Penname: Gmariam [Contact]
Real name: Gina
Member Since: 05/04/06
Status: Member
Welcome to my author page!

I am a teacher, musician, reader, and avid Harry Potter fan. I am originally from the Midwest and now live a bit farther south. I am thrilled to be a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well.

I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love!) I've listed them below with a short description since I know trolling through summaries can be tedious. Thanks for reading!

EDIT: Someday I will categorize my stories by genre. Today is not that day. ;)
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Of Weasleys and Malfoys by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Four moments from their life that brought them together.

This is Dinny's Christmas present for the 2010 Gryffindor Swap. And this is not what J.K.Rowling has been working on, no.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 3824 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
12/25/10 Updated: 12/27/10

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 12/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I like your story, Natalie! In particular, I like your characterization of both Rose and Scorpius, but especially Scorpius: you've made them your own in small, subtle ways, like their unspoken academic competition or his smoking.

The other thing I really liked was the last scene when they finally come together. I really liked how hesitant they were, and when they admitted their feelings it was just something soft and simple - two friends finally coming together. As always with your writing, I believed it completely.

My only concrit would be that I wanted a bit more from each scene, to really build up to the end. But wanting more is a good thing, isn't it? :)

Nice job, Natalie! I will try to read your other new stories soon!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Gina!

I always look forward to your reviews. I don’t think I’ve ever told you that. :)

This is the story I was panicking about in my AIM statuses. I knew it wasn’t enough, whatever I’d written – something was missing, wasn’t it? Although the bare essentials were there, it definitely needed a bit of expansion, a bit of elaboration. But time constraint, exhaustion, and panic got to me; I really couldn’t tell where I should add, or even what I should add in the one-shot. I still feel this idea could have been executed more properly as a chaptered fic.

I am, however, super glad that my characterisation of Scorpius has been appreciated. I think my Rose was under-developed compared to him. It’s something I need to work on if I ever think of doing something about this pairing, and about this version of their story (because I’ve done at least three versions till date.)

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gina. I can’t wait to read what you and Jess have been publishing. :D



Glass Ginny by WeasleyMom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 20]

Summary: Ginny Weasley has a strong spirit, and is not given to weepy emotional displays. But when her friend is taken from the Hogwarts Express during her sixth year, her fears begin to rumble and rage... at least for a moment.

This is WeasleyMom of Hufflepuff writing for the final of the Hogwarts Missing Moments class.

I am delighted that this fic has been added to the SBBC Hall of Fame on the Beta Boards. Thanks to my fellow SBBC-ers!

What? This story won the 2011 QSQ Award in the category Best General Story! Thanks so much!

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1625 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
12/25/10 Updated: 01/01/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/01/11 Title: Chapter 1: Glass Ginny

Aw, that was very sad! First, I loved Neville's support here.It shows what a strong character he became in DH. And it immediately made me wonder if anything else might have happened to them during this time. ;) I also really liked McGonagall's appearance. But I really thought that Ginny's bottled-up fear was brought out nicely...and then put away very characteristically. The memory of Ron really brought it home for her, which was sweet and even more heartbreaking. I never really thought about how hard this time must have been for the DA at Hogwarts, and now I do. Lovely job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it Gina. I've struggled a bit with this one, and am not sure I'm still entirely pleased. But it's all right. I like thinking of Ginny really losing it at some point. I dont' care how tough she is, everyone breaks at some point, and I wanted to imagine that it was NOT technically related to Harry. I think sometimes the thing that breaks the camel's back is not what you expect it to be... hence, Luna being the instigator. I adore Neville. I have wondered about that relationship, too, but I imagine them both being too focused (particularly Neville) on the DA. Hmmm.... ;) McGonagal's appearance and that of a Slytherin were requirements for the assignment. I'm glad they didn't feel too forced. Thanks as always for reading and taking the time to review, Gina. I always appreciate your thoughts!


Dark Requiem by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]


The irony does not escape Severus Snape as he seeks to gain the favour of the Dark Lord on, of all nights, Christmas. The spectres of days dead and gone spur him on to complete his mission, but can the fond memories stop him from committing an unspeakable act?


