I love all things Potter.
*clap, clap, clap*
This was wonderful. I absolutly loved it! There were so many wonderful one-liners. I really enjoyed the way you wrote Lucius. This was just great! I don't know what else to say.
Ah! I remember reading parts of this in EoM. I love the way you pulled it all together. This piece is really well done and I think it's particularly powerful because it's coming from Bellatrix, of course, I am a little *coughalotcough* attached to her.
Anyway, this story is really well done. I enjoyed it a great deal.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I\'m glad you like it. Wish it luck in the challenge then! :]
Albus Dumbledore is a man of many secrets. One of them is his secret identity as an advice columnist, the Wise Wizard. When he coerces Snape to fill in, readers discover the Sagacious Sorcerer answering their queries would be better named Snarky Severus!
This was lovely. You nailed the characters personalities rather well. Perhaps, Severus was a little OOC, but I doubt that could be avoided when he is forced to write an advice column with letters from his favorite students.
You did a wonderful job with the letters. You identified just the type of problems they would write about. I particularly enjoyed Severusí responses. Although, I was rather surprised that Severus didnít respond to the letter from Mary Kate Greengrass. I thought he would enjoy watching Pansy hex the sisters.:D
Overall, this was very well done with lovely characterization. Worth a good chuckle. I particularly enjoyed your insertion of Sparkly-poo house and Severusí little hobby.
Author's Response: Everyone needs a hobby, right? :D Personally, I think Dumbledore deserved to have a never-ending legion of Mary Sues show up with their forged letters. It may be in the \'future\' but I still hold a grudge against Albus for Severus being coerced to kill him, even if it does turn out to be a hoax (girl can hope!)
I probably wasn't supposed to laugh that much, huh? I just don't see Lucius being that hopeless. It's so amusing to think of him like that. I remember laughing when I read your other Lucius story as well.
I also really enjoyed Narcissa in this. I have come to think of her as the weakest of the three sisters and your fic showed her as strong, sarcastic and determined. I also loved how she finally started to slightly soften towards Lucius at the end.
This was really very good, even if I found Lucius' awkwardness far too amusing!
Author's Response: There\'s a few drabbles in The Three Broomsticks you might enjoy, then, where I\'m actually TRYING to be funny at the expense of Lucius Malfoy. Here, I don\'t mind if you snicker a bit, come to think of it. Glad you liked it, at any rate!
Nice, Anna. I loved this. I loved how he felt that he was fading away like the flames. Very inspired. Excellent job!
Author's Response: Lol, I actually got the inspiration for this while snowed in. >.< I think I was desperate for heat, teehee. Anyway, thanks for another lovely review! :D
Cute. This was really well written. I loved your odd choice of character for a poem. Very well done.
Author's Response: Thanks! I love Dobby. He\'s adorable.
DailyProphetEditor, I read this fic when it was first published on MNFF. I believe it was the second story in the most recent category at the time. The next day I added it to my favorites. That was probably about a week ago and I have read it several times since then. However, I couldnít leave you a proper review before now. I really needed time to recover from your story before attempting to respond to it.
This is one of the best stories that I have ever read. It haunted me for days after I read it. The amount of emotion you managed to draw from me was phenomenal. I cried more than once after reading this story.
You have taken two characters that I love beyond all reason and done something truly unique with them. There are very few stories that could hold a candle to this one.
And I must say it takes a lot for me to feel anger towards Severus. I have been annoyed with him twice. The first time was after Siriusí death in OoTP because of the way he treated Harry when he was clearly mourning. The second was when I read this story. I was livid. Had he been a non-fictional character I would have hunted him down and yelled at him. I couldnít believe how quick he was to dismiss Bella after telling her he had loved her enough to follow her as a Death Eater. He claimed that he loved her so much, but that he could no longer feel it. He was going to let her rot in Azkaban because he believed that she could be some threat to him. That is not love. If he ever loved her as much as he claimed then he would not have been able to leave her to such a fate. However, this is something I can see of his character and I think you did well with it. It just really made me angry at him.
On another anger related note, Dumbledore. I believe I may have actually screamed that he was a hypocrite while reading this. But thatís okay. I have always felt that way about him. I absolutely loved the way you handled his character. I think this is the most IC I have ever seen him in fan fiction. He goes on and on about second chances. He was willing to give Severus a second chance. Where was Bellaís second chance? He knew that she had turned away from the Dark Lord. He knew that she was no threat. So why did he treat her like the enemy. He preaches forgiveness, but only shows it when it is convenient for him. When Severus came to him seeking forgiveness, Dumbledore had a use for him so he was forgiven. Bella was so far removed from the Dark Lord that she could no longer be helpful so she was sent to rot. Again, I think you handled his character wonderfully.
There is one scene in this story that I donít really get. When Severus came to heal Bella why was he so cruel to her? I find it hard to believe that anyone, even Severus, could treat someone they had ever loved like that. She was at her weakest and most vulnerable. He should have at least been gentle with her.
