Penname: Pondering [Contact]
Real name: Tash
Member Since: 05/10/06
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Beta-reader: Yes
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Bio:
Hello! I'm a teenage girl from Australia who spends most of her free time (and also the time that isn't free =P) writing fanfiction. And that is all you really need to know. ;)

I have an account over on the Forums with the same username over there. Drop me a PM sometime! ;D

Some (but not many) of my fics can also be found at fanfiction.net under the username 'Lythdan Megend'. I always update here first, however.

My Stories

Life is But A Dream

Is on a temporary hiatus. It'll be finished someday, I assure you, because I know that the story cannot be left untold, and I really want to finish it myself.

The Bedroom at the Burrow

This Fred-centric story was written for the Autumn Challenge on the Forums for the prompt: The Next Great Adventure, where we had to write a story about a canon character who had passed away.

The funny thing is, I never liked the twins much before I wrote this story. Now I love them.

I am very pleased to say that this story came first in the Next Great Adventure Prompt.

The Inner Eye

Not one of my favourite fics of all time, but still a semi-decent read. This story was written for the Extra Credit: The New Professor prompt for the Autumn Challenge and came second in the prompt.

I never knew Trelawney could be so funny before. =P

Flame

My writing style in Flame I'm quite proud of, as the overall concept, but I think the twist at the end could have been a lot more thought-through.

Wait, did I say twist at the end? You didn't see that.

Where Lilies Grow

Written for the Telling The Truth prompt for the Autumn Challenge--I quite like this one, although I wish I hadn't tried to be so profound and there are still a few of those damned tense errors poking in there -somewhere-

I also find it quite annoying when people leave reviews for stories in the AU section telling me that certain events didn't happen in canon. So don't do that. Because pointing out the obvious is not really helpful.

The Very Best Gift of All

Nearly half my reviewers on ff.net told me that this story was so sweet it gave them cavities...so beware. Other then that, it's a nice story.

Phases of Learning

My first finished fic that isn't a one-shot-- Yay! It's a three-shot! I quite like this one, and the funny thing was I didn't quite come up with the Phases idea until I was stuck without a title. If I hadn't come up with the Phases idea, this story would have been a lot worse, I assure you.

An Exciting Life

This was written for a School Assignment, the mystery class I was in. The writing style's decent but I sort of made up the plot events one day and went, 'Yep. That's what going to happen.' Luckily, the characterisation is better than the plot, otherwise this fic would have little redeeming features. =P

Forgiveness

Someone should tell me to stop writing Severus/Lily. I quite liked this one, and the twist in it...(yeah, I should probably stop mentioning these things in my bio) but there's nothing very exceptional about it. Still a decent read though.

The Song of the Stars

This was written for dancingcarrot21 for the Secret Santa in '07. I spent ages worrying about Luna's characterisation, but I think I got it down eventually.

Talks With Plants and Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

I'm not going to admit how long it took me to spell Snorkack...apart from the fact that I just did. Luna doesn't have her usual dreamy quality, but Rolf is a funny guy.

Rowena's Song

This is one of the better fics I have written recently. I quite like the themes presented in the story, but also the humour involved. I thought that I would never be able to write a Founder-fic, but I guess I proved myself wrong. Huh. xD

Good Luck

Written for the Gauntlet Fifth Round, with Minerva McGonagall.

The Fourteenth of February

Written for a humour class on MNFF, it's actually an idea I came up with when talking about fanfiction on a train with a friend and how many suitors Lily seems to have in canon.

Pepperup Potions

Co-written with the wonderful Lilykinslove/Emma, this story explores a Snape/Madame Pomfrey relationship. We were assigned the pairing, in case you were wondering.

Saving Catherine

The longest one-shot I've written, not counting the Gauntlet. It was for a DADA class on the MNFF forums, and my second ever foray into Dark/Angst.


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Summary: Ever wonder what the world of Harry Potter would be like as a soap opera? Me neither – until now, that is. Set in Harry’s 6th year, think of this as the parts of the Half Blood Prince that JKR didn’t want us to see. If you're into unconventional ships, this one's for you! Behold… As the Wizarding World Turns

Episode 9 is up!

*****Excerpt from a later chapter*****

"Haven’t you heard the rumors about her – one date Weasley.”

“One date what!?” Harry stared at Hermione dumfounded. He turned his head towards Ginny who once again started snogging Dean. Dean’s hands wandered to his girlfriend’s bum as she pulled the lower half of his body closer. “Hmm… makes sense,” he admitted.

“Anytime she brings up that sort of thing, I try to act like I have loads of experience too, but actually I have no idea what I’m talking about.”