This story has been nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Marauder Era Story.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 3423 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
12/25/10 Updated: 12/25/10

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow, Jess - you wrote Snape! In first person! Present tense! And you really nailed it, too. :)

Using first person and present tense really conveyed his character well, and I couldn't imagine it any other way. You totally captured his darkness and the obsessive side of him that must have been present to have driven him all those years. Plus you touched on the reasons he joined Voldemort. I find it interesting that you don't see Snape as waffling in his beliefs for Lily - meaning, he didn't compromise his inner self in order to win her. In fact, it was very interesting to see him thinking that she would approve and forgive him, since she clearly would not. It shows a rather delusional side of him that I would suspect a lot of Voldemort's followers shared.

I agree that it's much more interesting for Lily's parents to have died in a suspicious way. I don't know if I buy that Snape was the one who did it, and with enthusiasm. I personally think a more canon Snape would have been far more reluctant and remorseful. However, you justify your Snape's actions perfectly - it's something he has to do, it doesn't bother him, and since LIly will forgive him, it's no big deal. Fascinating, really, because I wonder what your Denial!Snape would be like in the books.

Great use of Occlumency/Legilimency, and I really liked Voldemort here. It's a wonderfully dark and twisted story, Jess. Nice job and good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Yay to a visit from Twin!

This story was strangely easy for me to contemplate. Whether that makes me slightly screwed up or not remains to be seen, but I didn't feel at all incongruous with its relative darkness and obsessive undertones. I suppose I just wanted to pick teh character that less people would write, since J/L fluff would probably dominate this particular catEgory. :D

Heart always,


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I suppose I just wanted to pick teh character that less people would write, since J/L fluff would probably dominate this particular catEgory.

Nice spelling. ;)
And what's wrong with J/L fluff?!?!! You do realize I wrote a J/L fluff for this very same challenge, do you not? Are you poking fun at me? Hm? Because that sort of makes me want to torture my favorite pairing a bit, you know. ;)
I jest. I'm incapable of that, I think.
As to being able to write something like this easily - I don't think it means you are dark or obsessive or crushing on Snape. After all, I've written a few darker pieces, and I'm nothing like 'Shattered' or 'Blood on my Hands.' And I've written a lot of fluff but I am certainly not a romantic sop. I think it means that first of all, JKR developed Snape enough for you to be able to extrapolate something like this. And it means you are a damn fine writer who can put herself into a separate frame of mind and just go there. And when I write something easily, it means the story was already out there and I merely discovered and transcribed it.
This is why I wish we could respond to review responses. Ah well. I will say again this was very cool because it's not a very sympathetic Snape. In fact, it makes him even more of an enigma, to think he could do this while still doing all that he does for Harry. Fascinating character. Have you ever thought of shipping him with Harry or Hermione?
Just kidding. Don't.
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

I think the only way I could write a sympathetic Snape is if it was an early childhood, pre-Hogwarts story. But otherwise, by this point in his life, he's pretty much the sum of his influences. He simply wasn't capable of understanding why Lily turned on him, since he had no basis of comparison for a healthy relationship. That makes me think that his mind couldn't rationalise family dynamics and their inherent value to someone like Lily, so hence he thinks that she would actually understand the idea that he was compelled to kill her parents. Also, he didn't care about them in the first place outside of their deaths' effect on Lily. He just doesn't, you know... get it, lol.


Merry Christmas, James by Sapphire at Dawn
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: James Potter's 'aquaintance' with Lily Evans has been somewhat turbulent, but as things get a little smoother between the pair during their seventh year, James looks back at their beginnings.

This is for the Gryffindor Christmas Craziness swap. Merry Christmas, Andi!

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 2514 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
12/28/10 Updated: 01/08/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I, for one, really appreciate the idea that James wasn't in love with Lily from first year. I especially liked how your James gradually realized he liked her. That seems far more realistic. I also liked how the others teased him when they found out who he had a crush on, especially Peter. And lovely little kiss at the end!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Gina! I'm really glad you liked it. Sarah x


How He Became Their Hero by keara96
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A free-verse poem depicting the final battle of the Last Battle.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 129 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/05/11 Updated: 01/06/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: How He Became Their Hero

I like this! I like the structure and repetition you've used, and it builds to a nice ending. I do, however, wonder if using Voldemort's name at the end might take away from the poem centering on Harry as the hero, since that's the last thing the reader is left with. Just something to think about. :) Nice job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! You made a really good point about the use of Voldemort's name. I wanted a powerful ending, but while Voldemort plays a vital role in the poem, it is supposed to be mainly about Harry. Hmmm...I will have to think about that, and maybe mess around with the poem a bit. Thanks much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your feedback:)


Three by the opaleye
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: They move in a circle. She goes one way, he the other. It is a punishment neither deserves nor wants, and yet she holds the power to stop it.

Nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best Non-Canon Romance.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1214 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/06/11 Updated: 01/11/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/16/11 Title: Chapter 1: Three.

Ah Julia - I've already given you many of my thoughts about your story, but I did want to come by and publicly tell you how much I liked your story and enjoyed working with you and your writing. Forgive me if I repeat myself, but it's just so amazingly evocative. It's hard to even pinpoint what and how, but from your word choice to your sentence structure, your style is all your own and its really beautiful to read.
I admitted I knew nothing about the GG pairing, but as far as I'm concerned, this works on its own. Draco is done particularly well. And like many of your other fics, it leaves the reader wanting to know more about these characters you've developed as your own. What happened to the people in that photograph? How did Draco and Hermione first hook up? And of course - what happens next?? That's one thing you do so well, is give the reader just enough to want more.
Really wonderful story, Julia! I hope you get more reviews. Thanks for allowing me to work with you on it!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Awww Gina, thank you so much! For your review, your patience, and everything else! It was such a pleasure to work with you :)


Eyes That Know Me by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Having just been dumped by his girlfriend, Hugo Weasley is not in the mood for his cousin's party, even when James assures him that he'll soon snap up a 'wicked-looking witch'. And with Lily hell-bent on fixing him up with the boring Eliza Finch-Fletchley, the evening looks to be taking a sharp turn for the worse.

But on the other side of the room, one guest is watching him closely. Will Hugo be able to resist?

The Sexual situations are mild and the strong profanity is fleeting (but necessary) hence the rating.

This story was originally written for a Musical drabble exchange in the SBBC. The song that inspired me was 'Falling Slowly' by Glen Hansard. Thanks must go to Lia (Liandrin) for introducing me to the song, Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) for beta'ing the original drabble, and Elene (CoolCatElly) for beta'ing the extended version.

Finally, thank you Natalie (hestiajones) for introducing me to the whole concept of Scugo.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling or Glen Hansard. I just nick bits of their work and mould it into something else.

Nomintated for a 2011 QSQ in the Best Same Sex Category. Thank you.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 1794 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/06/11 Updated: 01/06/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: Eyes That Know Me

Oh, I really loved the snowball fight. That was well played. Once again, you write the next generation so effortlessly I am envious. And between you and Natalie, I rather like Hugo/Scorpius. It's a nice twist on what Ron tells Rose at the end of DH. And I like how Gryffindor bravery doesn't always extend to relationships - I wrote the same idea into a J/L fic (what else?) because I think it's an interesting way to see Gryffindor. Two questions: who was Rose's ex, and what does Hugo do?
I liked it! Do you have more stories? Keep writing! (haha, don't you love it when reviews ask/say that?)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh, hmm, I can't think of anything else about Scugo at the moment and I have to say I haven't really thought about Hugo's career. I can't see him at the joke shop - well not in this incarnation - so maybe he works at the Ministry. I like the Gryff bravery thing when applied to relationships because we don;'t see them being that brave, do we? It took Hermione seven years to kiss Ron, after all, and they were rubbish at asking girls to the Ball. Rose's ex is just some random Ravenclaw - probably a prefect. In High she's with a Hufflepuff called Benedict MacMillan - I like him. This isn't compliant though. Thank you for the review ~Carole~


The Run of the Mill by kehribar
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: During their third year at Hogwarts, Harry and his friends came to know Remus Lupin as a sickly, poor man; a wonderful Defense Against the Dark Arts professor with a sense of humour; a former friend of James Potter; a werewolf, and a redeemed friend of the infamous Sirius Black.

He was a man that everyone had been sad to see leave.

