Welcome to my author page!
I am a teacher, musician, reader, and Harry Potter fan. I am a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well. While I am no longer active in the fandom, I am proud to have passed on my love of Harry Potter to my daughter!
I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love, even years later!) Thanks for reading!
Harry Potter had seen death - a lot of death. Friends had passed in his lifetime, more so than any one person should ever experience, but how much is too much, even for the Chosen One?
Ron Weasley is dead, leaving behind his wife and his best mate. How can these two cope with their Trio being cut down to two? And when danger lurks in the shadows, can they find the strength to fight for one another?
Very cool. You know, it really sort of makes perfect sense for Harry to quit in order to keep Rita off Ron's story. And given Harry's fragile mental state (not to mention Hermione's) I'm not at all surprised that he did. He was remarkably calm about it. The final scene with Hermione was well done as he started to realize the repercussions. I can't wait to see whether it works and Rita stays off the story. I am dreading the Weasley's reaction, though. :(
Argh, the Weasleys. It shall be a 's*** hits the fan' moment, for sure. Rita will be interesting. :)
You killed him! OMG! You go! Bring on the angst! ;)
I tease. :D
Nice start here. It's definitely very intense, and builds to a shocking climax (even though we sort of know it's coming given the category, lol.) Poor Harry, watching his best friend die. This is going to be very interesting, since you've mentioned Harry is dating Ginny and Hermione was with Ron, even if they were fighting. Good luck as you continue!
Haha, I have no problem killing off Ron, 'cause he's a git. :D
Anyway, I had this idea in my head, and it sort of just spilt out on the page...the first time. Then my computer crashed, and I lost it all. This is but a pale reflection of what I had written in the first place, but it'll do. The rest of the story will be as it should have been.
This shall be funness.
Oh Jess, leave it to you to throw another wrench into the story. Awesome twist with Rita. I am truly frightened for what Harry might do. You are definitely taking him to the edge, it seems. Which places a huge burden on Hermione. But then, that's what you've nailed about their characters: Hermione taking care of Harry. Sure, Harry thinks he might be taking care of her after Ron's death, but he's not. He needs her more than she needs him. What's sad is that the Weasleys would have probably taken care of them both if only they'd been open and honest.
Sorry it's not a spew review, but I just want to let you know I'm still reading and enjoying your writing. Good luck with the next bit - try not to be too hard on Harry, now, k? *yeah right* ;)
Lol, now I feel sort of bad about what happens in the next chapter. Hehe. It's with the betasitter right now, and I shall post it as soon as I get it back. I'm glad you like it and enjoy my screwed up mind.
Poor Hermione! I can only imagine how hard it is going back after something like this, and you wrote it well. I'm still waiting for her big breakdown.
The scene with Ginny was actually just as sad, because they were so close to an understanding, and then Ginny went all crazy again and ruined it. I'm not sure if I feel bad for Ginny or not. I guess she is hurting just as much as Harry - possibly more, since she lost her brother AND he dumped her - so she certainly has her reasons for acting this way. I do sort of hope she comes around, though.
Looking forward to seeing Rita! Good luck as you continue!
I don't think that Ginny would have been nearly as hostile if George hadn't told her about Hermione staying the night with Harry. You know he would be rather venomous and lurid with the details. And Ginny, being that she is a bit judgmental, would probably not believe the best in people, especially when she felt betrayed by them. She was just coming around, but Hermione's basic inability to lie well sort of screwed the pooch, so to speak.
Indeed, Harry meeting Rita is coming next. That chapter is going to be daunting. Not as daunting as AU of Doom, but pretty close.
Ooh, nice ending! I can't wait to see how Hermione reacts. That was well done, the dream/not-a-dream. They probably needed it, though. The interview with Rita was also well-played: just enough of Harry staying in control and Harry struggling with it. Rita was spot-on. I wonder if we'll see what she writes? I really just want to see the next chapter and Hermione's reaction!
Keep it up!
Lol, I've been on a smut roll as of late, so it was the natural progression of things. The fallout should be interesting. :D
Thank you for stopping in. Now I have to stop failing epically at my requirements. Ta and good morning!
