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As Happily Ever After As They're Gonna Get by cjbaggins

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: My take on the first of those 'nineteen years' between the 36th chapter of DH and the epilogue.

Warnings: contains an unusually-shaped ring, a nosy neighbour, a rude shop assistant, shaving mishaps, thoughtful gestures, threatening goblins, and, unexplained appearances of Romantic!Ron and Romantic!Harry. You have been warned.

Rating is for *mild* innuendo and *mostly* innocent interactions but I wouldn't let my 9 year old read it.
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 03/19/11 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Errands

So many bad fanfictions have the obligatory "Harry impresses the goblins because he's *so* different than other wizards" scene. Yours was actually good. The goblins were not obsequious and Harry did not suddenly sprout Gobbledegook like he was Dumbledore. It was believable and a great scene.

Author's Response: Wow. Thank you. I really appreciate that. I worked hard on that scene; I needed Harry to be able to get his money, I needed the goblins to acquiesce in the end, but I didn't want it too smarmy or 'easy' either. Thanks for letting me know that you thought I hit it right. cj

The Lions of Gryffindor by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: It is June 1976 and The Marauders are at the top of their game. From the outside they look to have everything.But appearances, as the saying goes, can be deceptive.

James is discovering that not everything in life is his for the taking. Sirius knows he will have to defy his formidable family. Remus lives in constant fear of his life beyond Hogwarts. As for Peter... Well, Peter is struggling to live up to his friends.

The ties of friendship are strong, but war is raging and with a dark power rising those ties will inevitably fray.

Added to the mix is an adversary called Severus Snape, some lost House Points, a prank or two and a whole lot of Lily.

This is a Marauder tale.

This is a story of what made them special.

This is a story of why it started to go wrong for The Lions of Gryffindor.

OH MY GOOD GODRIC! Lions of Gryffindor won the 2009 QSQ for Best Marauders' Era Story. Amazed and incredibly grateful to those who nominated, judged and have beta'd this fic. THANK YOU.

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Trick or Treat!
3. She clicks on her mouse and swipes her wand;
Some stories go up, and some stories are gone.
Stories of her own? Why, she has plenty!
Fewer than one-hundred, but far more than twenty.

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 04/02/09 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Slythy Fen.

Because I view Snape as a possessive, jealous, bitter, vindictive yet witty a**hole, I totally love your characterization. He is vicious but doesn't want Lily to see him as such. In my opinion, you've pegged him perfectly in this story.; It's in-character that he stole the broom and was going to try and place hexes on it in order to sabotage James and take him off his high-horse.
But he still had a part of him that wanted to turn over the broom. Hmm, it's your story but I think that if Snape returned the broom it was because he wanted Lily to know that he had the broom because in his mind he probably thought it would show that he finally bested James. He wouldn't have counted on Lily viewing his actions as criminal or totally inappropriate.

Author's Response: Yep, you're right. Remember though, that's what Lily thinks, perhaps she's wrong... Actually, I do try and write Snape with an occasional redeeming feature. If he'd always been that petty and vindictive then I think Lily would have fallen out with him a lot earlier. Thank you very much for the review. Carole xxx

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 04/02/09 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Treacle Tart and Quidditch.

Hopefully by now you know how much I admire your writing and love this story. If you don't know, now you do... Having said that, the *only* thing that doesn't work for me in this story is the O.W.L.S. results. Sirius and Remus told Harry that Snape was jealous of James, in part, because he did so well in classes without even trying. Given that bit of canon, I don't think that Snape outperformed James (or Sirius) in O.W.L.S. results. At the very least they would have been on the same level. James and Sirius were very bright and talented and it seems like their results would be better than this.

Okay, having said that, the bit why it was difficult to find Slytherins's birthplace worked really well and it was, dare I say, inspired.

Author's Response: WOW! Thank you so much for all the reviews - I will respond to all of them - I promise, but I wanted to do this one first. I had a long debate with people about OWL results, and much as I hated it too, I hought Snape would probably have done brilliantly. The reasoning is that he basically had very few friends so probably spent most of his time studying - plus - he would have wanted to be the best at everything. In the 'important' subjects James and Sirius did the same (except Potions, I really wanted Lily to do better than the boys but I couldn't see her out-performing Snape) . James and Sirius I see as not studyng much but still doing well. I do see your point, though, and I am now wondering if I got it right. Hmmm....There's still NEWTS to come by the way ... Thank-you fore the review. Carole xxx

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 04/02/09 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6- Godric's Hollow.

