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Dark by comewhatmay
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: A poem told by a life long Death Eater who tells of the ways, fate, and what the two sides of magic will yet to become.



PLEASE R&R !!!!!!!!!
Even if you HATE it review please!!!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 100 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/05/06 Updated: 06/06/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: 1

This has a really nice flow. Which Death Eater is it?

Author's Response: Thank you! Well, I guess this could imply to any Death Eater,but I was thinking of Lucius Malfoy.

 

It Matches Your Eyes by bittersweet_lullaby
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 38]

Summary: I met her on the train ride to Hogwarts. We both got sorted into Hufflepuff, we take all the same classes, and we're best friends. But I've started to feel a little more for Hannah Abbott.



Two friends, both female. One life-changing infatuation that quickly turns to the greatest thing in the world: love. Susan Bones reflects on her life and explores the what-ifs of her relationship with Hannah Abbott.

Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Slash

Word count: 1270 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/07/06 Updated: 06/08/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/25/07 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Well, I must admit that this is a pairing that I never would have thought of. However, itís an intriguing idea, and you handled it very well. I love what you did with Susanís character. She was so real and well developed. It was almost like I knew her and she was one of my friends. You certainly have a gift for making unexpected pairings work.


She's an angel without wings, sent down from Heaven to make me realize how boring my life was, and to help me find myself. I don't know how I survived before I met her.


The first sentence of this passage is wonderful. It really shows the intensity of Susanís feelings and makes her seem somewhat poetic in her thoughts. However, Iím not a fan of the second sentence. The whole, ďI canít live without themÖĒ bit has been used very many times. Itís really been over done in fiction and RL. I think it takes away from the power of the first sentence. However, thatís just my opinion and just something for you to think about.


Sitting there with Hannah, holding that butterfly, was the day I started living.


I liked this line. Again, it shows the intensity of Susanís feelings and shows how she is seeing life in a different way because of Hannah. In a way, this is similar to your like about how she lived without Hannah; however, itís handled much better here. Using different words and not directly stating that sentiment give the same impression, but seem so much less clichť.


I'm in love with my best friend, and she has no idea.


This line really stuck out to me. It sounds so ordinary. The type of thing any teenager in love with their best friend would think. I like that because it makes Susanís feelings for Hannah seem more natural. Often in fan fiction, same sex pairings are handled differently than opposite sex pairings and it makes these relationships feel wrong to the reader. However, you have made this feel like a perfectly normal crush for a teenage girl. Good for you. You write same sex pairings very well.


I would also like to say that you write romance very well. I completely sympathize with Susan. It was easy to relate to her feelings. Anyone who has ever had feelings for someone that werenít returned could relate to her. Having a character that your reader can relate to is a mark of a great writer. This piece was very well done. You should be very proud of it.

 

Behind Prison Bars by lunar
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: No matter what.



These words were repeated over and over again in Mrs Crouch's mind as she lay dying. She believed in her sons innocence, believed that he should be free, so much that she took his place. In her cell, she lets her last thoughts roam to cover the thing most important to her; Barty.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 985 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/09/06 Updated: 06/15/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Cool. I never gave this character much thought. But she had a story to tell, and I think you did a wonderful job telling it.

Author's Response: Thank you Sly Severus. I thought it might be good to take a small character and talk about them. I\'m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again for reviewing!

 

But Sirius by Loki MM
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 20]

Summary: Sirius and Remus are in the library when Sirius happens to notice Regulus sitting next to a girl. A little too close to a girl for big brother's liking. So big brother proceeds to make a foool of himself.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1518 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/12/06 Updated: 06/14/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: But Sirius

Hehe! So cute. And so Sirius. Well done!

 

Voldemort's Day Off by KitKat517
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 24]

Summary: Have you ever wondered what Voldemort does when he isn't planning a new way to kill Harry?

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 123 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/14/06 Updated: 06/16/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Voldemort's Day Off

Haha! This was great!

Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it!