What was this man up to before coming to teach at Hogwarts? How had he become such a good teacher? Why was he looking ill at health all the time? Had he been all alone in life since that fateful night on 1981?

This is his story, beginning six months prior to his coming to Hogwarts, and following him as he strains to make ends meet.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 2639 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
01/07/11 Updated: 01/07/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I think this is a lovely start! You touched on so many things that should be touched on when exploring Lupin's life, from his job issues to his lycanthropy to the loss of his friends. I notice there was no mention of Peter and am curious how your Lupin feels about that.

I really liked him using the name John for some reason. Such a nice detail.

While I noticed an occasional awkward turn of phrase - for example: "would not ever be washed away" might be "would never be washed away" - it's really a matter of preference and I thought your writing was very smooth and natural and easy to read.

I think you did a wonderful job with Lupin and have already, in one short chapter, set up a good cliffhanger! I look forward to more, so good luck as you continue!
~Gina :)


Sing a Song of Mischief by clabbert2101
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A fun little poem about the day Fred and George "graduated" from Hogwarts. Inspired by "Sing a Song of Sixpence".

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 103 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/08/11 Updated: 01/10/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Throw in a Little Fun...

Very cute! You picked the right little song to set for the twins. 'Mischief' is the perfect word for them as well. I would have loved more verses! Nice job! ~Gina :)


In Silence by hogwartsbookworm
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A tribute to Harry and Hermione's friendship.

Nominated for the 2011 Best Poetry QSQ! Thanks, Gina/Gmariam!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 147 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/09/11 Updated: 01/10/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Silence

Oooh, I like this! What a lovely look at Harry/Hermione's relationship. I love poems that use repetition like this, and the 'in silence' was a great phrase to use. And the way it changed at the end was a subtle, nice touch.

The rhyme and rhythm was well done. My only issue was with the second to last stanza, where bond/strong/Ron don't exactly rhyme, and the rhythm is off a bit as well as I read it. Really, you probably could leave it out and not even mention Ron's name, since we know that's what's going on and sometimes leaving it unsaid makes it more powerful. But, I like how the stanza talks about their bond and what they do for each other. Any awkwardness of that one part doesn't take away from the overall feel and flow of the poem. I thought it really captured Harry and Hermione's relationship in a wonderful way. Really nice job!

~Gina :)

Author's Response: I didn't like the bond/strong/Ron thing as much as the other lines either, but... I didn't know what else to do with it. =/

Thanks for the great review, Gina!


Mirrors by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: The war changed a lot of people, and he was one of them. What he didn't know was that she was going to bring him back on Christmas Eve.

Thanks to Carole for reading this over, and to Cinderella Angelina for her prompt for the Badgery Secret Santa swap. Thanks also to Lea for the perfume.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 4268 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/11/11 Updated: 01/14/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/16/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I loved it! Wonderful story, Natalie. I am once again in awe of your ability to tell the minor characters' stories. Mandy Brocklehurst? Never heard of her, and now I love her. And what a beautiful job you've done of humanizing Ernie. He was a bit of a prat in the books, but he's so damaged here one can't help but feel sympathy for him.
The dialogue was great, and their lovemaking as a form of healing was perfectly done. But my favorite part? The mirror. Not only its wisecracks, but how you started and ended with it, and took us on a journey in between. Really well structured.
Fabulous story, dear. *hugs* ~Gina :)

Author's Response: You remember how difficult I found the prompt at first, don’t you? Ernie…is such a perfect picture of ‘unromantic’ that I had to dedicate a few angry AIM statuses to him. SO – I am relieved and happy to know you liked how I wrote him here. You’re one of those people whose opinion I value because you never shy away from criticism. : ) The mirror was my favourite part, too!

Thanks for reading and reviewing. <333



Harmony by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A poem for Harry/Hermione.

Thanks to Jess for encouraging me to publish this.