"She’d never questioned Sev’s words, never challenged Potter about his conversation. She’d set herself against them and concentrated on her work. Bottling up those feelings hadn’t helped her, and when they’d let Remus and Peter into their circle, she’d turned against them too.

Something subtly altered in her mindset. Maybe the slurs had never been there? Perhaps he’d always been impressed?"

This is a fabulous bit of backstory that's totally believable. Snape could/would so cleverly build barriers between Lily and people in her house who had the potential to take Snape's place as her friend(s) and confidant. And poor Lily has viewed the boys through the lens Snape created.

Your OC's are good and I especially like James' father.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review and all your lovely comments. I'm glad the back story is believable. It's just something I wondered about. I'm really pleased you like Hereward Potter. I think James' parents are so important to understand why he was such a 'jerk' to beging with. They're pretty indulgent with him and I think that rubs off on James.

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 04/02/09 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Journeys to King's Cross

This might be a duplicate review but I didn't see the original under the reviews so here we go again...

This is a wonderful story. It's one of the handful of Marauder era stories that's in-character (so far and as long as Lily isn't a shrilly Hermione reincarnated like in 97% of fanfics). Great job so far and the different viewpoints done in this chapter work really well. You've portrayed Peter really well. We can see the beginnings of his bitterness and insecurities. Remus' part was heartbreaking and perfect. James' denial makes me nervous because it sets him up for a very long fall when his mum dies. Sirius' part works well too but I don't have much to say about his or Lily's portions..

Please keep up the great work because your one of the only authors writing in-character interesting Marauder fanfic. Thank you for that!

Author's Response: Thank you somuch for your great reviews - good concrit as well as lovely praise. I'm very pleased you think my Marauders are in character. I try my best but when I get it wrong I get a swift kick from my beta (Thank you Terri). I fear for James too as well as Remus...

I'll Pick You Up by MagEd

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: “Guilt brings people together. It’s a takes one to know one type thing.”

James Potter has always been a spoiled, arrogant, lazy show-off. When he enters his final year at Hogwarts School, he’s Head Boy . . . and he’s still a spoiled, arrogant, lazy, show-off. But because of that terrible summer, he’s also guilt-ridden.

Lily Evans has always been a self-righteous, impatient, temperamental know-it-all. When she begins her last year at Hogwarts, she’s Head Girl . . . and still a self-righteous, impatient, temperamental know-it-all. But the first night back — and the murder that takes the entire school by surprise — leave her guilt-ridden as well.

With the darkness that’s surrounding the Wizarding world slowly seeping, at long last, onto the grounds of Hogwarts and into the lives of James Potter and Lily Evans, what comes next?

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 12/16/10 Title: Chapter 22: Epilogue

I think the thing I like the most about your characterizations of Lily and James is that you can see parts of Harry in each of them. You characterized them in such a way that canon Harry *is* the child of your James and Lily. His passion, dedication, bravery, wisdom (sometimes), kindness, honor, loyalty and intelligence could actually be a reflection of your James and Lily. There, I've said the same thing for an entire paragraph ;-)

The second thing I love about your characterization is that neither James nor Lily are super-powerful or extraordinary. There are some great L/J fics where James or Lily are so brilliant or extraordinary that Harry's own achievements pale in comparison to his parents' successes. Those type of characters are so brilliant that I wonder how Harry from canon could be their son. In contrast to those Mary Sues, your James stumbled his way through each battle and was saved from death multiple times by other people. Although strong in all the ways Rowling intended but he isn't the next Merlin and neither is Lily.

