Penname: Gmariam [Contact]
Real name: Gina
Member Since: 05/04/06
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Welcome to my author page!

I am a teacher, musician, reader, and avid Harry Potter fan. I am originally from the Midwest and now live a bit farther south. I am thrilled to be a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well.

I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love!) I've listed them below with a short description since I know trolling through summaries can be tedious. Thanks for reading!

EDIT: Someday I will categorize my stories by genre. Today is not that day. ;)
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Summary:

There is a memory; a lake and a picnic blanket and a bottle of wine. There is a boat drifting off into the distance.

*

This is a companion piece to The Colour of Distance.

I strongly advise you to read that first.



Categories: Harry/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 2650 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/29/10 Updated: 04/29/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 05/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: And the embers never fade in your city by the lake.

Ah, what a great read. You do such a wonderful job with H/Hr and making it believable - this feels like it definitely could have happened! It makes so much sense, and you make it so tragic, this idea of their secret affair. I like how you intertwined the past with the present. Do you have any plans to write more about them? Or are they definitely over? Wonderful job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks, Gina! I really like writing this pairing in situations which could have happened. It makes them even more delicious :p I think this story is definitely over. Hermione realised how much she had to lose and she couldn't carry on with it. But having said that I hope I will write more of Harry/Hermione in the future just not within the same universe as this story. -Julia XD

 

Summary: "Do you know what he tried to do to Mary Macdonald the other day?"

"That was nothing," said Snape. "It was a laugh, that's all --"

"It was Dark Magic, and if you think that's funny --" **

Two versions of the same incident. But what did Mulciber actually do to Mary Macdonald that could be viewed in two different ways, and why was Severus Snape so keen to defend Mulciber?

** The words at the beginning of this summary are taken directly from The Prince's Tale, Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I doubt that surprises anyone.

Thank you very much to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this fic for me.



Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 1926 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/02/10 Updated: 05/02/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 05/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

Great idea! I think you managed to find something that could be interpreted in several different ways. You worked Snape into the club very well, and I really liked how Lily jumped on James at the end, even though he was the one to rescue Mary! My only question is: James asked Mary not to mention the Cloak, but didn't the Slytherins see it too? I wonder how it would have played out if James had stayed hidden during the rescue - but then, that might not have been very in character for him.
Oh, and great research on all those names!! A nice missing moment. ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I'm thinking that as it was dark and that the Slyths were otherwise occupied with Stinging Jinxs to their groins, and that they were furthur away than Mary was to James, that they didn't see it was a Cloak. Good spot thiugh - ha ha. Thanks for the review, Gina. ~Carole~

 

The Happy Couple by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Romilda Vane is a young reporter for The Daily Prophet. Currently writing a popular column for the Social pages, she is outraged when the highlight of the social calender - the wedding of Harry James Potter to Ginevra Molly Weasley - is given to Lavender Brown to write.

Lavender isn't happy either, for their boss (He-Who-Pays-Our-Wages) has threatened to assign her to the Cookery section unless she dishes the dirt on her friends. She readily agrees to Romilda taking on the assignment for what could the Saviour of the Wizarding World possibly have to hide?

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for The Weddings Challenge in The Great Hall. I chose prompt 3 - The Daily Prophet Report.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I think you all know that.


Thank you very much to Samarie (Hopeful_Song) for beta'ing this story for me, and giving me some excellent advice.

The Sexual Sitiuations are really very mild, and merely implied.

Categories: Various Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 4964 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/23/10 Updated: 05/23/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 05/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Happy Couple?

Brilliant as usual. Why? Because you sure work down to the details, wow! And you don't throw them in the reader's face, but just weave them into the story naturally so we just accept it as truth. So easy to read - I never question anything you write, because it's all backed up by the story. (I hope that all made sense, lol)

Really original idea. I loved your framing device and how you revealed bits and pieces of Harry, Ginny, and Dean's story throughout but using Romilda's POV. But now you have to write that other story - and tell us how Lavender got the scoop from Harry. :D
Good luck in the challenge!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: WOW! Thanks Gina, I'm so glad you liked the story and found it believable. There were so many ways I nearly went with this and other secrets that nearly spilled out, but I tried to keep it as simple as possible, yet also leave something for the reader to make their own minds up about. Thanks for the great review... and good luck to you too. ~Carole~

 

All My Life by Secret
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 27]

Summary: When Lily and James are both awarded the Head Boy and Head Girl position, they are forced to get along for the sake of their school. Unfortunately, neither Lily nor James are willing to let their guard down. What results is a story that is so passionately tumultuous, neither one of them ever realizes that they have not only crossed the thin line between love and hate...but they are now dancing in its depths.

