Penname: Gmariam [Contact]
Real name: Gina
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Welcome to my author page!

I am a teacher, musician, reader, and avid Harry Potter fan. I am originally from the Midwest and now live a bit farther south. I am thrilled to be a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well.

I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love!) I've listed them below with a short description since I know trolling through summaries can be tedious. Thanks for reading!

EDIT: Someday I will categorize my stories by genre. Today is not that day. ;)
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Hope by keara96
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A poem set during Sirius Black's time in Azkaban.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 123 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/01/10 Updated: 10/11/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/13/10 Title: Chapter 1: Hope

I liked that very much! I often find free verse difficult to follow, but there was something about how this was organized that made it very easy to read. It described the situation very well, and built up to a very good ending. I only wonder how the last line would read if it were 'Sirius Black would not give up' instead. It sort of looks to the future a bit more, which was the feeling I got from the rest of the poem. It's just a thought. I liked this, nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you SO much! I'm glad you liked it. I liked your idea about the last line also. I hadn't really thought that way about it. Thanks again for reading and reviewing :)

 

Broken by msk8
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A poem about the despair of the people who opposed Voldemort in the seventh book.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 162 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/01/10 Updated: 10/11/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: Poem

I think this is a good poem! I only wanted more. :) I particularly liked the imagery of 'landscapes guarded by nightmares' - that is very strong, very powerful, and very evocative. It's also very fitting given what we know happened in the books. Nice job conveying so much in so few words! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it so much! :)
Megan

 

Murder for Love by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Five haikus for the Bloody Baron.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 138 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/02/10 Updated: 10/11/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Murder for Love

Ooh, those are so neat! I can't believe you told an entire story in five little haikus. That's amazing. Great word choices and a wonderful way to use the quote. And the title is perfect. Lovely job, Natalie! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks! The haikus did kick my behind a bit, but ... now that I am doing epigrams, in hindsight, they weren't that bad. Glad you liked it, though. :)



~Natalie.

 

The Lovers' Flame by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Though their journey getting there was rocky, some things came far more naturally to Ron and Hermione.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 102 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/03/10 Updated: 10/11/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Sonnet

You're quite good at this form, you know! I like it! You've done a good job with the subject, the prompt, and the rhythm. There were only a few things that tripped me up a bit. You know what one is, right? "Wanton want and wandering" - great use of repetition with the 'w' sound, only 'wanton' and 'want' just seem too close. What about 'wanton need and wandering'? That might chance your intent too much, but it's a thought.

I would suggest 'underneath' for 'under' because as I read it I just wanted another syllable there. And to keep the rhythm flowing between stanzas, perhaps you could try 'Our lover's flame' in place of 'And our love's flame.' It's mostly a question of where you put the emphasis when you are reading, I guess, but I do think the 'and' disrupts the flow somewhat.

The only other thing was the rhyming couplet at the end - it totally works, but there is something about using their names that almost spoils the beautiful spell you've cast with the rest of the poem. Mostly that's because 'Hermione' is such a long name, lol, and then when I got to the last line, I was thinking 'my Won-Won' instead of 'my Ron.' O.o Not sure how you could tweak that and still be specific as to what couple you are writing about, though.

So although it sounds like I'm nitpicking, that's only because I think these few things would take this piece from a really good sonnet inspired by Natalie's poem, to a poem that really stands strong on it's own. Plus I get rhyme and rhythm far better than I do free verse. ;) I really like it, I hope you write more!
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Greetings, Twin. :D

I see what you mean by your various points and whatnot, and I'm fairly certain that in my actual submission, I'd changed that one line to "our lovers' flame" like you'd suggested. I just never changed my draft on my computer, I think.

For the rest, please remind me later (when I had not just crawled out of bed and have no will do to anything yet) to take a look at these things, or I'm going to completely forget. Lovely review as always. 

~Jess

 

As They Watch by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: As Harry prepares to face Lord Voldemort, his parents anxiously watch from the other side.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 152 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/03/10 Updated: 10/03/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: As They Watch

I remember reading this on the forums, but I can't comment there so I'm glad you submitted it. I really like this poem, because I like structure, and I like how you structured each stanza here. I also really like how you interwove the lines from DH, and used dialogue only. It made a strong statement, emphasizing the narrative parts of the poem.

