Welcome to my author page!
I am a teacher, musician, reader, and Harry Potter fan. I am a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well. While I am no longer active in the fandom, I am proud to have passed on my love of Harry Potter to my daughter!
I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love, even years later!) Thanks for reading!
Soraya - this is really neat! What a original idea, to explore remorse through these characters. I really liked your use of repetition - the word 'remorse' and a definition to introduce each new character's experience with it. And kudos for taking on a tough rhyming scheme! You could have done this free verse but finding the right words to convey your thought and have them rhyme is much more challenging and well done. I thought the idea of ending with Voldemort and extending his verse as the one who did *not* feel remorse was a great way to conclude. It really tied it to the title, as well. My only suggestion would be not to shy away from punctuation. I saw several places where a comma, semi-colon, or period could have been used, but then punctuation in poetry is so subjective, it seems. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Gina! To be perfectly honest, as clichťd as I know this is going to sound, I don't really like poems which don't rhyme, so I find it even more difficult to write poems which don't rhyme. I'll admit that the rhyming was hard in places but I hope I did an OK job on it. And this idea was just stuck into my head as I thought about what Hermione said--how the pain of remorse can destroy you if you want to put your soul back together. I'm glad you liked all my ideas as this was my first ever time writing HP poetry so I'm glad you think it all worked. As for the punctuation--you're completely right. It is really subjective. This initially started with loads of full stops/periods and commas but I took them all out because I wasn't sure how they would look. Once again, thank you so much for reviewing. As one of my favourite authors on this website--particularly for Lily/James--I'm really happy you reviewed this. Have a nice day! ~Soraya~
Hi Cheshlin! NIce to see you posting again. And I like your poem. Wow, we've been writing poetry around here for a long time, haven't we? ;) This was very sweet. The fourth stanza was particularly good for pointing out that not everything was perfect for Harry and Ginny. The ending was lovely. Take care and happy writing! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: thanks Gina! :) I still love writing poetry. I've had this one in my thread in Poetry Anyone, and figured out I never posted it. Thought it was time to get a few new things up on the board. :) Cyns
Albus Potter had what some would call a fascinating job -- working for the Magical Law Enforcement's intelligence department. But when suspicious activity caused the Ministry to think the infamous Knights of Walpurgis were up to something, their leading expert was called into action.
In disguise and out of his mind, Albus embarked on an impossible task, but when things started turning for the worse, why were his only thoughts about the one person he would hurt along the way?
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next-Generation Story AND Best Same-Sex Pairing Story
Ah, Jess. I don't even know what to say, since I know a bit of what's coming and sort of want to save myself for that. ;) I will begin by saying that it's a really good start. You've quickly pulled me into the premise, which does sound a bit borderline insane until one reads it here. What is really cool is how you've kept Albus as Albus and yet created a second sort of persona for him as Melinda that Scorpius seems to be falling for. That first kiss was great - crazy and hilarious and yet, again, having some idea of what's coming, I'm already rooting for them. The best part is Albus recognizing that Scorpius is going to get hurt - I love that aspect of his character, and of course, that's where you got a good title. :)
So, yes - good start, get the next part up soon, and I shall endeavor to keep up with better reviews. ;)
Yay, my first review! Honestly, I think most people are sort of too 'wtf' to review. This is, as you know, one of the most bizarre things I've ever written. I've gone for a different Albus Potter in this one, who is more like a normal guy than my quiet, unassuming Al. I tried to incorporate his own personality into his thought process to keep him feeling more like a man in girls' clothing than a man trying to be a girl...which is just weird.
Thanks for the review, dear. I'm glad you like it. Now I shall get back to my NaNo so it can keep eating me alive.
I love it. I really do. Is it okay that I laughed as I was reading it? Because I did. Especially when Albus said, "And what in the name of Merlin’s most baggy y-fronts was that about, anyway?" HAHA! I know someone else who talks like that. ;)
It's a brutal cliffhanger. You've done such a great job of setting up Albus's inner conflict. He's aware of what's happening to him, as well as his feelings for Scorpius, and yet we don't get to see how it resolves. Of course, I do, and I can't wait to see it in context.