As the entire magical world battles the oncoming threat of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named, Lily and James will have to learn that the only way to defeat the darkness is to find the light...in themselves.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 20420 Chapters: 8 Completed: No
Published:
05/26/10 Updated: 09/04/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/21/10 Title: Chapter 6: All Falls Empty

For some reason, I just jumped in here, and it was a good jump. :D I loved the bit with Lily holding her wand backwards, lol! Their interaction was great. Even better was the scene with Dumbledore - fantastic calling them out, yet with such Dumbledore style. And James's answer at the end was perfect. This is very well-done! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/21/10 Title: Chapter 7: Ride Across the River

Great fight! There was some real emotion there, and I loved that it came from James as he pressured Lily into telling him why she hated him so much. The bit about Severus was a surprise, but made sense. I don't know quite how much James would have felt responsible for it, or if he would have truly apologized, but it was still well done.
I always felt there was a reason James became responsible seventh-year. Living up to his mother's expectations is a good one. It's funny, but in my personal Potterverse, Lily's parents were killed in a car accident. ;)
Loved McGonagall and the spell on the door was great!
I noticed that you jump between both of their points of view throughout the chapter. Often this can be jarring, but somehow your narrative flows strong and smooth enough that it works very well.
I really like how realistically contentious they are. It's not immature like the few glimpses we get from JKR, and it's not him badgering her constantly and her rejecting him like we see everywhere else. There is depth. I love the strong emotion. It makes me want to write a far more contentious J/L story now. ;) It also builds things up so that readers will just freak and squee when they finally kiss, lol. :)
Great story! Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a beautiful review! It was the inspiration I need to get me through another chapter :)

 

Summary: Martha Macdonald is in trouble. If she doesn't pass enough O.W.L.s then her dad has decreed that she will not be coming back to Hogwarts for her N.E.W.T. years. For Martha, returning to Hogwarts is essential or her dream of playing professional Quidditch will disappear faster than the Snitch at the start of a match.

Perhaps if she'd studied instead of flying, then she wouldn't be in this mess. Maybe if her boyfriend wasn't the distracting Sirius Black, then her brains wouldn't turn to mush as soon as she bent over her textbooks.

Or, says a small voice in the back of her head, perhaps she's just stupid.

Will Martha scrape an Acceptable or will she always be a Troll?

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff, and this is my entry in the Madam Pomfrey's Character Clinic Triathlon: Original Characters. Prompt # 1 - Exam Stress

Thank you to Kara (Karaley Dargen) for beta'ing this fic.

Martha Macdonald is my OC from The Lions of Gryffindor and Apparently Asleep.

Disclaimer: Sirius Black is not mine. He belongs to JK Rowling as does everything else you recognise in this story.



Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 2519 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/27/10 Updated: 05/27/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ha! The last line was great! Of course he failed that one. I really liked your original character, Carole. What I liked best, however, wasn't even the focus of the story: I really liked reading about a female Quidditch player. We know they're out there, but we don't read about them much. I thought that was a nice twist to Martha, to make her so interested in Quidditch. Oh, and I loved the veiled references to Animagi, hee hee. Sirius was great. :)
So - did she pass?? :D
Nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you. Martha grew on me. She was supposed to be this dippy girl with a crush on James, but then Sirius waded in. At one point I considered killing her (I am brutal), but then I decided I liked the Quidditch angle as well, so she turned up in my Tonks fic as well. One day I may write some more about her career post H/W and before she meets Tonks. Thanks for the review. ~Carole~

 

Being Muggle with Rooney by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Blast! The last time Big Joe cornered me, I had somehow turned his hair blue and scared him off. This time, I am not allowed to use magic or I’ll be expelled from school.

I don’t want to be beaten into pulp, though, do I? But “ darn it “ my wand is not in my pocket!

