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My stories:

On Broken Wings
A Charlie/Hermione romance.

At the End Comes the Beginning
A poem about the journey to the Afterlife.

Our Legacy
A four founders tale.

Will Alice ever recover her sanity?

Myth and Mystery
Alice is swept into a hair-raising adventure.

Flight, Fright, and Fight
Narcissa must learn to fight for her identity.

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A Life Worth Living by lily_evans34

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: On the eve of her wedding, Angelina Johnson is filled with looming regrets, before finally accepting her fate. But when old friends come back, Angelina is faced with a descision that could alter the course of her life. It's only then that she realises that she doesn't have time to be afraid, or live with regrets—after all, she had a life to live.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/25/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Life Worth Living

Wow. This was a powerful and original story. I liked everything about it. Angelina's courage at the end made me happy (that's right ladies and gents, if it don't feel right turn around and leave, even if you are at the very alter!) I also loved how it was Alicia that brought Fred into the story, reminding her friend of something Angelina already knew deep down. And did Alicia send Fred to plead his case? It doesn't seem like pure coincidence that Fred was on the doorstep the next morning.

Enjoyable, thoughtful, and a good read. Thank you, and please keep writing. :-)


Author's Response: Thank you! I actually never thought about Alicia sending Fred to Angelina, but I always try to leave a certain amount up to interpretation, so it\'s very well that it happened the way you said. Glad you liked it. :)

A Letter Never Read by beauty and brains

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A motherless child. A heart-broken father. A box filled with long lost treasures. And a letter holding all the secrets that have been buried for over ten years. Will Harriet discover why her father has kept her in the dark for so long? Will she finally come to know her mother…through a letter never read?
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Letter Never Read

This story brought tears to my eyes. I loved every word-- definately one of your best stories. Some of the things I liked most:

- The details! I loved the little things, like Ron's Quidditch shirt in the hippogriff picture and the apple-scent of Hermione's hair. Very inspired!

- The medium! The 'unread' letter to Ron's dead love is very powerful. You get a true concept of his grief and his deepest feelings. (That was the part where I started crying.)

- The character of Harriet! She was perfect. I loved her Weasley temper combined with Hermione's warmth and latent sensitivity. Couldn't you please, please, please write another story about her? She is too good to leave in a one shot...

Three quick things:

In the letter: "'She said Dadda.' How I lover to hear her say this." ---- lover should be love.

And earlier: "The ribbon glistened and shined against the glowing wood, each strand illuminated by the sunlight flowing through the open window." --- is 'shined' right? Isn't 'shone' more proper? (I'm not sure myself so ignore me if I am wrong.)

One last thing: would the whole floor around Harriet have been wet with her tears? Seems almost like overkill. I've never seen anyone cry that much (except Alice from Alice in Wonderland-- book, not movie-- err, ahem, pay no attention to the random tangent...)

Wonderful one-shot!


Author's Response: So this one was really that good, huh? That\'s what I\'ve been getting, and this was the very first fanfic I ever wrote. I\'m amazed that it went over so well.

The inspiration for this story came from Taylor Swift\'s song \'Tim McGraw\'. The lyrics- And underneath my bed, is a letter that you never read, from three summers back. I was listening to it last summer and BAM, plotline.

Thanks for the corrections, I never took the time to look this one over, so thanks again!


Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 12/25/06 Title: None

Superb beginning. Please, please, please continue. I've always wanted to read a good story from the Grindelwald era. Finally looks like someone is writing one that looks very promising. I'm eager to see how this will go.


Author's Response: Thanks a bunch!

The Monster "On" Harry's Chest by Chaser921

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: This is a missing moment from HBP. After Ginny tells Harry about Romilda Vane's comment about the hippogriff supposedly tatooed on his chest, she decides to draw a Hungarian Horntail on him with her makeup. One-shot focusing on Harry and Ginny's blossoming relationship.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 12/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Comments: Cute, and a great tribute to the artwork of mudblood428 (long live her excellent stories). You built a story off of one of my all-time favorite scenes from HP. Somehow I couldn't see Harry doing that in the common room. He is a fairly private person, don't you think?

Suggestions: None!

Bravo on the completion of your first fan fic.



Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 12/27/06 Title: None

Gritty. The child-birthing scene made me a bit squeamish, but your story was properly rated for that. You have a very cool idea for an AU story, bravo. The burning question-- is Tom Riddle going to still become Lord Voldemort? Can't wait to find out...