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Voldemort's Day Off

Haha! This was great!

Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it!

 

The Unexpected Gift by Accio_Brain
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 115]

Summary: It's Voldemort's birthday and Harry and Hermione have been invited to his birthday party. As the festivities commence, Voldemort makes a new friend. But things aren't always as they seem, for someone else has a plan that could make this Voldemort's worst birthday ever.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1359 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/15/06 Updated: 06/18/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

HA! That was great. I read the review you got about writing Voldemort at Harry's birthday, that's a wonderful idea. You should so do a sequal to this.

Author's Response: Thanks! I will think about writing a sequel. I currently have a big WIP that\'s occupying my time right now. *insert shameless plug for Innocence Found* : D

 

Changing Masks by delta
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: My eyes do not speak of my namesake like they should. For fifteen generations, black eyes had become one of the many trademarks of my powerful family. Black, they said, was pure and undiluted, just like their blood, and, as such, those opaque eyes became a point of pride in my family. But I had grey eyes. And those grey stormy eyes of mine marked me as different from the day I was born. They were a watered-down black, just like I was.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1633 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/15/06 Updated: 06/17/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/17/06 Title: Chapter 1: Changing Masks

That was a very entertaining take on Sirius' thoughts. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks. I\'m glad you liked it. :)

 

Summary: Just where exactly did Dumbledore go for days on end during Half-Blood Prince? Surely all that time wasn't spent just looking for Horcruxes... Though, he did mention that he occasionally stopped for drinks before searching...

This story contains two of the most unlikey drinking buddies imaginable...

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Substance Abuse

Word count: 1782 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/15/06 Updated: 06/18/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Drinking Game

That was great! Just the thought of those two drunk makes me laugh. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you all liked it. :-)

 

Stone by coppercurls
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A poem by Severus Snape for Narcissa, of life and learning and love. Set at Spinner's End.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 164 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/16/06 Updated: 06/19/06


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: Stone

I'm a horrible judge of poetry, but for what it's worth I liked this. It had a nice flow, and I kinda like the idea of a Severus/Narcissa pairing. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review; I appreciate your opinion!

 

Living With What's Done by Hermione_Rocks
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 38]

Summary: Ever since HBP and the famous interview with Jo conducted by Emerson and Melissa, there have been thousands of ideas and fics about Severus Snape and Lily Evans having some sort of romance. But Lily wasn't the only female in Snape's life...nor is the only type of love the romantic kind.





This is the story of someone else who has a connection with Severus, and how they have been, and still are, affected by him: Selena Snape, his sister.





"But I did...and I'm living with it. Because that's what we do...live with what we've done, live with our mistakes, the life we've made for ourselves."

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 34079 Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/17/06 Updated: 01/16/07


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 08/11/06 Title: Chapter 6: Accusations

That is a very different view of how Severus responded after the run in with Potter at the lake. Very interesting. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you! I thought it\'d be interesting to expand the \'Snape\'s Worst Memory\' a bit, glad you liked it. :)

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 8: Realizations

Well, hello, Anna.:D I bet you thought I abandoned this story. I really didn't.


This chapter was interesting. It's strange to see Selena having a life, as there is no indication that she ever has before. It's strange to think that someone could be that controled by the actions of their brother.


And I see Bella got a mention. ;) *huggles Bella*


Good job!

Author's Response: *smiles* Yes, I did think that. No worries. :P

Anyhow, the sad thing is most people are controlled by what happened to them when they were younger. It\'s sometimes hard to go on despite what parents/siblings/peers/etc might have said or done. I think it\'s something we all need to work on, in one way or another.

Anywho, enough preaching. :) I\'m glad you were happy to see Bellatrix. She didn\'t really have the nicest role, though.

Thank you for the review!

