Hi, I'm Melissa. :0)
You're pretty much amazing.
I love this and Veiled Revelations! I can't wait for the next part.
And, I totally agree that Lost has gotten worse and House (season finaleee soon) is awesome.
Author's Response: oh poor Lost. why did it go down the drain? don\'t know. but im in love with henry gale.... !!!! HOUSE SEASON FINALE WAS GOOD. i <3 wilson. THANKS FOR REVIEWING!!!
Laura has been a good friend to Percy for seven years. She took his side during a fight between Percy and Oliver their second year. She accepted Percy the way he was, something most of his brothers couldn't even do. And when the one brother who did understand Percy died, Laura was there to help Percy through it, even though the death hurt her greatly as well.
Yes, Laura has been a good friend to Percy. So why, during their seventh year, is Percy allowing his friend to be lonely and miserable?
A fellow Gryffindor decides to try to ease Laura's loneliness by interfering in her life. The result is that Laura must suddenly deal with new relationships, including an unlikely reconciliation with Oliver.
Laura succeeded in being a good friend when she only had one friend. Now she must learn how to be a good friend to several people... including herself. Oliver/OCComplete!
"Thy friendship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy - for friendship's sake." -William Blake
Wow, I absolutely loved this story! The ending chapter was great. : ]
My favorite thing about this fic was Laura. She was such a believable character, and I loved her personality. She was stubborn and smart, and someone I had no problem relating to. You made her seem like a real person to me, and not some underdeveloped OC.
I also think you wrote Percy wonderfully. You kept true to the canon we see of him, but you added more depth to his character. You made him your own, in a way, but managed to stay with the actual books. He’s still not my favorite character, but I feel like there’s more to him now.
And Oliver. Oliver was wonderful, and he was perfect for Laura. He was funny, gave good advice, and was as stubborn as Laura. [Just like Viv and Just Tink, I’ve fallen in love with him too!]
Well, I can’t wait for the epilogue. Any sequel plannedl? Or at least something else about Oliver and Laura? Thought I’d at least ask, as I hate to see the story end.
Anyway, amazing job!!! : ]
Author's Response: I love it when people mention Percy in their reviews. He\'s probably the part of the fic I\'m happiest with.
I don\'t think there will be a Laura/Oliver sequel. After this approximately 400 page novel-length, I don\'t think there will be enough of their story left to require another novel-length. It\'s possible that Laura and Oliver will appear in a one-shot sometime, but I doubt they\'d be its focus.
Thanks very much for reviewing!
Poor, poor Miriam. =( And now she has to find out what's happened to Sirius.
Great chapter - can't wait to see what comes next!
Oh wow. Did you really have to end on such a cliffhanger? =P
Hah, but really, this story is amazing. Miriam feels like such a real character, and I can't help but wish she had been in the actual books. She and Sirius make quite the couple.
I love that you've included the memories from Hogwarts and after, because it shows so much of Miriam's character and her back story. My favorite scene had to be when they're in the Shrieking Shack, but this very last chapter had me close to tears, which is always a sign of good writing. =)
I'm thrilled beyond words that you're updating, and I know there are so many other readers who will be too.
Awesome, wonderful, amazing job!
This is such a wonderful story. The fact that it's told from a Muggle's point of view makes it so interesting and original compared to a lot of other stories you find on here.
I liked how you didn't come right out and tell us it was Harry that needed help, but your clues led the readers to figure out who Daniel needed to help. The brief allusions to the Marauders were a great addition, too, and I loved the personality you gave Daniel. His kindness and generosity are truly heart-warming.
Great job! =)
It was full moon when the Dark Lord sealed a part of his soul within a magical amulet, and then broke it in half. One half was left to the faithful werewolves to guard. The other half was tossed into the impenetrable depths of time where no one but him could get it. When the first half has been found, the Order of the Phoenix selects Hermione Granger to go back into the past to search for the missing piece. What is waiting for her is a brutal task that will test her beyond her limits, and an undying love that extends beyond the boundaries of time.
No werewolves were harmed in the making of this story.
Update (9 May): Chapter 17, Burning, is up! Enjoy!
This story is incredibly amazing. Not only have you characterized Hermione perfectly, but you write Remus, James, Sirius, and Lily just the way I imagine them.
I love the flashforwards (if you could call them that) to the present day, and the fact that the interesting plot makes this so much more than just a Remus/Hermione story. But of course, I love the romance aspect, too!
I hope you update soon -- I can't wait to see what happens! =D
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m slowly working on the next chapter; Remus is just being a bit elusive, for some reason. ^.^ It\'ll be up asap.
Haha, this is really cute, and is definitely good for some Christmas spirit! I loved Harry's comments on each gift, and all of this followed the rhyme scheme from the original very well.
The one thing that seemed a little off was the "Enchanted Mistletoe" since there wasn't a five in there, but the comments for that gift were hilarious, so it worked for me.