There where one or two places where you repeated yourself. Might want to re-read work before posting it with that specifically in mind. Other than that I have no critique to offer-- and even this is rather nit-picky.

Keep writing!


Standing in the Rain by MarauderWannabe

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: An old love is rekindled with a letter that wasn't mean to be sent........
NEWS: Sequel in the works, obviously AU. Entitled Walking Through The Storm. Coming Summer '08!
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 12/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: P.S. I Love You

A nice start. It's a bit rough around the edges in places. The transitions between Harry and Ginny's pov are somewhat jarring. There are a few minor grammatical errors you might want to scan for-- example: Ginny had been there, standing next to Harry, daring not to look him in the eye. (might want to change it to 'not daring to look him...')

Nice job. Exciting to see a new story starting.


Everything is alright by hufflepuffgal

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It is early in the morning

I wake up from the light

And just for a moment

Everything seems alright.

A poem about the day the war ended, written from Ginny's perspective.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 12/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: Alright

Well done. Your poem was controlled but full of passion. It rhymed well too. The subject was serious and the twist at the end was heart wrenching. I think this poem is going to haunt me. I hope Ginny doesn't get paralyzed in the last book. One thing I found confusing was the line that says "I sit down with friends." If Ginny is paralyzed how can she do this? Shouldn't it run something like "I sit [here?] with friends"? Nevertheless the poem is excellent.


Author's Response: Thanks for catching that problem, I\'ll go fix i right now! Thanks!

Christmas Snow by lily_evans34

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: We all know the story of how James matured for Lily. Ever wonder why? Who would have thought that everything could change in a single day-with an unexpected romance, and a little bit of snow.

Written for Beth for the Secret SPEW 2.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/25/07 Title: Chapter 1: Christmas Snow

I really liked this one shot. I felt like is was a good explanation for James and Lily's ultimate love and understanding. Good job! The story was sweet and simple-- I liked the fact that it didn't have any 'frills.'

The first two or three paragraphs needed some work. Several sentences were grammatically unclear and seemed kind of choppy. One example is: "He had never seen their beds empty, usually one to leave for the holidays himself." I know what you are saying, I just think you could say it better.

I'm off to read another one of your stories (and review, of course!)


Author's Response: Thanks for the review, glad you liked it! Hmm, that sentence seems fine to me. I actually like the way it\'s written. How do you think I should rephrase it, exactly?

Shades of Black by Striped Candycane

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: The three Black sisters are very different. But once a week, for a brief moment, they become very much the same...Pre-Hogwarts.

Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 04/26/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, after reading that I really have only one question for you: why are you still writing fan fiction instead of original work? You have a near-perfect command of the English language, your character development and insight into character is brilliant, and your narrative flows smoothly from start to finish. Get yourself an editor and get writing!

I would also encourage you to challenge yourself by writing a multi-chaptered fic. I know you said you think you might lose interest. But I think the challenge would be a good thing.

Well, it seems I contradicted myself-- move on from fan fiction and write a long fic... hmm, I am going to have to work on consistency. I still stand by what I said, however.

One sentence stuck out for me:
She has gotten her acceptance letter only last week.
You might consider altering this sentence. 'Gotten' just doesn't sound right to me.

I have added you to my favorite author's list, and I will be keeping an eye out for any new stories of yours. (I am now heading off to check the other stories that you already have validated.)


Life in the Shadows by DaniDM

Rated: Professors •
Summary: The war has been over for just over a year and the Wizarding world has become complacent in its new-found freedom, yet only three know the truth.
With Daniella at Oxford and Severus and Dumbledore at Hogwarts, they work to keep the Wizarding world safe, but no one must know.
This is the third installment of "Creating a Ghost" and "Life in the Interim".

Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 10/16/08 Title: Chapter 53: 52 - Through The Looking Glass

Aww! A cliffie?

Excellent chapter, but too short. It had just hit its stride when you stopped. The gradual build of information was so abruptly chopped off!

Your story is truly amazing. You have created a host of new characters that the reader can care about. Plus your seamless integration of Italian/European magic and customs and the 'familiar' British magical community is superbly done.

I continue to follow this series faithfully!