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 9: Familiar Faces

Ooo, I liked this. Selen v. Narcissa was very interesting. I never thought of the two of them being in the same place at the same time. I very much enjoyed Narcissa's attitude in this. :D

Author's Response: *giggles* Thanks, Elle. This was a fun chapter to write. :D

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 10: What to Believe

*giggles* You really have Severus' annoying nature down. I loved his cryptic letter. I also loved how he just egged her on at the school. It was great.


However, I think this was my favorite line:


"I trust Severus," Dumbledore proclaimed firmly. "And if I do, then that should be enough for everyone."


It was annoying enough when other people said that was a good reason to trust one. To show that Albus is arrogant enough to believe that his opinion is gold, is perfect. It so fits his charater.


Very good, Anna. I'm sorry I've been away from this story for so long.



Author's Response: :D I love writting Severus. As you probably noticed.

Ah, yes, you\'re not a Dumbledore fan. I actually like the guy, but it is annoying how conceeded he is over his great intelligence.

Don\'t be sorry. *huggles* I love reviews no matter when I get them! :D

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 11: Long Ago Acceptance And Apologies

Loved it! I would say your best chapter. :D


Although, one question, what is a rat snake?

Author's Response: *giggleblush* Thanks Elle!

Didn\'t I include an explaination of the patronuses at the bottom of the chapter? I guess I forgot... *scolds self*

I spent a LOT of time trying to figure out an appropriate patronus for Selena. I settled on a black rat snake (also known as the pilot black snake). It is a non-venomus species of snake, found in North America. I don\'t remember much else off-hand, if you want more detail go to wikipedia. :P

Anyhow. So patronuses are supposed to represent something or someone that protects you. The only person I could ever see filling this role for Selena was Severus. I\'ve always seen Severus having a snake Animagus (if he is one) so decided that Selena needed a snake patronus.

I chose the black rat snake specifically though. The rat snakes are often thought to be copperheads. Copperheads are a poisoness snake, and while rat snakes will bite if threatened, are not related to the copperhead, nor are in any way poisoness. This was supposed to reflect how people sometimes pass judgement on Selena being Severus\' sister, even if it\'s not something she can control.

Sorry about my rambling. I should post all this in the chapter. :P Anyhow, thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 12: An Encounter

Hmmm...interesting. Although, I don't really understand why she agreed. He has given her no reason to trust him....

Author's Response: *shrugs* She agreed because a) he\'s her brother, b) I didn\'t know why she would agree, and c) I was sick of the story. No, those aren\'t good reasons in the slightest, but there ya go. :P Lol.

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 13: Epilogue: Conversations

*giggles* It's a nice ending. I like that she finally came terms with trusting her brother. Somehow, it seems like there should be more though. However, I know how you feel about being sick of it. I was beyond sick of Only Human. I almost deleted it, but I managed to finish it because of a few loyal readers. So I know where your coming from. But overall, this was awesome. Very well done! Sorry, it took me so long to finish it.

Author's Response: Lol, yes, it isn\'t very tied up. But I really was getting sick of this story. It was just feeling very...I don\'t know, annoying. :P And parts felt stupid, and cliched, and I just generally felt it wasn\'t all that well written. But, I had made it pretty far, so knew I wouldn\'t be happy with myself if I just abandoned it.

Anywho. Thank you for reading, and sticking out the story. :) *huggles*

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 09/04/06 Title: Chapter 7: He's Never Really Gone

I loved it, as usual. I really liked the flashback with Selena and Severus' father. Are we ever going to find out what Severus' revenge was?


One thing, this line: "Of course he did. He says it looks forward to it." has an it that should be a he.


Otherwise, I loved it!

Author's Response: There will be more involving their father, yes. That it was certainly not supposed to be there. Oops. ;)

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/19/06 Title: Chapter 2: S-N-A-P-E

Hehe! Chapter Two is even better. I love the way you're developing the brother sister relationship! Good job! I'm now adding this story to my favorites!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! You made me smile (and not in the sense that I typed a smiley, either). :)

 
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/24/06 Title: Chapter 3: The Funeral

Wonderful, as always.

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

 
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