“But what about you and Krum?” Harry asked, still visibly uncomfortable about their conversation.

“Oooh big deal. So we kissed a couple times. That means I must be a demon in the sack,” Hermione answered sarcastically. “Look, I was thinking…” Hermione started to blush. “I need to find someone I know to you know… practice with.”

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 21269 Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Published:
01/11/06 Updated: 01/13/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 02/24/08 Title: Chapter 4: Episode 4 –The School Year Begins

I wish I had read this fic before--the soap opera premise was refreshing and showed justification for the twisted story lines inside.

Now, onto the story lines. They have that exact soap-opera feel, you know, when you're watching a soapy and it's so overly-dramatic you can't help but keep watching? It's like that, I can't stop reading. I think this was your desired effect, so it's a job well done. :)

And the narration! It's nice, clear, and more importantly, funny. I'm sure to the characters everything feels like a life or death situation but I just can't help bu laugh and laugh and laugh.

Great work. :D

--Tash

 

The Seventh Horcrux by Melindaleo
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 1198]

Summary: The hunt for the Horcruxes begins. Harry has to decide who to trust as he moves closer to fulfilling his destiny. Will he be able to find and destroy all the Horcruxes? And at what price? Will he be able to find the strength within himself – the Power the Dark Lord Knows Not – in order to succeed in vanquishing Voldemort? And…can he do it and still get the girl? Join Harry and his faithful friends on their quest to finally defeat a Dark Lord.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Violence

Word count: 303697 Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/17/06 Updated: 11/11/06


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 09/15/06 Title: Chapter 28: Scars

Ahh, I've just been reading this over the course of the last few days and just wanted to tell you it's amazing. And that was an evil cliffhanger. :P

Author's Response: Thanks much! I\"m glad you\'re enjoying it.

 
Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 09/23/06 Title: Chapter 30: Matters of the Heart

And I though Ginny getting posioned by the snake was an evil cliffhanger! Pansy's just giving Harry a surpise party, right? Nothing bad's going to happen, is it?

Okay, so that's a bit optimistic, but oh well. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Will Harry fall off the cliff? :P



Author's Response: Er...a surprise part, right. You could say that ;) Hang on, because the next few chatpers aren\'t for the faint of heart.

 
Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 09/29/06 Title: Chapter 31: Mortal Peril

Aaah, yes, it was a bit of a party, wasn't it? And Harry was the guest of honour. ;) Another evil cliffhanger, but I wouldn't expect any less from you. :)

Oh dear, dear, what is Malfoy going to do when he finds out that Pansy is dead?

Author's Response: Heh - thanks! I worried about the cliffy here, but it had to be done at this point. It just didn\'t make sense to end it anywhere else.

 

Cliché Nation by just_the_contrary
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 328]

Summary: A compilation of the most commonly used Harry Potter clichés in the fandom. Features Angsty!Harry, Sweet!Draco, Head Dorms, sudden romances in the forms of Ron/Hermione, Harry/Ginny and of course, Draco/Hermione, because what's a cliché without them?

The Marauders also make an appearance in this fic, including Lily/Lily's best friend/Lily's other best friend.

Warning: mention of hippopotamuses inside.

Chapter Five is up! The story is done. Also, thank you to everyone who nominated this neatly tied bundle of ridiculousness in the QQ awards, I really appreciate it!

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6689 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/03/06 Updated: 09/29/06


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 09/29/06 Title: Chapter 5: Bring Me to Life

Thanks for the laughs! It was a fun ride. :D

Author's Response: Aah! It\'s accepted! Thank you so much. I hope so.

 

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Rated: [Reviews - ]

Summary:

Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 11/14/06 Title: None

Ooh. I like this story. It's a very interesting idea and I am intrigued as to where it will lead. Have fun! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m really loving how it\'s turning out and I\'ve already submitted chapter 3. Thanks for reviewing! ~Moony ;)

 

Lullaby by crazy_purple_hp_freak
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Late at night, Lily rocks Harry to sleep. She murmurs this lullaby…

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 172 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/08/06 Updated: 11/09/06


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 11/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: Lullaby

Wow, that was really sweet. You're good at poetry. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! :) I was starting to think that it might be too cheesy...but I\'m glad it\'s \'sweet\' :)

 

The Night of Change by Phia Phoenix
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: We all know what happened on the terrible night of the battle in the Astronomy Tower, the night Albus Dumbledore died, the night of change.

Or do we?

One person has yet to tell their story.

This is a one-shot written before DH, but just to be sure I've called it an AU fic.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 2220 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/01/07 Updated: 09/08/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 09/10/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wowee, was definitely not expecting that last line. Now you've got me wishing that something like that had actually happened in canon. Would have certainly been very unexpected.

