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Luna's Christmas by michelle_31a
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: While spending the holidays at the Burrow, Hermione gets an unexpected insight into the spirit of Christmas from none other than Luna Lovegood...

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1608 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/17/04 Updated: 12/17/04


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: Luna's Christmas

Oh, poor Luna. Hermione seemed kind of sharp in this one-shot, but I suppose sleep does that to some people. I liked how you portrayed Luna, though.

"Don't be," said Luna. "I've been waiting for him not to come for years..."

I love that quote. It's kind of sad, but it ties the whole story together quite nicely.

 

An Insider's View by CCCC
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 76]

Summary: A series of one-shots from inside the minds of various characters. Different formats and styles for each character.
This is a past featured story, but from way back before they did rosettes for it. Bellatrix, Gargoyle, Ollivander, Sorting Hat, Filch, Rita (New)

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 10402 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/05/05 Updated: 10/17/07


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 05/23/06 Title: Chapter 2: A Guardian

I like the concept of the story, and how you kept everything light and in canon. My favorite part was about Lecidius. Overall, it was an enjoyable read, although it jumped from topic to topic in certain areas.

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 05/23/06 Title: Chapter 2: A Guardian

I like the concept of the story, and how you kept everything light and in canon. My favorite part was about Lecidius. Overall, it was an enjoyable read, although it jumped from topic to topic in certain areas.

 

A Sirius Death by Eagle_of_Sin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: This is about how Harry feels when Sirius's death starts to sink in. I'll try to make it as heart-deep as I can!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 140 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/11/05 Updated: 04/11/05


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Pain

I'm particulary fond of how you ended the poem. "I feel like I've just bled, bled my life away..." I thnk the ellipses added a nice touch to it. Also, you did a wonderful job of portraying Harry's emotion through-out the poem.

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Pain

I'm particulary fond of how you ended the poem. "I feel like I've just bled, bled my life away..." I thnk the ellipses added a nice touch to it. Also, you did a wonderful job of portraying Harry's emotion through-out the poem.

 

Summary: 6-year-old Sirius Black just wouldn’t listen; he snuck into the family cellar despite being forbiddened to do so... A broken artifact brought about a chain of events that’ll bring us to a different world. Although most of the events stayed the same, his absence brought about some minor changes - now Sirius is in Harry’s time.

This is a story that will reveal what will happen if the most mischievous of the Marauders joins forces with the ever-creative Weasley Twins. This is an epic tale that will reveal the mysterious myths and history of the Most Noble and Ancient House of Blacks. Be mystified, and roll over with laughter, as Sirius bumbled his way through his 1st year at Hogwarts in this alternate tale of the HP tradition.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 96153 Chapters: 19 Completed: No
Published:
05/08/05 Updated: 06/09/07


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/17/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 - Out of His Time

My favourite character in this chapter was definantly Kreacher. You did a wonderful job on his speach. However, my favourite quote has to be "I promise to never turn your hair green again." It's just makes me laugh when I think of a six-year-old version of Sirius saying this.

I think you captured Narssisa and Lucius' personalities quite well. I can see Lucius not wanting to be put in a bad light, and Narssisa wanting to stay true to her family. Then, Lucius doing it for the money and to put others on a lower scale then himself. Wonderful.

I think the plot is pretty interesting. I'm curious to know if Sirius growing up at the Malfoy's effects his house. Keep up the wonderful writing.

Author's Response: I never thought I\'d be a natural at writing Kreacher. *lol* Well given the fact that Sirius turned out the way he did despite growing up a Black - I figured the Malfoys would also fail to change him from the Sirius Black we all know and love.

 

Transformations by Starmaiden
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 125]

Summary: Remus Lupin, resident werewolf of the Order of the Phoenix, meets Nymphadora Tonks, newly instated Metamorphamagus. Follow them through friendship to their ensuing relationship, which persists in attempting to happen, despite their best efforts. If it does, will they be ready?

