I'm a thirtysomething mom of 3 who uses HP as an escape. I'm thoroughly addicted. I've got strong opinions on characterization, and I've become an ardent H/G fan since Order of the Phoenix.
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Ooh, I liked this chapter. I liked the fight between Harry and Hermione. Hermione, as usual - is so literal she misses the fact entirely that he's angry for beging kept in the dark AGAIN. You'd think his best friends would know how he feels about that since everyone else in his life does it to him regularly. I think he expected more from her.
To be honest, I had trouble seeing Hermione as an Auror, anyway, the carerer she's chosen for herself fits. I also liked her thoughts on Ron's eating habits and the way he stayed out when things got heated. She's got Ron pegged, but really doesn't understand Harry.
Author's Response: Thanks. You're right. Hermione missed the mark (at this point) and Harry's too pre-occupied with his righteous anger to wonder why Hermione didn't tell him OR Ron until she did. And Ron, well...he's just Ron. I really think that it's about time Hermione turn into at teenager (instead of the smallish overly insightful adult that she morphs into on occassion) who makes mistakes and is WRONG. I think she thinks that she understands Harry more than she does, but I don't think anyone really understands Harry, not even himself. I think don't think cannon Hermione should be an Auror either. She's much to analytical (less instinctive), and she tends to freeze and panic in dangerous situation (OK, at least in the early books), and judging by her comparative OWL scores, DA isn't her forte. Hermione would want to be the best at whatever she does.
Grin, obviously I'm reading this after HBP and I got such a grin on my face when over the smell in Potions class. Of course, it wasn't the same thing but it made me react fondly.
I like the seperation with Hermione, both in this story and HBP simply because it forces Harry to depend on himself more, and do his own work. I think it's a very important part of Harry's growing experience. Of course, in neither situation do I want it to last overly long, but I still think it's important to Harry's maturity.
I wonder who the Slytheirin girl is? I'm sorry for my previous assumptions that this was a H/G story (although the scene on the train certainly shows promise.) I mentioned that KEDme referred me when I asked for a good H/G fic, so I had just assumed. My apologies.
Author's Response: It seems that we agree 100% here! There needs to definitely be some distancing between the trio for Harry's character to evolve. I think you'll see how the ship evolves here...:)
Hooray, you're back!! I wish there was a way to get an alert when chapers update on this site! I hope you had a wonderful trip.
What happened to the drinking scene? I hope it's still forthcoming. I like the idea of the Quidditch match and I'm LOVING your portrayal of Stephen Cornfoot. I got such a kick out of him, and I always like to see someone able to go toe-to-toe with Hermione and reasonably present the other side of her arguments. I'm worried about Harry's pallor after the Legilimency. Is he doing glamour charms? I think I'll have to go back and refresh my memory.
Author's Response: South America was absolutely amazing (the people, the culture, the food, the history - I could go on but I won't)! The drinking scene is still coming, but I have a couple of intervening chapters that I have to finish off before that suite of chapters (which are done) gets posted. I wasn't planning on portraying Stephan with such a sharp tongue, but that's what materialized. He's now a combination of the character that he was originally intended to be and a discarded character from a peripheral storyline who was supposed to have a crush on Ginny and be in Trelawney's class with her. I'm glad that you like him and we'll see where he ends up! The Quidditch tournament will (HOPEFULLY) be interesting; by then all of the characters will have been introduced and the story will be moving along at full speed. Harry is still only working on Occulmency during his private lessons (for good or bad) - his POV is back next chapter and you can see what he thinks of the entire deal. No glamour charms, but it would probably do him some good ;)! Thanks for your thoughts!
Great chapter! October seems so far away, but we'll manage. The Apparation lesson was funny - the Ministry official sounds like a lot of self-important "officials" often do. Very amusing.
I think Harry's mood swings might be his Legilimency and picking up on the moods and feelings of those around him.
I LOVED the shaving flashback. It was SO funny, and so normal teenage behavior. I think pre-HBP my favorite canon relationship was the friendship between the two boys, so that was nice to see.
As for my favorite canon post-HBP relationship, well, I saw traces of that one starting here, as well. Woo Hoo. Surest indication that you DO like someone is to inisst that you DON'T. I'm very curious about that old photo of Harry.
The FireWhiskey scene sounds like so much fun. I love Drunk!Harry.
