I love to write. I also love Harry Potter, so the two blend together beautifully, don't they?
My James/Lily fic, Never Too Late For Love, is up!
And now my chaptered project Al Potter, Chapter 1 is up as well. =)
Wow, thrilling chapter! I can't believe you ended it in the middle of the battle sequence! I was kinda bored, but all of a sudden- wow, well written. It wasn't an anticlimax, either. Well done. I was especially impressed with Al's ability to clear his mind and fire some spells at the Inferi. Although, Inferi can't wield wands, they are no longer living therefore don't have magic to use. They're kinda just zombies.
I think you're pretty close to spot on in this chapter, though. Harry saying that the country was getting lazy sounds very accurate for this time frame- 20 years without a war, Dark wizards apparently gone, it makes sense for this to happen. I also liked that Harry approved of the DA.
By the way, if Al's in his first year of Hogwarts the year is 2015, almost 2016, not 2017.
I was confused that Scorpius stayed at school. He has a home family and it doesn't make sense that he would remain at school for the holidays. I was sort of hoping Al would invite him to come over, but you haven't done much to get their friendship rolling.
Can't wait to find out what happened in the next chapter!
I couldn't help feeling a bit of anticlimax from the last chapter to this one. The action sequence was kind of short. However, it was a good transition chapter. I'm glad you addressed the issue with the Inferi doing magic. I'm left on tenterhooks wondering what is going on, and I'm hoping you don't expect Al to be handling this.. I know this is sort of his story, but he's only 11 and I think that can be forgotten too easily. That being said, I'm definitely interested and can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: You know, I remember not even much liking this chapter when I was writing it. I would have liked a crazier action scene, but I didn't want to push the boundaries of plausibility too far. This one is definitely light on plot.
Well, that was pretty good, but i think you have big issues keeping it at their age level. First years can't duel and do spells like that. What's more, they aren't going to try it. It was a little ridiculous, because it was a very close game, and not an embarrassing loss on Slytherin's side. It wasn't even for the House cup, so it shouldn't have evoked such a reaction.
That being said, it was definitely interesting! They're going to the Headmaster, cool. I can't wait to read about it, although it looks like you aren't writing anymore. That's unfortunate. Haha, you'll have a lot of reviews from me next time you log on. I hope they were helpful.
See, here I am trying to get some action brewing again! I thought this wasn't too wildly unrealistic because even young first years have a few really simple spells that can be used for duelling (remember "The Midnight Duel" in SS, when Ron says Harry and Draco will be able to shoot sparks at each other?). I also thought that it was somewhat plausible that preteens could get pretty angry at each other over the result of a game, even if it wouldn't make sense to more mature kids. I've seen it happen! :)
Anyway, your reviews were indeed VERY helpful and I'm glad to get somebody's detailed opinion on this story! Unfortunately, you're right, I probably will not be continuing it in the future. I've already kind of forgotten where I was going with it, and I just don't have that kind of time on my hands any more. Thanks so much for taking the time to tell me what you thought of it!
I think you wrote this story well and quite deserve that blue ribbon!
LOL I like, I like =]
Author's Response: Sorry It's taken me so long to respond! I don't know how I missed this! I'm glad you liked my story--and thank you so much for letting me know you liked it!
Rose used a blank journal to list practical information about the boy she intended to bring home for holiday and pass off as her boyfriend: Scorpius’ favourite colour, his favourite food. As their pretend relationship became real, the entries became longer and more intimate. And then one day—to her horror—she misplaced the journal.
Awwe, this was sweet :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Some people may think Slytherin and sweet are contradictions in terms, but when it's the right guy and girl, romance is sweet. :)
Okay, I don't hate you anymore. Why didn't you use this ending? It would have spared me a lot of rage and tears.
Author's Response: Ah, because this wouldn't have allowed for such a fun sequel! :)
Eh, your urge to get me to write a review was enough. Well! that was funny haha =] I quite liked it. Good job
That was good! It captured the personalities of all the characters perfectly, except maybe Remus. I thought the ending was quite abrupt, although that's just my reaction. It seemed to me Remus was in the middle of his revelation when you wrapped it up. It was really good, don't get me wrong, but if I had to pick something to nitpick, that would be it.
Author's Response: Ahhh...Remus. See, that's exactly how I feel about his part. I was aware of it while writing it, too, but there is no other way I could have written it. I didn't want to explain Remus' tragedy in detail.
Dominique Weasley took a summer job at Weasleys Wizarding Wheezes with the hope to stake her first claim of independence. All she really wanted was to be able to pay for her Yule Ball gown on her own, but one fateful day, someone strolled into the shop and turned her world upside down.
Scorpius Malfoy was sweet, confident, and completely gorgeous, but Dominique knew that he was off-limits as her cousin’s ex-boyfriend. The more she tried to push him away, though, the more she questioned her resolve to do the right thing.
This is ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor of Ravenclaw House, and this is my submission for the Fiction Junction ‘I Challenge Thee’ prompt
Thank you. :D
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Have a lovely day.
For my beautiful, youthful Julia, who held my hand through hell. Words will never be enough.
I am Kuri (Okiblossom) of Ravenclaw, and this is my entry for the February Love Challenge - in the Surprise Love category - in the Great Hall. This is in the MNFF Beta Boards Forum. NOTE: I have no talent that compares to JKR or any other author for that matter.
Liked it? Hated it? Please read and review.
Aweh, thats so sweet :)
Certain rules exist between friends and family, one of which is never dating someone’s ex-boyfriend. However, unfortunately for Dominique Weasley, Scorpius Malfoy has seen fit to test her resolve to not cross that line. Could she bring herself to break that taboo?
Lily Potter was nice, but she just couldn’t hold a candle to her vixen of a cousin, Dominique. Scorpius knew who he wanted, but did he have what it took to go and get her?
This story is written as a parallel to my fic, Dust in the Wind. All events from that story are written in the opposing point of view, plus more of the back story and after story are explored.
Aweh! *sniffle* I love it! When I discovered this after reading Dust in the Wind it was like a surprise gift! Very good job and did I say I love it :-)
Why thank you. After I had written Dust in the Wind, my reviewers demanded that I somehow vindicate Scorpius of being a cad and not worthy of Dom. This is how it came out.
Thank you for the review, and have a lovely day. :D
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
A war had raged; everyone had felt alone and afraid at some point. And when it was over, most people went back to business as usual, but two of those haunted souls found respite from the most unlikely of sources.
After all, who doesn't need a little bit of catharsis?
Any pairing with Draco I tend to like but I really like this one. I'm utterly furious you didn't get them together at the end though! *tear* :)
You know, I really don't think they could have ever worked as a pairing. Certainly, Draco marrying a friend of the wizard world's saviour would have bought his family a lot of good will, but I don't think the Malfoys would have ever allowed him to 'stoop that low'. Not that I think Katie's low, since she's one of my favourite characters, but that she fought on the other side woiuld really stick in their craw.
Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you liked it. :D