Penname: Gmariam [Contact]
Real name: Gina
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Welcome to my author page!

I am a teacher, musician, reader, and avid Harry Potter fan. I am originally from the Midwest and now live a bit farther south. I am thrilled to be a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well.

I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love!) I've listed them below with a short description since I know trolling through summaries can be tedious. Thanks for reading!

EDIT: Someday I will categorize my stories by genre. Today is not that day. ;)
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Hogwarts, Reunited by ProfPosky, Cheshlin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Teachers and students returned to Hogwarts the September after the battle to suspicion and prejudice. What can they do to pull all the houses together as a single Hogwarts, rather than separate houses under one roof?

This story is an entry in the Cooperative Challenge for June of 2009 by Cheshlin of Slytherin and ProfPosky of Gryffindor.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 8950 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/09 Updated: 06/28/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/11/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Congrats on winning the challenge! I don't know what the prompt was, but this was a nice idea, to show how so many different characters reacted to the reopening of Hogwarts. You set it up well and got our 7th years to return in a very believable way. It was great to see Hagrid and Slughorn as HOH, Hermione as Head Girl, Neville as Head Boy, Draco and so many others - even a great line from Snape! I particularly liked how you introduced Astoria Greengrass. I'm curious why, in your opinion, Harry and Ron didn't return?

The idea of sewing up tensions between the houses with the Slug Club and common room receptions was neat, too. And the way the castle repaired itself - of course it would! Brilliant!

There were some places where the narrative became somewhat confusing and could use some more breaks to make it clearer. At the beginning it was about Hagrid and all of a sudden without any break it switched to Slughorn. I had to reread it a few times to figure it out. It happened a few other times where the POV jumped around as well. The story worked fine with multiple viewpoints but only needed more breaks - a line or asterisks - to separate those shifts better for the reader.

I also thought the dialogue was a bit stiff at times - the big thing that jumped out at me was the lack on contractions. Hagrid was great, but I would suggest loosening up the rest of the dialogue and not being afraid to use contractions - these kids weren't so formal, after all! :)

Again - congratulations! ~Gina :)

 

Moments by ahattab33
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary:

Have you ever thought about those moments that really defined your life? The ones that were pivotal, life-altering? They can be as obvious as your wedding day, as defining as the birth of your child...or as small as a moment in time, as subtle as a glance between one person and another.

The greatest moments of our lives can sometimes be the shortest and simplest of them all.

A missing moment from the Half-Blood Prince and part of the "Moments" series.



Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1469 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/30/09 Updated: 07/04/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 04/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: Moments

I liked it! Second person almost always pulls the reader in and makes it feel so much more immediately. Given that this is also present tense, I thought it was very effective to experience and feel what Ginny was doing at the time. It just wouldn't read the same as first person or in past tense.
It's lovely to think that they did have these brief moments of happiness during sixth year, before they broke up. The end was wonderful - very mature and profound. Lovely fic, Amanda!
HAPPY BIRTHDAY! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: OMG OMG I CAN'T BELIEVE I NEVER RESPONDED TO THIS This is one of the first stories I ever wrote- and I didn't plan on writing it in second person, it just happened that way. Which is ultimately why I think it worked, because it just kind of flowed out of me for the scene I was trying to write rather than my trying to shove second person into a scene, if that makes sense. In my own head canon, they have lots of these little "dates" and times alone for poor Harry to be normal- for his life to seem like "someone else's" when he breaks up with her. Thanks for the read and review! <3 ~Amanda

 

I Am Alive by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Past Featured StoryAfter his conversation with Dumbledore at King's Cross, Harry wakes and reflects on life and what it means.

2009 Quicksilver Quill Award Winner for Best Poetry!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 141 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/18/09 Updated: 07/24/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 03/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: I am alive

Fantastic poem! Congrats on winning the QSQ! I love how you've written something so affirming interspersed with something rather dark from the book. Great connection and interplay. Love your word choice, all perfect for what Harry must have felt then. Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh Gina thank you! I forgot to reply to this review. Sorry! I still grin like a mad woman every time I think about the QSQ. It was such a lovely surprise! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

 

The Waiting Game by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: The waiting room at St Mungo's is a dreary place. Ginny knows it better than many people, for she spends her days there waiting -- and hoping.

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff writing for the extra credit One Floo over the Fwoopers Nest category in the Bookbasilisk Summer Challenge.