I am Andrew Carlton, Ravenclaw student, and nephew of Florean Fortescue, the ice-cream man of Diagon Alley. And I’m about to get the beating of my life.





This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the Character Clinic Triathlon, Round 3: Original Character. My chosen prompt is 2: Adventure during the Summer Holidays.

Many thanks to the original Brit Carole (Equinox Chick) for beta-ing this for me, for Huntingdon Hall and Oakdene, and for pork scratchings. Thanks to Lori (WeasleyMom) as well for the prank. Yes, the best pranksters are in Hufflepuff.

DISCLAIMER: I am not JK Rowling. Premises for story belongs to her, though Andy and Rooney are mine. ;)

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3307 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/28/10 Updated: 05/29/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: And then my best mate Rooney arrives.

I love this kid, he's a keeper! I love his background - his mom's a Squib, his dad's a Muggle, yet his uncle is the great Florean. Very cool. But what I liked best about this story was the idea of a wizard living in both words. I LOVE that he told his best friend - I mean, why not?? I'm very glad that they were able to work things out. The way Rooney handled the bully was great - perfect best mate material. I can just picture Andy taking him to Diagon Alley. Do you think that would even be allowed? Do you think you'll write more with him? I like him and like how you write in first person. Really nice story, Natalie! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: GINA!



YAY for Andy - I am rather fond of him, too. I definitely want to write more of him. :D I initially planned to have Andy taking him to Diagon Alley, but didn't want to get caught in canon issues. However, if parents can visit the place (we know the Grangers were there), maybe Rooney can slip in under adult (Florean) supervision? This necessitates another AIM chat! lol.



Thanks for the review, Gina. It was a really pleasant surprise.



~Natalie.

 

Breaking Rules by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary:

Rules.

How easy it was to break them.

All it took was a smile, a few good conversations, and some daredevilry on your part to take risks and do the impossible.





A birthday present for my e-bestie Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor), who always manages to make me laugh without even trying. Happy Birthday, love!



DISCLAIMER: Not J.K.Rowling. All characters belong to her.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1196 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/01/10 Updated: 06/02/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/02/10 Title: Chapter 1: For Her.

Lovely little fic! I love how casual the first person narration is, and yet so packed with emotion. The kiss was the best - very 'squee'-worthy, it totally made me grin. Lucky Jess (Happy Birthday!) - you did a great job with the pairing for her! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Gina!



YAY! You liked the kiss. :D I am loving the first person narration in general now, what with PJ and Colfer's Half-Moon being great books written in that form.



Thanks for reading and reviewing!



~Natalie.

 

Summary: Draco Malfoy stood in front of the mirror and studied his reflection closely. Flicking some invisible dust off his shoulder, Draco was satisfied. He knew he looked the part; it was just that the guests didn’t know which part he was playing.

Draco Malfoy is about to get married. The wedding has been planned for months, a union between the class of the Malfoys and the new money of his bride. His parents are delighted.

But Draco, possibly for the first time in his life, is about to defy them.

I am Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry in The Weddings Challenge - category Surprise Wedding - in the Great Hall Challenge.

Thank you so much to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this story in record time.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I'd love to be, but alas, she has far more talent.

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 4258 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/01/10 Updated: 06/01/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Runaway Specials.

Very nice - and very different! So many of us readers and writers imagine Draco as a reluctant groom, unable to truly care about anyone - this was nice to see him actually in love, and actually acting responsible by his unborn child. Of course, he was a complete arse to Daphne, but he wouldn't be Draco if he weren't, would he?
I like the irony of all these rather undesirable acquaintences being the ones to marry him, especially Hagrid. And having Daphne show up at the end (great slap!) was a nice twist, since I would have expected one of their parents - or a far more angry jilted fiancee.
Very original and very well done - good luck! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'm glad you liked Hagrid because I hummed and hawwed about him. As Natalie pointed our, all these lovely characters were helping Draco, despite him still being an ungrateful git. The reaction to his unborn child came about because of the Scorpius fic I'm writing. I want them to have a decent relationship. Anyway, thank you, again ~Carole~

 

The Clarion Call by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: A poem written in honour of those who fought in the Battle of Hogwarts, May 2nd, 1998.



This poem won the Last Line Standing Challenge at Poetry Anyone. :) It also won a QSQ for Best Poetry. Thanks to Carole (Equinox Chick) for beta-ing this.