I wonder if this isn't as crazy as you think. It's certainly pretty ballsy, but it's also well-written, well-paced, and nicely balanced between the Knights story and the Albus/Scorpius stuff. I'm loving it. Great job, bring on the smut!
PS. The scene with Harry was delicious - unexpected but so well-played. Great idea!
*hugs twin for loving my thus far ignored story*
Now you know why I angsted over this story so much; it had so much going on that it couldn't NOT be this long. I really wanted to make the relationship plausible and still keep to the plot. I'm glad you like how I've done thus far. The smut is toned down in the next chapter (which is in the queue), but it's available in the spewswap community on LJ. If you can't find it, just lurk in the chat thread in the SPEW forum, and it should be there.
*hugs twin again*
I freaking love this. I really do. It's just so insane that it works. I have to admit, I had my doubts, I did. They are gone, though, because you've made it so much fun to read. Like, after reading the first part I was really looking forward to the next chapters because even though you shared bits, it's still so wildly unpredictable it's an absolute trip to read. It's a bit like Brazen, really, in that there are parts where I'm thinking "Did she really just write that?" with the biggest grin on my face. It's a blast.
Okay, so enough of that. Like I mentioned last night, I loved Greengrass in this. That was such a neat little twist to throw in! It was a great way to set up the reveal. The actual reveal was fascinating. I thought Scorpius would be far more furious. I may have to duel you on your thoughts regarding his reaction. It was neat to see them get to know each other at the end. The best part is how well you've written Albus's inner turmoil throughout. It brings the whole thing together.
I can't wait to see how things play out with the Knights plot now that they are in hiding, and of course, I'm dying to see how these two come to terms with what's happened. What an absolutely unique way to bring them together. I want to write a next generation story now.
Cool job. I hope more people read this because it's a heck of a ride!
You know, I knew from the start that this story was one that people would either love or hate, not much in between. I wanted to write something original, but still with a glimmer of the characters that I know/heart. Though it's a bizarre way of going about it, it was definitely worth writing, considering how much my SSS recipient loved it.
Scorpius's reaction was meant to be how one reacts when something is too stupidly strange to be true. It's kind of a, "Well, shit" sort of deal, because there is no set rules in relationship behavior for this. I suppose he reacted more strongly when he found the stray pair of underwear, because there is something that one can envision and deal with, no matter how distasteful. I suppose it's like being in a heavy relationship with someone, only to find out that they used to be the other gender and wanted to go back to their birth gender. Definitely a 'wtf' moment.
Glad you love the story, and even if 3 of the 4 reviews for this are from you, I'll take those over 10 meaningless one-liners any day. heart.
Well, drat, it's done. Ah well, it was quite a ride! I really, really enjoyed your 'strange little tale.' I can see why it gave you fits, that's for sure. And I can see why you had your doubts, but apparently I am just as crazy as you for loving it. And I'm pretty conservative when it comes to my fanfic, you know! ;)
I think what I liked best about it was how quickly and naturally you established this character of Albus. And then you turned him into a girl...only, he was still Albus. The Albus/Melinda stuff was great - his inner dialogue always kept the insanity grounded. And watching him fall for Scorpius as Melinda made the story believable.
The other thing I really liked was that there was such an interesting subplot that was equally important to the romance. The undercover idea was brilliant, and the conspiracy was fascinating to puzzle out. I loved the addition of Mr. Greengrass in the third chapter. This final chapter added another great twist and good way to end that storyline. It also wrapped up Albus/Scorpius's story nicely as well.
I only had one bit of concrit with it, though, and that was that this last chapter felt a bit rushed. That might just be me wanting more, but I felt like the reveal was a bit sudden and the battle might have been a bit longer. I definitely wanted more from the scene in the hospital. I guess getting the story from Scorpius made me want to actually read what went down after Albus was knocked out. More than anything, I loved hearing about Harry's reaction and would have loved to read it; knowing that was not within the scope of this story (being Albus's POV) perhaps Harry might have made an appearance in the hospital with or without James. You write Harry so well, I would have loved to see his response to both the attack and the revelation of Albus/Scorpius. But again - if that wasn't your plan, so be it; a good writer makes the reader want more, and you did.
