AHHH! Poor Bella. *sniff* That was really good. I could cry right now, of course I absolutly love Bella. That was so cruel. My poor Bella. :'(
Okay, I'm done ranting now. Your story was really great though. It was very well written. The dripping added to it nicely. Congrats!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! This is my very first attempt at the Dark/Angsty category, so I\'m glad to get that reaction out of you. Not that I like making people cry or anything, but... you know what I mean.
Awww...poor Reg. I have always felt sorry for him. I don't believe he had a clue what he was getting himself into when he joined the Death Eaters. This was really well done. I love the way you incorporated the rain. :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :)
So the story is started. I couldn't resist looking.
It's a nice beginning. I like the introduction to Lucius. Was he using the Crucio curse on Jen, by the way? And one thing that confused me, Anna thought there was a family resemblence between Jen and Lucius, but there really shouldn't be.
Anyway, nice beginning. I'm looking forward to seeing where you decide to take this.
This is a wonderful introduction to Jennifer and her life at the orphanage. Your writing flows nicely.
And the suspense builds. I never expected that Draco would be given the impression that Jenny wasnít really his sister. That could really spruce things up. But how will she find out who she is, if Draco doesnít know? Interesting, interesting.
I love what you decided to do with Narcissa. I think this is far more canon than the way you were originally leaning. To me, itís very clear that Narcissa loves Draco, and I canít imagine her feeling any differently about any other child of hers. You have portrayed her as a loving mother, who lives in fear of her husband. I think that could fit with canon, and it fits perfectly with your story. So again, I think you made a good call with your characterization of Narcissa.
I really do love this fic. It always leaves me with so many questions. I want to know who Jennyís father is. Does he know about her? And why was Jenny ever brought to Malfoy Manor? I canít imagine that Lucius would ever want her there. Did he not know that she wasnít his daughter in the beginning? Anyway, thatís my favorite thing about this story, it always has me thinking and guessing.
The way you write Draco is interesting as well. I canít really tell how he feels about his mother, but he really doesnít seem that fond of his father. In the books, I have always had the impression that Draco loved and looked up to his father, but that could have been act. Itís really hard to tell what goes on inside his head. However, I like the softer version of him that youíre writing.
I also want to comment on the flow of this chapter. It was really amazing. Everything felt perfect as I read it. I was hooked from the first sentence all the way through to the end. Itís clear that you are passionate about this story, and thatís what makes a story great.
You have done a really good job on this fic, so far, and I look forward to seeing your future chapters.
Author's Response: Thank you for all the great compliments. It makes me so happy that someone enjoys my story so much.
I have so missed In The Eyes of Others, but this looks like something that will be equally fun to read. It's great to see that you're back to writing a chaptered Snape story.
And Ginny. I am always impressed when I read a story involving Ginny that doesn't make me cringe. So congrats!
Author's Response: *returns huggle* I like Ginny. I just don\'t get why she\'s so hooked on Harry. Thanks for reviewing!
Whoa! Very powerful.
Poor Andy, is not having a very good Gauntlet run, I'm afraid I had Bella kill her as well. The poor dear. I must admit our set up was even somewhat similar, although I didn't do it til the end of the story. Very interesting. I am anxious to see who you had at the end, although I do have a guess...
Anyway, this was very well done. It gave me chills.
Author's Response: I\'ll try to read your story soon. It seemed natural that Andy may have died because we don\'t see her or hear her mentioned throughout the series.
Author's Response: Sly Severus\'s story is amazing. If you\'ve never sympathized with Bella, you might want to read it. It\'s different than mine, true, because the focus of the fics is different. I took a different view of Narcissa\'s testing than S.S. did of Bella\'s testing, but the story is still very effective. The final test in hers, and the main focus, was Bella\'s transformation to a Death Eater. That\'s not the case with Narcissa\'s testing with the Dark Lord because the final focus is on how Narcissa is snubbed from being allowed into the inner circle which her husband and sister are privalleged to belong.
Awww...this was really cute. I loved the ending. It just seemed to sum in up perfectly.
Very well done. :D
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for the review! I\'m so glad you stopped to read this piece and I\'m really glad you liked the ending. I couldn\'t resist the extra couplet. ;) Thanks again for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)
TF! My Bella! *cries*
Wow. I really don't know what to say. This is so far off from anything I have ever written or thought about Bella or Androemda, or even Voldy. There were just too many chances coming from him.