Author's Response: Thank you. I know you're an adamant H/G shipper, so there you go - cat's out of the bag! :) I like the Harry-Ron dynamic as well. I think it would be hard to outdo their bond (even with a romantic relationship). Plus, Ron is so much fun to write - I stick him in whenever and wherever possible!
I can't believe I just typed a whole huge review and this site ate it! Grrrr. I'll try and remember what I said.
I enjoyed this chapter - tense and exciting. I loved the dialog and interaction between Snape and Cass. I was nearly growling at Snape and so indignant on Harry's behalf over his foul insinuations. I can't believe DD hasn't learned his lesson about keeping information from Harry that directly pertains to him. Will he ever learn?
The Shape Shifter obviously wants a bit of Harry's blood, but interesting that DD also didn't want the Ministry to have it. Poor Harry, so much going on and people plotting over him without him left with a clue.
I thought by far the best and most poignant part of the chapter was Hary's bottling his grief and emotion over Sirius's loss. Talk about tugging on my heartstrings! It left me feeling so sorry for him, yet at the same time so eager to see what it will take for him to finally crack.
I'm really eager for more. I don't mind the footnotes (although I found the numbers in the text rather startling at first. I don't think they're necessary though, so you really don't need to bother.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback and your comments, especially about those footnotes! They are very helpful. I'm so glad that you had that reaction to Snape because that's what I was aiming for. Dumbledore not telling Harry things for his own safety was something that I wasn't sure if it was going to be plausible, but I see him as the grand orchestrator, the benevolent (and human) puppeteer, and I'm working off of OotP Dumbledore (not HPB Dumbledore). Even so, there is a limit to how much is believeable. Yes, poor poor Harry, he is quite overdue for a nice angsty meltdown isn't he? Again, that Sirius thing can only be belabored to a point before it begins to get redundant. These are two things that will be addressed in the next suite of chapters along with Dumbledore's motivations regarding the Ministry and Harry's blood. Your review is much appreciated!
BTW, I copy all of my long reviews and author responses before I press 'submit' so I have a copy on my desktop just in case it disappears (which just happened!).
Delighted to see you return! I hope this means more updates will continue? I adored the beginning of this chapter from Ginny's POV. I loved the image of her fixing Harry's glasses before she fell asleep. As to the second part, well, I'm going to go with the flow and see how it all plays out. I'm very resistant to the idea that Harry's full of Dark Magic. I think the reason he couldn't perform that Cruciactus will be very significant in the end. If Voldemort is that evil, I think there has to be a counterbalance, and that's Harry. Still, I've been so eager to see how you deal with Sirius, and what this plan is of DD's. As always, I'm very eager for more. Oh! I also love Wymond. It's down to his acceptance of Eva that keeps me from wanting to lock her in a room with Snape until only one emerges, lol.
Author's Response: I\'m so happy to have this chapter over and done with! It\'s actually a great relief to have this lengthy Ginny POV behind me - I find her incredibly challenging to write because there is so little of her in canon that I don\'t have a good grasp of her character in comparison to the other major players. I\'m pleased that you liked it. :) As far as you comment on DarkMagic!Harry goes, I don\'t believe that Light and Dark magic are as cut and dry as \"good\" and \"bad\", respectively. I also believe that just because someone has Dark Magic capabilities, doesn\'t necessarily mean they\'re evil. How they choose to use it is another thing, however. :) I like to think that all magical beings possess components of both Light and Dark Magic - it\'s just that the Light Magic is easier to access (as it\'s taught and wizards and witches tend to exercise this type magic more ... as well as neutral magic that doesn\'t tap into any emotions like \"Lumos\"). To me, it seems like most wizards and witches in canon have the POTENTIAL to perform an Unforgivable Curse as they are magical beings and can do spells/hexes/curses, so I interpret that to mean that Dark Magic is present in everyone magical. However, the big difference (as stated in canon) is two fold: 1. the CHOICE to attempt to use Dark Magic-related curses and 2. the true INTENT to do harm to another which powers the curse (and in my interpretation allows one to actually access the Dark Magic present as it\'s fueled by emotion/intent). So I think that even though Dark Magic exists in everyone, it doesn\'t necessarily mean that it\'s going to be used to do harm. In that respect, yes, it is significant that Harry was unable to fuel the Unforgivable Curse at the end of OofP, but I think that just because he couldn\'t do it doesn\'t necessarily mean he can\'t have a component of Dark Magic existing in him somewhere. I agree with you 100% on Light and Dark Magic having to counterbalance each other, but how that balance ties to Harry and Voldy\'s outcome in this story won\'t boil down exclusively to \"Light Magic\" vs. \"Dark Magic\" and \"pure goodness\" vs. \"pure evil\" in black and white terms. However, the balance bewteen the two is going to be addressed and that will play an important role in the H/Voldy struggle and dictating the final confrontation. :) I look forward to writing the Sirius part! And it\'s taking some major self control not to jump ahead and just write it now. *sits on hands* LOL! Snape and Eva stuck together in a cupboard would also be entertaining. I would fear for both of them, I think. Snape is so horrible, and I\'m sure he smells. And I bet that Eva could do some damage with that stump of hers. ;) Thanks for your review!