I really hope you get more reviews for this. I shall go recommend it in Fiction Junction, I think. Your quirkiness knows no bounds and I look forward to whatever you might come up with next!
Great story, twin!
Author's Response: *hugs* I'm so glad that someone liked this story that wasn't involved in SSS. It's an odd take on a pairing that shouldn't ever exist due to family reasons, but I suppose it makes sense that they would meet unintentionally. I know the end seemed rush, but there's a good reason for that. Well, two reasons, but I'll start with the one that is actually good. From the very beginning, the reason why Jenkins picked Albus for this task is that, well, he's not all that observant. Al has worked for him for years, so if anyone should know how good he is, it would be his boss. As mentioned in the story, the scheme was years in the making, and Jenkins had chosen the man least likely to screw up his personal plan (look for what he was told to look for and not go any deeper). And truly, Albus really wasn't all that great, which is why he got his ass handed to him in the battle. The only reason why he thought he could even come close to taking on the flock of baddies is that he'd had his ego stroked for years (by Jenkins), thinking he's better than he is. The second reason was that, well... I really just wanted the story to be over. Not a glorious tale, but a true one, hehe. I know it sounds weird, but those were my reasons behind that. I did want to include Harry, but I don't think Ginny would let him come home empty handed unless Albus was actually dying or if he had apprehended all the guilty parties. Thanks for being all over this story. I know it's strange and completely nuts in what it's about, but I guess someone had to write it, lol. *hugs Twin again* ~Jess
I liked it! There is something about Lily/Sirius that is appealing, I thought that Sirius might have been a bit overplayed at first, but his reaction after the kiss was nice. Of course, I'm not convinced he was serious in wanting more, but it did seem in character. Lily was well-written as well. And the last paragraph - awww, it's like you're setting up another chapter! Good ending - or good beginning. ;)
Author's Response: Hi there, ta for that. It's the first time I've written Sirius and Lily, so the characterisations may be a tad sketchy - then again, they may be a fair representation, depending on what you like. *wink* Either way, it was a blast to explore a potential romantic encounter between these two! Ta muchly for the feedback. CbK.
That was really nice, Natalie! It was quiet and subtle and completely believable. It was sad to see Harry in his old age, especially since he's lost so many friends and family. So bittersweet by the end! You set up their kiss nicely, but I think my favorite part was their reaction: the one liners and the laughter. So in character. Very lovely fic! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: It was quite saddening to write old and lonely Harry. :í( But Iím so glad you found them in character. The mere thought of writing the trio makes me tremble. Iíd sooner write Umbridge/Filch, you know.
Beautiful! Just really beautiful. You write about connections and made some really great ones here. You pulled together all the scenes from the previous chapters and wrote a really poignant ending that fits perfectly. I love your angsty tortured Draco, and really liked how he resolved his issues here. The potion was neat, and the idea that he gives it to Hermione to make up for not helping Charity was great. I still don't really understand their kiss, but I still loved their dialogue and interaction. My favorite part, though, was meeting Astoria at the end. What a lovely bit of foreshadowing, as was the stuff with Rose/Scorpius back in the last chapter.
Really, really great story, Carole. Best of luck to you in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Gina. Okay the first kiss was because she was there and vulnerable. Draco was thinking he could comfort her (she was thinking about her death, the table and everything). At that point, he's the same as her - ie a wraith or wisp of light, so they both have the same type of form and feel alive to each other (I hope this is making sense). The second time he kisses her, it's very much because she's close to him, he's feeling lost and he is pretty sure that she can heal him. He's 18, she's 27 and attractive. I think Draco is ruled by his hormones as much as anyone.
As for the Rose/Scorpius - meh, that's one version of the future. Scorp could well end up with Lily - heh heh heh.
Thank you very much for the review, Gina. You've made me think through that kiss, and although I'm keeping it, it's good that you've got me to justify it. Good Luck to you, too. ~Carole~
Lovely start! Charity Burbage is such an original choice - and the perfect ghost to come back to Draco, given what happened to her at Malfoy Manor. You're so good. Nice job setting up Draco's post-battle angst. Looking forward to the scenes you choose for him to visit! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: I hope you like his Christmas past. Present will be coming up soon .... ish. Thanks for the review, Gina.