I have no idea how to punctuate poetry properly - are there different rules? - but someone here once told me to punctuate it like you would prose. I saw a few places where you might have used a comma in place of a full stop, since the next line was a fragment that could have been part of the previous line. For example, after 'chest' you could use a comma since the next two lines describe her hair and could be part of the preceding sentence with a comma. But then, fragments are okay sometimes, especially in poetry, so if that was your intent, ignore my comment. I also thought maybe the 'But' in the third stanza could be a 'yet' simply because you have an 'although' and 'yet' seems to go better with that. (Did you follow that? :))

Concluding with Harry's kiss to the Snitch and his line to open it was wonderfully done. What a powerful moment. I really like how reflective this poem is, and how well it works with Julia's poem. Nicely done - congrats on the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Gina. I did fiddle around with the punctuation quite a lot with this one. Usually i forget about it, or else I just throw commas around willy-nilly, but I did actually think about it this time. I wanted it to be quite fragmented especially that first verse because I needed to convey the abrupt and broken state that Lily is in. She is, in effect, having to urge her son on to death,which must go against her instincts. I do think Dumbledore told them both that things would work out ... but it must still be a dreadful postition for them to be in. Hence this is their rehearsal incase they're needed by Harry. Hmm, I've burbled on too long. Yet instead of But is a better idea, I may well change that. Thank you ~Carole~

 

Draco's Journey by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A set of haikus about Draco's life once he became a Death Eater.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 124 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/11/10 Updated: 10/11/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: Draco's Journey

Oooh, dark! Did you write this with Shrouds in mind? It seems like it could be. I am amazed at how both you and Natalie have imparted such great drama through such short, simple haikus. I especially like the contrast between heat in the first stanza and cold in the second. After reading it several times, I could pinpoint each stanza to its reference in Draco's life. It's very subtle and well done. Nice job and good luck in the triathalon! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I did have shrouds in mind. Draco's story is fascinating me with the possibilities of redemption. These were hard to write because it's a form of poetry I've never attempted, but once I started, I enjoyed it. Thanks again. ~Carole~

 

Catchphrase by Cinderella Angelina
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Percy Weasley meets Penelope Clearwater.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1009 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/12/10 Updated: 10/12/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/13/10 Title: Chapter 1: Catchphrase

That was very cute. The way you used the prompt through each scene was perfect. And I really liked how Penny was not nearly as aloof as Percy. She seemed to have a good sense of humour about his quirks. Percy's speech seemed a bit stilted at times, but you gave the readers a good reason for that. He actually reminded me of Sheldon from the television show 'The Big Bang Theory'! Do you ever wonder what happened to Percy and Penelope? Obviously not everyone marries their school sweetheart, but I still wonder. Nice job with an underappreciated minor character! ~Gina :)

 

My Black Brother by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: He realises his brother was right.



Winner of Stage 2: Free Verse the Second Annual October Triathlon at Poetry Anyone. Nominated for a QSQ for Best Poetry.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 123 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/24/10 Updated: 10/25/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very nice, Natalie! You have given us a very deep look into this character in a very short, intense burst. You're so good at this stuff. I love it. I think I was most impressed by the 'Yet, as I stand by this lake," stanza, because it's so sutble, but so important and so dramatic. The end is brilliant. Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hello!



...a very short, intense burst.



I like that. ;) I think this is what I was talking about in my reply to your LJ post; I had trouble writing this poem, but that wasn't obvious when I finished it. Thank you for your review, Gina. I really appreciate it, and am happy you liked the poem.



~Natalie

 

Barely There by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Dean Thomas felt like his soul had been ripped out when he survived the Battle of Hogwarts and his best friend did not. Grief-stricken, his brain simply couldn't wrap around what meant anything to him anymore, but the unlikeliest of heroines pulled him from the brink and maybe saved herself along the way.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 3906 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/28/10 Updated: 10/31/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah Jess, you do know how to write the inner angst, don't you? Poor Dean! I can't believe Seamus died in the final battle! That was very sad. But--life goes on, and so did Dean, and I hope he's happy. :)
Nice job with little backstory details - Dean's family, Quidditch, etc. - it really adds depth. And a very nice take on who Hestia Jones might have really been.
Lucky Natalie, it's a lovely fic!
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Angst is my thing. I think it might comprise about 10% of my body chemistry, actually. As is positing scenarios as to what didn't not happen. :D

Plus, it's odd how Hestia's canon description isn't unlike a certain Muggle girl who has ensnared your beloved Prongs.