I loved the end of this. It was nice to see that Bella remained so concerned about her family. She seemed genuinely grateful to Severus for helping Draco, despite what he was doing to her. I wasnít surprised by her final decision. She had spent fifteen years of her life in Azkaban. Then she had something to hold onto and she hardly escaped with mind. She knew that she could never make it with nothing to hold onto. Suicide was her only way out. However, I do think you should add a suicide warning to this story. I know that details werenít given, but the topic is still there and some people are very sensitive about it. Also, I know there has been some chatter about his in your reviews, but I think it was very clear what Bella planned to do. I donít think you need to adjust your ending at all. Actually, I wouldnít change it. The story was wonderful. If I were you, I wouldnít change a thing.
Again, this was truly amazing. I hope you continue to write because you are obviously very talented.
Author's Response: Wow. I mean, wow. I just logged on here to check out your stories (I saw your name mentioned in the review LilyRoxy left here) and now I find a review from you. Amazing. Thank you so much for your long review. I think we really share views on Snape and Dumbledore. The reason why I wanted Snape to mistreat Bella after her torture is that I think in this story-setting, she has been nasty to him all her life. She has always acted his superior because she had Voldemort behind her. Now she has fallen from Voldemort\'s grace and Snape gets to act out his frustration. He is broken, bitter, and somewhat sadistic. He will mistreat her for all that she has done to him, but he heals her all the same. Well, anyway, thank you so much for your review. I will certainly continue working - next story is with my betas currently. It\'s Snape again, but a little nicer... I am sure you\'re right about the suicide warning. I shall try to change that.
Author's Response: .. actually, I now noticed that your name was not mentioned in LilyRoxy\'s review here, I think I must have read it in her bio information?
Suzie! I had no idea you wrote a Remus/Tonks story. Honestly, I love Tonks, but I donít read many stories about her with Remus. Sheís such a fun character. I like to see her standing on her own. However, this was really great. I loved the emotions you portrayed, especially with the mention of her hair color. I think that speaks a lot about her love for Remus.
The wind rattled the thin windowpanes ominously, as if pounding on the glass for entry. They had been wary for a few days now, jumpy as hell, turning at the slightest rustle, shivering with the slightest chill.
This is such an excellent beginning. You set the scene wonderfully. After reading the first few lines, the reader knows that this takes place during a dark and dangerous time. The wind and rain outside make a perfect backdrop for Tonks conversation with Remus.
fierce, intense love battling with loss and anger and pride.
I loved this little excerpt. The amount of emotion and feeling in these few words is amazing. Very well done, Suzie.
Also, the last two paragraphs were perfect. They thoroughly showed the amount of love between Remus and Tonks. The ending also leaves the reader with a sense of hope in a dark time. It was kind of like, love can beat the odds. I hope thatís true for this adorable couple.
I have one tiny nitpick: They found you anyway Remus. There should be a comma before Remus.
Anyway, this story was really amazing. Well done, Suzie.
Author's Response: ELLABELLA :D Oooh thanks for the SPEW review! *squishes*
As youíve probably gathered I donít usually write romance very much coz Iím crap at it, but this was for the Sneaky Cupid and as Cyns likes RL/NT I thought Iíd give it a go. :D Iíve always thought that Tonksí hair colour change was a nice touch in canon representing both her unhappiness in the war and towards her personal life. I think that it would be a big change in her Ė i.e. not being able to metamorphose, so is a good way to describe how she would be without Remus.
Heehee. Iím glad you like the intro! I love description! && thanks for the nitpick, I think Andrea pointed it out in the acceptance letter for this fic but I never got round to changing it. *hides*
Anyway, thanks so much for the review1 You rock! :D *huggles* ~Suzie
Wow, Suzie. Honestly, I don't know what else to say. This was just amazing. I absolutly love it. Wow, again. *huggles* Sorry, I didn't really have anything constructive to say.
Author's Response: *huggles back* Elle! I\'m glad you like this! Thank you for taking the time to read and review! :) ~Suzie
Awww...this was really wonderful. I could totally feel what Remus was feeling. It was Remus, right? I know you're a fan of Fenrir, but I donít think he has ever locked himself away to avoid harming people.
Anyway, the description was amazing. You described such a normal child, who knew that he wasnít really normal. He showed such a mature and accepting attitude. And if we are talking about Remus, he would have been extremely young at this time. However, that makes sense because he always seemed as though he would have been mature for his age, especially in comparison to James and Sirius.
Again, this was really brilliant. Well done!
Author's Response: Hello, Sly! Thank you soo much for your fabulous, squee-able review. =]
To answer your questons... It was actually written with Fenrir in mind, but I broadened it to encompass all werewolves. I know he doesn\'t seem like the type to lock himself up, but I have a rather... unconventional view on his life. =P
Anyways, thank you soo much! Your wonderful review made my day, and I really appreciate it. =]]]] Fenn
I really enjoyed this. It's not at all what I would have expected from Hermione, but it's totally believable all the same. Her anguish and loss was clear. This was really well done.
I did notice this line: ...although she does she wonder why. There's an extra she in there. ;) I do that a lot.