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Self Injury

Word count: 24286 Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Published:
09/10/05 Updated: 06/27/07


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: Of Umbrella Stands and Magic Eyes

I like how you started it off, with the flash foward. (I guess that would be what you'd call it)
Also, I like how you kept the mood light, and you didn't have Tonks dwell on Remus being a werewolf. I can see Tonks and Sirius joking like that.
My favorite part, however, had to have been, "Tonks made a face. “Please, not Nymmie. I haven’t been called that since I was nine. Not Nymphadora, either,” she added hastily as Sirius opened his mouth again." This not only a humourous quote, but it gives us some kind of relation to how long they haven't seen eachother for.
I'm glad Remus finally did some talking, he seems to be opening up to Tonks more.
Keep up the wonderful writing

Author's Response: Thank you! Thoughful reviews are so encouraging. They say you care enough to leave help!

 

Summary: James finally asks Lily out. The problem is, he chose a roundabout way of getting to her. Plus, he stands a high risk of breaking his neck in the process. Told from Remus Lupin's POV. Rated 3rd-5th years for slight language and mild innuendo on James's part. One-shot.


A/N: Quick note to all: I am sorry, but there are no plans for a sequel for PC. I hate to disappoint you all, but I feel that the story is better standing alone, leaving the rest to your imaginations.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2497 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/22/05 Updated: 10/22/05


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/15/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Prongs Complex

Wow. I'm blown away. I'd have to say the ending was my favorite part, as it tied the whole thing together nicely. It's an interesting way to think of Lily finally going on a date with James, and it seems like something James would do to get her attention. I like the story from Remus' point of veiw, it adds a lot to the style.

 

Siriusly Me by Hallie Black
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 153]

Summary: The story of the wonderful life of Sirius Black told by the one and only, Sirius Black!

CHAPTER 5 SUBMITTED!

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 15735 Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Published:
11/22/05 Updated: 10/25/06


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 07/06/06 Title: Chapter 4: Results

Wow. Pricelessly hilarious. I absolutly adore this fanfic, it's wonderful. I was laughing the entire way through it. However, I would have to say my favourite part was that about the fork-turned-crown. I can see Sirius doing that to rub it in James face.

But since two people before me said that James should have one. I must contradict. Sirius is defiantly better than James, on so many levels. Although, I do love the Marauders as a whole.

Keep up the wonderful writing. I can't wait for the next chapter.

 

Where Laughter Dies by Noldo
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 36]

Summary: Past Featured StoryIn the beginning of the Christmas holidays, Sirius Black runs away from home and will not return for twenty years. A warning for mild language.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4381 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/08/05 Updated: 12/09/05


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 06/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Where Laughter Dies

Firstly, I like the set-up of the peice, it's interesting and different. What I thought was most interesting about it was how the story was narrated in third person, but in the (parenthesis) was first person-Sirius.

Although I had many favourite parts, I'd have to say my absolute favorite was:
James had run afoul of her at school a few times, and hoped she'd rot in hell.
Sirius hopes she'll rot on earth.
I think it explains Sirius and Bellatrix' relationship(or lack of one) perfectly.

I liked how you characterized Regulus- quiet, obediant, keeps to himself. On the same note, I also liked how you showed the Marauders on such a strong level of friendship. Maybe even a twinge of envy from Sirius. Overall, all the characters were completely three demensional, and had some humerous side to their story. Visualizing a boy's room in pink fluffy carpet and rose curtains certainly is funny.

Keep up the wonderful writing!

 

Amortentia by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 160]

Summary: Merope Gaunt has what seems like a flawless plan to get Tom Riddle to love her. She has everything worked out to the very last drop of Amortentia in his glass each morning. Watch as a country called Romania and a celebration of love takes it's effect on this 'perfect love.'

Written as a Term Challenge: Holidays Abroad submission for Slytherin.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 10936 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/22/06 Updated: 05/16/06


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/24/06 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Four

Should I feel sorry for Tom? Or should I feel sorry for Merope? Very confusing stuff. Personally, I like how you’ve represented both of them and made the choice of who to hate so painstakingly hard. I think it’s interesting how you portray Merope as being very passive. She seems to know everything that is going on, and how everything is falling apart...yet she decides to still go up to her room and just wait for him to come back to her. It’s intriguing to say the least.

The only nit-pick I found was, ‘Maybe if you left me alone though, they would be.’ I don’t think I’ve ever head someone refer to their relationship in first person as ‘they.’ Instead, I think, it should be ‘it.’