Despite my love of 95% of the story, this chapter didn't ring true to character for me. It struck me as OOC/cowardly/weak/wrong that James and Lily would not report to Dumbledore that Regulus murdered Jilly and conspired to murder Lily and recruit James. There's a huge difference to me between giving people a chance to be their best self/trying to stop them from a path that will destroy them and others and letting people get away with murder because you care for them personally. It is hard to turn someone you love(d) in for murder. It is weak and cowardly to let someone go merely because they are a friend, lover or relative and you don't want them to suffer for their crimes. James is defined by his courage, bravery, and nobility in canon so his behavior in this chapter is inconsistent with his character. If Lily knew the details of a murder Snape had committed, I have no doubt that she would inform Dumbledore. Lily stood up to power and was unwilling to support evil in any form, even from long time friends or people with other positive traits. Despite being attracted (re:Rowling and canon) to James, Lily refused to date him because he was arrogant and dismissive of those not as powerful as himself. Does that sound like the type of girl that would let her emotions over-rule her morals? Not to mention, Jilly saved James and Lily's lives a number of times at Diagon Alley alone and Regulus cut her from the world for no reason other than she was not Pureblood. By sending Lily and James to Voldemort, Regulus shows that he will indeed murder again without shame and without remorse. Their actions weren't inteded to reform or save Regulus but to shelter him from the legal consequences of his crimes.

I can't believe that Lily, James or even Sirius (who was raised with very questionable morals) would have let Regulus off but I *could* see Sirius letting Regulus have a head start before Lily and James tell Dumbledore. That would be completely believable to me but not letting Regulus stay at school with absolutely no repercussions for murdering Jilly and conspiring with Voldie to murder Lily. I think Sirius was strong enough that he would be able to do the difficult, but right, thing by telling Dumbledore of Regulus' actions.

Other than this chapter, the story was fantastic and you wrote James and Lily well. I'm just struck by how off their actions in this chapter seem. Maybe I'm wrong and they would have acted this way but obviously I can't contain myself from ranting on about it! Despite my tirade against their actions in this chapter, I truly do love all other aspects of this fic!

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 1: I Can Be Anything

This was a fabulous first chapter. You have stayed completely faithful to what we know of canon while creating an interesting and believable backstory for James. I especially love the relationship you have given Sirius and Irene.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 3: A Punching Bag, A Piece of String

Hmm,who was the "friend" Lily got distracted by? I am thinking Snape. If it was Snape, I sincerely hope that Lily told Dumbledore about it. James is still perfect and I love how similar to Harry Lily is in her passion and determination.

Author's Response: You'll find out who the "friend" is eventually :) I'm glad you like the story so far! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 4: That Reminds You Not To Think

You are totally right about Lily having had sass and there is even canon to back you up. Slughorn waxed poetic about Lily's wit and "cheek". Plus, as you stated, James really wouldn't have been attracted to a girl like Hermione.

Author's Response: I'm glad you agree--and it's definitely canon! :)

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 10: You Wanted A Hero Tonight

Great chapter. Obviously it is exciting to read about Lily and James but the mystery is compelling too.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy the mystery as well as the James/Lily parts.

Jemzi by Belledeg

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Jemzi Zabini is the seventeen year old daughter of Blaise Zabini and his wife Harper, and is about to join her fellow witches and wizards at Hogwarts for their final school year. Jemzi is famous for being the once best friend of Albus Potter. However, a mysterious argument last year that only the two of them were witness to has ruined their friendship and they are now practically enemies. No one knows the reason for their fall out, only that it has caused a great divide in their friendship group.

Jemzi's best friend and Albus' cousin, Rose, suspects that their friendship expired because of strange and unwanted feelings between them. Feelings which, despite their fall out, have not gone away. Feelings that are similar to those she has for a certain Slytherin...

So can the next generation of Hogwarts students learn to forget past actions and forgive?

Nominated for "Best Next Generation Story" and "Best Other Character" in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards

This story features Harry Potter, Ginny Potter, Lily Potter, Luka Krum, Blaise Zabini, Harper Zabini, Zacharias Smith, Leon Holmwood, Tristan Wells, Rose Weasley, Scorpius Malfoy, Jemzi and Albus plus many more.
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 06/01/10 Title: Chapter 13: Lily Conjures Cupid

Did they forget contraception 'cause it sure seemed like it... Hmm, if she gets pregnant they will not have to worry about her getting sent to a finishing school!

Author's Response: I'm not going to lie, I hate the intimate scenes. It's like writing about your friends or your siblings :D

The Gates of Happiness by MagEd

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: The seven men who loved Ginny Weasley.
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 11/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was brilliant. Your "Harry" section was incredible but I loved all of them. Thank you for this piece.

Author's Response: Thank you! The Harry section is one of my favourites, so I'm particularly glad you liked it :)

The Happy Couple by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Romilda Vane is a young reporter for The Daily Prophet. Currently writing a popular column for the Social pages, she is outraged when the highlight of the social calender - the wedding of Harry James Potter to Ginevra Molly Weasley - is given to Lavender Brown to write.