Lovely visit, Twin!

~Jess

 

Juggling by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Lily Evans wasn’t the only Gryffindor with a childhood friend. Whilst she was meeting the boy who would introduce her to the magical world, someone else was learning how to mix with Muggles.

This is not, however, a story about Lily Evans. This is a tale about James Potter and the Muggle girl that he never quite forgot.

This story is for Natalie (hestiajones) who makes me laugh more than most people and has been a very supportive friend, despite our separate continents. Happy Birthday, mate!

I’m indebted to Gina (Gmariam) who kindly offered to beta this short one-shot, and then didn’t complain when it mushroomed into a chaptered fic.

Because of an archive gliitch, this fic has been temporarily put down a rating. the content remains the same and it is still a 6th-7th. You have been warned.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. If I had been, then Sirius, Remus, James, Lily and Tonks would not have died. Peter, however would have died in an icky manner

OMMPP! Juggling won 2 QSQ's for Best Chaptered Marauder and Dita won Best Original Character. Seriously pleased and shocked here. Thank you.

The chapter titles are all from Keane songs.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 16283 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/10 Updated: 11/13/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - On a Day Like Today

Carole,
I've already written you comments, but let's make it official (even if you don't get those lovely notifications anymore.) I love this! You are one of those writers who writes original characters effortlessly. You've created a lovely character in Dita. I instantly liked her, which is amazing since we know James ends up with Lily so it's possible Dita might inspire more jealousy than anything, if that makes sense. But I like her so much and you know I am rooting for them.

As I also mentioned, you write their age perfectly as well. And your canon knowledge continues to amaze. You pick up things and tie them to your story incredibly well. I think it's one of the things that gives your stories a feeling of depth and a real "JKR could have written this" type of feeling.

Looking forward to reviewing the next chapter and finishing up the third! I'm glad I could be involved!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Gina, it's much appreciated. I'm pleased you like my OC because at one point I really didn't think I'd ever be able to write OC's - especially not ones who play as large a part in this as Dita does.

Thanks for all your help as well ~Carole~

 

Excruciatingly Painful by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: In Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, five men deal with remorse, yet in completely different ways. It affects the soul, mentality and even the body. This poem explores the way these five men cope with wrong actions and the guilt that follows it.

By the way, I'm not J K Rowling. I doubt you're surprised. All reviews receive a response!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 439 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/03/10 Updated: 11/06/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: Remorse

Soraya - this is really neat! What a original idea, to explore remorse through these characters. I really liked your use of repetition - the word 'remorse' and a definition to introduce each new character's experience with it. And kudos for taking on a tough rhyming scheme! You could have done this free verse but finding the right words to convey your thought and have them rhyme is much more challenging and well done. I thought the idea of ending with Voldemort and extending his verse as the one who did *not* feel remorse was a great way to conclude. It really tied it to the title, as well. My only suggestion would be not to shy away from punctuation. I saw several places where a comma, semi-colon, or period could have been used, but then punctuation in poetry is so subjective, it seems. Nice job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Gina! To be perfectly honest, as clichd as I know this is going to sound, I don't really like poems which don't rhyme, so I find it even more difficult to write poems which don't rhyme. I'll admit that the rhyming was hard in places but I hope I did an OK job on it. And this idea was just stuck into my head as I thought about what Hermione said--how the pain of remorse can destroy you if you want to put your soul back together. I'm glad you liked all my ideas as this was my first ever time writing HP poetry so I'm glad you think it all worked. As for the punctuation--you're completely right. It is really subjective. This initially started with loads of full stops/periods and commas but I took them all out because I wasn't sure how they would look. Once again, thank you so much for reviewing. As one of my favourite authors on this website--particularly for Lily/James--I'm really happy you reviewed this. Have a nice day! ~Soraya~

 

Sunset At Last by Cheshlin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Ginny reflects on life on her wedding day.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 125 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/04/10 Updated: 11/06/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Sunset At Last

Hi Cheshlin! NIce to see you posting again. And I like your poem. Wow, we've been writing poetry around here for a long time, haven't we? ;) This was very sweet. The fourth stanza was particularly good for pointing out that not everything was perfect for Harry and Ginny. The ending was lovely. Take care and happy writing! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: thanks Gina! :) I still love writing poetry. I've had this one in my thread in Poetry Anyone, and figured out I never posted it. Thought it was time to get a few new things up on the board. :) Cyns

