Welcome to my author page!
I am a teacher, musician, reader, and avid Harry Potter fan. I am originally from the Midwest and now live a bit farther south. I am thrilled to be a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well.
I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love!) I've listed them below with a short description since I know trolling through summaries can be tedious. Thanks for reading!
EDIT: Someday I will categorize my stories by genre. Today is not that day. ;)
Summary: The Mirror of Erised hid in Hogwarts castle for many years. So what happens when four famously unruly boys stumble upon it? Does finding out the truth about themselves make them better? Or bitter?
This is a Marauder one-shot adventure.
I stayed up late last night to read this, because I thought the idea of the Marauders finding the Mirror was just such a great idea, and I really wanted to know what they each saw. I thought you did a very good job with them and their desires. I agree with your last reviewer that putting the point in bold is probably not necessary and only detracts from the narrative. You've written things clear enough and your readers will get it without having to be so obvious about it. :)
I liked Sirius's vision of the four friends. I think he would see that because he's lost his own family. I don't know if he wants to go off and be Aurors with them, since even he recognizes their shortcomings in that area, but seeing them as brothers forever was good - and very sad, knowing what happens. I would only watch that Sirius doesn't act too immature - at times he seemed to pout or sulk a bit too much for a Marauder.
Remus was fantastic. Of course that is what he would see! Poor Remus.
I thought using the Mirror as a bit of a wake-up cal for James was interesting. I can definitely see him burying his feelings for Lily by seventh year to the point where he doesn't even recognize them. I do think, though, that he might be a bit young to be seeing himself getting married. And I think that the Marauder's friendships were just as important to him as to Sirius, so I could see them being part of his vision with Lily, but that's just my personal opinion (and I'm an avid J/L shipper, go figure!)
Peter was great. I was a bit worried because throughout the first three he was a bit cliche - weak, wimpering, not someone you'd think the others would be friends with. Watch out for that, because there must have been something there that they saw, as well as something strong enough to play spy for the Dark Lord. You really nailed his motivations, though, because I do think that he was the lesser of the four, and that his feelings of inferiority probably played into his turning. Ending with his part was exactly the right way to end it, because we know that his vision comes true in a far worse way than any of the others.
Again - such a unique idea for a fic, and very well done! I'm glad I read this, good luck with your other writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! It really helps to get in-depth opinions! As far as the bolding goes, I apologize, lol. It was a friend's suggestion and it seemed like a better idea at the moment. The positives of the idea are fading fast, ha ha. With Sirius, I was trying to capture his sense of adventure with the Auror idea. Sirius doesn't seem like the type who would really think it out and rationalize, he kind of acts on impulses, ha ha. As for the immaturity, it's more that he's playing to get his way than pouting. Reading about Sirius as a teen, he reminds me of a close friend of mine, who acts like this with his close friends. XD Sirius gets better about both things when he gets older, though. Remus is my favorite Marauder, so I'm glad to have done him justice. Very much a J/L shipper! Ha ha. It's possible that he would be too young to consider marriage, but I'm glad you liked it anyway. :) Peter was the hardest. I can't stand Peter and it took a lot not to let that colour my writing too much. I read a fic about the Marauders where Harry dreams that James is narrating a memory of the four and says "Don't turn away when you see him. Yes, he will betray me, but right now, he hasn't and he isn't ever going to." It really helped me to get in a mindset where he's not so much a villan yet, but a nervous young boy with an inferiority complex. I thin that he probably had a good sense of humor and a few good prank ideas that would have made him fit in well with the Marauders, but in the fic he's more thinking to himself, you know? I think he had a very negative self-image, especially after so long with friends like his, and he can't see the good in himself. Though if James had heard Peter's inner monologue, he definitely would have told him he was wrong and tried to make him feel better. Thanks so much for the imput! Helpful comments like this makes me a better writer! X)
Summary: Sometimes, she liked mulling over the possibilities of a change, but would she ever act upon it?
Inspired by Round 4 Brawl: Week 2. Thanks to Kara/Karaley Dargen for a real-time AIM beta job and for all the courage she gives me.