Okay, despite the fact everything I have said so far was negative this was actually really well done. You just have to take into account my little (extermely large and somewhat unhealthy) obsession with Bella. The story flowed really well and you could really relate to Bella as she began to lose her grip with reality. It was absolutly well written. And you really hit emotion in me when I read it, but that also might have something to do with the above mentioned obsession.
Sorry, for the very strange review. I'm still traumatized but *huggles anyway*
Haha! Wait til he has to introduce Bob to his Death Eaters. I can just imagine what she would have to say to them.
This was really amusing. Well done. :D
Author's Response: Thank you! Hmmm, that might be an amusing idea for a sequel... I want to see Bellatrix\'s face when she realizes that you can\'t torture the dead.
Well, I'll have to say this isn't what I thought of when I read about the challenge. It's really original and I really enjoyed it. I liked how you had students calling Voldy "lord" before he even left school.
This was really good. An interesting take on the challenge.
Author's Response: It wasn\'t what I thought of originally when I read the challenge either. :) First I was planning to do a lighter piece that was more in the \'spirit of the holidays\' about Severus. But then I had the inspiration to do something totally different and, well, you can see the result. Glad you enjoyed, thanks for reviewing!
Haha! This is really cute. I would have never thought of writing a challenge about Peeves. Very creative and very well done. :D
Author's Response: Well, Peeves is my favorite character, so I jumped for joy when I finally got a reason to write him. Thanks for reviewing, I\'m glad you liked it.
Hehe! Very cute. You write Sirius very well. Of course, we all know that you write Severus excellently, but I'll say it anyway.
I found this very amusing and it demonstrated their maturity levels towards each other perfectly. Well done, as always. :D
Author's Response: Everyone has someone who makes him regress, right? And here it\'s mutual. I\'m glad it amused you! Happy holidays!
Yay! It got validated! I like the changes to the first couple of paragraphs. I really did enjoy this story. It has a nice nostilogic(bet I spelled that wrong) feel about it. Well done! :D
Author's Response: Thank you for beta-ing it for me!! You were a big help. :) I\'m glad I made things a little clearer in the first few paragraphs. I\'m also glad you enjoyed it! I enjoyed writing it. Thanks for reviewing!
The most interesting take on Frosty the Snowman I have ever read. This was really cute.
Author's Response: Thank you! It\'s very different from what I normally write, but it was really fun to do. :)
Awww, that was cute. You thought of so many "sweet" things for little Sirius to do. I really enjoyed it. Good job!
Author's Response: Woohoo! Lol. I had fun writing this. Especially the \'sweet\' things Sirius did. However, making them into eight syllables did present a challenge at some point...lol. Thanks for the review!
I have never read anything like this before. Actually, I have never thought much about what Harry's life was like before Hogwarts. This is a really interesting concept. I also liked how it could play out so true to real life. There are so many children out there who don't get the care they deserve and so many people who do nothing about it. This story was truly amazing.
Author's Response: I\'ve thought quite a lot about Harry\'s life before Hogwarts, although it took me a while to get round to writing this. It really didn\'t seem to add up that no one noticed. I\'m especially glad you think it worked out true to life =) Thank you for the lovely review.
Wow, Suzie. This is the first serious story I have read for the Christmas Carol challenge. It's very unique and really well done. I think you captured the unease and fear within Hogwarts very well. Good for you. :D *huggles to my fellow Slytherin*
Author's Response: *huggles back* :D I wanted to make it kind of sad but with hope...Have you entered the challenge? *goes to check* :p Suzie x
Haha! This was really cute. Good luck with the challenge. :D
Author's Response: thanks so much!
Whoa. This was really dark. A very good exploration of Harry's feelings. I really enjoyed this. Very well done.
Author's Response: My VERY FIRST REVIEW EVER ! ! ! Yay! Thank you for the compliments...I can finally breath, I was thinking that maybe some of the bits were to obscure (such as the bit at the end where I have Harry decide to inflict self injury/commit suicide after killing Voldemort inorder to be with the ones he loves/has lost) to really find meaning in through the books...it\'s INCREDIBLY difficult to fit the life of a main character who spans seven books into one short poem...anyhoo, thank you, agian! *hugs* ~The Tainted One