I like that it's written in first person and the tense it's in. It definitely works and seems almost poetic. Loved this fic. :)

-Tash

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I had a much more complicated explanation at first, but it lost its punch, so I tried to keep it a complete mystery right til the last couple of sentences. I\'m so glad you liked it! And I find first person to be the easiest for getting into the character\'s head- kind of like being an actor. I was immeasurably flattered by you saying that you wished it had happened in canon! Thankyou SO much! You have no idea how happy this review made me! Thanks, Tash. Love Phia.

 

An Unexpected Ray of Sunlight by Phia Phoenix
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Originally entered into the 2007 Autumn Challenge, prompt New Beginnings.

The boy Remus passes his days in a haze of pain and self-hate, loneliness and terror, with books as his only escape. It is the same every month, and he has lost hope that the cycle will ever end. But then there comes the unexpected ray of sunlight to pierce the haze, and make him human once more.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Self Injury

Word count: 6779 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/22/07 Updated: 11/01/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 10/10/07 Title: Chapter 1: An Unexpected Letter

Hi Phia! I finally got around to reviewing your story. :D

I have to say, I really like the first few paragraphs that are from the werewolf’s POV. It’s very effective and engages my attention right away. The short sentences emphasizes the attention span of the wolf. I’d just thought I’d point out that you’re missing a full stop after ‘I howl’. :)

I think the shift between the wolf’s POV and Remus is a bit jarring though. It almost sounds like it is happening in the book Remus is reading at the start of the fourth paragraph.

I enjoyed Remus’s self doubt after the elation of receiving the invitation to Hogwarts wore off. I think you’ve done his characterisation very well. I’m glad he decided to seize the opportunity of going to Hogwarts.

I also liked what you did with his mother in this fic, and the line about how Remus always hears a tone of uncertainty in his mother’s voice. Very powerful. Poor Remus!

Good luck with the challenge and I hope you get the next chapter up soon! :D

Tash


Author's Response: Thanks! I\'ll fix those couple of things up. I really enjoyed writing Remus as a child, because he was virtually a blank canvas! It was also really good being able to get inside his head and kind of, explore his feelings. Very interesting. Thanks for your lovely reviews, Tash! , <3

 

A Lily in Death by Angela_Prongs
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: During the war, an imprisoned Luna ponders her looming death. This is not violent, morbid, scary, nothin'. I really think you should read it.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 268 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/10/07 Updated: 10/17/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 10/18/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Lily in Death

Angela! *huggles* Okay, I don't actually know that much about poetry, but I really liked your poem. You really set the mood well and you had some absolutely lovely lines in there. =] hehe, a poem about death and you managed to make it not morbid. :)

--Tash

Author's Response: Aw, thanks Tash! I was reading The Book Thief when I wrote this, so maybe that\'s why it wasn\'t morbid. Or maybe the fact that I am a scaredy-cat (?!) and don\'t write, read, or watch scary, morbid, yucky, and/or disturbing things. Either way, thank you for the review! I am so glad that you liked it!!

 

Negative Space by Denebola
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: The beauty of what isn't there... If Dumbledore had waited a little longer to relocate it, what might Hermione have seen in the Mirror of Erised? This nostalgic little "What-If?" takes place during Year One, and answers that question with a haunting twist.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 1538 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/22/07 Updated: 11/04/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 11/06/07 Title: Chapter 1: Negative Space

Oh, how did I miss this getting validated? *blinks* I still love this story, and I think you've done well with Harry and Ron's characterisation.

And the ending is totally unexpected. :D Don't worry about it being too obvious. :)

--Tash

 

The Moon and the Sun by Love_is_4ever
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary:

You and I, that’s like talking about the sun and the moon: even though they share the skies, they can’t be together at the same time...


What happens when your most precious possession is taken from you? This is the story of the life of Rowena Ravenclaw, one of the cleverest witches of her time. But she has a secret, and a past she can’t forget...


Written for the Full Moon One Shot Challenge, I am Hopeful_song, of Hufflepuff House.

This Story Won Third Place in the Full Moon One Shot Challenge!


Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3572 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/24/07 Updated: 12/05/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 12/11/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wait. Please don't tell me that I haven't reviewed this yet. *dies*

I absolutely loved your story. I remember commenting on how it made me cry while I was betaing it, and it's very moving, very exceptional. Some of the way the sentences are structured still sound only mildly awkward, but it actually helps with setting the atmosphere that these events happened a long time ago, before modern english has progressed into what it is now.

What am I talking about? I think I get off track way too easily.