Author's Response: Too Short?? It was 3477 words. I'm glad you're enjoying the illustration of Italian and British magick, and I'm very pleased to see that you're reading faithfully. I hear from so few people, although it's obvious that many are reading. A bit disappointing, so when I get messages from reviewers, I'm thrilled. Thank you. Dani

Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 07/20/08 Title: Chapter 47: 46 - The County Fair

Loved this chapter! I've been waiting for Colin and Emily to find out. I hope you devote some of next chapter to the family and their discovery of the magical world. But I am sire whatever you decide to do will be wonderful.


Author's Response: Sorry, not the next chapter. It took a different direction, but I'm sure you'll be pleased. Dani

Yellow Roses and Daisies by MorganRay

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A first crush, so innocent, is not admitted in a world where reputation is greater than love. Can a young love survive amongst bitter prejudice?

NEWT romance OC/canon pairing. MorganRay of Hufflepuff.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 09/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: Yellow Roses and Daisies

I like your work so much. This is an excellent example of what you do best-- the original and unexpected. Your decision to use the second person combined with Marcus' letters is fresh and thought-provoking. I don't think many authors could pull it off, but you managed to perfectly convey the mood and atmosphere you described on your author's note: the slightly disjointed thoughts a confused child-- that indescribable mixture of what is handed down from elders and what comes to be in the individual child.

This story fits well with the style you chose for Fools in Love. The two together give a rounded, complete idea of who Marcus was and were he came from, why he is different and yet why he complies outwardly with his family's creed.

Superb! Keep writing (and please don't abandon Warped Image-- I'm hooked!)


Author's Response: Aww. Sorry Warped Image failed. :( A sub-plot as been revamped -- with better writing -- in Accursed Miracle. I found myself wanting to write different characters, so I did. I'm glad you liked Fools in Love, too. It's a bit sappier than my usual fare, but meh. What do you do? I hope more unexpected stuff starts flowing from my brain soon. :) Marcus may return (because I know what happens to him after Fools in Love), and he's such an interesting character for me to write. He seems to fit well into the Potterverse and the tangled lives of the Malfoy family.

Author's Response: Aww. Sorry Warped Image failed. :( A sub-plot as been revamped -- with better writing -- in Accursed Miracle. I found myself wanting to write different characters, so I did. I'm glad you liked Fools in Love, too. It's a bit sappier than my usual fare, but meh. What do you do? I hope more unexpected stuff starts flowing from my brain soon. :) Marcus may return (because I know what happens to him after Fools in Love), and he's such an interesting character for me to write. He seems to fit well into the Potterverse and the tangled lives of the Malfoy family.

Author's Response: Aww. Sorry Warped Image failed. :( A sub-plot as been revamped -- with better writing -- in Accursed Miracle. I found myself wanting to write different characters, so I did. I'm glad you liked Fools in Love, too. It's a bit sappier than my usual fare, but meh. What do you do? I hope more unexpected stuff starts flowing from my brain soon. :) Marcus may return (because I know what happens to him after Fools in Love), and he's such an interesting character for me to write. He seems to fit well into the Potterverse and the tangled lives of the Malfoy family.

Lovers in the Moonlight by beauty and brains

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Irene Mahavior had always taken a fancy to the quiet Remus Lupin. She liked the soft spoken boy, as she had grown up with her rather raucous Irish family. Irene couldn’t though, for the life of her, figure out where Remus disappeared to once a month. Not thinking anything of it, Irene decided to take a moonlit stroll out on the grounds one night. This one mere urge would seal her fate forever.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: Shadows in the Moonlight

Oh man! I'm dying to know what will happen next. What a cliff hanger. Yikes.

Based on what we know from PoA it would be right to say that Remus never mauled anyone. But it makes for a very interesting AU plot line. He is going to be so guilt-stricken when the sun rises (unless no one tells him.)

Eek! Please update! I want to know how Irene handles her new curse.

BTW, I (once again) have to say how much I love your details! The whole 'frummpy day' thing was so completely realistic. The idea of a red-headed girl in a pink hoodie! Holy cats, that had to be a sight to behold.

Another awesome story, beauty and brains!


Author's Response: Hehe, this review brought a HUGE smile to my face! =]

I wasn\'t exactly sure how readers were going to take this story, seeing as it is way off in cannon. So far though, I have gotten good reports, so I\'m happy.

Irene Mahavior really came to me when I was talking to my dad about our heritage. I\'m an Irish/Scot/Greek/English mix. We were, at the time, watching the very old movie Far and Away, and the Irish girl appealed to me, and so we have Irene Mahavior.

