Summary: Iduna Snape is worried about her brother. He's been different this summer. Changing. She feels as though she's lost her best friend. Can she do anything to save him?
I'm new to the fan fiction scene and a friend pointed me to your story. I must say that you are quite an outstanding writer! Your words flow easily in their rhythm. I don't think that you used a descriptive word more than once, unless it drew two thoughts together (ie: describing her tears as shadowy streams and then using shadow to describe what is left of Servus' old self. You may not have meant to do that, but either way, brava!). That's something that struggle with myself in everyday life, much less such great writing.
Are you going to continue this story? I doubt it, as it leaves us with such a great feel and better understanding of Severus' darkness, and expanding could risk ruining it.
I just may have to read more of your stories.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! Originally this story idea was much longer, Snape was going to be the main character, and this was just going to be one scene of many told from his perspective. But, there was a challenge on the site to write about an original character, and I couldn\'t resist using this moment and writing about Iduna. I may write the longer story eventually. Thanks for the review and your comments, and thanks to you and your friend for reading!!
Author's Response: Oooo, you\'re a sneaky little muggle!!! \"A friend\" pointed you to the story, huh... tricky tricky! Love you Corky!