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I am a teacher, musician, reader, and Harry Potter fan. I am a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well. While I am no longer active in the fandom, I am proud to have passed on my love of Harry Potter to my daughter!

I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love, even years later!) Thanks for reading!

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We All Fall Down by coppercurls

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A Rondeau poem about fighting the losing battle.

"Nevertheless, Harry, while you may only have delayed his return to power, it will take someone else who is prepared to fight what seems a losing battle next time -- and if he is delayed again, and again, why he many never return to power." Sorcerer's Stone, p298

By coppercurls of Hufflpuff house for the rondeau poetry challenge.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: We all fall down

Ooh, very dark! I thought this line was brilliant: "In Apathy's most torpid thrall." Awesome! Great connection to the first book - good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks very much, I\'m glad the mood came out well. Good luck to you, too!

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: We all fall down

Ooh, very dark! I thought this line was brilliant: "In Apathy's most torpid thrall." Awesome! Great connection to the first book - good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oops, double post- well thanks again ; )

The Prodigal Son by Vorona

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Percy seeks reconciliation with his family. Won 2nd Place in the June 2007 Patronus One Shot Challenge by Vorona of Ravenclaw.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Prodigal Son

Wonderful job!
The changes you've made from the original really polish it up. First of all, it flows very well; you've done a great job going back and forth between the action and Percy's thoughts and memories in a way that isn't ever abrupt, and still gives us plenty of information, all of which relates to what's going on in the story.
I love what you've done with Percy, making him an informant for Dumbledore. I think I might just be disappointed now if this doesn't turn out to be one of the surprises of Book Seven! You did a great job with his character, allowing us glimpses into both his thoughts and actions that really flesh him out and make him a far more sympathetic character than JKR has done (so far!)
I also still love the bit with the elephant. =)
I think the way you've tweaked the end works really well: Percy doesn't do as much explaining, but it all comes together perfectly for his family to accept him back. Adding the bit about Ron and Ginny at the end keeps it real: not everyone forgives and forgets so easily, but they will come around, like you said.
This was a wonderful story, very well planned and well written. Good luck in the challenge!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m really glad you got to see the finished version. I\'m glad you liked the changes I made, and also thank you very much for the luck! You were very helpful with this story.

Amazing Grace by Valentinia

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: To conjure a patronus, one must think of a happy memory. Her life is filled with happy memories, and sad. Yet she knows if she dwells on the unhappiness she will forget to live, and if she recalls the happiest moments, she will be able to fly, graceful free as a swan.

Originally written as an entry for the June One-Shot Challenge - The Best Patronus Ever.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 02/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Swan: A Lifetime of Memories

That was lovely! I like how the girl's identity was slowly revealed - I guessed it about halfway through. :) You did a great job with those little moments from Cho's life, stitching them together into her Patronus. Very nice! Congrats on being the 'Claw Story of the Week! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Wow thanks! I haven't been on MNFF for... a very long time... But I am back, and what a lovely review to come back to! :) Yeah, I wasn't trying to hide it, really - props for guessing! I'm so glad you enjoyed this story! What's that about 'Claw Story of the Week' though? :/ I was not notified! :D Thanks for reviewing!

Where Souls Linger by Lalalalatina

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Where souls linger, and ghosts do dwell,
'Tis where our greatest heroes fell.

About the Final Battle, the enemies, the heroes, those who lost their lives, and those who lived but must learn to move on.

I am Lalalalatina of Hufflepuff and this is my entry into the Poetry Anyone? monthly challenge for June- The Rondeau Challenge.

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice job! The first stanza does a wonderful job of setting a dark scene. I think the refrain is great and some of the imagery is fantastic, ie: "Blood flowed freely, painted all skin." Creepy!
The only thing that jumped out at me was the word "mirth" in the third stanza: it didn't seem to fit the overall feeling of darkness and sadness of the poem. The next line talks about "joy hidden" so maybe there is a way to tweak the line with "mirth" to continue the sense of loss and sorrow you've set up since the beginning. If you wanted to really knock the reader over the head with sadness, you could try:
"Their sorrow growing deep within,
As memories keep joy hidden."
That's quite sad, though, and perhaps you want that bit of hope with the word "pride," which I could definitely see. In which case, you could just find another word for "mirth" or add a different idea to the line to keep the rhythm. But those are just one reader's suggestions, and it's just one line! :) Overall, I thought you did a great job with your rhyme and rhythm and the general feeling of this poem - good luck in the challenge!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the long and very well-thought-out review! I\'m glad you thought it was dark, since it was meant to be so. The last stanza was suppposed to be lighter, which is why I included mirth, because if Voldemort really was gone, the wizarding world would be very happy, as we saw at the beginning of PS/SS. So you were right, I put pride and mirth in there to show that even after the dark times, there would still be hope and hapiness to come. Although I admit that the end is still quite sad, so maybe mirth may look out of place. Thanks again for the constructive criticism! ^_~