I wrote this, not J.K.Rowling; she doesn't ship Harmony. :P

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 100 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/11/11 Updated: 01/16/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/16/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Lovely poem! I love the structure of this poem, Natalie. And the language is very beautiful, just flowing off the tongue with easy simplicity. The one word I didn't understand was the 'But' toward the end. It seems like it should be contrasting something, only I don't see the contrast, if that makes sense. Really, though, that's just a nitpick from a clueless free-verse reader, because I still love it! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ahhh...The 'but' part. All I can say in my defence is that I took my poetic license to create a contrast where it wasn't really needed. :P

Seriously, though - you are right. This contrast wasn't necessary per se, but I added it because it left a strong emphasis on the final argument. The previous lines talk of things which exist but cannot be seen - "hidden recess", "absent trysts", "communions that can never be tangible", etc. In a sense, that almost negates the very existence of their love. So, the "but" in the final line is an emphatic response to that negation.

Happy you liked my poem, Gin gin! :) And thanks for being such an amazing reviewer.

And I apologise for this uber-late reply.



Learning to Fly by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Severus Snape fell off his broom the first time he tried to fly. He had no natural talent, not like the loathsome Potter, and couldn't really see the point at all in Quidditch.

But then he saw Lily watching a certain Chaser play and suddenly flying becomes very important.

I am not JK Rowling and I know nothing about flying on a broomstick. This is all made up.

Thank you Natalie (thelastolympian) for beta'ing this story in its original form a whole year ago.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1591 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/15/11 Updated: 01/15/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: Learning to Fly

Aww, isn't that last line sad? Because we know what happened after O.W.L.s, and he never got the chance to show her.
Very nice look into Snape's teenage character, Carole! It's all so perfectly balanced - his relationship with Lily, her relationship with James, Snape's drive and ambition. I really liked how he internalized flying - it wasn't just about beating Potter or showing Lily, but he grew to like it. I could see that. He obviously appreciated the journey of hard work, which seems very in character for a potions professor.
Very nice!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. Yes, I thought the last line was sad too - poor Snivellus. I did want to make the story more than just his obsession with Lily because I think that's overplayed and he was far more than just that. Glad you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~


Enslaved by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A poem about Draco Malfoy and his steady downward path to Death Eater-dom.

Caught on the slide, he can't help remembering the words of Professor Dumbledore.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, Dylan Thomas or Sylvia Plath. But I'd like their talent.

I'd also like Julia's (theopaleye) talent with words. She is a poet extraordinaire who always sets us incredibly tough challenges on the boards for Poetry, Anyone?

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 131 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/22/11 Updated: 01/22/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/22/11 Title: Chapter 1: Enslaved

This is very cool! I had not idea what a villanelle was but it's fascinating. Your two repeating lines are very powerful, most especially in the final stanza. You sure are crushing on Draco. ;) What was neat about this was how his relationship with Dumbledore was contrasted with his relationship to Voldemort. Almost makes me feel bad for him. ;) Lovely job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. I have to admit that I found this very hard and this was about the sixth attempt. I do seem to be crushing on Mr Malfoy at the moment, but originally I started writing about Ron and being attacked by the brains. Draco just lends himself to dark poetry. Thanks again ~Carole~


Close Your Eyes by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: Hermione and Lavender weren't particular friends. It was true they shared a dormitory, but for much of their school time they lived parallel and separate lives. Then Lavender helped Hermione get ready for the Yule Ball and that set off a chain of events that left both girls confused.

This story was inspired by a suggestion from Gina (Gmariam) and a drabble written for Natalie (hestiajones). This story is in no way 'caron -compliant' with Lavender, blue - a Gryffindor true.

Thank you Natalie for beta'ing this story.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, her lawyers agree, so don't confuse us. Lawyers for Miss Brown and Miss Granger were unavailable for comment.

Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 6598 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
01/27/11 Updated: 01/27/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/27/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Carole! I once again can't believe you took this pairing of all the suggestions we gave you. It's really fascinating, though, so I'm glad you did. Well done and super original.

I think, though, that there is a bit too much dialogue at the beginning.

Haha! Just kidding! ;)

Actually, I really liked the beginning. Starting it as a fun makeup session seemed so age-appropriate and was a perfect set-up for their accidental kiss. You know I love dialogue. :)

One thing that surprised me was that I was sort of rooting for . . . Seamus. You make him such a decent, likable guy. I felt sort of bad that Lavender wasn't completely into him. Nice job with him.

Hermione was well done also, especially after events at the MoM. I really liked that you used Lavender's point of view, though. That was the right choice, as opposed to Hermione. Great job with Lavender.