That was fascinating! You know I have no way with minor characters whatsoever, so reading one of your stories that writes them so well is always a treat. Especially when you take a "bad" character like Pansy and give her motivations that are understandable and not all bad. I did feel sort of sorry for her. She brings it on herself, but her feelings about Slytherin and how she wished she didn't have to play those games were particularly sympathy-inducing. I wouldn't want to see her get her hooks into Seamus, but hopefully she'll get something better than Draco. You weren't very nice to him, were you? ;)
Very nice! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Hehehe. I don't imagine Draco as being great in bed during school - he appears too selfish and self-centered. I believe I angered Carole with that part. Khi khi khi. Thanks for reviewing Gina! I always look forward to hearing what you have to say about my fic. :) I'm glad you liked the characterisation. And as for Pansy/Seamus - there is more coming, I'm afraid. D:
It was the worst news a father could receive: his son was marrying his worst enemy's daughter.
But for Draco Malfoy, being in the role of the reasonable parent was in itself a debacle as he tried to make the best of a bad situation. But when circumstances forced him to spend more time than he ever cared to with the most irritating Mudblood on the planet, he constantly questioned his sanity, as well as that of his son.
However, Draco might have come to realise that things change, as well as people. Is Hermione Granger Weasley the mad bint he remembered, or were they both a little different this time around?
This story has been nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Non-Canon Romance.
This story has also been nominated for a 2014 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Humour Story.
I love it! As usual, your Draco is a lovely bit of snark. So fun to read, so natural, some awesome lines. I look forward to seeing what further madness ensues in this story. It's a great idea!
Happy birthday, Elene!
Haha, the madness has just started. :D
Summary: "Do you remember me?" he asked.She did, but she wasn't sure what to feel about a guy who had suddenly reappeared after a decade. But over the next twenty-four hours, her life was going to change, and all because of him. Written as a birthday present for the too a*****e-for-words Carole/Equinox Chick, who has been a lovely friend and a lovely role model...in more ways than one. Here's hoping you have a great time reading this. HAPPY BIRTHDAY! Heartfelt thanks to Kara who I repeatedly harassed on AIM. :D DISCLAIMER: I am definitely not J.K.Rowling. Nominated for a QSQ in the Next Gen Category.
Cuuuuute! It took me a while to figure out who the narrator was, but I've got her now. So what were they doing in Greece together, exactly? Just curious. They are obviously heading back. I hope they don't splinch!
Lovely start, Natalie. I'll review properly nearer the end. Look forward to reading more! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: YAY! So glad you came and read it. :) I hope you like how the whole thing turns out. The title is no misnomer. Lol!
Fun! First of all, loved the Apparating bit. If it were possible, I'm SURE there would be laws against it. That was well done. And second of all, I'm glad you've voiced Lucy's doubts, since it would seem unrealistic to not have them, especially for her character. There seems to be something more to Lorcan going on, I can't wait to see what it is. Of course, now that Lucy has had a bit of ouzo (which I looked up to see if that was your own concoction or not - how do you know so much about Greece?!) things might get even more interesting with him. *eyes warnings* Hee hee - lovely! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Heeheehee-ing at your last line. :D
Lovely, lovely story! Oh, you've brought Lucy to life so well. She developed so dramatically over each chapter, and yet it never really seemed forced or unnatural. You've got such a winner in Lorcan! I LOVE him!! And I am still so impressed with your knowledge of Greece. The butterflies were particularly impressive. :)
Great story, Natalie. Carole is a lucky lady! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: The butterflies! Yes, that I knew because of a Sidney Sheldon novel. Can't remember which one it was. I do think the real Pateloudes mostly has moths, but I needed colours. I'm sooooo happy both Lucy and Lorcan are well-received by you all, because this story, as I keep saying, was written in such a rush. The original idea I had for them was a long, drawn-out drama. But...I think I like this better, and I see an Evil Twin Sequence coming up in the near future, anyway.
It was going to happen eventually: Oliver Wood had to retire. But when the decision was made for him, he allowed himself to be tricked into grooming his replacement. However, coaching proved to be a completely different animal, especially when the untried and unbridled Roxanne Weasley pushed his limits every step of the way.
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Non-Canon Romance.
All right, I read this several days ago and am finally about to leave my 500th review! YAY!
