Not much to say I guess, I'm a college student majoring in English Lit and Graphic Design. School always keeps me super-busy, but I'll miss it when it's over and it's going to be over way too soon.
And no, contrary to beliefs very likely impressed upon you by this summary, I'm not a gormless prat.
Well... not entirely.
FYI Today on Yahoo News they had an article about the benefits of being sad-it was called "The upside of being down". I laughed.
This is, without a doubt, my favorite fanfic story I've ever read. Anytime I get bored I just come write back here and read to my heart's content. But have you decided not to finish the sequel on your live journal? I wish you'd keep going with it.
Wonderful writing! You included some really insightful and creative details that made it much more believable and interesting to read. The inner dialog of both brothers added a lot as well I think.
Author's Response: Thank you, you have made my morning. A \"you have a review\" e-mail is my favourite kind to get. I hadn\'t thought about the inner dialogue thing before, it just kind of happened. I think this is the only thing I\'ve ever written where I can go back a year later and not cringe at the awfulness, which is good.
Another beautifully written chapter, I can't wait to read the next part of it. Hopefully you'll be posting it soon? The little details you include about the minor characters are brilliant and very believable. We have so little information about them to begin with that it's interesting to hear about their appearances, personalities, etc. It's a bit redundant after reading all the other reviews you've gotten, but great job!
Do you remember the scene in Half Blood Prince when Harry realizes that the prophecy doesn't really matter...that he would have gone after Voldemort anyway because that's what his parents died for? That part gives me goosebumps everytime and I felt the same way after the scene Lily sees in the pensieve. You have a very powerful writing style and I can't wait to read the rest of this story. The characters, the plot, the descriptions, everything is just so realistic. From now on in my own head, this is exactly how it happened. Keep up the great work!
Out of curiousity, do you have any plans for how long the story's going to be?
How terribly cruel you are! What a horribly wonderful cliffhanger. Though I hardly need say it, another great chapter, (or half-chapter as it were.) I was a little confused about the sudden increase in intimacy between Lily and James without much detail. I think I would have liked to see a bit more description of how they got to this point, but that's just my opinion. Other than that, fantastic!
Wow. First of all I am VERY impressed with how quickly you got this next chapter up. For that I THANK YOU! As for the chapter itself: wonderful as always. No matter how the chapter ends (cliffhanger or not) you leave me wanting more. I'm dying to know what happened to James but I read through the entire chapter without getting any information about him AND without getting irritated about the lack of information. It's almost unnerving how well you're able to manipulate us. Keep it up!
Usually I don't review a story until I'm caught up with the updates, but seeing as I have 30+ chapters to go, I thought I'd tell you how much I love it so far. I recently took a class on Arthurian legend and I love how you've incorporated it into the story. Really spectacular interpretation and I can't wait to read more. It doesn't bother me at all that some things don't make any sense right now because I have supreme confidence that they will eventually. I also really appreciate the fact that you didn't dismiss Hermione's and Ron's relationship throughout the books, and instead gave a reason for it's ending. After all, how many teenage romances last? You're writing style is so interesting and I can't wait to read more.
As a side note, I'd like to thank you for responding to those who review your story when you obviously get so many. When you want to let an author know how much you appreciate their writing it's so much more encouraging to know that they do the same. Thanks for that!
Author's Response: lol... um, yes, you\'ve a very long way to the end ;-) I love thought-out reviews, ones that include a little something about what you do/do not like, perhaps what makes sense or questions you may have. This is quite lovely, thank you! * * * I\'m very happy you are enjoying it thus far, and only on the fourth \'chapter,\' too. I love the Authurian legends, and there is so much that is interpreted that it leaves it open for further expansion and different combinations of the many options of \'\'facts\'\' and theories. You\'ll see more of it as time goes on. * * * hahaha... I couldn\'t very well ignore what JK has put our faces through subtle hints along the way, but I had to change Hermione\'s mind for her, I\'ll say that! But yes, it had to make sense, had to be credible, had to be a natural transition as with any broken relationship. You\'re right; most of those teenage romances don\'t last, and that\'s sort of what I was trying for here, how she\'s outgrown their relationship. * * * I have to laugh - my writing style turns some people off, as it can be a bit difficult to follow at times, but this story begged for it that way, and just wouldn\'t allow itself to be written differently. My next story is not quite so succinct and stingy with the pronouns! ;-P * * * Oh, I completely believe in responding to reviews - if someone has taken the time to comment on your story, you should be courteous enough to reply. Besides, I LOVE \'conversing\' with some of the reviewers, as they bring up such relevant and interesting points.
* * * Thanks, again for your wonderful review. I hope you continue to enjoy the story, and meets any expectations you have regarding the legends.
It really seems like you're developing this story well with each chapter. It doesn't seem rushed and it doesn't drag either. Loved the small details you include that show that Angelina's views are changing (her resentment at the use of the word "mudblood".) She's becoming more and more likable as the story progresses.
I'm also very happy to see that you're finally getting more reviews. You deserve them; you've got a great story here!
Author's Response: You’re making me blush! Thanks.
I love Angelina's relationship with Emma. It's very believable the way that she tries to be harsh and distant but she forgets herself and realizes she actually likes her.
I think you were right about the shifting points of view. It was good to get a wider picture of all of the characters at the beginning. Now that the story has levelled out we've gotten more of a focus on Angelina and I think that was a very clever choice.
One thing I'm really anticipating is a glimpse of Angelina's family life now that she's become a 'blood traitor.' From the reaction of her brother and man in the painting I think it would be interesting.
As a side note, I tried adding this story to my favorites and it never showed up. Anyone else having trouble with this?
Hope there's more soon!