Here is what I found so fascinating: the whole set-up for the end. The second kiss, the summer writing, the rejection. And then the last line: "You wouldn't want another witch snapping him up." OH! Brutal! I mean - what an awesome twist on Ron/Lavender - it was all revenge on Hermione! That was very, very cool, and perfectly done. Great job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Mmm, I felt sorry for Seamus, but it did spark off a whole new idea about him ... hee hee. Gina, I'm glad you enjoyed the story and the random pairing, and I hope you can understand how essential the dialogue is to this story. I thought about using Hermione's POV for some parts, but it didn;t seem to work as well as Lavender's probably because I can't write Hermione very well. Thanks for reading and reviewing ~Carole~


One Day in the Life Of by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Happy endings? What are happy endings? They saved the world for the future, and the kids are here. Life, meanwhile, just goes on.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. I just wish she would hurry up and publish The Scottish Book.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 3928 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
02/04/11 Updated: 02/26/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 02/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: Lucy

Hi Natalie! What a neat idea, to explore all the Next-Generation kids this way. It will be interesting to see how their perceptions of each other play out. For example, Lucy gives her opinion of all her cousins, so it will be fun to see if their stories line up with that perception. Fun idea: you could take it anywhere. Are you planning on using the same day for all of them?

I already love Albus. Just the idea of him being kind to the cousin who doesn't fit in melts my heart. You mentioned something about Lucy not being very likable on LS, but I think it's more than she remains fairly enigmatic. She's not unlikable. She's unique. There are several things she says or does that make me go, Why? Now, it's probably not the scope of this piece to answer that question every time, but I would like a bit more depth to answer some of them.

I saw the kiss conversation and have to admit I did find it confusing as to whether she really did kiss him or not It could be made a little clearer that she is imagining it. Plus, I might have liked the details on her relationship/feelings with Albus to come before that to make it less out of the blue.

I LOVED the bits on Dominque and really hope you follow up on that in other chapters. And the idea of Hugo following Uncle Charlie into dragonry is great too!

Nice start, Natalie! Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Yes! I’m planning for everything to happen on the same day. :D I’ve already finished Hugo, but I’m debating if I should post him later on, and do Fred’s first.

About Lucy. This actually started as a long one-shot on her character, but then as I was writing her, I felt like I had to tell what the others were doing. Their stories popped up in my head and I thought this would be a great way to introduce my personal vision of the Next-Gen kids. I know I’ll be writing other one-shots which would be off-shoots of this. Anyway, I’m planning to develop more of Lucy through the other characters’ POV, so I hope you’ll stick around to read more of this. And oh! Dominique will definitely show up. :) Her story is one of the things which will remain a constant throughout the fic. Hugo, however, isn’t following Uncle Charlie’s footsteps. Hee hee. He is…I suppose you’ll find out soon enough.

Did you read this after I’d edited that part surrounding this kiss? I added a few more lines to make it clearer. I’m not sure if I should make it more obvious than it is right now, though. : ( I want to keep Lucy’s POV sort of distinct. She imagines a lot of things; she doesn’t tell us straightaway when Albus first enters her consciousness about her attraction towards him. In her heart, she knows the Albus image she has made up is just that – made up. But then, she’s a human being, and as much as she wants not to dwell on this, it comes up later on when she’s alone with him. She wants it, and it happens, if only as an illusion.

This response is getting too long. Lol. Thanks for the lovely review, Gina, and for the good wishes, too. I hope I get to finish this quickly before I run out of steam again. D:


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 02/26/11 Title: Chapter 2: Hugo

I like it! What I really like is how this chapter also nods back to your other fics. I can guess who Hugo is seeing, and no, I don't think Hermione is prepared. ;)

I thought you handled Hugo's talk well. Of course Hermione would be accepting, she just seems like that sort of person. You keep referring to how Fleur reacted and how Dominique left, so I hope you write more of that (not necessarily this story, of course, but sometime.)