I think you did Rowena's heartbreak with the loss of her daughter very well indeed, and everything that she went through I could almost feel as well.

Congratulations on placing! You deserve it. :)

--Tash

Author's Response: Tash! *tacklehugssquish* Thanks so much for your review! *is hyper* *you already know that*

People! Go get Tash as a Beta, she\'s fabulous! *huggles*

 

Diamonds of Glass by Gin_Drinka
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: There are rules about who he can be. There are rules about who he can love. And there are rules about how much peole are really worth.



Severus Snape doesn't agree with the rules.





There might still be a little hope left to be had, because you can find diamonds in mounds of broken glass.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse

Word count: 1990 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/26/07 Updated: 12/05/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 01/21/08 Title: Chapter 1: Diamonds of Glass

I like how you've played with the contrast in things here. First of all, you don't go into the stereotype of 'it was a dark and stormy night', instead you start with the sun shining brightly which really makes the upcoming angst more vibrant.

Then you go onto to describing the rich people and then compare them to the poorer houses.

I really like your descriptive prose, by the way. I usually don't like overly descriptive pieces but you do it very well and every line has meaning and isn't there for the purpose of making the story longer, although I think that sometimes you could have varied your paragraph a little bit, as sometimes you can make things more powerful by isolating them.

Take this line for example:

He runs away, glancing over his shoulder, pockets full of his diamonds, mind full of fantastic daydreams.

I think this is one of the most beautiful and emotion evoking lines in the story. You can just feel Severus's desperate hope coming out of that one sentence--and also, it was easy to spot and didn't accidently blend into other sentences. Just thought I'd point that out.

The diamond idea was very well implented throughout, I think that you have some brilliant metaphor going on, and I really liked your characterisation of Eilleen and Tobias, they felt realistic, the dynamics seemed appropiate of the relationship they have with each other.

I also like how Snape doesn't give up, as he's really not that sort of person. And even though it's a D/A fic, it ends off with that hope, continuing the contrast.

All in all, I really enjoyed this fic, and thankyou for writing it.

--Tash

 

A Shimmer in the Moonlight by Angela_Prongs
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: This is a one-shot I wrote for the In-House Halloween Hauntings challenge. (Ravenclaw) Personally, I wouldn’t say it’s the greatest piece of literature ever written, but it sure is quite dandy if I do say so myself!

Sirius Black is dead; we all know that. What we don’t know is that he has some unfinished business to attend to on this Halloween night.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1805 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/10/07 Updated: 11/17/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 11/17/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Shimmer in the Moonlight

*squishes the Angela* You know, when I was betaing this (before you told me the title, of course) I was wondering about all the references to shimmer. Then you told me and I was like...ohhhhhh. :P

Very glad you got this through the queue! :)

--Tash

Author's Response: Tash! *tackles* YAY! I forgot to credit you--*headdesk*--but I edited it in so you\'ll notice you are now in my story! :P YAY! THANK YOU! ~Angela

 

Going Under by harrypotterfangirl21
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: In the midst of the Battle of Hogwarts, Ginny finds Harry dead.

However, accepting death is not so easy... and sometimes depression is easier than grieving.

Most warnings are precautions. This deals heavily with depression, however, so it is quite the angst-fest, and somewhat disturbing.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1315 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/23/07 Updated: 11/23/07


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 11/23/07 Title: Chapter 1: Going Under

:D I was looking at the MNFF front page and saw that it got validated! :) I like stories where Harry dies as I wish I did happen in canon...maybe I'm just morbid. :P

Anyway, I think you did well with the edits. :) *hugs*

--Tash

Author's Response: Nah, I wanted Harry to die in canon, too. *ish ebil*

Thanks, Tash! Without your superb beta-ing skills, this wouldn\'t have been HALF as good. ^_^

 

Colours Of Life by xombie
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 61]

Summary: Each moment is a decision, defined by the circumstances. Who knows? Had it not been for an overprotective cousin, perhaps Rose Weasley and Scorpius Malfoy could have been the best of friends. Perhaps in one point in time and space, they are. As it happens, their relationship was defined by one catalytic factor, James Potter, and now,they are sworn enemies.






This story is a chronicle of their first year at Hogwarts, and their last. It is a tale of happenstance and familial influence, of an enmity that was not theirs to decide. Read and find out how such an enmity can influence the lives of two innocent children and wreck them. Will the injury last forever?



Due to my heavy work-schedule, this fic will be on hold till early June. My apologies to all.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3772 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
12/17/07 Updated: 01/22/08


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 01/03/08 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

This seems to be a promising start to your fic. I like how you have set the foundation for Rose and Scorpius’s future relationship, and their interactions seem to be very in-character considering their background and ages. Actually, I think you do a very good job with the characterization in the prologue.