Whoa! What a fantastic update! It was worth the wait, even - but please, don't leave us too long with the cliffy!
It was delightful to read a Harry who acts like Harry and a Ginny who acts like Ginny for a change ;)
Damn though, did anyone else realize what was going on out there? And what will this mean for Harry's chances to play in the tournament? Ouch, poor thing.
I ADORED his clumsiness before the match, and the silly boy's confusion over what was causing it. The touching scene between Ginny and Harry was wonderful. And his thoughts were confusing and distorted and very well thought out.
Author's Response: Melindaleo, I missed this story, so it was nice to get back to writing a variety of characters again. *grins* I don't want to leave such a long time between another update again because I'm finding it increasingly difficult to switch POV gears the longer I wait. Urgh.
So this chapter jump starts our H/G "adventure". A nice long, darkish, and angsty road stretches before our wonder duo that I can't wait to start marching down. There was at least one other person who picked up on something "strange" happening on the Quidditch pitch in more ways than one. *wink* Also, the tournament is about a month away. But before then, there's a Gryffindor/Slytherin match that needs to be dealt with. I tend to think that Harry is sort of like a rubber ball - he always seems to bounce back somehow. Thanks for your review!
Nice start to the story, I generally like the idea of Harry in a Muggle hospital. KEDme referred me to this story,and so far I'm very intrigured.
Author's Response: Hi Melindaleo, Thank you for your review. I'm flattered that KED referred you; her story is absoutely amazing. I've noticed that you've left some more reviews which is very nice because I'm always eager to hear what insights other author's have...
Yikes!!! Scary ending there. I felt so bad for Harry when Uncle Vernon was berating him. Poor kid. I know he'd hate me cuz I desperately want to hug him. Who are the two talking and what do they want with Harry? They want him awake so he fears it? Sounds like a Malfoy to me...
Author's Response: I agree, Harry needs about a million hugs! The person instigating those orders is, in my opinion, evil personified and I can't wait for the reveal!
Excellent chapter! I like seeing things from other POV on occasion. Harry is in rough shape, but I'm DYING to know what those other two did to him and his memories. At first, I thought we'd have amnesiac Harry, but he seems to have stopped them himself before the Order got to him. I'm anxious to learn more so I'm moving onward!
Author's Response: Thank you. I think writing in alternating third person makes it much easier to convey other character's feelings/thoughts than third person limited, and, at this point, I'm all for the easy way out. :) Plus I like to play with the nuances of speech pattern and perception between the different characters (or at least I pretend to in my own world). I toyed with the idea of having an amnesiac Harry, but he needs his memory and sense of self at this point.
Sniff. This was a wonderfully done chapter. I was annoyed by Molly and her overprotectiveness at first. Hadn't she learned anything in OotP? But then..with that flashback scene, and Harry calling her Mum. Oh, my poor heart. Sniff. It was nice to hear her thoguhts and see how attached she is to Harry. I loved the thought of how he'd snuck in and stolen a piece of her heart, and my favorite like was the one about The hero of the Wizarding world being a child - a child that needed his mum. Really touching stuff. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Melindaleo, Thank you for your compliments. It certainly means a lot, especially coming from you. I really think Molly needs more action in the books, so this is my attempt at remedying that. She's the only true mother figure we see (does Neville's gran really count?) and I think that's GOT to be important. After all, parental love is still love and it's all got to add up to something substantial in the end.
Hello? I hope all is going well, Billie. I'm DYING for an update here? Can I hope for anything soon?
