I'm a thirtysomething mom of 3 who uses HP as an escape. I'm thoroughly addicted. I've got strong opinions on characterization, and I've become an ardent H/G fan since Order of the Phoenix.
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Well, the war is certainly hitting closer to home now, isn't it? Sad, but very realistic with the way you have them all snippng at one another, as well.
Author's Response: It certainly is. Thanks for the comments - they're all useful!
I liked the scene at Privet Drive, but I wish it had lasted longer and had some more dialog with the Dursleys!
I don't know why Ginny behaved so stupidly, however. I know she was upset, but that seemed extreme. How come Harry didn't just Apparate them out again though?
Author's Response: Ginny wasn't really thinking - it may seem extreme, but she was still in shock and acted on instinct rather than reason. I didn't want them to spend too long at the Dursleys' - I didn't want to drag it out too much. As I have said in a previous review, there was an Anti-Apparition guard on the Burrow. Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: I have now amended the chapter with more clear indication of the Anti-Apparition thing. Thanks for pointing it out.
Whoa, nice ending. I think if Voldemort had made Inferius out of James and Lily, he'd use them to torment Harry. I'm eager to see what is planned for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks. Last chapter has been submitted!
So, was it Inferi of James and Lily who attacked Remus and Tonks? Shudder. That's just creepy! Fascinating though and I'l be waiting for more.
It's funny to START a story with Harry going back to Privet Drive, lol, but I was glad for the update!
Why is it that us girls always end up doing the packing? It's a conspiracy!
I like to see Harry standing up to Dudley, the big oaf. I hope the dreaded Dursleys don't give him too bad a time, he's been through a lot.
Author's Response: I know - I thought it might be cool to write a whole story just showing the summer. Girls always pack because men can't do it! We are much more organised and thoughtful packers. Look out for the next chapter which should be up within the week.
It's very interesting that DD allowed all teh students to fight. I'm eager to see what happens with the Inferi and if James and Lily are included. Shudder.
Author's Response: It seemed time that he would allow them to help - the Order needs all the help it can get. Yes, shudder...
Great job! I loved to see the arrival of the DA, and the dialog you used was really moving.
I particularly loved Harry's reaction to hearing what's going on with Lupin, and the line "I"m braver when you're with me". Really nicely done.
Now, Bella is alive (yay, she needs a better end) but we've lost a lot of DEs and none of the Order it seems? I'm not rooting for you to kill off characters, obviously, but I hope you'll make it realistic. The good guys will have losses, too.
Now, do we get to see what happens between Grayback and Lupin? I love the idea of the two werewolves fighitn with Lupin protecting his "cub".
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Melindaleo! The dialogue was fun to write, and I hope it shows. As for the losses - I am in total agreement with you. It's one of the reasons why I had to take Harry away from the platform. As I mentioned, this is the chapter just before the other shoe drops, so things are going to get a little hairy ahead; fatalities on both sides for sure. I'm also REALLY looking forward to posting the chapter where Harry witnesses Lupin and Greyback's fight - it's actually a major plotpoint, so yes, we can all look forward to that as well ;).
Wow, very intense. There was a whole lot of redemption going on here, and while I enjoyed each one individually, overall I think it might be too much to expect.
I groaned when Harry didn't get to tell Ginny he loved her, but that alone gave me more hope than the rest combined. I was beginning to think it might be time for me to bail (I always bail before I'll read Harry's death, lol) but not telling Ginny perked me up. Somehow, I think he'll still get the chance.
I'm eagerly anticipating the fight with Voldemort.
Author's Response: lol - I admit I probably could have drawn out the redemption scenes, but I've been in such a rush to get to the final battle, I honestly didn't give it a second thought! As to the other stuff -- well, we've already discussed that privately. No need to spoil it for the others, eh? ;) Thanks :D
Oooh, the Inferi! Rubs hands with glee. Great battle scene, and I liked the addition of Grawp. I also really liked the comparison to Harry's reaction after losing Cedric. I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm particularly fond of the death scene for that reason. For the first time, Harry's a spectator to someone else's grief, and that implicit connection he feels there is actually pretty important to what lies ahead ;).
