remember to grab Snape in the Shrieking Shack. It's was a relief to see that someone was coming back for him. It shows a bit of Harry's nobility; I don't think that Harry would want to leave Snape to rot there.
I really liked that Harry thought to bring Draco with him to the Shrieking Shack. Snape did do a lot for Draco, so Draco would want to honor Snape's memory. It also shows Harry's maturity; even though the two never got along, Harry still thought to bring him along.
Slowly, he approached the blonde family. They were so wrapped up in each other that they didn’t notice him. He hesitated slightly, wondering if this was really the best time to interupt.
I love this image of the Black family. Even though they might be on Voldemort's side, they still loved each other. I think that Malfoys definitely love each other, and I love seeing that family image of them.(Oh, there should be a second r in interrupt.)
“I should go with you,” Draco muttered. “He saved my life, and I was a prat. I can’t believe I was afraid he would steal my glory. How childish I was then.”
“We all were,” Harry told him. “This year has changed us all.”
I loved this part. It really shows how much both Harry and Draco have matured. The fact that Draco is willing to admit his mistake of not trusting Snape shows how much he has changed; he's no longer the cowardly bully, but a mature, young man. Harry realizes this, and you can begin to see that they are beginning to accept each other.
I love Draco's and Harry's little eulogies for Snape. It was interesting how similiar they both were. Both Harry and Draco didn't trust Snape right away. It took Snape's death for them to realize what a good man he was. You can tell that Draco and Harry do want to honor his legacy. I wouldn't be surprised if the two of them worked together to get Snape's portrait in the Headmaster's office.
I love how the fic resolved several issues from book. It showed how Draco and Harry were beginning to gain an acceptance for each other. It also resolved the issue of Snape's burial. It really helped to add closure to the end of DH.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the truly amazing review.
This is probably one of the funniest things I have ever read.
I loved Voldemort. Even though he was a bit OOC at parts, there was a good reason for(Stupid Billywigs). I loved Voldemort's flying song. I could hear him singing it in my head.
Snape was perfect in here. I loved reading his thoughts. Snape was IC, exactly the same snarky person he is in canon.
Then he corrected himself; he wasn’t dreaming, he was having a nightmare. He was quite certain that Lord Voldemort bursting through his window in the dead of night was not something he would dream about. This was the sort of sick and twisted dream only Bellatrix Lestrange would have.
Snape's thoughts were great. They had to be the funniest parts of the fic. Snape's thought almost matched what I was thinking. You really used his character well here.
Basically, I adored this fic. It's probably one of the funniest things I've read.
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much! I\'m really glad you enjoyed it! :)
This is probably one of the most interesting fics I've read in a while.
Christian's character was perfect. He was a clever, a bit psychotic. He gives you the creeps just reading about him. He seems like just the person who would want to make a Horcrux, a lot like Voldy. It looks like he was unloved. He didn't believe he would a Christmas present after all.
I loved the theory that a Dementor is made from a failed Horcrux attempt. The two ideas - Dementors and Horcrux - are so much alike. Both deal with the soul, and both do inhumane things to it.
I loved how you described Christian after he became a Dementor. The description was perfect. It was creepy and chilling.
But the warmth turns and runs from him and his decayed, disfigured face, although it froze for a moment in fear of him. He drifts away to search elsewhere for another being that will make him warm for a few more minutes. That will let him feel again if only for those few fleeting seconds.
I loved this section. It really describes a Dementor well. I've tried writing from the POV of a Dementor, and it's hard. You can feel his emptiness here, the need for warmth.
Rowena was amazing. She is exactly how I would imagine her; calm, collected, extremely intelligent. I love her note to Salazar at the end. It really shows her intelligence. I loved how she came up with the name Dementor; it’s very clever.
This is probably one of the most interesting fics I've read in a while. Your imagery is great, and I was sucked into the fic. Great job!