 

In His Hollow Eyes by h_vic
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Past Featured StoryWhen Harry died to defeat Voldemort, it damaged him. Some indefinable part of Harry was left behind, leaving him dark and empty. Hermione has done what she could to shelter him, but perhaps there are some things from which there is just no coming back.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 2229 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/05/10 Updated: 11/07/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ooh, knowing Jess as I do, you have written the perfect story for her here! Like your note said, it has a bit of everything, and yet what's amazing is that it all works so well in so short a piece. We get the background we need to understand where they are and what's happening. We get the inner turmoil to understand their emotions. And we get a Harry/Hermione moment! ;)

The ending is bonechilling, really. It's such a vivid image, these two damaged souls coupled on the floor as fate comes to claim them. So dark, so angsty, so vivid and visual and visceral. This was really wonderfully written. I'm glad I clicked on your lovely banner (see, they do work!) Great job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Elene really did do a lovely job with the banner, didn't she. I'm so glad that it drew you in because I definitely think this is my odd little story that scares most people off from reading it. I kind of figured when I wrote it that Jess would love it, but hardly anyone else would probably ever dare to read it. I'm so glad you thought it worked, because it worried me when I wrote it whether I could make it feel believable and whether I could find the balance between slotting in enough of the fairly extensive backstory necessary without losing the sense of urgency in the present. Vivid, visual and visceral was exactly what I was aiming at so I'm very glad that came through. Thanks for brightening my morning with such a lovely review, Gina.

 

Summary:

Albus Potter had what some would call a fascinating job -- working for the Magical Law Enforcement's intelligence department. But when suspicious activity caused the Ministry to think the infamous Knights of Walpurgis were up to something, their leading expert was called into action.

In disguise and out of his mind, Albus embarked on an impossible task, but when things started turning for the worse, why were his only thoughts about the one person he would hurt along the way?

 

This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next-Generation Story AND Best Same-Sex Pairing Story



Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 25947 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/10 Updated: 12/10/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah, Jess. I don't even know what to say, since I know a bit of what's coming and sort of want to save myself for that. ;) I will begin by saying that it's a really good start. You've quickly pulled me into the premise, which does sound a bit borderline insane until one reads it here. What is really cool is how you've kept Albus as Albus and yet created a second sort of persona for him as Melinda that Scorpius seems to be falling for. That first kiss was great - crazy and hilarious and yet, again, having some idea of what's coming, I'm already rooting for them. The best part is Albus recognizing that Scorpius is going to get hurt - I love that aspect of his character, and of course, that's where you got a good title. :)
So, yes - good start, get the next part up soon, and I shall endeavor to keep up with better reviews. ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Yay, my first review! Honestly, I think most people are sort of too 'wtf' to review. This is, as you know, one of the most bizarre things I've ever written. I've gone for a different Albus Potter in this one, who is more like a normal guy than my quiet, unassuming Al. I tried to incorporate his own personality into his thought process to keep him feeling more like a man in girls' clothing than a man trying to be a girl...which is just weird.

Thanks for the review, dear. I'm glad you like it. Now I shall get back to my NaNo so it can keep eating me alive.

~Jess

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/12/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I love it. I really do. Is it okay that I laughed as I was reading it? Because I did. Especially when Albus said, "And what in the name of Merlin’s most baggy y-fronts was that about, anyway?" HAHA! I know someone else who talks like that. ;)
It's a brutal cliffhanger. You've done such a great job of setting up Albus's inner conflict. He's aware of what's happening to him, as well as his feelings for Scorpius, and yet we don't get to see how it resolves. Of course, I do, and I can't wait to see it in context.
I wonder if this isn't as crazy as you think. It's certainly pretty ballsy, but it's also well-written, well-paced, and nicely balanced between the Knights story and the Albus/Scorpius stuff. I'm loving it. Great job, bring on the smut!
~Gina :)
PS. The scene with Harry was delicious - unexpected but so well-played. Great idea!

