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On Broken Wings
A Charlie/Hermione romance.
At the End Comes the Beginning
A poem about the journey to the Afterlife.
A four founders tale.
Will Alice ever recover her sanity?
Myth and Mystery
Alice is swept into a hair-raising adventure.
Flight, Fright, and Fight
Narcissa must learn to fight for her identity.
Summary: My name is Eregonian Miran Shinai Thundeir. Not that it would matter to you. I have spent six years at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry, and am preparing for my final year. My final year of freedom with my magic, before my family forces me to renounce my gift. While I expect this year to be the same as all others, things rarely happen in the manner which I intend them to. I invite you to accompany me, into the Gryffindor seventh year boys' dormitory, 1975, for my final year in the arms of Mother Hogwarts. EDITED BY MOD - No more than 2 line breaks please.
I am riveted. This is such a gripping beginning. Please do not abandon this story. I want to know what is going to happen. Badly. This chapter was such a tantalizing cliff hanger.
Hope you don't mind a little cc... my friends tell me to move to Antarctica sometimes. I can't think why... where was I? Oh yes! Back to the cc... I would like the story/plot to clarify itself a bit more in the near future. It is bordering on too mysterious. There can be too much of a good thing. It was very relieving to have Paravel clarified somewhat, and Eregonian's status there. As a reader I would like to have things explained a bit more, otherwise I foresee myself (and anyone equally or less intelligent) getting terribly confused.
Now for some (wild) guess work. The gold wrist band is obviously important. Honestly when I saw the title of this chapter-- Gold Bands and Striped Geraniums-- I thought it might have something to do with a wedding (the whole gold bands part that is, not the Striped geraniums.) When I reached the end I began to wonder if the special event Eregonian was called home for was his brother's marriage. Hot or Cold, maybe lukewarm? It would also hazard a guess that Shanis and Progonna are dead, and that their deaths are somehow tied to He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named. The chameleon-charmed rope part has me stumped... err, Eregonian is going crackerdog? (bonus author points if you know the reference)
I'm dying to know what is really bugging the hero, especially since I'm fairly sure my guesses are about twenty light-years off target. Please write more. I've heard authors-who-don't-update-their-stories-frequently hunting is banned in most parts of the world, but rules where made to be broken, right? Consider yourself warned.
Loving your story and your style! 9/10.
Author's Response: To be honest, you are not that far off from where I intend to go. I promise an explanation and more clarity in the next chapter.
Summary: Ginny reflects on Harry
I liked you poem. I was wondering if you had time to explain the last stanza a little bit. When you say the power they have is not love you took me by surprise, which is what sets this poem apart. Without the closing lines I don't think the poem would stand out for me. Do you mind explaining a bit more about what you meant?
Summary: Have you ever wondered what Voldemort does when he isn't planning a new way to kill Harry?
Nice! Made me smile. How about a longer version?
Author's Response: If you want it longer, you\'ll have to send me some more ideas for activites. I stopped when I ran out. I\'m glad you liked it!
Summary: Enclosed here is a printed copy of the one and ONLY valentine that You- Know-Who, yes, he HIMSELF, in all his evil glory, ever wrote. With witty rhyme and winning words it shows you the other side of this seemingly heartless man. And to make it a little more interesting I'm not going to tell you who it is written to (*evil laugh*) in the poem. You can guess in your reviews and I'll tell you if you are right. If you are the first to correctly guess the person, Iíll give you the code for an icon I made and you can post it on your bio (if you want). Good Luck! Hope you enjoy! Please review!
LOL! Is Voldie watching the sky for the Dark Mark? *chortles* Such a well done valentine! If only the pasty, red-eyed, spider-handed, bald, noseless hunk would send one to me! I think I would swoon.
Author's Response: thanks for the review. Actually, when i wrote the poem i ment for him to be watching the sky for and owl to deliver a responce. But your idea is good, too.
Summary: A little owl who never stops believing that he will one day be the greatest post-owl that ever lived, is dissipointed when he finds out that he is going to be shipped to Romania. However, something happens that he never expected, and he finds himself leaving the place he lived in for so long to have a new life.
Written by Bryant of Ravenclaw for the One-Shot Owl Challenge.
I loved this story. I will never think of Pig the same way again. The lovable feathery tennis ball has his own story! I'm sure he would be proud. It never ceases to amaze me what fan fic authors choose to write about. I can honestly say this is currently my favorite off-the-wall mini fic. You write well, and your style is endearing. Keep writting more stories like this please. I'd love to see a series about all the pets of our favorite characters (like Trevor, Crookshanks, Hedwig, and Ginny's pygmy puff what's-his-name.)
Anyway, good luck. Pax.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you. I\'ve been taking a break for a while, but I\'m currently working on a new fic that will be up soon, I hope. It\'s reviews like this that makes me want to write fanfiction. It always inspires me when someone leaves good reviews! Thank you, once again!
Summary: This is a poem written from Ginny's perspective about how she feels on Bill and Fleur's wedding day.
So good! I'm sure this is how she will feel at the wedding unless Harry musters up the gumption to eat his words. Once again, you know how to capture the feelings of completely different characters and translate them into poetry.