Never Meant to Be by GryffindorGoddess

Rated: Professors •
Summary: In the wake of the final battle, Ron is murdered and Hermione’s life is torn to pieces. When she finds out that Ron left her something before he died, her world turns upside down. Now she and Harry find temporary comfort in a flawed love that was never meant to be, and therefore could never last.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/09/07 Title: Chapter 1: 'Til Death Do Us Part

Wow, for someone who never writes angst, you did a fantastic job with the heartbreak! This was so sad and touching. The beginning had just enough backstory so that we learned what had happened to both Ron and Ginny without moving away from the focus on Harry and Hermione. You did a great job of showing Hermione's grief throughout, and the bit of foreshadowing when Harry hugged her was a nice touch. The end where Hermione runs after the casket is just gut-wrenching.
This was exceptionally well-written and I look forward to reading more, especially about Harry. Good luck as you continue!
*turnip hug*
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hehe, thanks, Gina! For the angst part I just had to imagine how I would feel if Ron died. :P I think I really related to Hermione\'s side of the story in this chapter because it was easier to put myself in her shoes instead of Harry\'s, which is really why it revolved around her more. And you know how I like foreshadowing. ;-) Of course a brilliant Turnip like yourself would have picked up on that...I\'m glad someone did.

Thanks ever so much for the great review! Glad you like it so far (since I\'ve already suckered you into betaing chapter 2 *ebil laughs*).

*huggles* ~Ashley :D

In Azkaban by Cwiddy

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: The prison of Azkaban holds Dementors, innocent men, and guilty men. This is a Rondeau Poem written about Azkaban, but from the view of Sirius Black in Prisoner of Azkaban.

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: In Azkaban

Nice job! You definitely captured the dark creepiness of Azkaban with your words and images. I especially liked: "Despair and heartbreak is the tune
these tortured souls are forced to keep." Good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! Thanks so much for the review! 8)

Hatred Flows Within by crazy_purple_hp_freak

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Only at the point of death does Lucius Malfoy regret the suffering he has wrought on himself and his family. It is far too late to save himself, but for his son, there is still hope.

Written by crazy_purple_hp_freak of Slytherin for the Rondeau Challenge
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/03/07 Title: Chapter 1: Hatred flows within

Suzie, I just love your poetry, it never fails to amaze me. Fantastic job! This is a very powerful poem. As always, your distinct attention to the details of language really give the poem a dark and emotional feeling. Your rhyme and rhythm is strong, I especially like the third stanza. Great work!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing Gina! I wasn\'t sure if the third stanza worked the way I wanted but I\'m glad you liked it! <33

A Mother's Love by GryffindorGoddess

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: When a Dementor threatens one of her friends, Luna is compelled to produce her Patronus in defense. Guiding her through the daunting task is the good advice, mark of faith, and eternal love that only a mother could provide.

Submitted for the June One-Shot Challenge by Gigi of Ravenclaw.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 07/11/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Mother's Love

Ashley! I *love* it! This is just a beautiful story, and you've done a fantastic job with the writing of it.
I loved how you added a rabbit family living in the yard, for it really strengthens Luna's connection to her Patronus. You did a great job in creating a beautiful portrait of her mother in such a short story, she's wonderful. And you did an amazing job bringing Luna's dreaminess down to her six year old self.
The final paragraph is absolutely touching and really wraps up the story wonderfully, making a heartwarming connection between Luna, her mother, and her Patronus perfectly. This is such a sweet story, wonderful job! I'm so glad you decided to give it a go. I'm also glad I got to help out, it was a pleasure.
Good luck in the challenge! Go Ravenclaw!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina! I really owe credit to you for inspiring my basis for this story, and you\'re so right about the bunny family! Muchas gracias for the idea~ I\'m so glad you like the end product.:D *squishes* Rah Rah Ravenclaw! ~Ashley

Slow Spinning Redemption by mgle_teacher

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Sirius' last thoughts as he falls through the veil.