Nice! Did you plan the parallel to Harry's parents being in hiding during Lily's pregnancy? It's neat. I'm still wondering whose baby it is. You've been nicely enigmatic with the timeline. Hermione would have realized if it was too late to be physically possible as Ron's; what's interesting is that she doesn't remember sleeping with Harry, and that wasn't that long after Ron died, was it? Interesting. Are you going to reveal with the birth? And are you going to give them any happiness whatsoever?!
PS. Nice touch with Teddy - I was wondering about him when he suddenly appeared!
Author's Response: I didn't really parallel anything on purpose; it was just the next natural step, with Harry worrying that Yaxley was going to hurt the people he cares about. I'm enjoying how people are fishing for information about whose baby it is. All will be revealed in due time. :D I am planning on a non-miserable ending, but I can't guarantee anything, because my muse does pretty much what she likes. You know how that works.
The scene at the beginning with Hermione was lovely - Harry knows her so well! And a Burning Curse? Ouch! Harry's guilt is so intense, wow. I feel bad for him, yet I can't help thinking he's a bit of an arse for actually breaking up with Ginny right after Ron dies. That sets up loads of conflict, though. Can't wait to see what's next. ;)
Well, Harry IS an arse, so I'm not surprised he went all noble and 'did her a favor'. It just seems like a Harry thing to do. Glad you like it. The next chapter has a good amount of action in it. :D
~Teh Other Twin
You are the queen of angsty!Harry and I bow to you. You are also the master of unspooling mystery and plot. And you are setting up great death and destruction to come, of this I am certain. And possibly a twist with George. I shall have my kleenex ready. Write fast, twin.
Haha, you have no idea how many people are BEGGING me to tell them who the baby daddy is, but I'm sticking to my guns and not telling. I figured that George isn't entirely the vigilante type, though his general disdain for Harry is real.
Update will come... eventually. However it takes to finish an In the Ashes chapter and write another one for this. :D
James was living the dream. He was the star player on England's 2030 Quidditch World Cup team, and he was showing the world how it was done. That was, of course, until foul play sent his world asunder.
Albus saw his brother's livelihood snatched away in the blink of an eye, but more than that, James was...different. He was cold, angry, and callous - a far cry from the man he was before. Harsh words and even harsher attitudes put them at each other's throats.
Me again. :)
So once again you manage to surprise. Here I am thinking James is really going to get it, and you end up with a sweet and fluffy proposal at the end! Ha! So who is this fiance, Augusta? I liked her spunk at the end.
The beginning was great. I really believed that James was a world-class Quidditch player and that everyone, even Albus, was excited to see him play. The match itself was brilliant, as was the play that got him injured. I wanted a bit more on his injury; I think it would have set up his foul mood a bit more. And then Albus punching him in the face would not have felt a bit rushed. Of course, when you are drabbling, feelng rushed is the name of the game. ;) Just something to think about for non-drabbled stories.
I loved how Harry pretty much threw down the gauntlet and made them sit there and talk. Great little wrestling match! And getting James to finally admit what was wrong and talk about it - especially over a good bottle of Firewhisky - was great. I really felt for him. If I ever write the EoD, my James is also sidelined by a Quidditch injury and goes on to become on Obliviator instead. If I ever write it. ;)
Like I said, the proposal was very romantic, but I liked Augusta's response the best. Glad James wised up to her.
I know you guys are talking about British/American writing in the SBBC and I must say I always notice how natural your use of British vocab and slang is. I know you're American and yet you write the British so easily it's amazing. I am jealous.
As usual, nice to see your Albus/Scorpius dynamic. Nice one-shot! ~Gina :)
Yay! Waiting for your reviews is like waiting on food at a really good restaurant.
I always knew that I wanted James to be an ex-Quidditch player. I wanted him to be a keeper, because he seems like the personal glory type to me, and making him a Seeker, which is the other more solitary position, would have just made him into a cliche. I couldn't do that to him, because I like him too much.
Augusta, while not a real canon character, is Neville and Hannah's daughter, who is three years younger than James. In my story, About Last Night, it marks when James stops thinking of her as another cousin and more like, yeah...she's cute and I like her. Then, she gets him good. Their relationship has had some troubled spots, but I can say that, about two years after this story, they have their first child, Eric. He's a large part of my plot in VoJP (well, him and James both). They really do love one another, but Augusta doesn't have that Gryffindor spirit that Neville had, which causes Albus to not like her in the future.
I thought that knowing about the fall and the resulting injury was sufficient in explaining James's angstiness. I did try to make it clear that Albus didn't know that James was never going to play again until he said so toward the end. Probably could fill that part out more, which I might do later.
I'm glad you liked it, and I think Harry would definitely lay down the Dad law in that situation. I was actually inspired to do the feuding brothers over a holiday mean by the brother duo of Kurt and Kyle Busch in the NASCAR Sprint Cup Series. One year, during the All-Star Race (both gentlemen are very good racers), Kurt wrecked Kyle trying to win, and neither talked to each other for six months. THat was until their grandma sat them down and told them that they would NOT ruin her Thanksgiving. lol
I'm glad you liked it, and you've given me some things to think about.
I like it! I read the original and it seems to me like you did a great job writing something similar in the Potterverse. Plath's poem seems much darker whereas Ron's incident with the slugs is really rather humorous, but that sort of adds to the strange irony of even reading about slugs in poetry at all. I love the occasional rhyme, it makes it feel a bit more quirky and trippy off the tongue. What were the key words? Was Parisian one of them? Nice job! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks you. Yes *sigh* parisian was one of them. That was the only one I had real trouble with. The others were Flitwick, thirty, benign and icicle. I enjoyed writing this very much because the original has always fascinated me. ~Carole~
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2011 Quicksilver Quill awards.
Minna, that is cool! It is sort of nightmarish, to be honest - so much repetition of the shadows and the clinging and the fear makes it rather dark and scary. What a mood! Nice job! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you :DD (omg this review is from FOREVER ago how have I not responded before)
You are such a gifted writer, Natalie! Your prose is just amazing at times, so full of depth and emotion. And then to take these two seemingly random characters and throw them together in such a powerful way and have it work - even better!
Writing from Rabastan's point of view really makes him sympathetic, which is ironic given he is a cruel Death Eater after all. But I like his voice here.
Regulus is wonderfully mysterious. Oh, there are so many things left unanswered, so many ways he could go! Very cool.
Great job including the other Slytherins of the era. And James, too, of course. ;)
Great start, this will be fascinating to follow! Good luck as you continue!! ~Gina :)
For some reason, your author's note - Wait! I have reasons! - made me stop and giggle. Which was odd after such a sad story. So my first question is - reasons for what? My second question is - did this pop out of the June drabble challenge on the beta boards? Just curious, as loads of people wrote Remus/Lily. I love reading about their friendship, and you wrote a lovely scene for them at the end.
The idea of Remus killing his baby sister during a transformation is so horrifying and sad. Very original though, and plausible as well. I was only a bit confused as to when it happened - did it happen before he came to Hogwarts, or after his friends found out about him? The first scene was a bit unclear, but I think they got drunk as friends and that's how it happened? That is really tragic. Kudos for daring to go there. The flashbacks worked well in detailing things more, revealing it bit by bit. I would only suggest trying to tie it to the opening a bit more. For example, why was he transforming with his friends out of Hogwarts?
I really wanted to leave a review to point out one thing: the tense jumps around several times. For example:
"He tried to give her a smile, but instead, he gave her a grimace. He wanted to say he was sorry, but it won't come out. It seemed like 'sorry' doesn't work anymore. It wouldn't fix anything. After a moment of silence, Lily spoke."
This paragraph jumps tense from past to present. "It won't come out" should be "It wouldn't come out" and 'Sorry doesn't work anymore" should be "Sorry didn't work anymore."
It happens again toward the end:
"It was his fault that his sister is dead, his mother is depressed, and that his father was always absent. He took away all their happiness."
As I read it, it should be "his sister was dead, his mother was depressed." This keeps it in line with "and his father was always absent."