Quick correction, one of your lines runs "It not that I'm not delighted..."--- you're missing the 's' in 'It's'.
Keep writing, you're really good.
Author's Response: thanks for the review.
Summary: August 1, 992
Salazar Slytherin explains his reasoning and rationale behind creating the Chamber of Secrets.
I was not sure, when I was reading this for the first time, whether this was meant to be a real justification for Slytherin's actions or rather an example of his twisted logic-- something to the effect of 'an evil deed is justified by a righteous end.' Even after a second reading I am not sure. Ultimately I think what Salazar did was unpardonable and so I view his 'justification' as completely unsatisfactory. However, I wish to stress how much I really enjoyed this work. It makes you think hard about why someone would do something so apparently evil and depraved. Everyone has a 'good reason' for what they do, no matter how mistaken they are. While Slytherin's regret strikes me as odd (why should he regret what he thinks is right-- is it because the means are so drastic?) I thought the way he reasoned betrayed a very human character. Fictional villains are typically one-dimensional. Your Salazar was a believable one.
I'm off to see if you have written anything else. Well done in this one shot!
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you. You\'re right, I am not trying to justify Slytherin, but to give him another dimension than evil. You made me blush.
Summary: As a young man out of Hogwarts, Arthur Weasley tries to find a job. Will he succeed before someone else steals Molly from him? We know what happens - come see how!
What a happily written, lovable perspective into Arthur and Molly's romance! You made me smile. The characters were perfectly reproduced and the plot believable. I completely understand poor Molly's desperation *grin* and applaud her wonderful way of taking command of the situation. You really made the young couple's predicament come alive. I was not expecting Lucius to be have his eye on Molly, but that doesn't make it bad. Your writing style is impressive.
I'd love to see more one-shots along the same lines. Ever think about maybe giving us a glimpse of their quiet wedding or when she tells him she is expecting? I can never get enough of the beautiful, touching moments (and less of the broom-closet relationship play-by-plays.)
Summary: Near the lake is a beech tree. This beech tree is where two couples declare their love for one another. It holds memories of love lost, found and forgotten. Under this beech tree is where four people spend two sunkissed days, nearly twenty years apart.
This is a Lily/James & Harry/Ginny story.
I think this is one of the sweetest one-shots I have read. You write beautifully.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m really glad you liked it!
Summary: This is a poem, written from Snape's point of veiw, explaining the whats and whys of what happened that ight by the tower. Why did he really do it? is he really still working for the Dark Lord? How could Dumbledore trust him?
I think your poem here is well done (and-- bonus points-- correct.) Super-duper. I was totally drawn into Snape's narrative. It was so delightfully... Snape-y! Bravo.
My only criticism-- the phrase 'until need be' in the third to last stanza has been used incorrectly. It needs an object. Its a pity since it fits in so perfectly.
More, more, more!
Author's Response: thanks!
Summary: Minerva is going through a rough time. First she lost her mother, then she lost her friends. Will she risk losing her father as well in order to live the life she wants to live?
Not bad! You have me interested... who are the five students and what were they up to?
Author's Response: Sorry, but this is just a one-shot, there won\'t be any other chapters. And to be completely honest, those five students don\'t even have names in my head, nor do I know what they did to poor Pringle.
Summary: The locked room is a place few wizards will go... Actually, where only one wizard will go as Jemina Doyle will son discover.
Written for Ravenclaw House
Good job! I think you did a great job introducing the characters here and in drawing the reader into the mystery of the locked room. I liked how you revealed some things, but not too much-- makes for an evil cliff hanger.
Summary: It is England in the early 1800's, Bonapart is reigning in France and tensions between the two countries are running high. Phillip must face the secrets of his past while still surviving in the present. It takes the portrait of a remarkable girl to teach him that he can find trust in a world gone mad.
Winner of the June/July monthly challenge, #1: autobiography, and overall winner. By coppercurls of Hufflepuff house.
Coppercurls, you are amazing! This story is hauntingly beautiful. The concept, the atmosphere, the details, and the characters are truly magnificent. I usually offer an author some cc, but I can't find anything to critique in this story. I hope I don't sound like I'm gushing, but the quality of your writing surpasses that of most fan fiction authors, and I think you deserve a place on the 'featured' list for this story.
I have read most of the authors you mentioned in this story by the way... I'm pleased to see that my theory that 'those who read great works write great works' is born out in your case.
Thank you for one of my new favorites.
P.S. -- Loved the switch from Thistledown to Thistle. Cute and creative. One of my favorite parts in the story.
Author's Response: Thanks for your appreciation. I have been on a French history kick lately, and it is nice to know that its fruits have been well recieved. I\'m glad you have read the classics; one thing western history has taught me is that they come in handy again and again. And as for Thistledown, he may look like he would blow away in a stiff breeze, but he is really all over in prickles (except for where his mistress is concerned of course). Thanks again!
Summary: This is a series of letters which Emma Wood, a first year student at Hogwarts, writes to her Grandfather over the course of the year. Follow Emma as she receives her Hogwarts letter, buys her first wand, is Sorted into her House, and meets Harry Potter, The Boy Who Lived.