DISCLAIMER: Not J.K.Rowling, though I wish I was. Haha!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 145 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/01/10 Updated: 06/06/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: For the Heroes of Hogwarts

I like it! I read the Burn's poem and think you did a really good job with the challenge. You used the last word of every line, but your poem is completely original. It really fits the mood of the Battle of Hogwarts. In particular, I think the second stanza, referring to house rivalries being put aside, is brilliant. Congrats on winning the challenge, I think you are a wonderful poet! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ginaaaaa!



How sweet are you? I was just glaring at my own LJ post when this showed up. I squeed in my mind because my roomies are sleeping and I couldn't do it loudly. :( I'm happy you think I'm a good poet. Hehehehe! Thankssss!



~Natalie.



P.S. I promise I won't tell anyone about you and sneezing. Er. Oops.

 

Brazen by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 24]

Summary: Past Featured Story

*These are the times that try men's souls.

Well, that couldn't be any more real for Draco Malfoy than on the eve of his wedding. He was getting married the next day, but all he could think about is how his life was about to become so much more damned complicated.

He had no idea.

 

*Quote - Thomas Paine, American revolutionary.

 

This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Humour



Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 6829 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/02/10 Updated: 06/03/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah Jess - I love how visceral your writing always is. Like I mentioned before, one of the reasons this is so awesome is that it is like one big long LJ rant, only from Draco's deliciously snarky point of view. It is also very funny, but in an oh-so-dark kind of way. I love your drunk Draco, but it is kind of sad at the same time, isn' it? It's another thing you do well: create sympathy for otherwise unsympathetic characters. Particularly by the end, I totally felt for Draco. I was waiting and waiting for the twist (since you had mentioned that it was quite an ending!) only that was so not what I expected! Loved it! And that's when I officially felt bad for Draco.
Other bits of awesome: Harry's appearance was spot-on, the way Draco dealt with the wedding preparations was fantastic, and the vows were hysterical. Not to mention the very consistent, creative tone throughout, some great vocabulary, and that jaw-dropping ending.
Add to that this is once again so unique - remember when I teased you about taking this wedding prompt and turning it angsty? Well, you did it and you did it great, with a hell of an attitude. I really hope your story does well in the challenge, because it totally deserves it! Good luck!
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Oh, how I love you. This story needs to be read more, because I'm pretty sure it's now in my top three faves. Carole favourited it to read it again. :D

Gah, I can't wait to read your J/L (did I really just say that?). *hugs*

~Jess

 

Unbreakable by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary:

The marriage between Dorian Nott and Isla Black was the talk of the town, but to reporter Fredrick Whitlatch, it was yet another mundane societal write up. However, when the wedding started without the bride, his wish of a bigger, better story came true all too fast. What happened next went futher than his wildest imaginings.

Where was Isla?

 

This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best History Story.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Mild Profanity

Word count: 4674 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/04/10 Updated: 06/06/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was great! I am amazed by how different this is from your other stories - so sweet and touching and heartfelt. None of Draco's angry bitterness here! I kept expecting something bad to happen, and it never did, and that was perfect for this story, because Isla and Bob deserved a happy ending.

You really did a great job creating these two characters - and Frederick - in such short time. The couple sounds fascinating - strong and in love and so defiant. And to include Isla's disability is this way - as a source of her family's ire - was so original and well done, and really lent her character depth and sympathy.

I wonder if an Unbreakable Vow was a bit strong for the situation, but I agree that Bob in particular would not trust Frederick without some show of honor.

Very well written, such a steady, consistent tone - wonderful job! Good luck! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Aw, thanks, love. :D

To be honest, I wasn't - and still am not - sure about how well I did on this story. I probably should have had it betaed for at least a second opinion. I probably didn't even carry out the prompt correctly, but whatever, lol. 

I didn't want to use the Unbreakable Vow, honestly, but in my mind, I really could not concoct any other manner to assure that Fredrick would be silent. Despite being a bit of a bigot himself, Fredrick was always a decent sort, hence his dislike of Dorian (whose story may or may not come to existence) and his desire to spend as little time with Cygnus Black as possible. But what I really wanted to get out of him was a modicum of understanding for Isla and her condition.

