I'm a thirtysomething mom of 3 who uses HP as an escape. I'm thoroughly addicted. I've got strong opinions on characterization, and I've become an ardent H/G fan since Order of the Phoenix.
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Summary: Since the tragedy at the Astronomy Tower, Harry has become an even more formidable wizard, but a shocking revelation may mean the difference between life and death for The Boy Who Lived. It is the final stage of Harry's quest to destroy Lord Voldemort - can he save the Wizarding World and those he loves from the treachery of the Dark Lord... and also save himself? [Action takes place in media res towards the end of Harry's Seventh Year at Hogwarts (Post-HBP).]
Great job! I loved to see the arrival of the DA, and the dialog you used was really moving.
I particularly loved Harry's reaction to hearing what's going on with Lupin, and the line "I"m braver when you're with me". Really nicely done.
Now, Bella is alive (yay, she needs a better end) but we've lost a lot of DEs and none of the Order it seems? I'm not rooting for you to kill off characters, obviously, but I hope you'll make it realistic. The good guys will have losses, too.
Now, do we get to see what happens between Grayback and Lupin? I love the idea of the two werewolves fighitn with Lupin protecting his "cub".
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Melindaleo! The dialogue was fun to write, and I hope it shows. As for the losses - I am in total agreement with you. It's one of the reasons why I had to take Harry away from the platform. As I mentioned, this is the chapter just before the other shoe drops, so things are going to get a little hairy ahead; fatalities on both sides for sure. I'm also REALLY looking forward to posting the chapter where Harry witnesses Lupin and Greyback's fight - it's actually a major plotpoint, so yes, we can all look forward to that as well ;).
Wow, very intense. There was a whole lot of redemption going on here, and while I enjoyed each one individually, overall I think it might be too much to expect.
I groaned when Harry didn't get to tell Ginny he loved her, but that alone gave me more hope than the rest combined. I was beginning to think it might be time for me to bail (I always bail before I'll read Harry's death, lol) but not telling Ginny perked me up. Somehow, I think he'll still get the chance.
I'm eagerly anticipating the fight with Voldemort.
Author's Response: lol - I admit I probably could have drawn out the redemption scenes, but I've been in such a rush to get to the final battle, I honestly didn't give it a second thought! As to the other stuff -- well, we've already discussed that privately. No need to spoil it for the others, eh? ;) Thanks :D
Oooh, the Inferi! Rubs hands with glee. Great battle scene, and I liked the addition of Grawp. I also really liked the comparison to Harry's reaction after losing Cedric. I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm particularly fond of the death scene for that reason. For the first time, Harry's a spectator to someone else's grief, and that implicit connection he feels there is actually pretty important to what lies ahead ;).
Groan. I do so hate redeemed Malfoy - he's such a git. Great tension here though, but I hate the plan. I wouldn't trust either Snape nor Malfoy as far as I could throw them. The end Snape has planned for Harry sounds ominous, but I'm holding out hope. I'll give fair warning though - I always bail before I have to read Harry's death. Nope - won't do that.
Great cliffy, and I love the image of all this going on under the glard of the dark mark. The No Survivor rule is chilling, as well.
Author's Response: lol :) Thanks Melindaleo! I'll say this much. Granted, Malfoy and Harry are on the same side now, but that does not change Malfoy's nature in any way. He's in this for his own ends - his family wellbeing is at stake. Harry only matters to him insofar as he can help the Malfoy's out of a sticky spot. So yeah - Malfoy's only *partially* redeemed. As for the bad plan, I will also just say that Snape reveals only what Harry needs to know at the moment he needs to know it. There's more up Snape's sleeve ;).
Oh, and as for Harry's death, please don't be afraid to read ahead! I can't say more without giving things away, but I promise there is a happy ending! Cheers!