Author's Response:

*hugs twin for loving my thus far ignored story*

Now you know why I angsted over this story so much; it had so much going on that it couldn't NOT be this long. I really wanted to make the relationship plausible and still keep to the plot. I'm glad you like how I've done thus far. The smut is toned down in the next chapter (which is in the queue), but it's available in the spewswap community on LJ. If you can't find it, just lurk in the chat thread in the SPEW forum, and it should be there.

*hugs twin again*

~Jess

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/19/10 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I freaking love this. I really do. It's just so insane that it works. I have to admit, I had my doubts, I did. They are gone, though, because you've made it so much fun to read. Like, after reading the first part I was really looking forward to the next chapters because even though you shared bits, it's still so wildly unpredictable it's an absolute trip to read. It's a bit like Brazen, really, in that there are parts where I'm thinking "Did she really just write that?" with the biggest grin on my face. It's a blast.

Okay, so enough of that. Like I mentioned last night, I loved Greengrass in this. That was such a neat little twist to throw in! It was a great way to set up the reveal. The actual reveal was fascinating. I thought Scorpius would be far more furious. I may have to duel you on your thoughts regarding his reaction. It was neat to see them get to know each other at the end. The best part is how well you've written Albus's inner turmoil throughout. It brings the whole thing together.

I can't wait to see how things play out with the Knights plot now that they are in hiding, and of course, I'm dying to see how these two come to terms with what's happened. What an absolutely unique way to bring them together. I want to write a next generation story now.

Cool job. I hope more people read this because it's a heck of a ride!
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

You know, I knew from the start that this story was one that people would either love or hate, not much in between. I wanted to write something original, but still with a glimmer of the characters that I know/heart. Though it's a bizarre way of going about it, it was definitely worth writing, considering how much my SSS recipient loved it.

Scorpius's reaction was meant to be how one reacts when something is too stupidly strange to be true. It's kind of a, "Well, shit" sort of deal, because there is no set rules in relationship behavior for this. I suppose he reacted more strongly when he found the stray pair of underwear, because there is something that one can envision and deal with, no matter how distasteful. I suppose it's like being in a heavy relationship with someone, only to find out that they used to be the other gender and wanted to go back to their birth gender. Definitely a 'wtf' moment.

Glad you love the story, and even if 3 of the 4 reviews for this are from you, I'll take those over 10 meaningless one-liners any day. heart.

~Jess

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/28/10 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Well, drat, it's done. Ah well, it was quite a ride! I really, really enjoyed your 'strange little tale.' I can see why it gave you fits, that's for sure. And I can see why you had your doubts, but apparently I am just as crazy as you for loving it. And I'm pretty conservative when it comes to my fanfic, you know! ;)

I think what I liked best about it was how quickly and naturally you established this character of Albus. And then you turned him into a girl...only, he was still Albus. The Albus/Melinda stuff was great - his inner dialogue always kept the insanity grounded. And watching him fall for Scorpius as Melinda made the story believable.

The other thing I really liked was that there was such an interesting subplot that was equally important to the romance. The undercover idea was brilliant, and the conspiracy was fascinating to puzzle out. I loved the addition of Mr. Greengrass in the third chapter. This final chapter added another great twist and good way to end that storyline. It also wrapped up Albus/Scorpius's story nicely as well.

I only had one bit of concrit with it, though, and that was that this last chapter felt a bit rushed. That might just be me wanting more, but I felt like the reveal was a bit sudden and the battle might have been a bit longer. I definitely wanted more from the scene in the hospital. I guess getting the story from Scorpius made me want to actually read what went down after Albus was knocked out. More than anything, I loved hearing about Harry's reaction and would have loved to read it; knowing that was not within the scope of this story (being Albus's POV) perhaps Harry might have made an appearance in the hospital with or without James. You write Harry so well, I would have loved to see his response to both the attack and the revelation of Albus/Scorpius. But again - if that wasn't your plan, so be it; a good writer makes the reader want more, and you did.

I really hope you get more reviews for this. I shall go recommend it in Fiction Junction, I think. Your quirkiness knows no bounds and I look forward to whatever you might come up with next!

