You are a really talented poet. This is very beautiful.
Awesome! I absolutly loved it. These are very realistic thoughts for a Death Eater. Very well done!
I loved it! You are really good at identify emotions that Death Eaters are likely to experience. This was really truly wonderful!
Hehe! This was great. There were tons of wonderful one-liners in here. I really, really enjoyed this.
Author's Response: Before writing Tonks, I sat and thought of her question to Moody about wands in back pockets. So much of her character is right there in that sentence. She\'s flippant, saucy, and utterly unintimidated by authority. So putting her with Severus, Lord of Sarcasm, made for quite the scene and I had a blast. I\'m glad it was as much fun to read as to write! Thanks for the review!
Masky! This story is really great. I was totally sucked in. It took me awhile to realize exactly what was going on, but Iím probably just having a slow night. You know I have those. Once I grasped it, I was reminded of Mary Poppins. :D
The two sounds chased each other around the room, stealing the joy from the house; the slamming of a door, and the sharp exhalation of a frustrated male breath. As they died away, tumbling past each other up the stairs, the cottage sagged. It wasnít grand enough for itís master, wasnít the mansion that people expected. Itís cheerful colors and plain decorations werenít what a hero was supposed to have, and itís occupants were far from glorious.
Wow. This is a really strong start. I can imagine this as Harryís life. Heís so drawn to the ordinary, but the whole world would expect his life to be luxurious and special. I donít ever see Harry having a Malfoy-lifestyle. Heís happy just being like everyone else. I donít really understand that, personally. :p
One little nitpick, in this excerpt you have misused itís twice. Itís cheerful colors should be Its cheerful colors. The same thing with its master.
The war had taught the better part of him not to expect fairness from his fellow humans, and the righteous anger died away quickly.
I loved this line. It really shows that Harry learned something from the war. Honestly, in his younger years, he seemed a little hopeless in that area. Although it is rather sad that the lesson he learned was so harsh.
Jon was really cute. I liked how he was connected to his fatherís feelings. He seems a little young to really pick on emotion, so it seemed like a special bond to me. However, I was surprised that he had taken to speaking in snake language. I would think it would take a child longer to master that than English. Of course, I could be wrong since Harry just started speaking it without even realizing itÖ
I also really liked Sarah. She had a sad background, but in a way it was similar to that of Harry and Voldemort. Itís nice to see that her kindness could survive a harsh upbringing. I hope she has a happy life with Harry and Luna. By the way, cute pair. I donít think Iíve ever read them together.
Anyway, I really enjoyed your story. Good luck with your future writing and I shall try to check out more of your work. *hugs*
Author's Response: Gah. It\'s and its are my personal demons. I *know* them, but I can\'t type them, and I can\'t see them. You\'re not the only one who\'s been a bit lost - if I ever rewrite this story I\'ll try to make it a bit more obvious. Every child that I\'ve ever seen has been extremely responsive to their parent\'s anger. I was using the theory that Jon could speak Parsletongue as easily as Harry first did, to the extent that he knew how, since it\'s an enchanted language. NEVER READ HARRY/LUNA?!? Horror! Thank you very much for the review. It completely made my evening.
He started calling her Bella, how cute. I absolutly loved the Muggle First Aid kit. As if Severus would have any idea what to do with that. This story is really great. I'm totally hooked now.
Author's Response: The First Aid kit was great joke, in my opinion. Because, as you said, Severus has no idea what to do with it. He is astounded when the wounds don\'t heal immediately. muuhahahaha another fish on the line.. ~woomama
I liked it. When I read the last chapter I thought that he was going to send Bella but I couldn't figure out what they would do with her voice. Anyway, I found out it was Peter from your post in the fourms.
This paragraph is absolutly perfect. I think it describes Peter wonderfully:
"The one thought that was comforting Hermione Granger was that the pain could not go on forever. At some point, her body would have taken as much abuse as it could and she would pass out. Snape seemed to be enjoying his power over her, more than she had ever seen before. It was almost as if he had never had so much power over another human being in his life. However, she knew that to be untrue. Severus Snape was in control of almost every situation. He had held power over her and the other students at Hogwarts for six out of seven of her years there, and at least ten years before that. Now here he was acting like a child with a new toy, throwing spell after spell at her. The black clad wizard cackled with glee while slamming her into the wall, hanging her upside down, or torturing her with the Cruciatus Curse."