I would like to thank Apurva (DracoGurlFurever) for beta'ing this for me and making some great suggestions.

I am not JK Rowling - I doubt that shocks you.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 1950 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/07/09 Updated: 08/07/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/22/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well done! It's so sad, and yet so beautiful, with such a bittersweet ending. You are a very talented writer- good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks Gina. It was tough and personal to write so I'm pleased it didn't come across as mawkish. Carole xxx

 

Drowning, not Waving by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 23]

Summary: Past Featured StoryEveryone knows Oliver Wood. He's the seventh year Gryffindor obsessed with Quidditch. But why is he so focused? What drives him on? And how will he cope when the Dementors get too close to his Seeker, and Diggory catches the Snitch?

Shutting himself in the changing room showers, Oliver cannot bring himself to visit Harry in the hospital wing, for the Dementors have released long repressed horrors in his own life. Will he finally face the reality of his life and obsession?

This is Equinox Chick submitting her final for the Characterisation class on the MNFF beta boards.

I would like to thank Emma (Amortentia X) for her invaluable help in beta'ing this tale. She not only corrected my horrible punctuation but helped a great deal with characterisation. I would also like to thank fgweasley, inspirations, eternalangel, Electronic Quillster and luinrina for their suggestions in class. Last but most definitely not least - thank you, Prof Haylee for allocating me Oliver Wood!

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I doubt you're surprised by that.

** indicates a line taken from Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban.

The opening lines are taken from a Stevie Smith poem called 'Not Waving, but Drowning.'

Nominated for a 2009 QSQ award in the Best Same Sex Pairing category. Thank you.

Also nominated for a 2010 QSQ award in the Best same Sex Pairing category. Thank you!

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash, Strong Profanity

Word count: 8745 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/09/09 Updated: 08/09/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 03/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Carole,
I can't believe I haven't read this before. It's gorgeous, and I'm not just saying that because it's your birthday! I absolutely loved it. You are brilliant at these SSP stories. *hugs Monochrome* You know I prefer short stories, haha, but I wanted more of this, so I'm thrilled to know you're working on it! Yes!

I thought you did an amazing job with Oliver's character. I could feel his sadness--from his father's abuse to his closeted sexuality. It was heartbreaking. The saddest part was the end, when he told Cedric he was afraid - but for him. Hearing what happened to Danny and Oliver was awful. You really gave Oliver a sad past and a horrible father; I just glad you also gave him a loving mother, a lovely girlfriend, and Cedric. :)

You also really nailed Cedric. We totally get those glimpses of him wanting to be more for Hufflepuff in GoF, and you brought that out here wonderfully. And he was so confident but caring - damn, how could Oliver deny himself for so long! I wanted him too! LOL!

The way you worked the events of PoA into the whole story was great. Having read it, we didn't need to know everything that was going on with Harry and Co., but it grounded the story in something familiar without repeating anything we already knew. Lovely balance.

And the end! Guh! So, so heartbreaking (again) - and yet, also hopeful. Well, except for knowing what happens to Cedric. *sigh* I understand many of your status updates now. It must be hard, wanting to bring them together but damn Peter Pettigrew for interfering! Bloody rat!

Happy Birthday, Carole! This was a beautiful, well-crafted, well-written story, and I really look forward to the next one!
*hugs*
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so very much, Gina. This was my first SSP and came about because I had this image of Oliver 'drowning himaelf in the showers' ... Somehow this nakedness - ha ha - affected me and I was thinking who I could pair him with, someone equally hot and totally unexpected. A handsome man enters, and we all know who he is - hee hee.

I think you know that I'm struggling a little with the sequel. It's far longer than 9k for one thing and I'm wondering how I managed to pare this down to one shot size when I'm struggling so much with Riptide (that's the title of the sequel). Ho hum, it will be finished, I think I'm on the home straight with it, just don't want to write sad things :( (Bloody rat!)

Thanks again for the lovely review. I really do appreciate it, especially for this story which is one of my favourites. ~Carole~

 

The Difference You Made by Padfoot Patronus
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: All accomplished men like Dad share something in common – they are looked down, degraded, criticised for everything they say or do, right or wrong, and they take all of that in, patiently, uncharacteristically. Somewhere in those decades, the same society gives up on them, awards them with a pedestal of hero-ship and an immunity from all things used to roughen them up in a past life. People like Dad never again stand on the common ground like the rest of us.