Groan. I do so hate redeemed Malfoy - he's such a git. Great tension here though, but I hate the plan. I wouldn't trust either Snape nor Malfoy as far as I could throw them. The end Snape has planned for Harry sounds ominous, but I'm holding out hope. I'll give fair warning though - I always bail before I have to read Harry's death. Nope - won't do that.
Great cliffy, and I love the image of all this going on under the glard of the dark mark. The No Survivor rule is chilling, as well.
Author's Response: lol :) Thanks Melindaleo! I'll say this much. Granted, Malfoy and Harry are on the same side now, but that does not change Malfoy's nature in any way. He's in this for his own ends - his family wellbeing is at stake. Harry only matters to him insofar as he can help the Malfoy's out of a sticky spot. So yeah - Malfoy's only *partially* redeemed. As for the bad plan, I will also just say that Snape reveals only what Harry needs to know at the moment he needs to know it. There's more up Snape's sleeve ;).
Oh, and as for Harry's death, please don't be afraid to read ahead! I can't say more without giving things away, but I promise there is a happy ending! Cheers!
Yikes! Excellent chapter! Super cliffy, too. Yikes. They are in big trouble now, aren't they? What was Ginny doing? I liked that you kept Malfoy wimpy, but I hope Ginny at least pays him back for torturing Harry. Harry's scar not burning is curious. Hmmm, what is he up to?
Author's Response: *Wrings hands deviously* Oh yeah, the stuff's about to hit the fan ;). Voldy's not a happy camper.
Really nice start to your story. I loved the ending - so Harrylike, but Hermione is right, he needs his allies. I can't even say Harry is wrong though, Voldemort doesn't tolerate "spares". Very gripping stuff. I liked Harry's thoughts at the beginning as he reminisced about his final year at Hogwarts.
You didn't say why he, Ron and Hermione went back, however? The one bit of constructive criticism I'd give - and ignore it if you'd like - is that Harry and Ginny seem very OOC being awkward with each other. JKR set them up as understanding each other better than anyone else, and that didn't play here. I read your reviews that you based their break up on personal experience, which generally is a great way to write, but you have to take into consideration the personalities of your players. That didn't feel right for them at all.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed the ending - I was definitely going for putting Harry in a tight spot - I promise things will turn out for the best in the chapters ahead!
As for Harry and Ginny's dynamic, I am adding a special author's note about it shortly, so check back. I think it'll clear up the issue (seems a lot of readers have been rather passionate about it...)
OH, bravo! I got the update for the story, but it wasn't approved yet. Thanks for the reminder. You know me - I simply couldn't read the last one,but this one is perfect. I loved Harry's meeting with DD, and I love his choice even more. He so deserves to live. I like the idea of going through the water to return, and while he was walking on it, his fear of stepping in the wrong place was right on. Well done.
Wow, great chapter. The battle with the Inferi was dramatic and intense and highly enjoyable. I loved Harry's anxiety about losing that amulet, too. Using the paint was great, and I loved Hagrid's refusal to leave them behind.
Malfoy. I liked how in character you kept him even though he was helping Harry. Not many people can pull that off, so kudos. While I don't for a second believe canon Malfoy is a werewolf, it works nicely for your story. The only problem is that Wolfsbane would not have stopped his transformation, merely made him docile until the moon had passed.
Author's Response: Many thanks for your review :). I knew that Werewolf!Malfoy would be the biggest stretch I've made thus far - but I figured it wouldn't be too bad considering his mysterious condition in HBP, you know? Either way, I'm so glad you thought it worked :). Cheshlin brought up the problem with Wolfsbane, so I'm gonna try to spend a little time today fixing that issue (there's a charm to turn a werewolf back into a man, but I just want to make it convincing that the charm could last an entire night). In any case, thanks again!