Anyway, very well done. I anxiously await the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I am glad that you liked what I did with Peter. I knew that he was the perfect choice as the imposter since he was the one most likely to enjoy the opportunity to weild Snape\'s \"perceived\" power over another human being and fulfill his disgusting desire for pain. You picked out the best paragraph as the clue to who it was. I think even if you hadn\'t seen on the forums what I was up to, you probably would have figured it out. I am glad you are enjoying the story. My muse is almost sober enough to contine working on Chapter Nine now. ~woomama
Hey, my two favorite characters Bella and Severus. This was really entertaining. I loved the interaction between the two. Their squabbling is adorable. I know this is a Severus/Hermione pairing, but I hope Bella is around some more. Very good first chapter!
Author's Response: Yes, I have a different outlook as to Bella\'s attitude. I tend to see her as more of an opportunist. She will snuggle up to anyone that #1 she can advance from #2 she can antagonize. In my view I think that she sees Snape as a superior that has lost his dominance, and she loves being able to lord it over him. Glad you are enjoying. ~woomama
Very entertaining. But how come Hermione can get healing potions when Severus can't?
Author's Response: Severus was unable to get healing potions because the house, being sentient, didn\'t think that he needed them. The house didn\'t think of it in terms of him needing them to help Hermione, she had to ask for her own, and then the house knew what she needed. The house is supposed to give them just the bare minimum of their needs. Nothing that will allow them to escape or use magic of their own. ~woomama
Hehe. Poor Severus, it must be a little unnerving to have half dead former students appear in your bed. I really love the way you write him. Well done!
Author's Response: I know, can you just imagine the shock. OH CRAP!!! hahahaha ~woomama
Hmmm...some interesting pairings in here. I always like Severus/Lily, but Minerva/Dumbledore somehow freaks me out.
This was a very interesting chapter. You gave a good reason for Dumbledore's trust, but I never saw him as the type of person who would ask anyone to take an Unbreakable Vow. But he's also not one of my favorite characters so I may not be the best judge.
Anyway, I really enjoyed chapter. Good work! Looking forward to the next chapter. :D
Author's Response: I also liked the idea of Severus/Lily, but well, Lily is dead. Much the same way you won\'t see me writing a \"Sirius jumps back through the curtain\" story, I won\'t be writing a Severus/Lily pairing unless it is set in their teens. I think it is very interesting that Albus/Minerva squicks you out, I have always thought it was a give in, even in canon. That also might just be my perception, but hey, to each his own. Now as for the Unbreakable Vow, there is no indication that Dumbledore *made* him take an Unbreakable Vow, I left that open on purpose so that readers that see it in two different ways can draw their own conclusions. My personal thought was that Severus insisted on it, being as distraught as he was. Kind of like shaking his fist at God and vowing to do everything he can to get even or die trying. Magic just makes sure you can\'t renege. Thanks for reading, Chapter 10 is almost finished. ~woomama
Oh, poor Bella. Sorry, I do have a soft spot for her. Anyway, how on earth did Lucius became the Dark Lord's favorite? I figured he'd be more likely to kill him.
Anyway, I really love this fic. I love reading about Severus, and with a side order of Bella, who could complain?
Author's Response: I guess in my mind Lucius has found a way to regain the Dark Lords favor. He probably should have been killed already, but Lucius is very sly. I am glad that you like the story. I am having a little trouble with my current chapter as well as RL interfering. But Chapter 8 should be coming soon. ~woomama
Well done. I assumed Snape was around Draco when he was growing up, but I could never really decide how they would have interacted with each other. This was an interesting take on that.
Author's Response: I\'d wondered too, and as I\'d written Severus so far, there were extra twists and problems for the relationship. He never can do things the easy way. Thanks for the review!
Awww...I love it! It gave me chills. This was really well done and it clearly shows that the bond of family is not as easy to break as we sometimes wish.
Good Job! Very well written.
Awww...poor Bella. You write her and Rodulphus pretty similar to me, although my main fic about them hasn't been validated yet. I think the guy is a total *tries to think of nasty enough word and fails* but you get the idea.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this. I loved the bit about the little boy. And the line about Lucius not wanting fiflth like her in his house has somehow really stuck in my mind. Very excellent job!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Ha! No wonder the twins are so good at causing trouble. They've gotten help from all of the greatest troublemakers of the previous generation. But they found a better use for their skills.
This was really very amusing! Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks! I had such fun writing this one.
This was really interesting. I've never read anything like it. I liked the idea that it was Slytherin who suggested using Muggle ways to fix the problem, although it doesn't really fit his character. ;) I also loved the last stanza. This was really good. :D
Snape is just the type of person to give someone a shower of spiders for their birthday and make it look sweet. This was very cute. Well done, as always.
Author's Response: That first sentence cracked me up completely -- thanks! And for the review as well!
Well done. I never considered what Hermione's life was like when she wasn't at school. You did a really good job describing it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I didn\'t consider it very much either until I went away to school myself and it occured to me how hard it must be for all the muggleborns to split their lives into two separate worlds. ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing.