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I thought this was an interesting take. It was well-written and I liked the way you set it up, but I'm a bit biased. I love James and hate Pettigrew, so I found it difficult seeing things from his perspective or sympathizing with Peter.
I do think the piece was powerful and I liked the formality you used about it, but I found the way Peter referred to James as 'Mr Potter' somewhat strange at the same time.
"And, yet, there is such an irony to it all, for he is the boy I am going to kill."
"Well, James, my old friend, it will be done."
Those two lines gave me chills. There was just something about them; the thought of killing someone, of being so angry that you want his or her blood is just... frightening.
I guess I always pictured James (and Sirius) as someone who valued friendship and because that's how I've seen him for so long, it almost feels as though he is OOC in the story. Of course, he isn't, for we don't really know anything about him, but it just feels that way for me.
But, I do think you have a wonderful style and you really captured everything. You were descriptive and the story had a certain vibe to it. It was very good!
Author's Response: Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it despite it being quite a negative portrayal of James. My main objective was to show how Peter wasn\'t mentally stable; most of what he was saying about James came from this corrupted obsession he had. I started off with the phrase \"Mr Potter\" just for sarcasm and then realised that it might be something Peter would call him in order to distance himself from his \'old friend\', if that makes any sense.
This was very cute. I loved how you portrayed GInny. She was exactly how I picture her, strong and independent, but at the same time, forever belonging to Harry. And I love the "familiar flame." I just really loved this; it made me smile.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! You are one of my favorite authors, so this mean a lot coming from you.
Yayy! This got up! I didn't see it until just now. Again, I really like this story. The prank was very Marauder-ish. They were sneaky and cunning, but at the same time, did it for another and showed their good hearts. Really great job!!
Wow, I loved this! It was very cute and made me smile. I love the way you portrayed Ginny and her relationship with Harry. It was great! The -ing list was cute.
:] This was really cute. I've never really read a story about Padma before or read a Padma/Seamus story. I have to say, I like the pair. You sometimes forget, since HP is so focused on Harry, Ron, and Hermione, that there are other people in their grade (and dorms) growing up and seeing each other.
It was very good. I liked the way you portrayed Padma and how you connected her to Ron's situation. Great job!
"I seriously hoped I wasn’t going to the Ball with a cross-dresser."
:D :D Favorite line!
Author's Response: When I came up with this story, I was actually at Disneyland (weird, I know) and without access to GoF. So when I was playing it out in my mind, I was actually expecting it to be Padma/Dean. There is that line Parvati gives Harry about Lavender going with Seamus, but I thought she was going with Dean, and Dean later asks how Harry and Ron got the best-looking girls in their year. (Sorry if this all sounds really weird. I\'m about to go get my wisdom teeth out, so I\'m a little loopy right now.) Anyway, I\'m so glad you liked it! I was a little afraid I made Padma seem too...whiny when in the book she seems more annoyed than distraught. It\'s also nice to learn that the stuff about Ron and Hermione worked. I\'m such a big Ron/Hermione shipper that I just couldn\'t pass up the opportunity to slip them in.
I never read poetry, but was in the 'Most Recent' and stumbled upon this. I'm very glad I did! This made me laugh, especially because I'm going to the beach tomorrow. Hehe, Voldie raisins. I thought it was very clever how you made it rhyme and managed to fit the stanzas together. Anyway, just thought I'd say thank you. This was a great poem, and very funny. :D
Hehe, not a drop of Coppertone. *laughs*
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Author's Response: p.s. I\'m going to the beach tomorrow too.
Wow. I've just recently become a Blaise/Ginny shipper. I love the pair, I think they'd be good together. I really liked this story. I was horrified he spoke of what his mother made him do.
I think you've approached this in an interesting way. It was very simple, yet you seemed to have managed to make their feelings run deep. I also thought you did a good job with second person, it can be difficult to master at times. All in all, I liked this very much. Do you write a lot of Blaise/Ginny? What do you like about the pair? Sorry, I've just become interested in the ship and haven't had to chance to talk to anyone about it. :D
MAJOR SPOILERS A post-DH Fred and George fic.
It's been one year since the war ended and Weasleys' Wizard Wheezes is still going strong. That is, until Angelina shows up with news that her new boss is being blackmailed. Next thing, a mysterious package arrives on the doorstep, there's a spate of inexplicable burglaries in Diagon Alley, and an old friend appears to have come back from the dead…
Wow! I really like this. It's very good. I'm excited for the next chapter. I love Fred returning!
Author's Response: Thank you very much ;o)
Ahh, Jordan!! I loved this! It was so cute. The perfect dose of fluffiness. I couldn't help but grin through it all. Ginny was very in-character, and the whole thing was just so great. I reckon I like Harry/Ginny more than I thought I did; I always forget how much. Thanks for the reminder. :)
Author's Response: Anytime, Keri. Anytime. =DD
Ahhh! A Lily/Snape/James thingy. I love it! I loved the way you had Snape realize his feelings for Lily, and I loved the part where Lily talked about her and James' relationship, how Severus could never be James to her.
I'm very excited for the final chapter. Great job! :D
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you liked how I had it play it. When I first started to plan out this one-shot, two of the firsts scenes I imagined in my head were in fact Severus coming to realize his feelings and Lily telling him all the reasons she loved James, not him.