Yes, the whole frumpy day came from me, and my own experiences. At least once a week, I would go to school in either sweats and a hoodie or jeans and a short bathrobe. These were my lazy days, and the teachers despised me for them.

The Worth of an Uncanny Love by BloodRayne

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Cho Chang is in an abusive relationship with a person she loves more than herself.

2nd Place in the Spring Challenges, *To Laugh or Cry* prompt, by BloodRayne of Gryffindor.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 12/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: Really Worth it?

Poor Cho. I think you choose the right female HP character for this story. She is an emotionally broken girl, and I don't think anyone cared for her properly after Cedric died.

This story felt like a cautionary tale, and I don't mean that in a bad way. You never once had to say 'Cho is being manipulated,' we just knew it was true. It is such a shame no one really understood her. Even her mother didn't seem to be handling the problem as well as she should have.

I liked the fact that you ended the story where you did. The reader feels sure that she will either loose the baby or mother and child will continue to suffer abuse. Hopefully someone will eventually really help her heal her heart and mind.

Anyway, these are probably things you know already. After all you are the author!

Thanks for the great read, BloodRayne.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words, Fauna!

Circe: The Goddess of Treachery by Ron x Hermione

Rated: Professors •
Summary: Circe. How little do we know about this Greek goddess. She could turn grown men, strong enough to lift ten oxen, into beasts by herself. She was gorgeous. When the men wandered onto her lonely island of Aeaea, all they could do was stare at her beauty and grace.

When David, the leader of his own ship, on the hunt for treasures, awakes on her island to find three maidens standing before him, beckoning him to Circe's palace, he refuses, yet his men follow. He has no other choice but to go along.

Circe eventually tries to pull him into her bed, yet David refuses; he has a wife and child coming at home, and he is not the type of man to betray her.

But Circe always gets what she wants.

This is an entry by Ron x Hermione of Hufflepuff for the Wizard Card prompt. I am using the all-mighty maiden Circe.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/01/07 Title: Chapter 1: Circe

I don't like to be negative, but this was not a well written story. There were numerous grammatical errors. Sometimes I wasn't sure what a sentence was supposed to mean. (Example 1: quote: "The men resumed speaking for what felt like ten minutes to the women because they enjoyed watching so, to what really was hours." Example 2: quote: "She was expecting, and he reviled to leave her in this time...")

Some of the images you used were interesting and beautiful. This story would really improve if you got a new beta to read it and give you some advice. Good luck!


Author's Response: Okay . . . I think I had a wonderful beta. I understand your concern for perhaps some of the sentences, but if you would have read them carefully, you would have seen the meaning more in depth. In the second sentence, She was expecting to have a baby, and he reviled (hated) to leave her during that time. I\'m not sure what you meant by that. I can faintly understand about the first sentence, but if you would have read it more closely, the men spoke for hours and hours, but it only felt like a few minutes because the girls enjoyed watching it. Time flies when you\'re having fun, dear. I hope this explained it more. ~Lindsey :(

Holding Onto Hope by KASK

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ginny Weasley doesn't mean to hear the conversation between Ron, Hermione and Harry. She doesn't want to know that Harry is kissing girls after D.A. meetings. But with Cho Chang very much a part of Harry's life, Ginny must face her own feelings for Harry.

This is for the 'Spring Challenge: A Different Viewpoint'. I am kask of Slytherin.
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Holding Onto Hope

I loved it! A clever missing moment idea-- it crossed my mind once, and I'm thrilled an author decided to write it and do such a good job. It seems kind of rare to find fan fics about Ginny when he was running after Cho. Poor kid, it must have hurt.

I loved the last line. A very 'in character' thought for Ginny to have. She is a fighter.

Anyway, all the best.


Author's Response: Thanks! :D

Keep Moving by MaraudersWolf

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: There are stories missing in the life of Remus Lupin. Between the sudden upheaval of war, the loss of many friends and later returning to Hogwarts as a professor, the years in between are a mystery. This one-shot explores one moment of struggle in his desires to have a "normal" life. What happens to the man when his world shatters . . . again? Who will help the man pick up the pieces and keep moving?

Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/04/07 Title: Chapter 1: Keep Moving

I admit, I did find the characters OOC. However, I still enjoyed this one shot (it is a one shot, right?). The great bits were in the details-- like Remus answering Severus with a big X rather then a hurried word, or Severus snapping at his students when he was preoccupied with his friend's odd response. Little things like that really make a story come to life. Overall I felt like the story belonged in the AU category (which is not a criticism of the style-- I love AU, it is an area where authors really get a chance to try their wings.) I can't see JKRowling's Remus and Severus ever being so close given their attitudes towards each other in HP I-VI. Still, I suppose people can always change with time.