Yikes! Excellent chapter! Super cliffy, too. Yikes. They are in big trouble now, aren't they? What was Ginny doing? I liked that you kept Malfoy wimpy, but I hope Ginny at least pays him back for torturing Harry. Harry's scar not burning is curious. Hmmm, what is he up to?
Author's Response: *Wrings hands deviously* Oh yeah, the stuff's about to hit the fan ;). Voldy's not a happy camper.
Really nice start to your story. I loved the ending - so Harrylike, but Hermione is right, he needs his allies. I can't even say Harry is wrong though, Voldemort doesn't tolerate "spares". Very gripping stuff. I liked Harry's thoughts at the beginning as he reminisced about his final year at Hogwarts.
You didn't say why he, Ron and Hermione went back, however? The one bit of constructive criticism I'd give - and ignore it if you'd like - is that Harry and Ginny seem very OOC being awkward with each other. JKR set them up as understanding each other better than anyone else, and that didn't play here. I read your reviews that you based their break up on personal experience, which generally is a great way to write, but you have to take into consideration the personalities of your players. That didn't feel right for them at all.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed the ending - I was definitely going for putting Harry in a tight spot - I promise things will turn out for the best in the chapters ahead!
As for Harry and Ginny's dynamic, I am adding a special author's note about it shortly, so check back. I think it'll clear up the issue (seems a lot of readers have been rather passionate about it...)
OH, bravo! I got the update for the story, but it wasn't approved yet. Thanks for the reminder. You know me - I simply couldn't read the last one,but this one is perfect. I loved Harry's meeting with DD, and I love his choice even more. He so deserves to live. I like the idea of going through the water to return, and while he was walking on it, his fear of stepping in the wrong place was right on. Well done.
Wow, great chapter. The battle with the Inferi was dramatic and intense and highly enjoyable. I loved Harry's anxiety about losing that amulet, too. Using the paint was great, and I loved Hagrid's refusal to leave them behind.
Malfoy. I liked how in character you kept him even though he was helping Harry. Not many people can pull that off, so kudos. While I don't for a second believe canon Malfoy is a werewolf, it works nicely for your story. The only problem is that Wolfsbane would not have stopped his transformation, merely made him docile until the moon had passed.
Author's Response: Many thanks for your review :). I knew that Werewolf!Malfoy would be the biggest stretch I've made thus far - but I figured it wouldn't be too bad considering his mysterious condition in HBP, you know? Either way, I'm so glad you thought it worked :). Cheshlin brought up the problem with Wolfsbane, so I'm gonna try to spend a little time today fixing that issue (there's a charm to turn a werewolf back into a man, but I just want to make it convincing that the charm could last an entire night). In any case, thanks again!
Great, tense, exciting chapter. I'm not sure about Harry announcing to everyone about the Horcruxes like that though, since he wouldn't even tell McGonagall. Regardless though, I loved Harry's running, jumping Diaperating, and I love that Snape seems so loathsome. Good stuff here. I also enjoyed the warm reception from Molly.
Author's Response: Thanks again Melindaleo! It was tough plotting out the action - it was literally like choreographing a dance at times. And yeah, Snape will be getting a little juicier in chapters ahead, so I'm hoping that'll be great fun once I get to it. As for Harry's announcement - I'm not sure if I conveyed it correctly, but the only people who were paying attention to Harry at the moment were McGonagall and Lupin - everyone else is too preoccupied with fighting, healing, or trying not to die ;). Harry's a little less concerned with who knows at this point - he's got few precious hours left to deal with Voldemort and rid himself of the Horcrux inside him before morning. Considering how things have been unfolding, he could use all the help he can get! Anyhoo, as always, thanks so much for sticking with the story and for your fantastic review :).
