Hi Natalie! What a neat idea, to explore all the Next-Generation kids this way. It will be interesting to see how their perceptions of each other play out. For example, Lucy gives her opinion of all her cousins, so it will be fun to see if their stories line up with that perception. Fun idea: you could take it anywhere. Are you planning on using the same day for all of them?

I already love Albus. Just the idea of him being kind to the cousin who doesn't fit in melts my heart. You mentioned something about Lucy not being very likable on LS, but I think it's more than she remains fairly enigmatic. She's not unlikable. She's unique. There are several things she says or does that make me go, Why? Now, it's probably not the scope of this piece to answer that question every time, but I would like a bit more depth to answer some of them.

I saw the kiss conversation and have to admit I did find it confusing as to whether she really did kiss him or not It could be made a little clearer that she is imagining it. Plus, I might have liked the details on her relationship/feelings with Albus to come before that to make it less out of the blue.

I LOVED the bits on Dominque and really hope you follow up on that in other chapters. And the idea of Hugo following Uncle Charlie into dragonry is great too!

Nice start, Natalie! Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Yes! I’m planning for everything to happen on the same day. :D I’ve already finished Hugo, but I’m debating if I should post him later on, and do Fred’s first.

You know, I quite like this! I wrote a James/Sirius story myself back in October (did not post it) and there is something about it that really intrigues me. I find it very believable and even a bit romantic. But I get ahead of myself. :)

First of all, I loved the beginning. You painted a very dark and dramatic picture of the night Sirius runs away. His desperation and defeat is palpatable. You added an interesting twist with Sirius being worried about James's reaction about the Whomping Willow incident. At least, I assume that is what you are referring to. I love stories that delve into that, because it had to have been traumatic for the Marauders. I thought it added another sad layer to his situation. I do wonder about the timeline though: in DH, Lily is still speaking to Snape about the Whomping Willow incident, and the incident in Snape's Worst Memory appears to happen later. James and Sirius don't seem angry at each other in Snape's Worst memory, which is at O.W.L.s, so it seems odd that now over the summer James is mad at Sirius about the Whomping Willow incident.

That said, I'm perfectly happy accepting this how it is because I like how you used its effect on Sirius. It always seemed odd to me anyway that something so deadly would happen at the Whomping Willow, and then James and Sirius go and pick on Snape afterward at the lake. So I'm curious to hear your take on the timeline. :)

I love that James just instinctively seemed to know something had happened and took Sirius in. I thought their talk was great - really, I'm impressed to read dialogue in second person! And their kiss was well done. I didn't give Lily a second though. ;)

The second person narrative - come on, I'd be remiss if I didn't mention it, right? - really grabbed me. I really liked reading it this way and thought you did a great job with it.

The last line was brilliant. This is a great look at Sirius running away as well as a lovely James/Sirius moment - nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I agree, James/Sirius is very intriguing! er, honestly, with regards to the timeline, I didn't remember the order of events correctly. >.> I don't have a copy of DH available atm and it didn't occur to me that I was wrong and I wasn't really thinking that much about it when I was writing . . . so, yeah. I'm glad you liked the second person aspect! I love writing in second person. I think it's really hard to find a way to tell a story so that it needs to be in second person and I love the challenge, but I know some people don't particularly like to read second person. Thank you so much for this review! It's got me grinning like a mad woman. :D <3Mere

Hey Twin. I'm making my way through the Recents list tonight and quite liked your piece. You chose a really interesting moment to touch on, and I think you hit on exactly the right thing: that Draco finally started to question right and wrong that night on the Tower. What's interesting is that Harry--and as we know from canon, the Wizengamot--decided that Draco should not be punished for what he did in order to continue the change that began that night. That's a fascinating way to look at the justice system. I don't think I would have voted for Draco if I was on the Wizengamot. Consequences are consequences. They should have all gone to prison. I liked that your broke Draco a little--arrogant little twit--and kept Harry's edge. I wouldn't want Harry to go all soft in this moment, because like he pointed out, Draco was NOT a good person. He did loads of bad stuff besides join the Dark Lord.

Anyway - that's rambly. Like I said, I think you did a very good job with this moment. My only concrit would be that at times it felt a bit unfocused. It seemed to float between an omniscient point of view to being more focused on Draco at the beginning and Harry at the end. I would only suggest sticking to one point of view to make it more effective.

All right, time to keep reading and writing. And an unofficial welcome to the prolific list! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

I'm so not surprised that it felt unfocused, considering the time of day itw as when I wrote it (i.e. 2am). I took an old drabble and expanded it, which was originally omnisient, which is probably how that happened. I would go back and re-read it, but I cba at the moment, lol.

I really wanted Harry to get his measure of revenge on Draco, because we KNOW that he has it in him to be just as petty, but he's disguising it as doing something nice. It's almost like the boardroom scene in teh movie Liar, Liar where Jim Carrey's character insults his boss very crassly and they all laughed. Well, I laughed. Oh, I laughed ebilly.

Lovely visit, Twin, and great review!

~Jessssssss

Lia, I read this ages ago on my iPod and kept meaning to come back and review. Sorry about that! This was such a fun read. It was so incredibly original, from the story to the format. I loved Draco in this more than anything, and Theo was great as well. You really bring Ginny to life well. I guess I don't have as strong an image of her adult self in my head to really say whether she is in character or not, but I like the spunk you always give her.
I particularly liked the many twists in this last chapter, from Ginny wandering out to the lake to the source of the dragonpox to her realizing perhaps that kiss was real after all. That last one was the best, and really set up the last scene as they snogged away. Very sweet.
Great story, Lia! I really enjoyed it!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh, Gina, no need to apologise, you sweetheart. ^_~ I'm really happy that you enjoyed both the format and the storyline of this little fic of mine. Writing double narratives that break the fourth wall can really be a hit or miss in most cases. Luckily, mine was, for the most part, a hit. ^_~ Draco was especially fun to write in this - as I tend to focus on him more than anyone usually - because I got to show his more human side while keeping him "Draco". He doesn't fall in love with Ginny or vice versa, which is why this wasn't in the Draco/Ginny section. Hehe. I did, however, hint at the possibility of a kiss. I'm just a little scamp, and a closet romantic at heart, I guess. Needless to say, I'm so very glad that you read and reviewed this, as your reviews always bring a goofy smile to my face. Thank you, Gina. ^_^ ~Lia

This is wonderful! I hope you get more reviews! It's devilishly clever, for one, and so well written. There are so many different things going on - the bit with the Author, the story at Hogwarts, Draco's tale, Ginny's Tale, THEO - that it could be overwhelming, but it's woven together so well. As always, your Draco/Ginny dialogue is brilliant fun to read.
I like this last bit at the end that hints at the prompt setup. What an original way to attack it. Looking forward to more!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Aww, thank you, Gina. ^^ I had a lot of fun time writing this. Needless to say, I relate quite a lot with Author - don't we all? :P And Theo... yeah, I had to include Theo 'cause he's my new favourite character. ^_^