Author's Response: I am so pleased you like it! And if you continue reading you’ll be seeing more of Angelina’s family in up coming chapters. As far as trouble adding to favorites, I haven’t heard anything about this; hopefully it’s just a temporary glitch in the site. Let me know.\r\n\r\nA new chapter should be coming out soon. It’s been in the queue for awhile now.\r\n\r\nThanks so much for your wonderful review. And hope you continue reading.\r\n
I think you have a really great start to this story, and I'm SHOCKED that you don't have more reviews.
You characterize your oc's really effectively, as well as the canon characters. It's impressive how you're able to make readers sympathize with Angelina despite the fact that she's so arrogant and bigoted.
One thing that threw me off just a little bit was the way that the point of view shifts every once in a while from Angelina to another character, like Lily. To me it seems like a story flows better if each chapter is from one character's point of view...but that's just my own preference.
Congrats to you, my dear! You are definitely very talented!
Author's Response: First off, let me tell you thanks for the review.\r\n\r\nI think this problem of multiple view points is mainly in the first chapter. This was somewhat intentional as I wanted everyone in the compartment on the train to be able to share their views, thus allow readers to see what kind of world the story is being set in and how the canon characters are going to be portrayed and why. After chapter one the story should shift exclusively towards Angelina’s view. That said, it may be confusing to do start out with multiple view points. If I were writing original fiction I wouldn’t, but in fanfiction it seems it necessary to establish the rules of this interpretation. Maybe not. Let me know. \r\n\r\n\r\nI really appreciate your comments and I’ll keep it in mind in writing future chapters.\r\n
Really fantastic one-shot! The little details about the minor characters were perfect; really gave them distinct personalities and all that, even though we don't know much about them at all. Getting a little information about them makes it really heartbreaking to think of what would eventually happen. Really well done!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks, what a fantastic review! It was the little details that I tried to focus on; they\'re what make people who they are, in my opinion, so I\'m glad to hear that came through! But I agree ... it\'s so heartbreaking, it really is.
I think you have a wonderful beginning here. It's impressive how much emotion you were able to include in the first chapter without overdoing it. Lily seems believable and, from the little we know about her, totally in-character. I'm hooked.
I also think this is an interesting way to portray her family; slightly prim and snooty, but also loving and compassionate.
Bravo so far. I hope the next chapter will be coming soon.
Every girl deserves to get a letter like that once in her life. That was so beautiful and so convincing. You were able to say so much about their relationship with the few details here and there, (the lunchroom serenade was fantastic.) You have a great style and I can't wait to read more of your work.
Author's Response: aw thanks! I\'m waiting for a letter like this too :) I\'m so glad you liked it; that means a lot to me. Thanks for reviewing!
Can't believe nobody's left a review for this wonderful story yet! I'm glad to be the first so that I can tell you how much I loved reading this first chapter. You definitely seem to have a great handle on dialog. "‘You mean, you ran away?’ Sirius gave a short, bark-like laugh, ‘Well, I prefer to think of it in rather more manly terms, but that about sums it up.’" Loved that. Despite this very somber beginning you were able to include some really funny details that lightened the mood and also made it more realistic. Can't wait to read more!
That was so touching and sweet and completely believable. It felt like a moment that probably happened and J.K. Rowling just didn't include it. I absolutely loved this. You included little details that aren't exactly necessary to the story but made it so much more intimate and beautiful. And the ending was so perfect-made me tear up and everything. You're very talented and I can't wait to read more of your writing. Great job!
Author's Response: I hardly know what to say! I\'m really glad you found it believable. J.K. Rowling has done an amazing job of giving us wonderful characters, and I hoped my interpretation of them (especially Remus and Sirius) might be faithful to her vision. So, thank you very, very much for the great review!
I think you have a really nice beginning here! They're very young yet, but you've done a really good job with the characters so far. And when Deathly Hallows came out I wanted something at the end where Harry grieved for everyone he'd lost, so I appreciated that first part. I'm a little confused though about how these first two chapters go together. You've almost set it up in the first chapter as if Harry's going to get some sort of insight into the Marauders' lives, but I'm not sure that's really what you were going for. It doesn't really seem like Harry's involved at all now. Just a thought. I really like your writing style though and I'm excited to see where you go from here!
Author's Response: alright, so you've caught me. i like writing the marauders a load more. see, he's at the first chapter and the last, and there really is almost no connection accept... well i can't tell till the last chapter. but the message of the whole thing is about death and what it accomplishes, so that's what relates. at this point i've written the whole thing but i'm having the hardest time getting it validated! Thanks so much for the review, you've inspired me to try again ~Burning Star
Diana has always been different. She can make objects move without touching them. She can command animals without training them. She always seems to know when someone is lying to her. And strange things always seem to happen when she's sad or angry....
But even when the enigmatic Professor Dumbledore comes to tell her that this is all normal for someone like her, there are other things that still set her apart. She has no memory from before age eleven. She hears voices whispering to her when no one is there. And there is something more sinister lurking inside her, something that reminds Dumbledore of another student he had so many years ago....
Diana's birth was no accident. Someone has dark plans for her, and unless she can solve the Riddle of her past she may just become the very thing she strives to destroy.
What an interesting idea for a story! You have me completely and totally hooked. You made the resemblance to Voldemort subtle but noticeable. Lovely beginning so far, and I can't wait to see what you have in store for us!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's great to hear something like that from a reader.
Peter's POV is very well-done. A little resentment, a little justification, a little fear; you really show his motivations for turning traitor without being obvious. And no remorse, I think that's really interesting. He's immediately jumped into his new role with both feet, even feeling smug about his position. I think you're doing a great job of keeping everyone in-character as well. I'm interested to see where this goes and what kind of plotline you're planning.