Thanks for making me laugh! Great job! =)
Winner of the QuickSilver Quills Award, categ. Best Marauder Era.What did being a Marauder truly mean?... Let's just say that some tunes cannot be played by a lone musician; and those four's lives were certainly not soloists' scores. In class or in detention, in Quidditch matches or full-moon wanderings, fleeing before monsters or confronting dark wizards, they wrote, measure after measure, their own eight-handed piece.
Messrs Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs, are proud to present a Symphony for Quartet.
Well this is wonderful so far!
All of the characters are exactly like I imagined them, so I can't wait for the next part.
10/10 most definitely. =]
Author's Response: Well as I\'m finally done with my exams... Next part should be started quite soon!
Written as a Term Challenge: Holidays Abroad submission for Slytherin.
Once again, I found my self reading something that I'd never read before. (First something from the point of view of Barty Crouch Jr, and now this!) I’ve never read Merope/Tom before, but this was great!
Merope is just how I imagined her, a little timid, but determined to get what she wants. The line, “She had made the plans months ago, brewed the potion weeks ago, and no matter what her mind was thinking, her heart would pull her through today.” sums her up perfectly. Her heart overruled her mind when she gave Tom the love potion.
One very tiny nit-pick in an otherwise wonderful prologue…
“For him, it was just an chance to get out of the house;”
It should just be ‘a chance,’ instead of ‘an chance.’
Well, I’m looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters! =]
Author's Response: Thanks! I suppose it\'s really time that I go through this and read it for typos huh...
A very good chapter! I thought the Romanian sentence was very cool, and I’m glad you had Merope use that helpful little spell, because I wondered what it said. I think that Merope’s thoughts are very good, having her paranoid and worrying all the time. She’s a very interesting character, as well as Tom. And it was nice to see Sara again, if only in passing this time.
I only have one tiny nit-pick… …
Trying to be a quiet as possible, she took our her wand from the same cabinet she had gotten the potion from and stirred the concoction.
It should read, ‘took out her wand…’ instead of, ‘took our her wand…’
This was very interesting. I had never thought that Merope would have to give Tom the potion everyday, but it makes sense. I especially liked the ending, where you mention he needs more and more each day. I wonder if he’s going to become immune to it… Guess I’ll have to keep reading! Great job! =]
Author's Response: Everyone seems to love Sra popping into this, but really, this story was written first. I\'m glad you all thought it fit well into place, though. Thanks for the review!
This is definitely my favorite chapter so far! I think that Tom’s reaction to finding out that Merope’s pregnant was very in character. The rage, the leaving, the everything. I especially liked the last line in your fic, even though it was pretty simple. I personally thought it was very powerful, and left the reader feeling sorry for Merope, even though it was her fault that all of this happened in the first place.
“Maybe Merope had always had that fire burning inside her--she just never let it ignite.”
This is another one of my favorite lines, as I think it really sums up Merope. We see her in HBP as a very timid, weak girl, but here you show that she is, for lack of a better word, “fiery.” I think one of the great things about this story is that you show different sides of Merope’s personality: paranoia, anger, and sadness. Well, once again- great job! :]
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'ve always thought the fic got better as it went on as well. ANd I\'m glad that you pointed those emotions out, because I always thought of Merope as a character who was extremely emotionsl and always on the edge. Thanks for the review!
What a sad chapter. (Good though!)
Merope’s feelings and thoughts in this were so understandable. It’s too bad that she broke her wand, and I wonder how much she’ll regret that later…
And, it was a nice detail that you added about how she could no longer understand Romanian. It added to that fact that her dream world is ending fast.
My favorite part of this chapter was the last paragraph.
“She knew they would either find their way to the heart of a new friend, or they would die in the same place that they lived: at home.”
That is such a powerful sentence, and has so much meaning behind it.
I’m starting to get sad, only a few more chapters left for me to read. I really liked this story. :]
Author's Response: Aww, thank you. I always hated coming to the end of my HP books, too. And I\'m glad you liked that last line; it seemed many people did. Thanks again!
Oh, no. I thought I had another chapter to read, but this was the end. Although I started reviewing this story because you won the EoM Helpful User (congrats, by the way!), you had me hooked by the end of the prologue. I absolutely loved this fic, and it’s introduced me to the wonderful world of Tom/Merope. Yay!
Right, on to the epilogue. (Nice title, very fitting.)
It was absolutely a great ending! It was interesting that Merope saw Tom and Sara again, and understandable that she wanted her feast. You did a good job tying in what we know happened in canon, and what might have happened that night. I agree very much with Kumy, the ending line was the perfect way to end this.
Well, great job on this story! I really, really enjoyed reading it! :]
Author's Response: Why thank you, I enjoyed writing it. And although I know you started reading this because of the EoM, it\'s nice to hear that you liked it nonetheless. Thanks for the wonderful reviews!
Another great chapter! I love how you included a bit of Romanian culture. It was something that I found very interesting to read, and something that I knew absolutely nothing about. I really think that it added a lot to this chapter!
Once again, I loved Merope’s characterization, especially when she got angry at Sara. It makes sense for her to be jealous when Tom’s around other girls. I also liked the detail you wrote with, including things like the flowers outside of the hotel, and things of the sort.
