this story (both of the chapters so far) is so entrancing, it has feelings and is impossible to stop reading. WriterInTraining, please email me at: firstname.lastname@example.org when you submit the next chapter, or if you could tell me where I can find the whole story (you said you had 16 chapters on this story on another site). please email!
see my "hurt" review. keep em coming! :)
wow. its really good...update soon! just as long as h/hr get togerther!
I really like it, you definitely have a talent for writing. keep up with this story, and, if you want, read my story and review "The Grief that Must Be Overcome" a H/Hr fic
I really like the length and detail, it's a very original and interesting story...but there is so much detail it kiind of seems like you are working more on the adjectives and adverbs more than the plot line. Well, I like it a lot though!
Author's Response: That's a fair point. One that's been brought up by others as well. On the other hand, some have asked for even more details! I guess its a balancing act. Thanks very much for the detailed review. I appreciate the feedback.
Are you sure this is your first fic? Because this story ROCKED!!!!! keep on writing, girl, and never stop!
I love your balance of humor and drama; that shows the marks of a very good author. It was very short, though, but that might be a good technique-keeps them waiting! Anyway, very, very good.
Author's Response: Thanks! It totally rocks my world when I get a kickass review like that! Merci! *wink*