Lavender isn't happy either, for their boss (He-Who-Pays-Our-Wages) has threatened to assign her to the Cookery section unless she dishes the dirt on her friends. She readily agrees to Romilda taking on the assignment for what could the Saviour of the Wizarding World possibly have to hide?

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for The Weddings Challenge in The Great Hall. I chose prompt 3 - The Daily Prophet Report.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I think you all know that.

Thank you very much to Samarie (Hopeful_Song) for beta'ing this story for me, and giving me some excellent advice.

The Sexual Sitiuations are really very mild, and merely implied.
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 05/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Happy Couple?

It's not totally clear what is happening although it seems from Ginny's line " “I can’t do this, Dean, not after the last time. I can’t be with you ever again.” that she has cheated on Harry. This review assumes that she has cheated on Harry and still loves Dean... Although the story comes off as cynical in the 'weddings aren't as happy as you think' way, it's also naive because it assumes that the person being cheated on, Harry, is completely oblivious to the cheating or using. In real life, it seems that people settle for someone and *choose* to ignore that their spouse(s) are cheaters, liars or otherwise. They know what is actually wrong in their relationship but they make excuses to save their relationship because they don't think they can do better or they have children. Why would Harry settle for someone that was in love with someone else and cheated on him? He's known her for many years and wasn't enamored with her for most of that time so it's not like he's projecting any image of perfection onto her or that he was always in love with her and doesn't want to face the truth. Harry is rich, famous and confident, so why would he put up with this when he is all about honor, nobility and love? And why would his tactless best friends allow him to stay in a doomed relationship? In any event, I love your writing but think this idea doesn't work without all of the characters being OOC from canon.

Author's Response: Hmm, well let's look at what we know from canon. Ginny went out with Dean; she then went out with Harry. Dean was still fond of Ginny. Later we know Harry and Ginny got married and had three children. We don't know what happened in between. You're assuming from my story that Ginny was in love with Dean. That's not what I've said. In fact I've left it ambiguous as to what happened between them ... and when. It could have been a one-night stand before Harry and her got together. I hope I've made it clear that she's ecstatically happy to be marrying Harry - I use the line 'No one could fake that much happiness.' Harry knows a 'version' of it as Lavender says. And what has Harry craved all his life - a happy, settled family. People do 'forgive' things. They make compromises. Perhaps there's nothing to forgive (if they were as Ross says to Rachel 'on a break' then does Harry have to forgive her for anything?) Yes it's ambiguous, and it's up to the reader to decide what went on. I also make it clear at the end that Dean is happier. Now, I don't think any of them are OOC from canon but then that's because I have the story in my head as to what exactly happened between Dean and Ginny. Thankls for reviewing, though, I do like reviews that make me think about what I've written and ask questions about it. ~Carole~

Taking Direction by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: What if the characters in the Harry Potter films were portrayed”not by actors”but by the book versions of themselves, as created by Rowling? How might things unfold on that set? What would the characters think of the changes made from the stories they’d already lived out… to the ones written for the script?

This fic is a series of one-shots, posted as chapters, each from the perspective of a different character who is dealing with the changes occurring between the book and the script.


Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!


Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 10/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Jazz Hands

That was lovely! For me, the movies have gotten worse as we go and since I love OotP (book, of course), I loathed the movie. To tell you the truth, I can't even remember what happened in the movie at this point since I was so appalled that movie!Harry gave the prophecy to Lucius. But, your story is going to help me get over the movies, chapter by chapter. Right?

Author's Response: Haha. I'm not sure I can actually help you get over them, but we can at least bear it together, right? Misery loves company, as they say. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 10/06/10 Title: Chapter 2: Babe Magnet

That was perfect! I think the scene, while wildly out of character, was supposed to show us that Harry had moved on from Sirius' death? And also that he was a desirable legal male on the prowl? All I could think was "That girl is way too cute to go for a guy that looks like *that*." Of course, she didn't notice that the pictures on the paper were moving so she couldn't have been that smart in the first place...

Please tell me you examine one of the scenes where movie!Ginny is meek and boring. Or crying about her relationship with Dean! I'd love to read what Harry and the Twins would think of movie!Ginny.