Author's Response: Oh dear. *biteslip* Yes, I have been neglectful as of late. PR has been keeping me busy, but I think things are starting to fall in place and I'm beginning to miss writing on my own soooo....I will be submitting the next chapter later this week for both stories! My sincere apologies for the delay! Thanks for checking in and giving me a nudge in the right direction.
Oh, I'm SO happy to see an update to this story! I hope you'll still finish it now that you're writing another. You will, won't you?
I'm really curious as to how they are going to stage "Sirius's" death and how it will be hard on Harry. Something tells me it's going to go even worse than DD is imagining.
Lucius was chilling, but I'm intrigued to see what happens, and Luna was loads of fun in this chapter. Urgh, did we have to bring back Dean though?
Author's Response: Melindaleo, You'll have to cut off both my hands for me to let go of this fic. The other stories are just me dabbling in other things in order to satiate those distracting plot bunnies running around in my head.
As far as Sirius's death affecting Harry goes, let me just say this: let the walls continue to fall! Bring on the angst. ;)
It would seem that Ginny likes Dean (at least enough to get back together with him), but who knows what will happen in the future. After all, they did already break up once...As always, thanks for the review!
Kathy, If you feel your story is right the way it is, don't let the MuggleNet mods. bully you. I find some of them to be extremely difficult and opinionated. I loved your first chapter, and I'm anxious for more. I'd suggest to either take it to another site or simply submit it again as is and you might get a fairer moderator.
I'm so glad to see this back here and continuing! Oh, no over Mrs. Weasley - I'm off to read more. I do hope Fred and George told someone that Harry's not eating, however - that can't be good.
Backup? Hmm, is DD asking Dung for backup, or is he telling Dung to get backup cuz he know Harry tricked him already? I can't wait for more.
Hello! Now I get to return the favor and review you!! Great job! Poor, Harry! My heart just aches for him. But I think you already have the thing I love most in a story - protective Weasleys! Woo Hoo!
Your profile page is a hoot! Ron and Hermine like each other - get over it. Amen, sister! I love it.
Okay, first chapter and a cliffy is kind of cruel, and what a way to torment poor Harry.
Author's Response: I am...er...slightly cruel to Harry, but you know I love him. I am sorry about the cliffie. Thanks, ~B.~
Uh oh, they're going to be in trouble with either Ron or Mrs. Weasley if they don't wake up first in the morning. I did find Ginny's changing in front of her brother a bit strange, though.
What stung me more than anything was that Mrs. Weasley didn't even greet Harry. I know she's strung out, but...OUCH! Poor, Harry. That had to hurt.
Author's Response: Ginny doesn't care - or at least I don't think she would that much. The fact that Mrs W didn't even greet Harry shows the extent to which she is stressed out.
Hooray for the update! What about Ron though? Harry wouldn't have just saved the girls without Ron. How awful about the Burrow, sniff. I wanted to strangle Ginny, but her response was very human. The idea of Harry wanting to shout "I did it" was so cute and recognizable.
So, are they in his room in Grimmauld Place or at Privet Drive?
Author's Response: Exactly - she wasn't exactly thinking straight at the time. I'm not telling you where they are! You have to wait for the update! Thank you so much for the brilliant review - it's people like you that help the most. xxx hattiepotter xxx
I've just read through both stories and really enjoyed them. I can't tell you how happy I am to see you showing some of the side effects and psychological trauma being a tortured POW for so long is having on Harry. I loved the flashback dream and the constanct flinching - very nicely done and I hope you follow through with it. Harry gave Ginny the flower and admitted he needed help, but he really still hasn't leaned on anyone.
I was actually more annoyed by Ginny in the past few chapters. If my timeline is right, he's only been back for a few days and she's being rather demanding. She has to at least suspect they didn't treat him very well, even if not the full impact of how they tortured him.
My heart is aching for Harry in your story right now, I guess I'm feeling a bit protective of him.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like my ideas. Harry was still getting over the whole thing, as you say, and he really hadn't properly opened up to anyone yet. When he first gets back, Ginny is so happy that she doesn't care that he's not telling her anything, but then she starts to want to know. I do feel sympathy for her, as she doesn't really know what he's been through, but she does have a right to. Harry isn't feeling up to telling her yet, but he has to soon or else he'll never get it out and off his chest! Please keep reading - your review was wonderfully informative!