Written for MNFF DADA - First Years (Professor: Snape's Talon during Summer 2006 as mugglemathdork of Ravenclaw
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: Black

Happy Birthday! And great job with this piece. It really is quite dark, from Sirius's agonized final thoughts, to the language you chose to frame them. I especially liked the flashback to his girlfriend, you really piqued my interest there. I think this is some of your strongest writing yet, so keep it up! *huggle*
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you Gina, this was definitely one of my strongest pieces yet. But truth is I wrote it in the middle of July right when the turmoil happening was getting worse than ever. In other words, I poured my soul into this piece. -huggle- Ritta

No Cure for Love. by Magical Maeve

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: Severus Snape returns to Spinner's End. DH Spoilers.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi Jan!
I really like this! I love the way you worked Lily and the Resurrection Stone into Snape's brief sojourn after death. And I really like that Lily forgave him and still loved him, though not in a romantic way. You've written a very touching piece that still kept the Snape-edge. It really does give the reader a bit of closure after DH - great job!
~Gina :)

A Proper Goodbye by Sly Severus

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The war has ended, but there is one more thing that Harry must do before he can be at peace.

Takes place directly after the last chapter of DH.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/05/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice job, Elle! I'm glad to see Snape get his due - and to see Harry and Draco offer their respects together. Good job with them, and the story!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Gina. I\'m glad you liked it. I really thought Harry and Draco owed Severus something and this was all they could do for him.

Weeks and Weeks by Ravensgryff

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: During the course of Deathly Hallows, Ron Weasley has his own demons to overcome. How does Ron cope and come to terms with himself during two weeks that are missing in Deathly Hallows?
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/05/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, poor Ron! I'm so glad you are writing these missing moments from when Ron left Harry and Hermione. I couldn't believe he did, and yet in the end it made sense. I'm looking forward to reading what he did in those weeks.
I like how you wrote this from Ron's POV because it gives us a really deep look into his thoughts. I already feel bad for him.
I can't wait to see what you do with the Deluminator, because frankly that really confused me!
Nice start and good luck as you continue!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: It really upset me when he left, but from a story and character standpoint, I understood why it had to happen. He had to battle those demons if he was going to be effective for Harry, as he needed to be when Harry got sidetracked, and he also need to let go of those fears in order to be the man Hermione needed/deserved. And from the story standpoint, the trio really needed some connection to the wizarding world that they had become isolated from. Since Ron was always that \'connection\' in the past, being the only one raised as a wizard, it had to be him to provide the link. I hope you enjoyed the rest!

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/23/07 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Poor Ron - you did a good job with his sad and guilty thoughts after leaving Harry and Hermione. You also had just the right hint of jealously as well. The dream at the end was very good!
~Gina :)

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 08/23/07 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Great story! You've written Ron's PoV very well. I really do love him. You also worked in a lot of little details very nicely; I liked the bit about the wedding. So what do you think was going on with the Deluminator leading him back to Harry and Hermione? That's one thing I don't get.
Hope your other stories are coming along well!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks, Gina! Hmm...well, it\'s pretty clear to me that the Deluminator was enchanted with a pretty powerful locator or guiding spell that allowed the holder to find their way back to their loved ones. But it seems that it would only work if everyone, in their hearts, wanted to be reunited. Here, I was sort of envisioning the Deluminator also kind of enhancing the connection between the trio - that\'s why Ron was having those kind of foreboding feelings. It seems fitting that Dumbledore had created this object - I can see him worrying about conflict with Aberforth and wanting to have a way back to his family. I think in that way, he saw himself in Ron and that\'s why Dumbledore gave it to him.

Of Words and Witnesses by Red and Gold

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Defense Barrister Rhianna Burke knows she has what it takes to save her client from Azkaban - her gift for words and her surprise witness.

**submitted for the August One-Shot Challenge: Lucius Malfoy by red and gold of Ravenclaw**
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/04/07 Title: Chapter 1: Of Words and Winesses

I love it!! I love what you did with your new witness, it works even better! And given all that happened, giving Lucius the chance to actually appreciate what Harry has just done for him was a great decision. I thought it was perfectly in character for a man who was beaten soundly in DH. Great connection to Harry's mom. And the last line is as brilliant as it was before.
I'm glad I was able to help out a bit. Great job, and good luck in the challenge!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hi Gina!!! I am so glad that you like the change in witnesses, and I truly appreciate all you did. It would have been a month\'s worth of work down the drain if you hadn\'t been there to guide me in the right direction. All your time and help were such a blessing! :-) Thank you for the lovely review, Gina - you\'re the best! *squishes* ~Andi

Night by Elphin

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: "He may well be the chosen one, but he is still my baby."