Albus Potter reflects over past and present upon his father’s death. My impression of Harry Potter in later years – a hero of sort and so much more.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 3844 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/15/09 Updated: 08/23/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/24/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi! I think you've done a great job with this story, I'm glad I read it! It is very poignant, starting with Harry's death. You've taken his character in a really interesting direction with his addiction to smoking; it could be awkward (Harry Potter smoke? Never!) except you set it up and flesh it out a bit and make it believable in the context of your story. I only wonder why he started after Lily left - empty nest syndrome? :)
There is so much packed into this, but it is clear and adds a depth to the story that makes the reader want to know more about your version of these characters and their experiences. You do a really good job of introducing your original character without just saying "And Lisa, James' wife, came in." The only rather confusing bit - and pardon me if I missed something or am forgetting a bit of canon you are referencing - was something Hermione says to Ron:
And she still blames me for it… Doesn’t she? She thinks it was my fault.
I wasn't sure what that was about but it was one small thing.
I really liked reading your character of Albus Potter, he was a good choice for the POV and you did well with that. I especially liked meeting Lily. You did a good job with everyone, really. The row with Percy showed he hasn't changed much, has he?
The last line, "Dad was too good, too right, to be a hero." is fascinating! It sort of makes me want to tip that statement on it's head. ;) It was a good ending, the funeral and Albus's final statement. The paragraph about the reporters was especially good and seemed true.
Overall, I think you did a wonderful with this story. It was original and very touching. Good luck with your next one! :)
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

It wasn't awkward?! Thank goodness. This was meant to be my comeback fiction and I thought at one point I'd taken a long shot what with something so debatable like an addicted Harry Potter. I still think I could have done with a little more at the explanation but then that would have threatened to take the focus away. I also tend to find it hard to stop when I get going, so it was just better to stick with what I'd already written. Hmm. Why did he start after Lily left for Hogwarts? Perhaps he was smoking even before she left but did it secretly given the hazards. So he cared enough to wait in a way, but the temptation and the pressure which he was probably was under as part of his job and position made it hard for him. I didn't think about this too much, but it could be one of the above.



I'm glad the story was slow enough to come across as clearly expressed. I often find that although I have all of my story in my head, I forget the distinction between that and what my reader does and does not know. You surely know this too well ;) Thankfully, here I didn't struggle with that much. About that thing Hermione says, well like I said to Ari, I wanted something to suggest that not all was good between these families all the time. The very defensive and rude stance that James takes with Percy hints at previous confrontations too. Ginny's comment about 'getting the obvious wrong' suggests that the two may have ended up on the wrong side of each other before now. So that's something in the background, something that is still a raw memory for Ginny and Hermione and that which involves Harry. Perhaps it is regarding work. I'm not sure. Maybe this wasn't THE best way to try about this intent, but ah well.



Regarding Percy, you must read my response to Ari. He hasn't changed much on the surface so to say - but I tried to show that there's more to him than that. While James' views his father on a more personal level, Percy takes an outsider's view. It's just our perspective sometimes, it is not always bad.



Thank you for your words of encouragment, Gina! They mean a lot. Thank you for the lovely review.



Akay

 

To Win his Heart by mudbloodproud
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: What happened between Remus Lupin and Nymphadora Tonks after they left Bill’s bedside after he was attacked by Greyback? What made Remus see the light in his relationship with Tonks?

They went down by the lake and Tonks wouldn’t take no for an answer. This is their conversation.

I am mudbloodproud of Hufflepuff writing for the Gift of Gab competition on the beta forums.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 2045 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/21/09 Updated: 08/21/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/22/09 Title: Chapter 1: A War of Words

That was lovely! I enjoyed that very much. It's amazing how well you can convey character through dialogue alone, and you did a great job with Remus and Tonks. I loved the humor too - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

 

The Slow Burn of Betrayal by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: At school Peter Pettigrew was somebody. He was a Gryffindor, a Marauder and an Animagus. Peter Pettigrew was special. He would have died for his friends ... at school.

But what happens when he leaves the haven of Hogwarts? Peter is no longer one of four, but a man alone working at the Ministry. And with his friends caught up in life or death situations, is it any wonder that Wormtail gets overlooked.