Wow! Strong stuff. I've seen this theory before, and to be honest, I can easily argue both sides depending on which way the other person goes. After reading this, I'm on the side that Harry's not a Horcrux, but if you'd said he wasn't , I would have argued that he was. It's such a great idea to comtemplate. I LOVED Harry's reaction to the new. It was wonderfully understated and so him. I agree that Snape was acting on DDs orders, but it doesn't make me like him any more. He's a good guy, but he's not a nice guy.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I tell you, JKR gave me a run for my money with all the questions HBP raised. I must be absolutely out of my mind to write this fic! Anyhoo, I hope it was entertaining if still a bit underdeveloped, but luckily there are more chapters to come to flesh it out a bit better :). Cheers!
Aww, I liked that last bit there. Poor, Harry. There has to be a way to destroy the soul part of Voldemort, and still leave Harry alive, otherwise how will he kill Voldemort? Hmmm. Exciting stuff. I'm glad they told Ginny everything.
Author's Response: Thanks, Melindaleo! 'Poor Harry' is right. The good news is that the ending is already written; it's ridiculous how much time I've spent putting together the scene where Harry and Voldemort finally duel considering all the factors involved (ie: wands/horcruxes/character deaths/redemptive moments). Krikey. I'm giving a heckuvalot away there, aren't I... ;) Thanks again!
Summary: We've all seen many versions of the rest of Harry and Ginny's day after their first public kiss in Gryffindor Tower. But what about Ron? How did he react to this startling turn of events? Read on and find out.
First fic? Really? Wow! I thought it was great and blended seemlessly with canon. You really had Ron down very well, and Hermione's gentle reasoning with him was well done. Nice job.
Author's Response: Hey, I was hoping you might read my story! You are one of my favorite authors! I'm really excited to get a good word from you, and hope I can keep making my readers happy. Thank you very much!
Summary: Dumbledore’s gone and Harry, Ron and Hermione have returned to Privet Drive to start their search for the Horcruxes. Their plan not to return to Hogwarts is changed with the reading of Dumbledore’s will. Harry must discover that his friends are a greater help then he can imagine and how to use the “Power the Dark Lord knows not.” With a little romance, action, mystery and even Quidditch along the way, Harry will find out if he and his friends can defeat the greatest Dark Wizard of the age.
This story was completely written before the release of DH or the Order of the Phoenix movie. Any similarities are entirely coincidental.
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I really liked that you had Hermione unable to do something Defense-related. There has been so much emphasis in canon on how it's her weakest subject, I really think that will come back into play somehow. I also really loved Lavender being catty to Hermione. Such a small detail, but very well spotted.
I have to admit, I really miss Harry playing Quidditch. I don't think I like seeing it go on without him. :(
Author's Response: Thanks, I think it is the little details that make these stories fun. We all have the same basic concept if we are writing a 7th book story. So it is the little things that make it our own. That was one of the things l loved about your stories. As for Harry and Quidditch, there is a game left in the season but GInny would have to be hurt or something for Harry to play. No one knows what the future holds, except Trelawny, and Ferinze and who knows what they would tell you. :) Take Care
Oh, thanks. I'm so glad you're doing an aftermath. I really missed that in DH. Sniff over the loss of Hagrid. I think that would hit very hard. Percy was a shock, but a really good one. I was so certain that when everyone argued with Ron, he'd be proved wrong. That seems to usually be the way it worked. I was delighted to see something different.
Author's Response: Thanks Melinda, I enjoyed making my argument for Percy being a bad guy. That was the only thing about DH I didn\'t like, the fact that Percy came back and was accepted too easily. Yes we will have a bit of after math and an epilogue at the end. Take Care and I hope you are working on something orginal for us to go out and buy.
Glad to see our favorite duo awake. I felt bad for Harry thinking only he was expendable. It's so like him, though. And now we're winding towards the end...
Author's Response: Yes, moving that way quickly. Thanks for the review, and good luck on getting nominated for a Quick Silver award. The Seventh Horcrux is the best Fanfic on this site so I hope it wins. Take Care
Go, Harry. Great chapter - I loved his chat with DD's spirit and the way he chose was just so Harry. I enjoyed it, and I like the way he shrunk into the wall as he began worrying about what he'd done, as well. I also liked the way Ron checked with him that he was all right before taking Ginny to the hospital wing.