Great, tense, exciting chapter. I'm not sure about Harry announcing to everyone about the Horcruxes like that though, since he wouldn't even tell McGonagall. Regardless though, I loved Harry's running, jumping Diaperating, and I love that Snape seems so loathsome. Good stuff here. I also enjoyed the warm reception from Molly.
Author's Response: Thanks again Melindaleo! It was tough plotting out the action - it was literally like choreographing a dance at times. And yeah, Snape will be getting a little juicier in chapters ahead, so I'm hoping that'll be great fun once I get to it. As for Harry's announcement - I'm not sure if I conveyed it correctly, but the only people who were paying attention to Harry at the moment were McGonagall and Lupin - everyone else is too preoccupied with fighting, healing, or trying not to die ;). Harry's a little less concerned with who knows at this point - he's got few precious hours left to deal with Voldemort and rid himself of the Horcrux inside him before morning. Considering how things have been unfolding, he could use all the help he can get! Anyhoo, as always, thanks so much for sticking with the story and for your fantastic review :).
Wow! Strong stuff. I've seen this theory before, and to be honest, I can easily argue both sides depending on which way the other person goes. After reading this, I'm on the side that Harry's not a Horcrux, but if you'd said he wasn't , I would have argued that he was. It's such a great idea to comtemplate. I LOVED Harry's reaction to the new. It was wonderfully understated and so him. I agree that Snape was acting on DDs orders, but it doesn't make me like him any more. He's a good guy, but he's not a nice guy.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I tell you, JKR gave me a run for my money with all the questions HBP raised. I must be absolutely out of my mind to write this fic! Anyhoo, I hope it was entertaining if still a bit underdeveloped, but luckily there are more chapters to come to flesh it out a bit better :). Cheers!
Aww, I liked that last bit there. Poor, Harry. There has to be a way to destroy the soul part of Voldemort, and still leave Harry alive, otherwise how will he kill Voldemort? Hmmm. Exciting stuff. I'm glad they told Ginny everything.
Author's Response: Thanks, Melindaleo! 'Poor Harry' is right. The good news is that the ending is already written; it's ridiculous how much time I've spent putting together the scene where Harry and Voldemort finally duel considering all the factors involved (ie: wands/horcruxes/character deaths/redemptive moments). Krikey. I'm giving a heckuvalot away there, aren't I... ;) Thanks again!
First fic? Really? Wow! I thought it was great and blended seemlessly with canon. You really had Ron down very well, and Hermione's gentle reasoning with him was well done. Nice job.
Author's Response: Hey, I was hoping you might read my story! You are one of my favorite authors! I'm really excited to get a good word from you, and hope I can keep making my readers happy. Thank you very much!
I really liked that you had Hermione unable to do something Defense-related. There has been so much emphasis in canon on how it's her weakest subject, I really think that will come back into play somehow. I also really loved Lavender being catty to Hermione. Such a small detail, but very well spotted.
I have to admit, I really miss Harry playing Quidditch. I don't think I like seeing it go on without him. :(
Author's Response: Thanks, I think it is the little details that make these stories fun. We all have the same basic concept if we are writing a 7th book story. So it is the little things that make it our own. That was one of the things l loved about your stories. As for Harry and Quidditch, there is a game left in the season but GInny would have to be hurt or something for Harry to play. No one knows what the future holds, except Trelawny, and Ferinze and who knows what they would tell you. :) Take Care
Oh, thanks. I'm so glad you're doing an aftermath. I really missed that in DH. Sniff over the loss of Hagrid. I think that would hit very hard. Percy was a shock, but a really good one. I was so certain that when everyone argued with Ron, he'd be proved wrong. That seems to usually be the way it worked. I was delighted to see something different.
Author's Response: Thanks Melinda, I enjoyed making my argument for Percy being a bad guy. That was the only thing about DH I didn\'t like, the fact that Percy came back and was accepted too easily. Yes we will have a bit of after math and an epilogue at the end. Take Care and I hope you are working on something orginal for us to go out and buy.