This is the untold story of Peter's treachery.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for The Untold Story Challenge in the Great Hall on the Beta Forums

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, and whilst I would very much like to own Sirius and Remus (although she can keep Peter), I don't.

Thank you to Lexi (Harry Rulz) for beta'ing this fic for me. It really is appreciated.

~~~~


Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 4528 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/26/09 Updated: 09/26/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Slow Burn of Betrayal

Ooh, neat story! To think that Peter was seduced to the dark side by his lonliness and a pretty girl is a nice take on his betrayal. Great title and introduction. Very good buildup - I was really hoping she wasn't a Death Eater, but once she "slithered down the wall beside him" it was kind of over, wasn't it? I think this scenario is very plausible because it's so subtle. I think he must have been very lonely indeed, which is a sad commentary on his supposed friends. So what do you suppose happens next? Is he blackmailed into joining or does he join more willingly for Eleanor? Nice job - good luck with the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. Although, I knew in my mind that she was always on the 'dark side', it's nice to know that you thought she might be innocent ... I agree about his friends. It's always been my contention that leaving Hogwarts was what changed them (plus Lily effectively changing the whole Marauder dynamic). Not totally sure what happens next ... we'll see ... I think he just gets in too far and there's no going back. Thanks again ~Carole~

 

A True Weasley by ahattab33
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

All summer, Percy has been anxiously awaiting that moment he knows with change his life: the day he arrives at Hogwarts. But with all his expectations, will he be prepared for what the Sorting Hat has to tell him?

I am ahattab33 of Hufflepuff, and this is my entry for the Hufflepuff Back to School Challenge.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2378 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/26/09 Updated: 09/26/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aw, that was sweet! It's so nice to read a bit more about Percy, since he's always sort of picked on by his brothers. You did a lovely job fleshing him out a bit and making him a far more likable character than he was in some of the books. It's nice to think he started out this way, just any other kid nervous about his first day at school. The conversation with the Sorting Hat was fantastic! You really nailed his characteristics down well. Such a nice story, it really deserves more reviews! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

EEK! Someone reviewed this little story! My poor little Percy story is kind of shifted to the back behind my canon romance ones. I still feel like the only person who ever read it was Natalie, who beta'd it, so I was quite shocked to get your review, and quite pleased that you liked it.

When the challenge came out last year in Hufflepuff, I immediately thought of Percy, as I've always had those moments in the series why I wondered why he wasn't sorted in Slytherin, and decided that it while it would be cliche to say it was simply because he was a Weasley, but then I realized that at the heart of it, that actually was the case- because he WAS a Weasley, and in the end has some of those defining characteristics that the rest of his family had that made us all love them so. I think that's some of the writing I'm most proud of, the conversation with the Sorting Hat, in anything I've ever written, because not only does it convey something I really wanted to specifically convey, but I was nervous about getting his style of speaking down.

Your review made me beam. :) Sorry for the long reply!

~Amanda

 

Summary: Relishing a moment's peace at the end of the day, Andromeda Tonks sits and talks to her family. They may only be photographs, but still she chats and shares her life with them. But how can they help when Teddy runs home in an uncharacteristic rage after playing with Muggle friends in the park?

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the Halloween Challenge, Halloween Explained prompt in the Great Hall Challenge.

Thank you to Emma (Amortentia x) for beta'ing this story.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I doubt that surprises you.

Claimer: I am, like Ted Tonks, a fan of Tottenham Hotspur.

~~~


Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2295 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/09 Updated: 10/16/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 10/20/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Awwww!
Sorry, I actually said that out loud when Teddy got to the werewolf part. This was really sweet. You have such a simple, genuine way of capturing these characters and writing a very heartfelt scene with them. I love your writing style and your pacing here was really good. What a perfect idea for the challenge! Good luck! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. I'm pleased you liked the story as I don't write much Next Gen at all, but Teddy kinda draws me in. ~Carole~

 

Company by HollynPhoenix
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Minerva knew it was time to leave. She was ready. So why was it so hard to walk out that door? A one-shot moment of transition in one character's life after the war. Why are life's major transitions so challenging, and what is it we really need from each other?

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2108 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/01/09 Updated: 11/10/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Company

That was very sweet! I thought Minerva was beautifully in character and enjoyed her reflections upon leaving. I also really liked her interaction with Harry and Neville. Their gift was very touching. Well-researched and well-done! ~Gina :)

 

Cauchemar by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary:

After the defeat of Lord Voldemort, Harry is haunted by the ghosts of his past.