I really liked the last scene with Draco's parents at the end. It was very touching to see the Malfoys that way. As is often the case in so many of your stories, I feel like you are hinting at something there, something with his mother. I wonder what the future will hold for them. I'm also curious to see if you'll stick to canon or take Draco/Hermione to another level. ;) Nice chapter, good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: One of these days, I shall finish my Dean story and that will explain the whole Draco and his mum situation. Actually, I do have a story up about Narcissa that explains my own personal canon surrounding her. That's not really in this story, though. Hmmm, Dramione ... perhaps. Thanks so much, Gina. ~Carole~
Very interesting line at the end! I really liked the two versions of the future Charity showed Draco. And I'm really digging her character. The dialogue between her and Draco is great. One question: what was the kiss about? Does it come back later?
Looking forward to the end!
Author's Response: I think Draco just likes snogging -LOL. In his mind, sex is the way to comfort someone, and she was upset at the time. Thanks for the review, Gina. The end is nigh ... ~Carole~
Alone, disgusting, adrift between life and death...
This is Tom Riddle's penance for his lack of remorse.
I saw your banner for this and naturally came to read it. How did I miss it? It's lovely. Well, lovely in the darkest way possible. ;) Really, it's a great poem. Everything about it - the style, the sentence structure, the word choice - all contributes to a perfectly dark and desperate mood and feel. There are some wonderful lines, but I particularly like the "For you are vile"/ "For you are unnameble"/"For you are Death" conclusions. So simple, yet so profound. The whole thing really conveys the scene in King's Cross brilliantly, but from a totally different perspective than JKRs. Great job, twin!
Along with my Christmas songs, this is probably my most ignored poem, hence the desire for a Bella!banner. I'm really happy with how this came out, especially since this is the product of my borderline QSQ snub neuroticism. Amazing the leaps the mind can make. :D
I suppose this is one of those 'be careful what you wish for' type things. Voldemort wanted to be feared. He wanted people to be afraid to say his name. He wanted to beat death. Well, he got what he wanted, but it certainly wasn't what he had expected. Muahahahaha.
Thanks for the visit, Twin o' Mine!
Lovely story! You've done quite a bit of research and it showed. Your story flowed very naturally through all the Quidditch talk, which can be hard to do. ;) It lends a nice depth to a story, though.
I liked the idea of Hermione going to her parents at Christmas, and of Ron going with her. I did have a question, though: why did she wait so long? The final battle was in May, 1998, so I'm just curious why she waited over a year and a half to go to them. You did mention her trepidation about their new life being better, but addressing the lag in time might be worth adding as well.
I wasn't sure about Ron and Hermione being recognized all the way down in Australia, but it did set up a nice moment for Ron to remind Hermione of her real name - not the name (Wilkins, I assume?) that she had created for her parents. That was a good line.
Their reunion was nicely done - I just would have enjoyed a bit more! It was sweet and very much like I would picture it. I'm hoping her parents will be just as happy with their old life back as they were with their new life.
~Gina via The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gina!! Yes, I know there is a huge tine lag, but I kind of thought that initially she would have been very eager to find them, and then it would have taken some time to do so and once she did, that's when she would have been more hesitant about actually approaching them. As in, she sees that they're in fact safe and happy, and she starts to question whether she should break em out of the little happy bubble she's created. I sort of see Hermione as someone who can be secretive when she's unsure of herself, instead of asking for a lot of advice, so she's keep finding excuses not to approach them until she realizes she has to eventually...does that make sense at all?? Anyways, I'm so glad you liked the story and I definitely believe te Grangers will be very happy to get their memories back!! :) -Claire
Natalie! Once again you quickly flesh out minor characters in a lovely way. I particularly like Hugo in this story. The dialogue was just so quick and snappy, it really leant him a nice personality. And what a neat pairing - you once again make a rarepair very believable. Nice story, Natalie - I really enjoyed it. :)
~Gina via The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves :)
Author's Response: GinGin!