To me, it was most important to break away from the typical Bob/Isla mold. It's always been the beautiful, oppressed Black princess and the handsome, sweet Mudblood boy. It still has those elements, but Isla's family doesn't mistreat her indiscriminitely; she has her condition that no one yet understands (seriously, how many people with palsy, MS, and epilepsy were ridiculed and tortured for being 'possessed' before their true conditions were understood), not to mention, she doesn't do herself any favours by defying her father. Also, Bob, though protective of her, is a bit of a jerk, but if I was him and had to endure the discrimination fo being Muggle-born in that particular time when it was not the greatest time to be of that blood status.

I'm glad you like the characters, and I hope to expand on this story in the future. Thanks for reading. I heart you, as usual, and I look forward to finishing the move so I can lurk/stalk your author page like I've been wanting to since the fifth of, oh, I dunno...forever. :D

*hugs*

~Jess

P.S. - Congrats to the Blackhawks for a stellar Cup effort. I'm truly happy for them. 

 

Veils by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 28]

Summary: It is the night before Petunia Evans' wedding. As she stares at herself in the mirror, she is satisfied with her appearance. The dress is perfect, cleverly cut to give her curves, and she looks like a dream. Yes, the dress is perfection ... but what of the veil?

She has promised Vernon and his formidable mother that she will wear the Dursley veil. It is an antique. A family heirloom.

It is hideous.

What she needs is a miracle to rid her of the ugly thing ... or perhaps a touch of magic.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Weddings Challenge - prompt Big Weddings - in the Great Hall Challenge over at the MNFF beta boards.

Thank you to Samarie (Hopeful_Song) and Kara (Karaley Dargen) for beta'ing this.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. I doubt anyone is surprised by that.

Holy Moroley and all things Padfoot! This won the QSQ for Best Marauder Era story. Thank you!

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 5393 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/05/10 Updated: 06/05/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Veils

That was really lovely, Carole! You are such a master at MWPP characters. James and Lily really sparkle - they work so well together, it's adorable! The bits with the dog/Sirius were great too - especially when he was sitting outside smoking and James chased him away. Oh, that made me smile!
Really, though, the best part was Petunia. I can't say I like her anymore than I do later on, but you've fleshed her out and given her some depth. Vernon's family in particular really shows us how she became the character we know in PS - great job. And one wonders why Petunia was so drawn to Vernon, when she shows flickers of regret here. I did feel for her, and Lily too. You are such a talented writer, I'm glad I finally read this - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I did find it quite hard to write Petunia sympathetically, so had to stop back from a lot of what we knew about her later. I didn't care about Vernon - ha ha - I'm sure he was always horrible. Glad you liked Sirius, I couldn't leave him out. ~Carole~

 

Harry Potter Is Here by mgle_teacher
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 4]

Summary: We must be willing to let of the life we have planned, so as to have the life that is waiting for us — Joseph Campbell

Pairing: Harry Potter/Pansy Parkinson

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders, Non-Consensual Sex, Self Injury, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 2767 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/12/10 Updated: 06/12/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Hi Ritta! It's so nice to see you writing and posting! You were right, this is very dark. You did a really good job of making it believable, too. The beginning gave just enough information for the reader to nod and understand and accept that this is what happened to Harry. The bits with the cutting were chilling.
I liked the way you alternated between the past and the present, telling two stories, really. It made it like sort of a mystery to figure out what was going on in italics based on what you were giving us in regular print.
Very original pairing! I find the idea of Pansy being exiled fascinating. I could definitely see Harry going into self-exile. You built up their relationship nicely. I can't say I'm rooting for them, of course ;) but it made sense in your story. Did you write this from a prompt?
Nice job, and I'm not even going to mention commas! ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks, Gina. I'm glad it came off as dark. I wasn't sure I was channeling Harry correctly, but I tried. The alternating italics are meant to be the continuation of where the normal narration ends so it is like telling two stories except it's the same one. Lol. I did write this for a prompt. -coughs-CommaNazi-cough-

 

Through The Veil by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary:

It didn’t seem possible. He had been standing before her merely five minutes ago, but now he was gone. She stared up at the empty archway. He had mentioned voices, but there was no sound. Someone was holding her, pulling her arm, calling for her to run, but she couldn’t move. Where had he gone? Where had Sirius gone? Why weren’t they coming back?