*


This is a sonnet from Ginny as she comes to terms with her husbands inability to move on.

Nominated for the 2010 QSQ Awards for Best Poetry!



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 118 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/17/09 Updated: 11/17/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 03/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: Cauchemar

Very cool! I can totally imagine that Harry went through something like this. This was very well done, so easily readable, and the concluding couplet was perfect. Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks Gina! Yes, I can't imagine that Harry WOULDN'T have gone through something like this. After everything he went through finding the Horcruxes and to the Final Battle where so many loved characters died... it's hard to imagine a happy!Harry afterwards. But thanks for the read and review! Glad you liked it!

 

The Colour of Distance by the opaleye
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: Past Featured Story

It’s quiet now. The universe is standing still.

She stares out across the great expanse of water.

He watches her longing gaze.

Finally alone.

My final task for the 'Watching the Mirror' class on the beta boards.

Nominated in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards for Best Non-Canon Romance.



Categories: Harry/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1636 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/04/09 Updated: 12/06/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 03/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: There's nothing I can say...

That was great! You really paced this well, building and building to the (dare I say it?) climax when they finally admitted they wanted and needed each other. I'm a canon shipper myself, but between you and Jess (and the movies, which definitely seem biased toward Harry/Hermione at times) I could absolutely see this! Your writing is very descriptive and emotional and really conveys this desperate need they have to fulfill. Wonderful job, I enjoyed reading this story! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Well I'm glad that you enjoyed this as a canon shipper. I really wanted it to flow like the song I quote from, slow and lilting until the final few climactic paragraphs. Thank you so much for the review!

 

Portrait by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A wizard gallery is a noisy place, but it's the quiet ones that will get you.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 146 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/04/09 Updated: 12/04/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 01/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was very touching. I like how it leaves so much to the reader's imagination. :) ~Gina

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. This was a nice one to write because its such a joyful snapshot.

 

The Dawn by ahattab33
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Past Featured Story

Ron Weasley is staying at Shell Cottage during the Christmas of 1997. These are the thoughts and feelings that occupy him.

This is ahattab33 of Hufflepuff, and this is for the "Watching the Mirror" class on the MNFF Beta Boards.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Suicide

Word count: 1921 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/05/09 Updated: 12/08/09


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 04/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Dawn

Amanda!
That was heartbreaking! And perfect, as well. I mean, it must be exactly what happened from Ron's point of view. I think you totally nailed it. I loved it.

You wove events and quotes from DH in efffortlessly. And yet, this was still your own fic. You really gave Ron an emotional depth that was so wonderful to read. We just don't get it with the books being from Harry's POV. I loved reading Ron's inner turmoil, sad as it was.

Bill and Fleur's appearance was understated and well-done. The Deluminator was brilliant. Ron tells us about it in DH, but reading it happening to him was much, much better.

I'm curious if you ever thought about continuing this a bit? You write Ron very well. Maybe someday you can continue up to the point where he finds Harry struggling with the sword. :)

Wonderful fic, Amanda! HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: *beams* I just...LOVE LOVE LOVE. You just made me melt into a million pieces again reading this...months later because I'm lame and am just now responding. But seriously, I do love this story, but I never thought everyone else would, too. And isn't it weird how much we love reading about Ron's agony? LOL poor Ron, we love you. Thank you so much....I have honestly never thought about continuing it because this part was always so clearly defined in my mind, but I've never thought about what happens next! I have really defined areas of head canon about certain things, lol. Again, thank you! Sorry for the late reply! <3 ~Amanda

 

Matthew Seven by DeadManSeven
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 7]

Summary: If asked, Yvonne would have admitted that she was caught in-between two worlds. She was a witch - a Healer working at St. Mungo's, in fact - who used Muggle methods to help her patients. She had no connection to the Department of Mysteries, and could not have thought she was trapped between the present and the past, reality and nightmare, truth and lie, the living and the dead...