Bravo! Please write more stories.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) Yes, it is a one-shot - nothing else has caught enough interest to continue it. One of the things I love about writing is the ability to play with one\'s imagination and there are many who will say I have an active imagination. I do tend to write with details in mind - I think the few out there that I beta for know this quite well because I\'m always asking them to describe details! I knew some people would find Remus and Severus OOC because of how JKR presents them, but I\'m glad you still liked the story. AU . . . I\'ll have to consider that - but yes, people can and do change over time. There are still many unknowns in JKR\'s world. Again, thanks for the review!

Helga's Journey: A Story of Forgiveness by beauty and brains

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: There are many hidden secrets deep within the Department of Mysteries, few of which we will ever know. Helga thought there might be a room for her to fulfill her darkest wish- revenge. Someone close to her heart was murdered, and she intends to find a way to punish the murderer.

I am beauty and brains of Gryffindor House.

Won second place in the fourth Gauntlet Challenge!
Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: Revenge will be Sweet

Seems very interesting... you have me wondering what has happened and where the story is going. It is a bit hard to get into right now because, as a reader, I have no idea what to think yet. The writing seems good, so I'll give chapter 2 a go.

One correction:
Missing letter: "But I also know that you cannot continue on with this train of hatred that you old against Rowena." old --> hold

You have probably got used to me by now. I'm going through all your stories. I try to review everything I read (unless I absolutlely hate it-- NOT the case with your stuff.)

You have lots of talent. More stories, please!


Author's Response: Gracias senorita!

Yes, this is another story that I think I did not do my best on. It was for the Gauntlet Challenge, so I have no idea how I placed a second. I was extremely shocked.

Oh, and thanks also for the correction. *fixing now*

Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/14/07 Title: Chapter 2: More Powerful than Magic

You have a big imagination. I am impressed.

Is the mirror room connected to the mirror of Erised?

I'm off to chapter 3. I am very eager to see what all these rooms are leading up to, and also learning what Rowena did to Helga and Godric.


Author's Response: Thanks thanks thanks!

Have I mentioned yet that I adore your reviews?


Reviewer: FaunaCaritas Signed
Date: 06/14/07 Title: Chapter 3: The End of the Journey

Interesting... what was the challenge? I liked how you laid out the story and carried it through. The very last room really baffeled me. What was it supposed to do/be?

Well, I liked the story. It would have felt more natural in the context of a longer story. It was hard to relate to Helga because there was no initial 'build up' of her character. Let me try to clarify... In your story 'A Letter Never Read' we get introduced to Harriet slowly-- we learn about her 'Ronish' traits and her 'Hermioneish' traits. That makes us care about her-- feel her loneliness, etc. In this story I didn't start caring about Helga's feelings until the middle of chapter 2.

Probably these thoughts don't relate to this story because of its 'gauntlet challenge' nature. You don't have any problem building up lovable, believable characters in your other stories.

One minor thing had me confused. When Helga is in the last room you write: "I’m going to die, Helga thought, panic completely taking over her mind. She tried to run forward, but found that she was unable to move anymore. Suddenly, a noise just to her left caught Helga attention, and she was able to struggle forward toward it. She wasn’t frightened in the least. She just wanted an escape." --- Doesn't that seem like a contradiction? Panic is overtaking her but she is not frightened in the least? Panic and fright are not identical, but I usually do not have one without the other.

Hmm, I can't think of anything else to say. I think I only have one or two of your stories left to read. I will be sad to reach the end of your writings so far. Maybe you could write another story very soon or post another chapter of 'Lovers in the Moonlight,' pretty, pretty, please?


Author's Response: The challenge was to pick any cannon character and have them go through the Department of Mysteries. We were given a new room each time we completed the previous one. The last room I had a bit of trouble with. We were only given that it was a completely black room with tons of pressure. I wasn\'t very sure of how to write it, so...

I think I was indicating that she wasn\'t afraid of what she would find, as she was already terrified.

Yes, yes more are on their way! As is another chapter os Lovers in the Moonlight. I had to take a long break from that to write this and the May One-shot Challenge.

Thanks for the great review!