Ditto on the next two paragraphs, but I won't point those out here. Just be sure to stick with one tense. :)
Sorry to point that out, but since you mentioned improving and concrit in your author's note, I thought it would help as you continue writing. I think you've got great ideas and did really well with the characters. Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Hello Gina! I’ll answer your questions now :) I thought that there would be readers that were not pleased with the story, so I gave reasons—maybe it’ll better if I call it “excuses”—excuses for my amateur-ness. No, I didn’t plan for this to be entered in the June Monthly, but rather in the weekly where the lovely barmaid requested for drabbles that will either make her laugh or cry. I did this, then I realized that it had to be under 500 words, not 800, and I couldn’t make it any shorter unless I don’t do it justice, so I put it back into the original length, added a bit more paragraphs, and submitted it as a one-shot. It happened before he came to Hogwarts for his sixth year, so that would be during summer. His friends had already found out about him. :) He wasn’t in the Shrieking Shack because he wasn’t at Hogwarts, and they got drunk during the night of the full moon, so they weren’t able to go to the place (I’m making this up; I just imagined it that way) where no one could be harmed by a werewolf. Yes, they did get drunk, and that’s the main reason why Remus ended up killing someone. He transformed out of Hogwarts because it was during summer, and they had a baby shower that night so I think that’ll explain if ever it was canon that Remus goes to the Shrieking Shack every full moon even if it was summer time. Yes, you’re right, I should have tied a bit of the memories to the beginning, sorry for the confusion! Ahhhh! Yes, the tenses, sorry about that! I really have a problem with those. I’ll fix it as soon as possible. Thanks for pointing those out! I will do my best stick with one tense, thank you! Thanks for all those lovely compliments, and thank you for taking the time to leave a review and helping me out with my writing! I truly appreciate it :)
Wow. Just, wow. You know, I don't tend to get emotional about stories, I really don't. I've written a few good tear-jerkers myself, but don't tend to get all sniffly when I'm reading fanfic much. But this one - oh my gosh, this is just brilliant. Really brilliant. I'm so glad I finally came around to read it, even if I have tears in my eyes. *sniff*
The other thing I realized as I was reading this was that I have hardly ever read a story about Remus and Tonks. I just haven't, for no particular reason. And now I am so struck by how absolutely tragic they are. How hard it must have been for them to go to the battle. How it might have gone.
This is canon. I absolutely believe Remus heard the news and went straight to the battle. Of course he would! And I sort of hate Andromeda for calling him out on that. It's his duty as a member of the Order. He *has* to fight for a better life for Teddy.
But I've always wondered why Tonks went. She just had a baby, for goodness sake! This is perfect. She went after Remus, she went to get him. Ah, that's just so sad, to think that they didn't go together!
And then for her calling out to him to be the cause of his downfall. Oh oh oh. And then Bellatrix! Ah! I hate her for doing that, I really do. And yet, now I'm sure this is all what happened.
I love the use of second person. I wonder how it would feel if it were first or third person, but there is something about imagining myself as this new mother that is very effective. The flashback in italics is fantastic. And the end - guh. The last three lines are just perfect. Heartbreaking. Stunning.
I don't fangirl much, but I am so impressed with this story. I am going to remember this one. I think I am going to look for more Remus/Tonks stories now that you have peaked my interest. And I'm adding you to my list to see what you come up with next! Really amazing job, Emma! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Ginaaaa :)
Actually, this was the first Remus and Tonks fic that I've written, let alone read, really. So my feelings are like yours - I never actually realised just how tragic they are as a couple and a family. I never really got the appeal with them. I think Fred's death overshadowed theirs for me.
Mmm, Andromeda. She knows that it is Remus' duty to go fight, but she's just protective of Tonks. She knows what could happen, so she comes off as a bit tough. I always wanted to know why Tonks went too, and this way, it's a bit more understandable for me.
I'm glad you enjoyed the second person narrative! I don't think I could have written it in any other POV, but I'd be interested in seeing someone else tackling it from first or third. Oh, it's great that you liked the flashback and the ending!
Thank you for all of your lovely compliments, Gina! This was such a fab review. You really made my day :)
*sniff* I've just looked at this again and it's just so good, so sad. It made me tear up again just looking at it. I'm off to the QSQ nominations with it - wonderful story!
Nice! I like the set-up, with the three things that go wrong. I particularly liked how James was nervous. And oh, the bit about 'lils' was too funny!
It was quite sad, Petunia blatantly telling Lily not to come to her wedding. No wonder Lily was so upset. And awwww, James found her and helped her - so sweet!
I think what I like best is the quiet subtlety of their kiss. Who says they always come crashing together in the middle of a huge row?