Author's Response: That scene in the hall way came together really well. I think Harry would have been going into over-drive with guilt for just thinking about killing Malfoy, and trying to find a place to escape would be the first thing on his mind. I also wanted to show how his friends understand him better now. Hermione is relunctant to leave him, and Ron checks on him. Arent\' friends grand. THanks for the review.
I'd suspected Ginny and Neville, but you really surprised me with Luna. Harry didn't get anything from Lancaster though, and Kreacher is still betraying them.
Author's Response: GInny I thought was pretty obvious, most everyone knew she was the cat, but I really see the six of them as a sort of unit. Since they were the six that went to the Ministry in OotP. That was the genisus of this story. Kreacher is still evil because people, and house elves rarely change. THanks for the support and I\'m glad I surprised you. Take Care
The Power Voldemort knows not, indeed.. Good thought with sharing the joy of flying with Charlie, too As a former Seeker himself, that was definitely something he could relate, too. I liked Harry loopy on painkillers. I've seen it done before, and it's always one of my favorite things. I hope we get to see more of that - Harry's funny when he's loopy.
A couple of big Americanisms - "graduation" and "guys". I think you have a very nice story here, but those glaring ones make it lose a little authenticity.
Now, I'm really curious what Ginny and Ernie are up to, since I don't for a minute believe they're really dating. Hmmm.
Author's Response: Yeah, Loopy Harry was one of my favorites from your fic too. It\'s fun being able to write him less seriously on occassion. I will keep working on the Americanism, with my beta, in the hopes of getting rid of them. We caught a few but must have missed a couple, thanks for the heads up. Thanks for the reviews.
Okay, I just caught up on your story. I've never seen Nagini taken out first, so that was a refreshing change. I think your story would benefit from a Brit picker, however. There are a lot of Americanism. "Guys" in particular is kind of jarring. Brits use "bloke" or "lot" for the plural. I'm not sure if Mugglenet offers Brit picking services or not.
That new Defense teacher reminds me of Tonks with the clumsiness, the little cat makes me think of GInny, and I like the strong bond of friendship you show between Harry and Ron. So many fics revert Ron back to his 4th year jealousy when we haven't seen that in canon since. The one area of this story that does bother me is the Occlumency. At the end of HBP, Harry couldn't do it at all, and JKR said in her interview that he CAN'T do it, so it seems off to me that he can in this fic. I think what she'll do is find a way around the problem - so that's what we as fic authors need to do as well. Just my .02.
Author's Response: Thanks, I was hoping to do a few things that I hadn\'t seen done yet and the Nagini thing was one of them. She usually goes last so I thought we would try something different. As for Harry and Occlumency, I did know about the JKR interview. I\'m surprised the Mods haven\'t nailed me on that one, but unfortunately it is too late to change it now. As for Ron, I think he had grown up a lot, so I agree, he wouldn\'t revert back to 4th year Ron in this case. THanks for the review, and the advice on the Brit picker. I need all the .02 I can get.
Hmm, Tonks is a very good teacher if all but two Slytherins could do the Patronus charm after only one Defense lesson...er...I mean Scurlock, grin.
Poor GInny, she can't really believe Harry wanted her to go with Ernie. He's always too noble, and he's never been very good at concealing his emotions. If Hermione could see it, surely Ginny could, I hope!
I'm guessing that small animal he saw was the cat - and that's really the secret Hermione wants Ginny to share, right? How am I doing?
Author's Response: Well let\'s take these in order. As for Scurlock, he is a very good Defense Teacher and clumsy. Tonk is probably a good teacher, and clumsy. Does that make them the same person, I don\'t know? Ginny understands Harry very well and knows him well enough to know what he is doing. The animal was not the cat actually. Thanks for the review, and you are tracking with the story really well. I hope you enjoy the next chapter.