Overall, I think this is a wonderful -well, angsty- chapter. It’s an interesting thought to consider if Tom had never left Merope and the younger Tom (Voldemort) didn’t grow up in an orphange...

Author's Response: Yes, it\'s very confusing stuff. I tried to make it that way. And I\'m glad you think it\'s both wonderful and angst, as I was going for both of those. Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/24/06 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Four

Should I feel sorry for Tom? Or should I feel sorry for Merope? Very confusing stuff. Personally, I like how you’ve represented both of them and made the choice of who to hate so painstakingly hard. I think it’s interesting how you portray Merope as being very passive. She seems to know everything that is going on, and how everything is falling apart...yet she decides to still go up to her room and just wait for him to come back to her. It’s intriguing to say the least.

The only nit-pick I found was, ‘Maybe if you left me alone though, they would be.’ I don’t think I’ve ever head someone refer to their relationship in first person as ‘they.’ Instead, I think, it should be ‘it.’

Overall, I think this is a wonderful -well, angsty- chapter. It’s an interesting thought to consider if Tom had never left Merope and the younger Tom (Voldemort) didn’t grow up in an orphange...

Author's Response: Double review?

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/24/06 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Five

Wow. I adored the imagery and analogies in this chapter. They were really well written. Poor Merope. Everything seemed to fit in wonderfully to describe Merope’s depression and her emotions.

I think my favourite part was how you described Merope as being isolated from the town. Even though everything and everyone around her was happy and thrilled by the holiday, she knew she couldn’t be a part of that. I’m guessing partly because she couldn’t understand what they were saying, but also because her comfortable life that she had become adjusted to had be snatched away from her. I suppose it serves her right for trying to trick Tom into loving her, but still; it’s sad.

Wonderful chapter! Keep up the fantastic writing.

Author's Response: Thanks. I dunno if it\'s \"fantastic\", but I\'m glad you like it.Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/24/06 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Five

Wow. I adored the imagery and analogies in this chapter. They were really well written. Poor Merope. Everything seemed to fit in wonderfully to describe Merope’s depression and her emotions.

I think my favourite part was how you described Merope as being isolated from the town. Even though everything and everyone around her was happy and thrilled by the holiday, she knew she couldn’t be a part of that. I’m guessing partly because she couldn’t understand what they were saying, but also because her comfortable life that she had become adjusted to had be snatched away from her. I suppose it serves her right for trying to trick Tom into loving her, but still; it’s sad.

Wonderful chapter! Keep up the fantastic writing.

Author's Response: Double review?

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/12/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

The flow on this chapter (well...prologue) was wonderful. You made the transition between when Tom consumed the love potion to their marriage very smooth.

I’d have to say my favorite line was after Tom had drank the love potion and Merope was telling him about the ‘condition.’ “Oh no, she has a condition, Tom thought frantically. That beautiful girl has a condition. A condition, a condition. What a beautiful girl. WHAT!? A CONDITION!?” It really adds a bit of comedy to the chapter. I think you captured the ‘head over heals’ factor perfectly.

The only brit-pick I really picked up was when Merope was assuring him that it was all right to come inside. "There is no need to fear the rumors that I know are flying around Little Hangleton.” Rumors should be rumours.

Overall, I thought it was a very interesting (and addicting) start to the fanfic.

Author's Response: Yes, I\'m no Brit, I guess. Haha. And, it seems everyone has picked out their own favourite line from this. I love the subtle humour here, and I\'m glad you did, too. I can tell you, this is the last of it because it gets pretty angst after this.

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/24/06 Title: Chapter 7: Epilogue ~ Birth of a Legend

I thought it was interesting how you switched from past to present through-out the chapter. I think it added extra closure to the situation that was occurring. The memories of the past you selected sort of completed the story; showed us what she did in that nine months without actually taking us through every aspect of her life on the streets.

And now; a few nit picks. ‘The temperature was frigid and the ground just as old.’ I think ‘old’ is supposed to be ‘cold.’ Second, ‘Merope looked into the eyes of her new born and said in reply, “Tom, after his father…” ’ ‘New born’ should actually be ‘newborn.’

Overall, I liked the fanfic as a whole. You defiantly had an interesting way of portraying the couple’s short time together and the creation of ‘a new legend’ as you put it.

Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you liked it. Yes, I made a few errors, and maybe someday I\'ll go and fix them. *sigh* But I\'m glad you liked the tense switching; I\'ve always loved doing that. Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/12/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter One

In this chapter, I especially like how you showed us the difference between Tom when he drinks the Amortentia and normal Tom. It really puts their seemingly loving relationship into perspective.

I think it was interesting how you included the guilt part in this chapter. I can see maybe the beginnings of Merope finally deciding to give up on using the potion in this chapter. She also seems to be more aware of all her guilt and how simple things as the beautiful mountain sight can bring that nasty monster back to her stomach.

Also, what I thought was important to mention was in from one of the last sentences. “She noted how much of his juice Tom had to drink before turning into his usual self.” I think it’s intriguing how she refers to the potion induced Tom as his ‘usual self.’ I think it shows the small side of her that is convinced that her husband truly does love her, even if she didn’t continue using the potion.

Author's Response: Yes, I wanted in that last line to show that Merope thinks of Tom\'s \'usual self\' as the one that she loves and that loves her. But, I wanted to give more of an impressed that she was obsessed with his new self and had forgotten that he had a mind of his own then anything else. Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/23/06 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Two

I think my favourite part in your fanfic so far is the contradictory between Tom under the love potion and Tom not under the love potion. It’s interesting to think about the different effects of loving someone might have on your personality. I think you’ve portrayed Tom’s careless attititude quite well while he’s not underneath the potion’s effects.

Being in the nit/brit-pick mood I’m in, I thought I might mention a few small errors. ‘The color of their flowers had changed many times since the couple had first come to this town.’ Color is the American spelling, however colour is the spelling you’re searching for. Also, generally you write out numbers under a hundred. So, ‘It only took him about 30 seconds to find the nearest craft cart.’ would actually be ‘thirty.’

Keep up the fantastic writing!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks. I\'m glad you\'re liking it. And, yes, I should change te \'colour\' thing, but I\'m pretty sure it\'s under twenty that you spell it out, but maybe I\'ll fix it eventually.

 
Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/23/06 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Three

And the plot thickens. I like the way you have Tom growing what seems to be slightly more immune to the Amortentia right as Merope becomes pregnant. Not even nine months of happiness left for the poor couple. Well, poor Merope at least.

The only nit-pick that caught my eye was towards the introduction. ‘Merope chuckled to herself but knew better than to laugh out loud, “That isn’t orange juice, Tom. It’s a morning drink called ‘coffee.’’ When the dialogue starts, there should be a full stop instead of a comma.

I think you portray Merope’s guilt very subtly but also realistically. I like how you portrayed her as a wife who’s desperate to believe her husband truly does love her, and the potion is only to make it through the rough mornings. Even though, deep down she knows that’s not the true case.

Author's Response: I\'m glad that you seem to understand so much about Merope just from what I\'ve written. It makes me happy to hear that. And thanks for the review!

 

Barty's Story by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 33]

Summary: Barty Crouch Jr. is willing to give up everything for his master. He would go to any great length do to His bidding.


Follow Barty as he takes his steps through the Quidditch World Cup in GoF. What parts of the story did you miss while reading from Harry's point of view? This is the side of the story that you really care about.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2229 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/23/06 Updated: 05/10/06


Reviewer: FeatherTrader Signed
Date: 08/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Quidditch World Cup

Wow. I like how you switched the views from Winky to Crouch through-out the fanfic. I also thought that Barty’s thoughts were an interesting addition. It sort of set up for what he was about to do.

The first nit-pick I noticed when reading your fanfic was the word house-elf. In the beginging you constantly used ‘house elf’ but towards the end you seemed to catch your error. You might want to go back and fix that. ‘He thinks just because people are calling him 'The-boy-who-lived' that he has the power to walk around and talk to just anynone's house elf.’ I’m assuming ‘anynone’ is supposed to be ‘anyone.’ And finally, ‘Ah, sir, meaning no disrespect, sir, but I is not sure you did Dobby a favor, sir, when you is setting him free.’ ‘Favor’ should actually be ‘favour.’

I thought this was definantly an interesting one-shot. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Author's Response: I guess \'interesting\' is pretty good when I wrote this so long ago. But I\'m glad that you did like it. Someday I will go through this and fix all the mistakes. Someday. Thanks for the reivew!

 
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