This story was written for the June/July Monthly Challenge One: Autobiography by GMariam of Ravenclaw.
Hello there! I think you have a really neat idea here. It is nice to see the world of Hogwarts through the letters of a student.
I would like to suggest two things. First, don't hesitate to develop Emma's character through her letters by letting us know a lot more about what she thinks and feels. There is a huge opportunity here to build up a lovable girl that your readers can identify with. Most, if not all, of your readers know about what happened to Harry his first year. I would suggest making Emma's letters do more then just relate those events. Have Emma really give a whole new perspective on Harry's life, or use your story to show 'missing moments' in his school years. Go wild with your imagination here. I LOVED what you did with Fred and George's hair color potion! Have more stuff like that; that was so awesome.
Second, have you though about showing Emma's letters to other people then just her grandfather? Her letters to her mother and cousins(?) might be a nifty thing to try your hand at...
I hope this review isn't overwhelming. I am probably offering a lot more then you need to hear.
Great work, and keep updating. This fic is ready to go places!
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to leave such great suggestions! It really wasn\'t overwhelming, it\'s great to know someone is reading so carefully and thoughtful enough to leave such a nice note. Hopefully I won\'t sound defensive, but I really did think about both of your concerns as I worked on this story. So here\'s a bit of insight into the deepest recesses of my mind
Summary: Post-OotP one-shot. Written from Hedwig's POV, as she tries to help Harry deal with Sirius' death. Harry/Ginny
This is a great story. Well written, original, full of emotion. I have always loved Hedwig, she is such an enigma yet such a key player in Harry's life. You wrote her story with simplicity, which made it beautiful.
Great work, bravo.
Author's Response: Thank you for the praise :) i\'m glad you like the story :D Chris
Summary: Ten years have elapsed since Dumbledore's death and McGonagall has Hogwarts back on its feet again. Hermione and Malfoy both teach at the school. But when a new teacher is hired to teach Defense Against the Dark Arts, everyone seems to feel that they've met him before. A story of mystery, passion, friendship, and jealousy… not to mention that Harry Potter has been missing for ten years and Voldemort is dead. (All violence is mild).
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Thank you to all my reviewers!!!
Disclaimer: I own my imagination, JK Rowling owns Harry Potter.
err, alright--current reaction:everyone is OOC. I am sure your story will explain everything, but you probably should have introduced the radical changes more slowly.
I don't think McGonagall would have hired smeone out of the blue. A teacher, who will be around kids? There are safety issues to be considered.
Anyway, I'll give chapter two a try. You did a good job building up the mystery and suspense.
Author's Response: one thing i like to inform readers of is that everything in my story has a purpose, a reason for being the way it is. for example, there\'s a reason mcgonagal hiring landon the way she did. but i\'m glad you are continuing on to chapter 2. my best writing picks up in the later chapters, so enjoy!
Summary: The story of the wonderful Lily and James!
Nice piece of poetry! Bravo on you first MNFF fledgling.
One minor correction-- you do not need a comma at the end of every line, only put them where they would occur according to the normal rules of punctuation. When in doubt write poetry out in normal sentence format and correct any punctuation that looks odd or out of place... then put it back in line/stanza format.
Good job. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thx, watch out 4 the new peice that i am submitting! Also thanks 4 the advice! it will go 2 good use, trust me! Thx, Dragon_Spirit
Summary: After defeating Voldemort, Harry Potter was about to become the most adulated wizard in the History of Wizardkind. But he ruined it all. And he's damn proud of it.
Wow! Unique. I loved it. I can honestly say I thought your version of the final battle was better then JKR's (which I frankly found very disappointing.)
You have such an interesting interpretation of Harry's character. It doesn't exactly fit with the Harry in Rowling's books, but your Harry seems to be a more mature rendering of a boy who grew up in the same circumstances/world/environment. Do you know what I mean?
The one thing I have trouble understanding is Harry's reaction to Ron's death. It seems to me that some part of him would feel sorrow... just like some part of him still finds joy in something as simple as flying. However, this is only an opinion...
Thanks for posting this one shot. I enjoyed it immensely. Now I'm off to see if the next chapter of The Song of the Trees is up yet!
Summary: Ever wondered what happened to that little boy Harry saw playing with his father's wand at the Quidditch World Cup? Well now little Kevin is eleven years old and about to start school at Hogwarts. While shopping with his mother in Diagon Alley he runs into Harry Potter and discovers that he's not so different after all.
Hmmm, could use work. It was a fun idea and a nice reflection on Harry (the normal guy who beat the villain, etc.) The story itself, however, came across as a sequence of events without much filler. Further the antagonism between Kevin and his mother seemed unnecessary and remained unresolved.
Enjoyed the idea... are you going to continue this story?
Summary: A collection of one-shots centered around celebration, happiness, family, or love. Each chapter is a different one-shot from a different mod-- a gift from us to you. Happy birthday, MNFF! *Bows to Authors*
I loved it... but if Lily is was so good at Charms why did she need matches?