I don't reallly like to write the stories. I like to read and review 'em. Maybe I'll be a critic some day, one never knows. Anyways, I love to give constructive criticism, good or bad, mostly good though. Good luck, writers! May the force be with you! God's Speed! I hope that was inspiring enough to get y'all started.
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Summary: The Hogwarts Express brings mystery and mischief in the Marauders' seventh and final year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. James, Sirius, Remus, and Peter are facing a year of N.E.W.T.s, romance, intrigue, and, of course, a little mischief-making. There are plot twists galore! James (in the midst of saving the world) continues desperately to try to woo the incorrigible Lily Evans. Sirius deals with family problems while dealing with his incredible popularity and good looks (the horror!). Remus is provided with a backdoor to avoiding the prejudices of the inevitable real world, but at what cost? (dun-dun-dun) And Peter...well, Peter gets himself a girlfriend (but don't worry: it doesn't affect his hero-worshipping of James...or DOES IT?!)
I thought this story was absolutely fantastic! You didn't make it too crazy or to serious (no pun intended). It had all the right elements mixed together. Bravo! 13/10
Summary: Lily Evans remained shadowed and distant from the world she loved so dearly. Control was Michael's weakness; temptation hers. Yet, when James Potter enters her life, without so much as a warning or brief hesitation, Lily finds truth. For James Potter refused to give up on her.
Wow... people don't usually make Lily like that. Its refreshing to read something new. You wrote a fantastic chapter. 13/10
I like this story a lot. I'm really interested in how its going to turn out. Lily already starting to trust James but how is she going to get rid of Michael? *pondering* Update soon so I can find out. Please! 13/10 once again
I wonder if James thinks less of Lily for giving in to Michael. I may never know. hhmmm....
how is she going to get out of this? Is he just going to dump her when he leaves Hogwarts? It seems like she'd be sick of it now. Then again, if he's so controlling, what could she do? hmmm... Oh! By the way, you get a 13/10. The chapter was brilliant.
Author's Response: You\'ll just have to keep reading ;)
Summary: The war is at it's peak, and Lily Evans is weighed down by guilt. She feels responsible for the death of her parents, and isolates herself from every one around her in the hopes of protecting them from the same fate. But some people refuse to brushed off. Lily would be lying if she said she had forgotten about James Potter, and she can't deny her feelings for him, but for that very reason, she has to.
Story re-added May 20. Please review! Next chapter will be up soon. Rated AU because, apparently, Lily and James got married right after Hogwarts. Enjoy!
Okay.... You've kept these people waiting long enough Juj! Now, I'll know how much homework you have over the weekends since we have almost all of the smae classes. Therfore, if you waste a perfectly free weekend lounging around with your cats I will call you out on it! So start writing already! And if you think you're going to keep getting writer's block then stop writing cliff hangers!
Author's Response: :D see people? this is the kind of review i need! thank you, calen. i\'ll definitely get to work... as soon as the IS timeline is out of the way :)
Summary: After tragedy strikes at Beauxbatons Academy, the school is required to shut down. Several students are forced to transfer to the other magic schools in Europe. One of these students is Amelia Jordan, who, along with two of her siblings, is sent to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. After being sorted into Gryffindor, Amelia's easy going personality helps her befriend Lily Evans and her friends Leah, Micky, and Haylie. Along with this, Amelia finds herself caught up in the schemes of a certain Marauder by the name of Padfoot. Between homework, Quidditch, romance, and the growing threat of You-Know-Who, Amelia soon learns that life at Hogwarts is NEVER boring!
I absolutely love this story and I can't wait for the next chapter. You've managed to really get the audience to care about each of the characters. This is especially apparent after reading some of the other reviews. I love Amelia and her interactions with Sirius and how she looks at him pretty skeptically and doesn't take a lot of what he says to heart too much (unlike Lily and her reaction to James). But I would like her maybe to gain the tiniest boost in slef confidence when it comes to her appearance. Right now, it seems like she doesn't hink too highly of herself and I personally think that Sirius would only truly notice a girl with at least some self confidence. Just a thought, but I also love the story the way it is. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! and the advise! I\'ll definitely take use your suggestions to mind in future chapters! *hands out cookie* :D
Summary: When Sirius comes to Hogwarts, he's a little more then apprehensive. When Sirius gets Sorted into Gryffindor, he wonders about his Mum's reaction. When Sirius meets his new roommates, he knows that the next seven years will be the best time of his life.
Yeah, its a little rough around the edges, but a good concept. Next time you might add a bit more description and slow down the pace a little. A bunch of things were happening at once without very many pauses. Other then that it was great, your idea was excelent.
Summary: Fifteen year old Emma Lovett hates Regulus Black. He's an arrogant jerk with an ego the size of Asia. Or at least, he was. When Emma starts her fifth year at Hogwarts, Regulus' behavior seems to have changed a bit. She begins to think that Regulus might not be so bad. Of course, no one but her diary ever needs to know what she thinks.
Please update ASAP. I'm really looking forward to reading more and I love the character of Emma and the way she describes her interaction with Regulus. I love the thought of a diary, but would also like it if you included flashbacks or little snippets of her in the moment. Then, you could have her talking about what she would have done differently. But of course you don't have to do this, just a thought. I love the story just the way it is.
Author's Response: YAY! I\'m really glad you like her and the story! I\'m gonna try to update at least once a month, hopefully more. I actually really like that idea. That way, you could see more of Emma\'s transition to her sarcastic self from her shy, scared little girl-ness. I may have to try that! Thanks for the idea!\r\n\r\n~Bella