Oh, I also like how the very end ties to Veils, since I've read that and know how it turns out, lol. Is this LoG compliant too? Cute story! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. This one's been hanging around for a while, but I altered it to be Veils compliant. As for LoG, I don't think their first date will be like this. In fact, I know it won't -ha ha- but I have lots of different scenarios in my head for that when I get to writing it. Glad you liked the kiss. I kept it understated because I wanted the other parts of the story to come through, plus first kisses are usually quite subtle, aren't they? ~Carole~
That was cool. :) They way you set it up totally made sense that Dumbledore would be Sorted into Slytherin. Of course, one could argue that he was brave enough to do what had to be done, and that's why he was Sorted into Gryffindor. Are you going to write more? Like, how Dumbledore reacts to being in Slytherin? Or will the story shift to Snape? Because the end ties to that nicely, but I'd like to see more of Dumbledore too.
Very nice little AU here! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Egads! I would love to write more of this, but I dunno. My brain has been consumed by PI so much - lol - and also, my huge syllabus for the first MA semester, I can't think of anything 'fanfictionly'. :O But...hmm...you got me thinking. Hehe. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!
Yes! It's up! I am so glad. Seriously, I laughed out loud the entire time I was reading it, and I've already read it several times. It's just so bloody brilliant and original. And funny, oh so funny. Tortured? Jazz hands? Just semantics? HAHAHA!
And yet this time I noticed something else as well: there is a bit of darkness in there, isn't there? It's not just a parody of the how the movies play on the books, it's a biting commentary on how the films miss a lot of important points about the characters themselves. We moan and groan about it every time a new movie comes out, but here we get to see how the characters themselves feel about being short-shifted on screen. And it sounds much more authentic coming from them, somehow.
I hope that made sense. :D
And then Tonks' incredible perception "All this...this is just fiction." Ah, brilliant. And it could be said of fanfic too, couldn't it? Love it. What a great line, a great insight.
I really can't wait to see what you do with the next one! I can only begin to imagine what Sirius might have to say to The Director, or how Dumbledore feels about some of the things the script has put in his mouth. Oh, I'm laughing already! Write up! And good luck as you continue! :)
Author's Response: Hmm... Sirius... I had not considered his perspective in this. I have two other ones in mind, though I've also considered adding in the reaction of Dumbledore to his angry movie counterpart... so I guess that is three more. Yay! This is going to be fun! I'm so glad you mentioned that serious tone of this as well. I expect that will continue in most of them. There really are upsetting implications for the characters with some of the changes we see in the movies. It will be interesting to explore them. Thanks so much for your continued encouragement, Gina. This would not have made it to the archives if not for the change you suggested. :)
Well, you already know what I think and which parts I love, but I had to come by anyway and say YAY! Because you know what my favorite part is? Watching you get so many positive reviews for your amazing idea. :) That and the Shoelace bit - still laughing! And I think the end is perfect - awesome! I can't wait for the next part!
Author's Response: Dude, these reviews are not good for my ego! I think people just need a laugh, as Ron said Fred reckoned in HBP. :D Thanks again for all your amazing help. I honestly think my favorite part is the bit you added about Ron's helmet, even though no one has mentioned it. I laughed out loud when I edited it earlier... which would be arrogant, except that bit was your idea. Hehe. Thanks a million for everything, Gina, and this nice review on top of it.
That is a very touching look into Hermione's character. We really don't know what happened to her at Malfoy Manor or how it affected her, and this is a beautiful scene exploring just that. What is so nice is that it is set in an everyday, ordinary moment - getting ready to go swimming - yet it explores extraordinary events, this terrible thing that happened to Hermione. It's also very subtle - I don't think I need to know the gory details of it, and so you addressed it perfectly. And then both of their reactions just seem perfect - Hermione is not completely broken, and Ron is completely accepting. Ah, he's so sweet and mature here, I love it! Very nice writing, Lori! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Who knows what it really would have been like for any of them, trying to recover from all of this stuff? But when I think of Hermione, I think of her being very strong, yet at the same time, very weepy. In my imagination, she does very well with regular life, and then its the surprising little things, the everyday things, that sort of set her off and cause a bit of emotional fright or trauma. Sort of the way it is with grief. And it is a kind of grief really, isn't it? Thanks so much for your thoughts and for the lovely review, Gina. I always get especially excited to see reviews from writers whose work I love to read. :)