What a great story to mark the milestone. :)
Seriously - you so got the better deal out of that AIM conversation we had. I'm so envious of how you (and Natalie) bring minor characters to life so effortlessly. And then make me believe in a rather random ship so quickly and easily! Guh! Amazing!
First, you developed their relationship through the game and their psuedo-date so very well. And then to bring it crashing down when Oliver had to pull her out - so very you, lol. And SO very dramatic. I could SEE that scene in the locker room happening. I sort of thought there might be some lips crashing together at that point, but was glad there wasn't because the twist with Logan was even better.
The scene in the shower was just so dramatic as well. Damn Oliver for being such a gentleman! And yet, it made for a lovely little self-sacrifice when he quit, which lead to a delicious bit of smut. You really do that so well.
Once again you have this romance with a strong plot. I am envious. And to develop it all so quickly is truly amazing. And to make me believe in this ship - Oliver and Roxanne, with such an age difference! - is yet even better. I'm sort of curious what happens to them, yet this was so good and fun it's okay to not know whether or not they stay together and make lots of little Wood-Weasley Quidditch stars. ;)
Great story, twin! And welcome to The List!!
But you got to write COUGAR FIC!
Anyway, as you know, my imagination can take off with just about anything and paint it at least a LITTLE plausibly. I honestly had no idea how fast I'd fall for this pairing. They're threatening to break into my top five ships. And for a ship that I'm reasonably certain didn't exist a week ago. XD
Heart you, Twin, and I may or may not be swinging by your author page soon. *coughspewcough*
Good start, Jess! Yay for late night AIM conversations! I told Carole you definitely got the better idea out of it, lol. I'll get around to the next chapter soon, I'm littering reviews across my flist this week. Good luck with Chapter 3!
And happy birthday, Carole!
It's taking a different track than I'd expected, but I think it's turning out the better. I'm just glad she doesn't hate it, lol.
I look forward to being done with all this stuff so I can get back to reading for fun. It's been a while, lol. I have quite a list of your stories that I need to review and read carefully as compared to 'perusing'. Heart. :D
ALL HAIL CAROLEDEMORT!!!
Summary: Carrie McKinnon, soon-to-be seventh year Hufflepuff, is not going to let the war get her down. However, it is going to affect her in one way or another – and maybe that's a good thing.
This is for Carole/EquinoxChick, and much less than she deserves. You are an incredible, magnificent person, and I still completely fangirl you. If I ever get close to what you are/have now, just talent-wise and with all the ideas you always have, I'd be happy. I really admire you and what you do a lot, so don't ever change.
Muchas muchas Gracias to Nat/hestiajones for helping me out, event though she should have been in bed.
Aww, that was lovely! It was a great look at Marauder dynamics, as well as house relations. The idea of each house perceiving others as well as itself in certain ways was really well done. And I loved Sirius's reaction to both Carrie's take on his apparent rejection, as well as his reasons for not inviting her into the compartment. There's just so much here - great scene and I hope Sirius stays with her! :)
Author's Response: OOOH I don't think I've ever had a review from you before. How terrifying exciting, I mean, that you read this!
Of course Sirius stays with her, and no one ever dies... I swear! (if only.. but she IS a McKinnon...)
I'm really glad that you liked the character and the scene! Thank you so much for this review! :)
Summary: Professor Dumbledore always referred to it as 'March Madness', that time of year when a certain band of Gryffindors ran amok. But in the Spring of nineteen-seventy-eight, one of the Marauders had other things on his mind.
Perhaps things will finally quieten down.
This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the 2011 Aprils Fools' Day Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 3 (Marauder)
A word about the warnings: The SSP is minor and I'm only using a 'warning' because otherwise I might get angry letters *snort*. The Sexual Situations are evident.
I am not JK Rowling. I'd like to be, but alas she got there first
I loved it! It's so cute, so simple, so casual yet well-knit. Nothing complicated or convoluted, and like so many of your stories, it sounds perfectly canon and so very JKR.
There are some hilarious lines (like the Vanishing cabinet), some great moments (Remus Langlocking Sirius-I love Remus having some edge), some great character insight (JamesJamesJames!!), some great coversations (Dumbledore and McGonagall) and some really enticing smut that I rather wanted to keep going, heh heh.