I did notice one technical thing: a few times you used the word 'got' and it seemed a bit awkward. For example, "Today, I really got to talk to her." I think "Today, I really NEED to talk to her." might sound better. Also, "I should have just done this before she got a chance to speak." I hear "I should have just done this before she HAD a chance to speak." But then, I still use 'gotten' sometimes and I know that drives Carole nuts. ;)

Well done, Natalie. Keep up with this one! Who's next??
~Gina :)

Author's Response: *saunters in late ungracefully*

About the technical things, I kept that to make it sound more colloquial, more 'teenagery' so that his POV was different from Lucy, who has a more 'adult' voice. And more will be coming up on the Dominique front! :D I am writing Fred now. Thanks for the review and support! <333



Hold Out Your Hand by MerrryD
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 3]


He’s James.
He’s your best friend.
And you have nowhere else to go.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 1832 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
02/08/11 Updated: 02/12/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 02/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: Hold Out Your Hand

You know, I quite like this! I wrote a James/Sirius story myself back in October (did not post it) and there is something about it that really intrigues me. I find it very believable and even a bit romantic. But I get ahead of myself. :)

First of all, I loved the beginning. You painted a very dark and dramatic picture of the night Sirius runs away. His desperation and defeat is palpatable. You added an interesting twist with Sirius being worried about James's reaction about the Whomping Willow incident. At least, I assume that is what you are referring to. I love stories that delve into that, because it had to have been traumatic for the Marauders. I thought it added another sad layer to his situation. I do wonder about the timeline though: in DH, Lily is still speaking to Snape about the Whomping Willow incident, and the incident in Snape's Worst Memory appears to happen later. James and Sirius don't seem angry at each other in Snape's Worst memory, which is at O.W.L.s, so it seems odd that now over the summer James is mad at Sirius about the Whomping Willow incident.

That said, I'm perfectly happy accepting this how it is because I like how you used its effect on Sirius. It always seemed odd to me anyway that something so deadly would happen at the Whomping Willow, and then James and Sirius go and pick on Snape afterward at the lake. So I'm curious to hear your take on the timeline. :)

I love that James just instinctively seemed to know something had happened and took Sirius in. I thought their talk was great - really, I'm impressed to read dialogue in second person! And their kiss was well done. I didn't give Lily a second though. ;)

The second person narrative - come on, I'd be remiss if I didn't mention it, right? - really grabbed me. I really liked reading it this way and thought you did a great job with it.

The last line was brilliant. This is a great look at Sirius running away as well as a lovely James/Sirius moment - nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I agree, James/Sirius is very intriguing! er, honestly, with regards to the timeline, I didn't remember the order of events correctly. >.> I don't have a copy of DH available atm and it didn't occur to me that I was wrong and I wasn't really thinking that much about it when I was writing . . . so, yeah. I'm glad you liked the second person aspect! I love writing in second person. I think it's really hard to find a way to tell a story so that it needs to be in second person and I love the challenge, but I know some people don't particularly like to read second person. Thank you so much for this review! It's got me grinning like a mad woman. :D <3Mere


Spiral by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Tom did love once; it just wasn't meant to last.

This poem placed third in the February Apples and Oranges Challenge at Poetry Anyone. Features Tom Riddle/A Woman You All Know.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. She wouldn't write this silliness.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 341 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
02/09/11 Updated: 02/09/11

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 02/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: This day was the day.

Hi Natalie,
I have to admit, when I read this on the boards, I wasn't sure who the woman was. I think I know now, and I think you've hit on a fascinating pairing. There is a great story in this poem, if that makes sense. Are you going to do more with the whole one-night-of-stolen-memories idea?
I really like the flow of the poem, but I wonder if there is just a bit too much repetition. I usually love repetition, but it might overwhelm the poem here.
Otherwise, you totally nailed Tom Riddle and like I said - fascinating story! Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I...completely forgot I had reviews to respond to. *fail*

Tom/Minerva has been a guilty pleasure of mine for far too long; I had to write it as the challenge seemed like a golden opportunity. I do have an unfinished one-shot somewhere…Anyway, you might be right about the repetition. When I wrote it, I wanted it sound more like a madman’s chant. I pictured Tom sitting in a corner, playing the memories around his head, which admittedly isn’t the best place to peep into. But I’ll definitely look at it again and see how it can be edited.

Thanks for the lovely review! I definitely want to write a one-shot on this two. :)


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