Take this line for example: ‘Of course not, Dad. I’m grown up. I’m three inches taller than last year, see?’

I can imagine any young girl saying this to her father. Young children often think that they’re grown-up, especially when they get their first taste of independence. From this line we can tell that Rose is taking a confident outlook on her Hogwarts adventure.

Also, I enjoyed that Ron’s warning to stay away from Scorpius just propelled Rose’s curiosity about him.

‘Bye Mum, bye Dad!’ the little girl waved goodbye

Just thought I’d point out that the t should be capitalized, as waving is an action. Otherwise, you did a very good job with the grammar in this story.

‘Rose Weasley. But most people call me Rosie.’

‘No wonder you’re so pink …. like a rose.’


This is an exchange between Rose and Scorpius that I love. I can just imagine the awkward expression on Scorpius’s face as he says this to Rose.

The way you have set out the prologue is also worth mentioning. At first it seemed a little distracting with the POV switches, but then it started moving into a rhythm where I could see in my mind these back and forth flashes. It felt sort of like in a movie where the camera swings back and forth from two characters, you know what I mean? :)

I look forward to the future chapters and seeing how Rose and Scorpius’s relationship grows.

--Tash

 

Of Blood and Purity by potterfan226
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary:

“Jordanna, trust me on this.”

She nodded. “I will.”

“Promise me you’ll do whatever – it – takes-”

“I will.”



Jordanna Benton went through great lengths to please her mother: she was living the life her mother wanted her to live, where she was forced to become someone she wasn't, befriend those who she thought she'd never talk to and hate those who she'd rather like. But as the years passed, why couldn’t Jordanna help but feel like something was missing? Was she finally starting to realize that this wasn’t the lifestyle she wanted to live? And why did Adelaide Benton want her daughter to live this ridiculous life in the first place?

Contains: Regulus/OC, Sirius/OC

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 17782 Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Published:
01/03/08 Updated: 09/01/08


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 01/14/08 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: I've Got Dreams to Remember

Gah. Didn't see this had gotten validated yet. *squishes*

I'm really intrigued by Adelaide's character--I think you've done a very good job with her. I like how that she is encouraging her daughter to do the wrong things and how Adelaide is trying to reassure herself that it is the right thing.

Good job! :)

--Tash

Author's Response: You know for some reason, I acctually do enjoy writing Adelaide\'s character, which is rather weird. Why, because I hate writing characters that give me trouble (I do admit that a few times I\'ve wanted to bang my head while writing Adelaide), but so far it\'s been good. Hopefully I can keep her characterization in tact for the rest of the story, and not have her go off of the deep end and turn her into some old Mary Sue. LOL. Thanks for the comment, hun. Means a lot. :)

 
Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 04/09/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2: A White Christmas Is Only The Beginning

Yay! The chapter got validated. *hugs* I can't wait to read more--good job with working Mrs Black's character. It feels better now. :D

Hope to hear more from you soon! (: (I should have your next chapter back in the next two days.

Author's Response: -jumps up and down- Heehee. Thanks! And thank god about Mrs. Black\'s characterization - I didn\'t really think Mrs Black would be a hard(er) character to write, until you pointed that out, but I\'m very glad :D\r\nAnd take your time! I\'m in no rush. \r\nThanks a bunch agaiN! You\'re totally awesome.

 

Thanks, Prongs by Angela_Prongs
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Sirius is wandering the Muggle streets. He can't go home and he doesn't know where else to go. Luckily, his feet know the way.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1358 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/19/08 Updated: 04/16/08


Reviewer: Pondering Signed
Date: 04/18/08 Title: Chapter 1: Thanks, Prongs

Hi Angela! Glad to see this got validated. :) What I really like in this story is the difference between the two sections--as a reader, you can just feel the atmosphere changing when he meets up with James again. I also loved the rain analogy and how it eases up throughout the story.

The only thing I'd like to note is that the ending doesn't feel as effective as it could have been. Personally, I feel that the last 'Thanks' makes the story end on a more sardonic note, ie, 'Thanks for nothing', rather than the more grateful tone which I think is what you were trying to get across. I think that if the story had just ended with the 'Thanks, Prongs.' it would have tied in more with the overall message. But this, of course, is very nitpicky. :P

*hugs* Great work on the fic. :)

Author's Response: *hugs* Aw, thanks Tash! I\'m glad you liked it. I edited the ending, too. I agree. I meant to have it sound all dreamy-like, but I guess it really didn\'t work that way. XD So, thank you for your nitpicky-ness! *squishes* =D

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