The fight with Regulus and Barty was brilliant, and the scene in the dormitory was perfect. I loved gentleman James.
But the last line was AWE- sorry-AMAZING. Does it mean a sequel??
Really great story, Carole. I'm rather envious. You always set the bar so high in these challenges. Good luck!!
Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. Oh, I'm not sure about you needing to feel envious. Your James/Lily stories are sublime and really DO set the standard. There's always some twist you add that makes it well worth the read.
I liked the Vanishing cabinet line - took me a while to come up with it, but it made me giggle.
Oh ... sequel ... um, not sure, really.
Thank you, again and again and again ~Carole~
Summary: A poem about the deaths of the Potters.
I like your poem, Meg! It's very visual with the color imagery. Great title. It's also very sad.
My only suggestion would be, if you ever need to reach that 100 word limit for a poetry submission again, maybe you could tell the readers about your inspiration, since I'm curious how this idea came to you and if it was a very visual idea for you.
Author's Response: Um... the idea came to me in English class. I ended up scribbling it down on a sheet of paper in my binder during class. I obviously revised it a bit, but how I got the idea isn't really an interesting story. Most of the poetry I've done so far is very visual; when I write it I'm usually looking at a picture or have a picture in my head. Thank you for the praise and the suggestion. -Meg
Summary: There is a boy in this orphanage, and something is not quite right about him.Written as a birthday present for lily_evans34/Rachel, who is lovely, talented and wonderfully funny. :) I hope you have a great day. Nominated for a QSQ in the Dark/Angsty category. Thanks to Kara and Carole for their help! This story would still be full of holes if it weren't for you two. DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling is not me. :p
Well-written, Natalie! It was indeed quite morbid, but a very vivid and plausible look at Riddle's character. It's scary, too, to think he was so depraved even as a child. I almost shudder to think of the other atrocities he may have committed, especially at Hogwarts. Good job - and a happy, cheerful birthday to Rachel! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: There's something about me and morbid birthday presents. Yours, I am afraid, will be the wildest, most macabre one. But I am going to promise you something: NO SNAMES. :)
Summary: Not all marriages are idyllic - not even for a hero. And however much we want someone to have a happy ending, love sometimes has a way of upsetting the equilibrium.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. To my knowledge all her heroes had the happy-ever-afters they deserved.
I think this is rather tragic. It's just so sad to think this happens to Hannah and Neville. Are they done for good? I don't know anything about tritinas, but I'm assuming three words must repeat? As sad as they are, your three words work together perfectly. I especially like how they can have double meanings.
Very melancholy, but very well done!
Author's Response: Yes, the three words do have to repeat and in a certain order. I rather like it as a form of poetry but it can be tricky getting it to sound unforced. I feel very guilty for writing this, actually because I think Neville deserves happiness ... so perhaps their estrangement only lasted a short while.
Thank you so much for the review. ~Carole~
During the second war, many must leave their homes and run for their lives. What must they feel, forced to hide from a government that hates their very existence?Nominated for Best Poem in the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Awards.
WOW! That was amazing! I love poems with strong rhyme and rhythm more than anything, and this was spot on. The 'Running, running, breath comes ragged, Fear still cuts like razons jagged;' was particularly brilliant. And then the way it changed at the end - guh! Amazing! I don't have the soundtrack, but my guess is the poem fits the music perfectly. Wonderful job! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, Gina. =D I'm a fan of strong rhyme and rhythm as well - probably why I use it so much when I write. I'm glad a fellow rhyme-and-rhythm fan enjoyed this poem. And you should definitely Youtube "Obliviate." It's just such a beautiful song.
Summary: Molly had always wanted to be a Healer. So why did she run away when she had the chance?Many, many thanks to the opaleye and Equinox Chick for their help and inputs! I love Molly Weasley and side-eye people who see her only as a baby-producing machine. If you're one of those people, this might not be the fic for you. DISCLAIMER: No, JKRowling is definitely not me.
That was very sweet! I absolutely believed the entire beginning about Molly becoming a Healer. Her thoughts were very well done, especially about her brothers. The connection to her not wanting to be alone and having a large family is perfect. The only thing I wanted more of was Arthur. Just a bit of set up so he didn't show up out of the blue. Of course that's why they ran away, but I would have liked a bit more from their meeting. That probably wasn't the point of the story, but you write young Molly and Arthur so well it would be lovely!