Great story, twin!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: *hugs* I'm so glad that someone liked this story that wasn't involved in SSS. It's an odd take on a pairing that shouldn't ever exist due to family reasons, but I suppose it makes sense that they would meet unintentionally. I know the end seemed rush, but there's a good reason for that. Well, two reasons, but I'll start with the one that is actually good. From the very beginning, the reason why Jenkins picked Albus for this task is that, well, he's not all that observant. Al has worked for him for years, so if anyone should know how good he is, it would be his boss. As mentioned in the story, the scheme was years in the making, and Jenkins had chosen the man least likely to screw up his personal plan (look for what he was told to look for and not go any deeper). And truly, Albus really wasn't all that great, which is why he got his ass handed to him in the battle. The only reason why he thought he could even come close to taking on the flock of baddies is that he'd had his ego stroked for years (by Jenkins), thinking he's better than he is. The second reason was that, well... I really just wanted the story to be over. Not a glorious tale, but a true one, hehe. I know it sounds weird, but those were my reasons behind that. I did want to include Harry, but I don't think Ginny would let him come home empty handed unless Albus was actually dying or if he had apprehended all the guilty parties. Thanks for being all over this story. I know it's strange and completely nuts in what it's about, but I guess someone had to write it, lol. *hugs Twin again* ~Jess

 

Catching a Train to Paris by Liandrin
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: They just happened to be on the same train, heading to the same place. Fate is ironic like that.

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1752 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/10 Updated: 11/13/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Catching a Train to Paris

I loved it! I remember this prompt, it was fun. I really like how you've expanded it. At first, I though the second part was a flashback, but it quickly began to make sense that it had jumped ahead, not backwards.
First of all, the Draco/Ginny dynamic is really good - you write them so well, I could almost believe them together. ;) Second - and you know this from Memento Mori - I love your descriptive elements, particularly how each character moves. It gives them such a depth and gives the reader such a clear visual without it feeling forced. And finally, I LOVED the kiss - niiiiiice! That totally made me grin.
Oh, and is this connected to your other Theo/Luna stuff? Because it certainly seemed like it could be. I like how you write them.
Very nice job, Lia! I enjoyed it very much!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh, Gina, I love you - even when I'm sending you mail by mistake. ^_~

I'm really glad you liked this. The first half was actually one of my favourite drabbles from that drabble-a-thon, if not the favourite. It ended up being my inspiration for the second half, which was part of a birthday prompt. And I wrote this in 15 minutes. Lol. It's funny how what I consider my worst work ends up being everyone's favourite. :P

Ah, me and my kisses - they should be outlawed. I'm such a tease. >_< As for the Theo/Luna, yes I did include Theo's storyline in this. He is quickly becoming my most favourite HP character. Watch out, Snape! ^_~

So, thank you, Gina. I really loved your review and I'm so glad you liked it. ^_^

~Lia

 

A Stolen Kiss by Cannae be Kenobi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: An unwitting challenge leads to a surprise revelation as Lily and Sirius partake of some forbidden fruit. AU.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 2307 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/14/10 Updated: 11/23/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Stolen Kiss

I liked it! There is something about Lily/Sirius that is appealing, I thought that Sirius might have been a bit overplayed at first, but his reaction after the kiss was nice. Of course, I'm not convinced he was serious in wanting more, but it did seem in character. Lily was well-written as well. And the last paragraph - awww, it's like you're setting up another chapter! Good ending - or good beginning. ;)
Nice job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hi there, ta for that. It's the first time I've written Sirius and Lily, so the characterisations may be a tad sketchy - then again, they may be a fair representation, depending on what you like. *wink* Either way, it was a blast to explore a potential romantic encounter between these two! Ta muchly for the feedback. CbK.

 

Over A Mug of Tea by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: I think of her as a sister.

The words rang clearly, loudly in his mind.

I think of her as a sister.

But did he?

Happy Birthday, Julia! You know you're one of the only two people on earth I'd do this for. :D

Thank you, Carole, for looking it over. And I am so not J.K.Rowling.

Nominated for a QSQ in the General Category.

Categories: Harry/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 2086 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/19/10 Updated: 11/21/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 11/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was really nice, Natalie! It was quiet and subtle and completely believable. It was sad to see Harry in his old age, especially since he's lost so many friends and family. So bittersweet by the end! You set up their kiss nicely, but I think my favorite part was their reaction: the one liners and the laughter. So in character. Very lovely fic! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: It was quite saddening to write old and lonely Harry. :( But Im so glad you found them in character. The mere thought of writing the trio makes me tremble. Id sooner write Umbridge/Filch, you know.

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gina!

~Natalie

 
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