Ginny thinks back to that fateful night in the Department of Mysteries—the night she lost Harry Potter.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Substance Abuse, Suicide

Word count: 1176 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/14/10 Updated: 06/14/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: That night seemed so long ago.

Ah, the veil - what a fascinating subject to write about. I've thrown a few people thru it myself, lol! I like your premise here - that Harry went through after Sirius. It would have certainly changed the outcome of the war. I like how you focused on just one aspect, though - Ginny. She saw it happen and you can clearly feel her lingering pain and anger, almost like post-traumatic stress disorder. Given that she also lost her family, it is no wonder she has moved away and turned to drinking to try and get over it. This strikes me as a scene you saw and felt very clearly, and have written to be very moving for the reader. It was a very possible 'what if?' scenario that was well-written with lots of emotion. I enjoyed reading it even though I felt so sad for Ginny! Nice work! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hi Gina! Thanks for the lovely review. I've always found the veil incredibly fascinating and I remember thinking that it would play a large role in Deathly Hallows. I'm not disappointed that it didn't, though, because I don't think JKR had to explain everything, and it also leaves a lot of room for us fanfic writers to play with! You're right about thinking about this scene vividly. I wrote the original drabble for the SBBC Couples Activity for the Doctor/Rose pairing. I was thinking about how Rose and the Doctor were eventually separated by the void and it made me think of the veil. What if Harry and Ginny had been separated by the veil before their own relationship could flourish? It is a tragic thought (I ummed and ahhed as to whether to put this fic in the AU, Harry/Ginny or Dark/Angst category) but I felt compelled to explore the idea. Again, thanks so much for the read and review! -Julia XD

 

The Third Option by SaladOrCellarDoor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Peter Pettigrew has fallen hard for a girl. The only trouble is, she's not his usual type...or any guy's usual type, for that matter...

“No, Remus. I like her, like her. A lot.”

“Well, you’ve got eyes, Pete. Have they been checked recently?”

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 2777 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/25/10 Updated: 06/28/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Third Option

That was quite cute! How refreshing to see Peter as a real person and not some poor hanger-on with no personality. I liked that he had his own sense of humor and sarcasm. The way Remus had Peter share his feelings with the girl right behind him was clever. I would only point out that some words, like Muggle and perhaps even Marauder, should be capitalized. Nice job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've wanted to write a fic humanizing Peter for some time now, and the idea of throwing him in a romance came to me a few weeks ago. I love reading Marauder (notice capitalization? lol) fics, but it always bothers me when people show James and Sirius and even Remus treating him poorly. Surely, he wasn't the most popular of the Marauders, but they wouldn't hang out with him if they didn't like him, and the Marauders were popular as a group, so a lame Peter would have really dragged them down. I think it's important to show him with attributes that could easily turn into the Peter we know, but some redeeming qualities as well that would lead the Marauders to like him and trust him. The thing with Remus was an idea I've had for a while for no particular story at all, and it just naturally worked itself into this fic. I think I finally realized I needed someone clever like Remus to pull it off! Ooh, are those really capitalized? I'll have to go in for an edit, then. I forget which ones are proper nouns in the Potterverse. Thanks for letting me know! Many thanks for the review!

 

Forget Me Not by SaladOrCellarDoor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: This story of Frank and Alice Longbottom's blossoming relationship at Hogwarts reveals the origins of the gum wrapper mystery that surrounds their time at St. Mungo's.

Frank/Alice

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1212 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/10 Updated: 06/29/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Forget Me Not

Lovely story! Great characterization from the very beginning. It was very bittersweet, particularly this part:
"He wanted to remember this moment, this very feeling, even in his old age. For an instant, he saw himself with graying, receding hair, telling the story of his young love, Alice, to his grandchildren. He promised himself he would remember every detail, recite the entire conversation from memory."
Knowing what happens to them later makes this really stand out. Excellent job.
Ooh, I hate to nitpick after my last review, but don't forget to capitalize Muggle as well as Hogwarts classes like Charms and Potions. :D
I've enjoyed your stories, good luck with your writing! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It really means a lot that you read another one of my stories! Yay! I really wanted to throw in subtle reminders about their future so that the gum wrappers would tie in even better at the end, and I'm so thrilled you picked up on them. Haha, feel free to nitpick. I fixed the capitalization in the other story, and I'll do the same here. In my mind, I just don't think of those things as proper nouns! It's good to remind me. (: Thank you so much for your feedback. It's so sweet and very appreciated. Much more writing to come!