Author's Response: Ahhh...I never even considered adding much of Arthur because I wanted to focus on Molly. As for the meeting, I planned to make it a bit drawn out but it was going into...er...a territory which might not be appreciated by the presentee. D: I do have an idea in mind, so I might as well write it some day.
Summary: It was only three words. Three tiny words. It should have been the easiest thing in the world. Yet, it wasn’t. It was the hardest thing he had ever done in his life.
I think this is wonderful, I really do. It was lovely to read and I smiled the entire time. If you are not comfortable with this couple, it really doesn't show. I think what is so strong about it is how you wove in several scenes from the book/movie and fleshed out Ron so well. I had forgotten about that book he had, great detail! They are so in character here, it's beautiful: Hermione reacting with ire and irritation, Ron thinking about food and stumbling over his thoughts until something else pops out. Great appearance by Fred (I'm so glad you chose him considering his sad fate later.) Really well done. The end was really sort of heartbreaking, when they drop hands. I felt so bad for Ron. The last three sentences tied it up perfectly. Think you'll write the story when he finally gets those words out? ;)
Really nice story, Chante!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing this story. I'm very flattered that you liked it so well. I don't write Ron or Hermione very often, so I'm glad that you thought I kept them in character. Will I write a sequel to this? No...yes...maybe... I don't know. I have been writing Ron/Hermione more, but I don't know if I could manage something quite like that. But we shall see. Again, thanks for reviewing and I'm really glad you liked it.
Summary: Three brides rise with the sun on their special day, all with different perspectives and feelings about their big day
I can't believe I missed this on the Recents list! It's really lovely. The rhythm is spot on, it flows beautifully. I love the repeating last line, it really connects the "stories" of each of these brides. I have to admit I looked at the reviews to find the answer to who they might be (sorry, I'm lazy, lol) and I think it works really well for each of them.What made you chose those three? I'm just curious. Great poem - you really are a strong poet, even if you don't think so!! *hugs* ~Gina :)
This is written in ballade form, so the repeating last line is sort of the *thing* it's supposed to do. I could have kicked myself for picking the dumbest rhyming word set for the most often repeated one, but I cheated here and there and it sorted itself out... thank Merlin.
I thought of those three because I'm a failed human being. DX I wrote the poem and tried to work out which bride was which by what I had already written. The first was always supposed to be Narcissa and the last one one of the Trio Era brides, showing the tides of change and how certain things weren't an issue anymore. The rest was supreme BS and fudging on my part. Yes, I am really that shoddy, lol.
Heart you, Twin. Thanks for reading!
Summary: Teddy Lupin appears to be surrounded by love and happiness, yet sometimes death and loneliness overshadow everything he does.
That was very sweet yet poignant and sad at the same time. I liked the way you approached it, almost a mix between first and second point of view. Victoire's voice (it was her, right?) came through clearly by the end and was lovely and sincere in her love for Teddy. Teddy's sadness was also very real, and yet you also gave him a bit of hope and light as well.
My favorite part was the part about the Shrieking Shack. Although I wasn't exactly sure why she smacked Teddy's friend, I could still picture her asking about him, running out after him, and finding him in the Shrieking Shack. What a powerful place for him to go and mourn! I really liked that scene and think it would make another nice one-shot. Were they together before then, or was that perhaps when Teddy realized it as well?
Lovely story for Teddy, Katrina! I enjoyed reading it. :)
Author's Response: Hi Gina, I'm so honoured that you (as in one of my favourite authors on Mugglenet) took the time to review one of my fics, and that you enjoyed it too! The perspective really came from the song, and I thought it would be fun to try out something new. (Yes it was Victoire's voice.) This is the first story I've written about Teddy, but he is a character I've always been drawn to... in many ways, he's like Harry - having to grow up without his parents and never really understanding what they died for. And I'm sure he would see that connection to Harry, and think he shouldn't complain because at least he doesn't have to put up with the Dursley's and there are heaps of people who love him. I'm glad you liked the part in the Shrieking Shack - Victoire slapped Teddy's friend because she was angry that he had just left Teddy, and she feels that Teddy shouldn't have to be alone. It is an overreaction, but I sort of wanted to show how much she feels for him... plus she has a bit of a temper. I think the Shrieking Shack would be somewhere that Teddy somehow feels closer to his parents, or where he feels like he can be alone with them. I hadn't thought about writing another one-shot about that scene, but now you've put the idea in my head, I might... In my mind, that was when Teddy realised it as well - as in, they had probably both had feelings but not really thought about them much and it came together in that scene. Thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it! ~Katrina
I read your response and had to say - good point about Teddy seeing the similarities between him and Harry, and then trying not to complain because his upbringing was so much better. And yet, he has every right to feel pain and sadness!