Anyway, again, very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'ll fix that right away. ;) Thanks again for the review!
Nice, Jen. I was reading your other reviews and will confess that I also concluded you were refering to Neville, but thought of Snape first. I can't imagine those two having much in common. :O
Anyway, the poem was wonderful. I loved the way it flowed. Very good. Slytherin seems to have a lot of wonderful poets.
Author's Response: Teehee, I\'m glad you liked it =) This was just written in response to a sudden poetry bunny, and I haven\'t seen any since then, so... probably no more poetry for me. But I like reading! LOL, no I wouldn\'t say Severus and Neville have THAT much in common... but I can sorta see what you mean... hm. =P Thanks for reviewing, Elle! *hugs*
*huggles Nagini* The poor dear. She just wants a boyfriend. Itís not like sheís an evil lord and the whole world wants to kill her. Iím sure she can go on a date without ending up in prison.
This was a really cute chapter. Well done, as always. Iím sure it will be interesting when we get back to Hogwarts. Oh and I have to ask, will Bella be making an appearance at some point. *makes Bambi-eyes imitating Draco*
Author's Response: Thank you! It\'s always nice hearing from you. As a matter of fact, we will indeed be seeing Bella, although not as much as in \"The Dark Lord\'s Blog,\" because she isn\'t evil ad therefore less interesting.
Yay! It's like having The Dark Lord's Blog back. I love it. I have nothing contructive to say. Well, Severus is very cute, but that's all I got. Nice chapter, though.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, he is rather adorable, isn\'t he?
I like that you chose to write about an ignored character. Dobby is such a cute little guy and we really don't see him much in fanfiction. Of course, after DH....but it's not like J.K didn't raise people from the dead...
I'm going to stop rambling now. The poem itself fit Dobby very well.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed this! I had a lot of fun writing it and I always thought Dobby was a nice character to read and write! :) Cyns
*giggles* This is a new twist for you. I loved it. The idea of Filch being Snape's father is wonderful. It's so fitting.
I really loved it. And the ending was perfect. Sirius and Severus really do have no understanding of each other.
Anyway, wonderful as always. :D
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, it was interesting AUing myself, but kinda fun too. I\'m glad you enjoyed it!
This is really good. I loved the way you wrote Severus. I always believed that he was at Godric's Hollow that night. It just makes sense. Someone else had to be there because we know a lot of information that we wouldn't otherwise. Anyway, the story was perfect. It showed the type of love Lily had for both Severus and James. And Severus' feelings shone through perfectly. Very well done, Keri. :D
Author's Response: Thanks Elle! I\'m glad you liked it. :D
Anna! That was really good. I didn't realize when it was set until the very end. I thought it was AU. That extra little bit was perfect. And the way he was talking about blood, almost as though he wanted to scare her, but draw her to him at the same time. This was really unique and I greatly enjoyed it. I also loved how irritating you made him, with his "in what sense questions?" You are so good with his character. Right, I'm just rambling. Well, excellent story!
Author's Response: *huggles Elle* Thanks so much for this lovely review! :D
Excellent! I still hate Peter, but it does give a different look at what he might have been thinking. Very well done. :D
Author's Response: lol, that\'s all right, I still hate Peter, too. :) Thanks for the review!
This was wonderful. I love how you wrote them so connected to each other. The ending, where she wished for him to come back and he said he would, was perfect. It was amazing to watch their love like this.
I have always believed that they married out of obligation, which is common belief, but as you said itís open for debate. However, I also believe that there is love between them. Not the fairy tale kind of love, but a love that was developed by surviving so many hardships together.
Your characterization of Lucius was excellent. I hate to see him written as through he has no feelings. You handled him wonderfully. I can really see him sitting inside his cell reminiscing about the past and wanting nothing more than to get back to his wife.
I also adored the parts with Draco. Really showed that his parents loved him, which I believe they do. It was cute when Draco asked his father to come with him to Diagon Alley, he was trying to be so mature and detached, but Lucius could see right through him.
Your portrayal of the Malfoys was wonderfully refreshing. Itís always nice to find another fan who doesnít think theyíre all evil. :D
The only thing I would consider changing is maybe some of the proposal part. It was very good, but I donít know that it needed to be told from both POVs. It seemed a tad overdone, but thatís just my opinion.
I absolutely adored the story. I hope you continue to write about the Malfoys.
Author's Response: Oh, what a wonderful review! Thank you so much!
I\'m glad you liked the characterisation of Lucius. One of the things that drives me mad is when he\'s portrayed in that one-sided caricature of a heartless Death Eater. I like thinking there\'s a bit more to his character than that, after all.
Draco was so cute, wasn\'t he? I like seeing the Malfoy family portrayed in a way that\'s a bit more human than they tend to get in mainstream fandom, so this piece was a lot of fun to write for me.
The proposal ... I remember writing that scene, as a matter of fact, and struggling with how to say it without really repeating myself. I definitely see what you mean, but the way the story was going had things told in both PoVs until later, so I just did it.
Thank you once again, though, for you kind comments.