Not yet, anyway.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders, Mild Profanity, Self Injury, Violence

Word count: 19465 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/08/10 Updated: 01/25/10


Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/20/10 Title: Chapter 4: The Good Tree

I was totally not expecting the bit about God. Absolutely fascinating. So few fanfics go into religion, this is a perfect way to address it. And an amazing cliffhanger as well! I can't wait to finish and leave a bit longer review. ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I was always disappointed that religion is such an untouched subject, since faith is left relatively unexplored in the canon. How does knowing magic exists affect people's faith? How do people raised with religious upbringings react to the magical world? How does magic affect views on miracles, ghosts on the afterlife? For that matter, are there athiests in a world with Horcruxes? The (very small) parts about God in my story are just the tip of the iceberg, I think.

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/22/10 Title: Chapter 5: The Ravening Wolf

This was a really fascinating story. Really well-written, engaging, and thought-provoking. I loved the characters as well the the well-paced progression of the plot. The horror aspects were well written and the cliff-hangers were great!

The ending was unexpected, at least the bit with Moss and what Yvonne did to him. Once we learned Yvonne's memory, I knew who the girl in the ward was. I had a feeling that patient would come back!

I only wanted a bit more at the end. Namely, how did Yvonne recover? But I sense that just wasn't a part of this story, that her final scene with Mary at the end was sort of where you were always planning on taking it. It was well-done, even if I wanted more details. :)

A great story and I'm glad to have read it for the review circle! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I wanted for this story to be unpredictable right up to the end, which then puts the actions of the main character through the story in a different light. It's a technique that crops up in a lot of anime, and is how practically every character on 'Lost' was established, and I find it fascinating. If you're given all of a character's backstory up front, you can probably figure out what situation they'll ultimately be put in in the climax of the story before the story gets there, and that's... well, usually boring, if the character or the plot are anything less than excellent, but having the layers of characters peeled away as the plot moves forward automatically gives the whole story a very different dynamic. The character is on a journey to further understand their world, and you're with them for that, but at the same time you yourself are also on a journey to further understand the character. It was a fun technique to use to plan.

Glad you liked it so much; I think it's got a lot for people to discover, if they're got the stomach to stick through it.

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Strait Gate

What a great start! You've quickly established a terrifically engaging character in Yvonne. I already feel like I know her, perhaps because she seems so Muggle-ish and yet works at St. Mungo's. Your attention to detail fleshes things out but doesn't get trapped in boorish repetition; everything contributes to the in depth sense of character and setting you've outlined her. You've also set up (I think, anyway) an interesting mystery/plotline about the emergency at the hospital. I'm already wondering how things tie to the summary.
Your writing is very good and I look forward to reading more! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: One of the things I realy wanted to do with Yvonne was anchor her in the Muggle world. She has an apartment with a toaster and a TV, she rides the bus to work and listen to an iPod, she's one of us. Yet she's a part of the magical world too, and I guess we as HP fans can relate to that, too. It always bothered me that there were no characters in the series that ever really remained strongly connected to any Muggle roots they had - not even Hermione, who I was sure was going to start a Muggle rights campaign base on her house elf activism - so I made one, and made sure to make as many Muggle references as I could. When else am I going to get the chance to, after all?

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 2: The Mote In Thy Brother's Eye

Wow, more and more mysteries! Great set-up, wonderful job building and layering things. This is fascinating, and just fantastic writing, as well. So descriptive here at the end in particular! Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: The image at the end of this chapter - of someone getting closer and closer to their reflection and then climbing inside their own eye - was the thing that sparked this story off, and I did a lot of thinking about who this person was and what exactly they were doing and how they got to this point. I hate anything to do with eyes - people touching them, talking about their contact lenses, things like that - so I paid very close attention to getting across the feeling of utter wrongness that went with that image, but also the sheer unreality of it. Like, where can the story go, after this? Guess you'll just have to read on...

 
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/19/10 Title: Chapter 3: The House Built Upon Sand

Oh my, that was really, really scary! Amazing writing! I don't like horror movies, but reading one is not as bad as actually seeing something like this actually happen on screen (eek!), and I really have to know what happened to Yvonne and if she is okay! Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: It's funny, because I think I'm the opposite - I don't have much trouble forgetting images in films, but sometimes descriptions of things will just stick like fishhooks in my mind. The girl on the bus was such a thing. I wanted to go a bit horror with this story, so I was trying to think of a concept that was particularly hard to get out of my head, rather than just an image of something grotesque. I think anyone can write about monsters and madmen, describe them in meticulous detail, but it's not going to have the right impact unless there's something underneath the monster, like.

 
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