 

Summary:

Lily Evans had a lot of thinking to do, and what better time to do it than the crack of dawn on a Saturday? Not a person in sight...usually. That was, however, until she happened upon a certain group of boys, but without their normal mischief.

Follow Lily as she investigates this awkward run-in with James Potter and his friends.



Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 3007 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/12/10 Updated: 07/15/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love it!! You know I am slightly obsessed with James and Lily right now and this was a lovely look at their relationship through the character of Remus. I am also loving Remus at the moment, and you wrote him so well - so careworn, so sad. Great insight into his character when he said he was not bothered by people hating him, but by people fearing him. I loved how he initially reacted to Lily with anger, but she put him in her place. Now he has another supporter. Lovely! And then the way he helped Lily see James in a slightly different light - very nice! And the dream comment was perfect. Ah, I love a good Marauder story. Was there another Marauder thing you were working on as well? It's good to see you posting again! As always, I loved reading your story! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Heart.

Remus and Lily's relationship has been ignored throughout fanfiction, and I don't know why. You'd think, out of all the Marauders, Remus is the one with whom Lily would probably have the most in common. A platonic relationship between them only makes sense, especially if Lily knew how much he had to endure and still put up a brave face. That seems like the type of person that she would like.

And, yes, I have another Marauder bun in the oven. I'm going to finish it as soon as I get my monthly stuff done. Thanks for reviewing, as always, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

Cheers!

~Jess

 

Summary:

The hallmark of Dumbledore's Army was their refusal to give in to the darkness that was slowly but surely emcompassing their world. As long as there was a hope, the DA would live on. This is a warning, an invitation, a promise, to one and all that they will not back down until the battle is won.

 

This poem placed third in the Last Line Standing Challenge in Poetry Anyone. The last words of each line are from a non-HP poem (Robert Frost, but the name of the poem escapes me), but we were to build a new poem around it.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 141 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/22/10 Updated: 07/28/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/04/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I like it! Two funny things came to mind while I was reading this. First, it would make a good song. And second, it's so hopeful when so many of your fics are a bit dark and snarky, lol. I love your versatility! And how strong your poems are all the way through. Nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Hehe, poetry is the one thing that I will actually edit when it gets waffly. In prose, i figure what the heck and keep writing, but poetry sucks far more if it gets rambly. I hope that is what makes it strong start to finish.

I actually meant this to read like a song or anthem of sorts, so yay that this works in that capacity. And it was supposed to be an in your face message to anyone who thought of the DA as just a teenagers' gang. They were in it for good. I'm glad that came across.

Thank you AGAIN for the review. Heart heart heart!

~Jess

 

I Am Shame by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The war is over and people are rebuilding their life, happy and sad and grateful. But what about Draco?



Written for the End of an Era Challenge at PA (WON FIRST PLACE! YIPPIE!), and nominated for a QSQ for Best Poetry. :D Thanks!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 184 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/25/10 Updated: 07/30/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: I Am Shame

Whoa. I LOVE IT! I usually have a hard time with free verse, but this just nails it! This is fantastic! What did it for me was the repetition of the single lines in the next stanza - I am now naked, Amoung other things, I am now cursed, etc. Setting that as a stand-alone and then going into more detail in the next stanza is briliiant and really details what you were trying to say.
The list of crimes was wonderful, and I love the stanza with the colours. :)
This is very emotional, and no more so than the last four lines. Just, wow. Very powerful. Great, great work. I can't think of anything I would change, it's just a wonderful poem. You are very talented at free verse!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: *glomp*



I know you don't enjoy free verse, so I feel it is a huge accomplishment to have you writing such a great review. :D:D Glad you liked the single lines and their repetition; that was something I didn't intend to use because I originally wanted only the last line to be a single line, but I decided to take a risk as it does make you stop, think and be ready for the next stanza. And the colours! Colours are a major part of my poetry; you'll find them in most of the poems I've 'published' till now. :D



Again, thanks for the wonderful review!



~Natalie.

 
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