I'm curious - did he learn about the Shrieking Shack from Harry? Do you think Harry told him everything about the Marauders, ie the Animagus bit. Just curious. :)
"I hadn't thought about writing another one-shot about that scene, but now you've put the idea in my head, I might... In my mind, that was when Teddy realised it as well - as in, they had probably both had feelings but not really thought about them much and it came together in that scene."
Ooooh, that sounds great, the idea that this is when Teddy realizes as well. You've set it up so nicely here, please do write it! I've read a few Teddy/Victoire things but a scene like that would just be so romantic and emotional. Heck, I could see a short chaptered fic! ;) I like how down-to-earth your Victoire seems, since I often read her as a copy of Fleur. And I really liked your vulnerable Teddy. I want him to be happy now. Good luck if you continue with them!!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing again! I think Harry would have told Teddy as much as he knew about Remus and Tonks (and thus the Marauders, too) because in his own childhood he constantly wanted to know more about his parents (for example in HBP, when he hoped that the prince was his father). Another reason is that Harry wouldn't want Teddy to have misconceptions (like in OotP, when Harry saw what his father was like as a teenager, and that his mother seemed to hate him, it really bothered him, because he didn't know the full story), so I imagine that Harry would have told Teddy the good and the bad (although probably mostly the good) of his parents. Hmm... maybe I'll write another story from Teddy's point of view. I'm not that good at writing longer stories, though, so it'll probably just be a one-shot. The Fleur we see in canon is I think how she presents herself to protect herself, because underneath she's just as vulnerable as everyone else. Obviously Bill saw more to her than the surface, and I think we see a bit of that at the end of HBP and in DH as well, particularly when the trio are at Shell Cottage. I think Victoire would still be more down-to-earth than her mother, though, because she has been brought up in the Weasley clan, and while she may have a French name, she's still a Weasley. Plus she's the oldest Weasley, which can't have been easy, because when she got to Hogwarts everyone would have known her name and had certain expectations, plus I imagine it would be hard to be the oldest of the next generation... she probably feels like being a Weasley defines her, rather than letting it just be a part of her. Anyway... I have to go now, thanks for reviewing again!! ~Katrina
Summary: It’s April Fools’ Day. Lily Evans wants nothing more than to escape, but she's caught off guard by someone she'd prefer to forget.
This is PoeticallyIrritating of Ravenclaw writing for the 2011 Aprils Fools' Day Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 3(A).
You've done a nice job with a difficult subject: Lily and Snape. I refer to it as difficult because it's just so hard to know how much she felt for him romantically based on canon, and because he's such a challenging character to like and imagine being with someone like Lily. I thought you did a good job with her character, particularly with the paragraph where Lily realizes nothing matters except what side you are on. I absolutely agree with this and just cannot see her staying with a man who chose the side that wants her dead. Good insight into her thoughts there. And as much as I hate to admit it, being a non-fan of Snape ;), she probably would have missed their friendship once it was over, given he was her first magical friend.
As for Snape,I have to be honest and admit I found him just a bit too weak and waffling here. He just mumbled too much, and while he might have done so as a teenager, he strikes me as such an articulate, introspective adult that I think his dialogue even as a student here could have been a bit more sharp. I could even see him being angry about what's happened to their friendship.
The hints of James/Lily were nice and added depth to something we know happens. The Marauder banter at the end was also well done.
This was a nice look at Lily in a pensive moment - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you liked my Lily. ;) I'll try to work on Snape, though I don't know if I'll ever be using him at this age again. What you're saying makes a lot of sense--I wish I had thought of these things before submitting...