I’m excited to go read the next chapter! I wonder what happens when Tom finds out he didn’t make that amulet… :]
Author's Response: I\'m glad you\'re excited to read the next chapter. That\'s what I like to hear...(and it makes me happy to hear all you readers refurring to Sara by her first name almost as if she was cannon. Yay.)
Dun, dun, dun! Merope’s pregnant. I wonder how Tom’s going to deal with this one.
This chapter is another awesome one! This story really has me hooked. Tom and Merope are very interesting to read about, as you do a wonderful job writing them. It makes sense that Merope would be under the illusion that Tom actually loves her, and that’s very sad. It didn’t surprise me that she left out the portion of Amortentia.
Like always, you wrote Merope’s emotions wonderfully, and I really enjoyed this chapter! :]
Author's Response: Thank you! I love Merope and Tom as well-- they\'re my favourite pairing.
Follow Barty as he takes his steps through the Quidditch World Cup in GoF. What parts of the story did you miss while reading from Harry's point of view? This is the side of the story that you really care about.
Wow, I’ve never read a story from Barty Crouch Junior’s perspective. I thought it was a unique idea, and I really enjoyed reading this!
You have a few spelling errors here and there, but it doesn’t take away from the story, or anything like that. Here are the few I noticed.
'The-boy-who-lived' that he has the power to walk around and talk to just anynone's house elf.
Anynone’s should be anyone’s.
“He was used to being under the Invisibilty Cloak.”
Invisibilty should be Invisibility
“This was convinient; he now would be able to know what was going on.”
Convinient should be convenient.
But really, they're just minor errors. Anyway, Barty Crouch Junior’s characterization is very good. I especially liked the lines about Harry.
Really! Potter thinks he knows everything there is to know, but I'll show him!
That seems like the sort of thing he would be thinking while under his cloak. It's sinister, and it shows how much control he's regaining- plotting against Harry already.
I personally thought ending it with Winky’s POV was a great ending. It was a good way to tie in what we know happens in GoF- Winky getting Stunned and BCJ sending up Mosmordre.
So, wonderful job!!! =]
Author's Response: Thank you for everything. And, actually, I\'ve found a lot of typoes myself as well as those that people have commented on, but I\'m just going to wait until the EoM reviews stop before fixing them all.
I loved Verity as an OC, and the idea behind her was very nice. I can't really imagine how hard it would be to be a Squib in the wizarding world. You wrote Verity’s troubles well, and I really felt for her. Especially in this line:
“A Squib could never have such luck.”
I also enjoyed the beginning. It intrigued me, and I wanted to keep reading! Also, you wrote with just the right amount of description. You added details where they needed to be, but the story didn’t drag on at all!
Well, great job, thanks for my lovely banner, and I’m off to read the companion piece! :]
Wow. This was hauntingly beautiful.
The first line draws you in, and you can’t stop reading. It's so intriguing. Your descriptions are great, as well as your use of imagery. I could imagine Andromeda's dress, and the girls in the attic, trying them on. Andromeda is such an interesting character, and you definitely do her justice.
I do have one tiny nit-pick. “She was forgiven for wearing a muggle brand, only because they were so expensive.” Here, Muggle should be capitalized.
Anyway, I loved the interwoven conversation between Narcissa and Andromeda. It fits perfectly, and never feels like it’s interrupted. It only adds to the fic.
And, even though she knows that she can’t ever go back, she can’t just shut it away like that.
This is one of my favorite lines in the story. It’s very powerful, and it made me feel for Andromeda.
Well, this was just absolutely phenomenal! And, by the way, the ending line was perfect. :]
Ooh, great story! I love reading about young McGonagall, and I think you did her justice. I can clearly see her acting that way as a young adult, and her actions, thoughts, and speech were all in character.
Your description/imagery was also very good! I loved how you wrote about Mr. Dessly’s ‘imaginary royalty’ melting off his suit. I have such a funny little mental picture of that happening. ;)
Besides those things, I really loved the opening and closing lines.
He was new and unfamiliar, and by the way he walked across the room to her, she did not like him.
I love this line. I can see the young McGonagall watching him enter, and already forming her opinion on him. I think it was a good way to start your story- it caught my attention!
Small things were not meant to linger over, like falling rain and silly men.
I liked the ending line even more than the first, though. It was a nice wrap-up to the story, and it’s a true statement. :D
Great story, and thanks so much for the banner!
I really liked your story! But hopefully Harry won’t die in the seventh book- I would be rather distraught. =]
Your characterization of Ginny in this fic is easily the strong point. She (in my opinion) is one of the hardest canon characters to write, and you did a great job. You give her realistic feelings, and write her grieving process wonderfully.
Also, like everyone else, I thought the correlation between the rain and tears was very well done. And, once again your ending line was very good.
Well, great job!
Author's Response: Haha, thanks, I should go into a business writing ending lines. That would be SO cool. Ahem. Thanks for the wonderful comments, and I\'ll keep my fingers crossed for Harry!