Lily and James Potter live every day fearing that the greatest dark wizard in the world will discover their secret. Knowing the threat that lies upon them, Lily reflects on how much it has affected their family.

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 09/23/07 Title: Chapter 1: Night

I very much enjoyed reading your story! I thought you did a very nice job with Lily and I liked the approach you took with the narrative tense. There were some wonderful lines and it seemed a very accurate exploration of what James and Lily were going through during their final days. Are you planning to write more? Good luck if you do!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad you think it\'s accurate. :) Hopefully I will be writing more soon because I love to do it!

Across the Line by Skipper424

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Scorpius is much different than his Malfoy name would suggest. He’s a very friendly and genuine young wizard who, against the odds, has become close friends with Albus Potter. He is bright as a student and has an amazing talent for Potions, drawing him comparisons to a former Hogwarts Headmaster named Snape. His quick smile is charming and he has a sense of adventure and mischief to match any Potter. And, unbeknownst to Albus, he’s fallen for the youngest Potter, Lily.

It all sounds like countless other school-age romance scenarios taking place at both magical and Muggle schools worldwide, none of which end in tragedy. What makes this one different? There is a line existing between safety and danger. Not all people posses the ability to recognize it, or foresee possible consequences of their actions when they cross it. Even in the absence of malicious intent, awful things can happen when one strays across this line into an uncharted and treacherous wilderness of ignorance.

This is the first place winner of the September One-Shot Challenge. Very special thanks to joybelle423 for her wonderful beta reading. I cannot thank her enough. Thank you, thank you, thank you ...

Warning: This story contains implied non-consensual sex. There is nothing graphic and the reader does not witness the act, but learns enough about it to possibly be disturbed if sensitive to such things. Please proceed with this warning firmly in mind.
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 05/19/09 Title: Chapter 1: Across the Line

That was fantastic! I am so glad I read this. I wanted to read this story because I am playing around with Albus on the forums right now. I love what you did with his character! I really enjoyed how you developed his personality and especially how you gave him a close relationship with his sister.

I think you did a great job with Scorpius as well. You made him believable and wrote a friendship with Albus that was also very plausible and enjoyable to read.

Your writing is exceptional! :)

It is really a sad story, isn't it? I feel very bad for Scorpius. I know he was the one brewing the potion, but Lily seemed culpable as well for what happened: they were both under the influence, after all. I'm surprised that everyone, particularly the Wizengamot, was so harsh on Scorpius. I wish Albus had visited him. But that's me thinking it's all real, and not a story. Were you trying to draw any real-life parallels to dating and date-rape? I think you made some tough decisions on where to take this and it all worked wonderfully. Congratulations on winning the challenge - great work!

~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Gina. Honestly, to this day, I'm not that pleased with the ending. Not because it ended like it did, but I didn't really explain well enough (at all, in fact) the harshness of the punishment. The idea was that the Malfoy's had wiggled their way out of so many tight spots before that the Wizengamot really was keen to nail Scorpius when they really had the chance. He brewed a power, illegal potion that he found out how to make in a banned book which led to non-consensual sex with a girl who was not of age. Lily's actions were all a result of the potions effects. The only thing she was guilty of is walking into the room, being at the wrong place at the wrong time. Honestly, though, that's how it is for many victims of crimes like that, isn't it? And, sometimes, the criminal really doesn't intended to be a criminal at all - or hurt anyone at all. It just happens.

Wished A Thousand Times by laceymoibella

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: In-House Secret Santa Drabble Exchange for Ravenclaw.
Recipient: Miss Bean
Pansy hopes that she will get the opportunity to talk to Draco before she leaves for the Christmas holidays break. When Draco finally shows, Pansy is the one whom is surprised.

Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 02/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Love it! And I love it because Pansy gave Draco the book that helped him poison Ron, right? Or am I way off? Very, very cool! I love those little nods to canon! You also did a nice job with Pansy's thoughts and reactions to Draco. You almost make me sympathize with her (except then she throws Harry to the dogs in DH so not quite, lol.) Congrats on being the Ravenclaw Story of the Week! ~Gina :)

Black but Bright by luinrina

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Two brothers – seemingly alike, yet very different. At least that’s what all thought. But was it really that way?
Reviewer: Gmariam Signed
Date: 06/06/09 Title: Chapter 1: Black but Bright

That is really neat! I love how uniquely you've told the brother's story. I particularly liked the contrast between Sirius becoming a lion and Regulus choosing the cool green den - great imagery! Wonderful job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.