Thanks again for a great chapter!

Author's Response: Hmm... I don't think they intended to show that he had moved on from Sirius, since in the very next scene Slughorn mentions his death casually and Harry is obviously still dealing with it. If anything, I think Harry's line to Dumbledore, "I like riding on trains. It takes my mind off things." So maybe more an attempt to forget what he can't get off his mind? Sirius, I mean. But here's the deal: he would have been thinking about Ginny, too. He didn't want to end things with her and that had only been a couple of months before this. So yeah, the idea of Harry being slick with girls is just so OOC as to be ridiculous. As for the Muggle girl... she wouldn't have been able to see the pictures as moving anyway, right? I have already written a bit about the silliness of the wimpy movie Ginny, so stay tuned for that in a later chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing--I really appreciate it!

Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 01/18/11 Title: Chapter 3: Saving It for Seven

That was an excellent chapter although more thoughtful, for me, than funny. You've got me thinking that the actors should have fought for their characters! Did Rupert not care that the films completely decimated his character and created legions of people that think Ron is a horrible friend, unworthy of Hermione and a general dumb-arse?

Author's Response: I know its true, but please do not say such things about sweet Ron. ;) Hehe. Yeah, he gets the short straw for sure in the films, but they did better in DH with this, I think. So far, anyway. But yeah, they take a lot from him in HBP--so frustrating! It's okay with me if it's more thoughtful than funny sometimes. I expect that to continue a bit, especially when it's the relationships that are taking a beating. I do there are implications for the characters with much of what they change in the films... bummer. :( But yay for you liking it--thanks for the review!

Juggling by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Lily Evans wasn’t the only Gryffindor with a childhood friend. Whilst she was meeting the boy who would introduce her to the magical world, someone else was learning how to mix with Muggles.

This is not, however, a story about Lily Evans. This is a tale about James Potter and the Muggle girl that he never quite forgot.

This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) who makes me laugh more than most people and has been a very supportive friend, despite our separate continents. Happy Birthday, mate!

I’m indebted to Gina (Gmariam) who kindly offered to beta this short one-shot, and then didn’t complain when it mushroomed into a chaptered fic.

Because of an archive gliitch, this fic has been temporarily put down a rating. the content remains the same and it is still a 6th-7th. You have been warned.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. If I had been, then Sirius, Remus, James, Lily and Tonks would not have died. Peter, however would have died in an icky manner

OMMPP! Juggling won 2 QSQ's for Best Chaptered Marauder and Dita won Best Original Character. Seriously pleased and shocked here. Thank you.

The chapter titles are all from Keane songs.
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 04/24/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Somewhere Only We Know

That was a fabulous James-centric piece with an engaging original character.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I had a lot of fun writing this except the end which made me cry. ~Carole~

Broken Chalise of Patience by serinah

Rated: Professors •
Summary: A woman of society, Astoria Malfoy nee Greengrass, has been brutally murdered - is it the money, revenge, or mindless rage? Any of those motives would automatically result in suspecting her husband.
Chief Investigator of Manslaughter Squad, Auror Potter is personally in charge of the investigation, but it is Ginevra Weasley, a rookie Auror of Morality Guard, who brings in the man Potter is looking for – Draco Malfoy. (Character death is for the murders, nothing really tragic will happen to the main characters and 'professors' rating is for violence in the epilogue, nothing more sinister.)
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 04/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi, this really should be in the Ginny/Draco section and have a warning of OOC and Epilogue discarded added. It'll help you attract the right kind of people and not those like me who like canon or in-character pairings.

One Day in the Life Of by hestiajones

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Happy endings? What are happy endings? They saved the world for the future, and the kids are here. Life, meanwhile, just goes on.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. I just wish she would hurry up and publish The Scottish Book.
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 02/26/11 Title: Chapter 1: Lucy

This is a good insight into Lucy's character. It's believable that she would cling, if only in her mind, to Albus. Kinda sad that she feels so isolated in her family and, apparently, at Hogwarts...

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! (And sorry for the late reply.) Lucy will have her happy ending some day. :)


Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed
Date: 02/26/11 Title: Chapter 2: Hugo

Ah, Hugo is pretty brave, isn't he?

Author's Response: Yep. ;) He be a Gryffindor! If you want to know who he's dating, you could check out my fic "In the Back of the Shack". Thanks for the review!