I like the different feel between the two parts of this poem and how they contrast each other so well. I liked the second part in particular because I could really feel where that one came from. I liked the first part as well, it was nice and flowy. The idea of Barty Crouch having a hard time as Moody for these reasons is really fascinating. You're so creative! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks Gina. There's a story behind this poem which will get written some day. Thanks for reviewing. ~Carole~
This was very sweet, and I very much wanted to read more! Knowing what we know about ghosts, it's unlikely Remus or Tonks would have stayed around, even for Teddy, but the idea of setting this on Halloween, when the veil is thin and souls can pass between the two world is very believable and a great premise. I only wanted to know *why* Tonks appeared on this Halloween, and not another. It would seem that for something like that to happen, there would need to be a good reason, and I'd be curious what you were thinking about Tonks' visit to Teddy.
I really liked your characterization of Teddy, especially the parts about him struggling to control his powers. And his reactions to the Muggles were great. ;) This was a very cute and well-written story - happy writing as you continue! :)
via The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: What a lovely review! I'm thrilled to 'hear' that you liked this little story. That is a very good question; why indeed did Tonks choose to come at that particular Halloween? Somehow, I doubt that 'because I needed to write a ghost drabble for a challenge' is a good answer ;) Thanks so much for the review, Gina.
I loved this! Having read your other story, I felt like Charity was familiar and that she certainly had a story to tell. This was a wonderful story. It was such a great insight into a character we know nothing about, except for her death. It's so original! And so fun, especially the bits with the other professors. I want more. :)
What really makes this piece so good is how perfectly it fits into canon. Not only have you worked in a later generation, but the casual references to Harry, Ron, and Hermione just reinforce the feeling of being in the Potterverse perfectly.
Myron sounds like he was great fun to write. I'm glad he and Charity had one more night together. Any thoughts on their future? Right now I'm thinking of how sad he would be to learn of her death. :(
I really, really enjoyed this. It's fantastic, and your Charity deserves more stories. Good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you Gina. I do have this evil plot attacking my brain about The Weird Sisters. I really should be updating my chaptered fics, but Myron and Charity are rather addictive, so I shall see what the NY brings story-wise. Myron was great to write because he is a cocky git and I don't want him to become all sweet and fluffy. Thanks again and I'm seriously thinking about a follow up. (Or a series, so I get to that 2%) ~Carole~
I like your story, Natalie! In particular, I like your characterization of both Rose and Scorpius, but especially Scorpius: you've made them your own in small, subtle ways, like their unspoken academic competition or his smoking.
The other thing I really liked was the last scene when they finally come together. I really liked how hesitant they were, and when they admitted their feelings it was just something soft and simple - two friends finally coming together. As always with your writing, I believed it completely.
My only concrit would be that I wanted a bit more from each scene, to really build up to the end. But wanting more is a good thing, isn't it? :)
Nice job, Natalie! I will try to read your other new stories soon!!
Author's Response: Gina!
Aw, that was very sad! First, I loved Neville's support here.It shows what a strong character he became in DH. And it immediately made me wonder if anything else might have happened to them during this time. ;) I also really liked McGonagall's appearance. But I really thought that Ginny's bottled-up fear was brought out nicely...and then put away very characteristically. The memory of Ron really brought it home for her, which was sweet and even more heartbreaking. I never really thought about how hard this time must have been for the DA at Hogwarts, and now I do. Lovely job! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it Gina. I've struggled a bit with this one, and am not sure I'm still entirely pleased. But it's all right. I like thinking of Ginny really losing it at some point. I dont' care how tough she is, everyone breaks at some point, and I wanted to imagine that it was NOT technically related to Harry. I think sometimes the thing that breaks the camel's back is not what you expect it to be... hence, Luna being the instigator. I adore Neville. I have wondered about that relationship, too, but I imagine them both being too focused (particularly Neville) on the DA. Hmmm.... ;) McGonagal's appearance and that of a Slytherin were requirements for the assignment. I'm glad they didn't feel too forced. Thanks as always for reading and taking the time to review, Gina. I always appreciate your thoughts!