I really liked it! I love Lily/Sev fics. I thought it was interesting how you threw James in, although he wasn't a prefect.
When Sev puts his arms around Lily, I have to admit, I was hoping that it was James. :D
I really like your portrayal of Severus. The curse he's talking of really fits his character -- to be excited by it. Lily's reaction was perfect, and I could really see that she realized it was the end for them.
Overall, really good job, especially for something un-Beta'd.
Author's Response: Thanks! :) Yeah, I wasn\'t sure about whether James was a prefect or not. I seem to remember JKR saying he wasn\'t in an interview, but I checked HPL and it said this: \"If Molly is correct (OP9) and all Head Boys were Prefects in their 6th year, this would apply to James as well.\" So I just went with what HPL said :P
This is an interesting start. It sounds like a promising, fun story, just be sure to stay away from cliches. They sneak up on you!
One thing that is a huge cliche is Head Dorms. They are never mentioned in the books. Try to stay away from them!
I do really like the idea of them getting to know each other through the Portrait. It's clever and works well, because of Ravenclaw's Entrance. Cute idea!
One part that I didn't get is the: "...almost wishing that James wouldn’t wake up alive." Was Sirius thinking that? *gasp* Will this come into play later?
Anyway, I'll definitely be reading ;)
Author's Response: I expalined a little more about the Head Dorms in a previous commenters post- basically, I plan to do a few things with the idea, but thank you so much for the warnings. I will try to stay away from more overused ideas. :) Ah, and about the Sirius line, just to clarify- basically he was just thinking about the idea of Lily actually getting back at James by murdering him in his sleep. I meant it to be that Sirius would think it an interesting idea, especially since they would now share a dormitory and that James accidently pranked her right in the beginning of the year that they would be together the most. (Of course never really hoping that his best mate would be killed! ) Thanks for your helpful comment, and I\'m so pleased to here that you thought it was interesting.
"Go away, you sick, perverted ghost.”
This was really funny. There were a few problems. James didn't have green eyes. Harry said Albus was the only one with them. And Hugo was younger than James, not at school when James was in his third year. He was Lily's age.
Other than that, it was very cute and funny. Hehe. Some of the things made me laugh out loud.
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out :] I was really fuzzy on the ages, the epilogue was quite confusing for me. But thanks! And I\'m glad you liked it :D
That was cute. I liked it, but I wished you went a little more in-depth with Lily and James. I think that there could have been a little bit more storyline. It was cute though! I enjoyed it. :D
"The sun didn’t shine and the sky didn’t snow."
Eagles, maybe? It's just like a line from Desperado.
Author's Response: Hey! Wow, everyone talks about your James/Lily stories, so it\'s an honor to have you reviewing mine. :-) I know this story isn\'t in-depth, it\'s one of the reasons I\'m not such a fan of it myself. It was written for a challenge, and there was a word-limit. SO it was kinda hard to establish an atmosphere and go in depth with just 1500 words. I completely know what you mean. Funny, I hadn\'t even noticed the resemblance. And I love the Eagles, I play Desperado on the piano and my dad plays it on the guitar. Thanks for pointing it out for me, I guess they inspire me unconsciously. :-P
Wow! I really loved that! I really like the way you began with a little intro to the relationship between Scorpius and Rose. I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Heehee, it\'s going to take quite a while though. I\'m glad you loved the prologue, and I really hope you continue reading this fanfic! Thanks for your review! (:
This is an interesting start. I like the relationship Lily and James have and I like the way you portray everyone. I'm curious to see where you take this.
One thing I was confused about was when Lily says her two best friends are Kat & Caroline. And then you say Lily doesn't mind Caroline, but she's shallow. And then you have Caroline best friends with Mary, who Lily can't stand. I just don't see how Caroline and Lily are best friends like she says.
I'll keep a look out for the next chapter! :)
Author's Response: Ack, that was a result of my refusal to character plan... I changed my mind mid-chapter about where Caroline was going to go- I\'ll have to fix that. Thanks for the review! ~megan~
That was so cute! I really liked Victoria. She seems like the type of girl who could actually get Sirius. I can see him being intruged by someone like her (which he was). The idea was very cute. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I think Sirius needs someone he can talk to like Victoria.
This is a really good start! I can't wait to see where you take this. The writing had a nice flow and I love the characterization of Lily and James, I also like how you've managed to make their relationship more complex than Lily-hates-James/James-drools-over-Lily. I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hi! I\'m glad you want to continue reading this fanfiction. And I hope you\'ll continue to want to read the next chapter, and the one after the next. Thank you for the review!
This is an interesting start. I'm curious to see where you take it. I like the idea of a letter trail, but I do hope that James takes over the letters and it isn't Remus and Sirius the whole time.
I'll definitely keep an eye out for the next chapter!
I found one mistake:
"Much better then mine!”
'Then' should be 'than'.
Author's Response: James will take over the letters soon, I promise. Thanks so much for reading my story! Kate
That was cute! I loved how Sirius knew where she was. It was very Sirius, and I laughed out loud. It was unique for an Lily/James fic and I enjoyed it very much! Thanks!
Author's Response: You\'re very welcome! =] I figured Lily had to get busted somehow or another, and it just seemed like something Sirius would be able to figure out... that\'s just how he is =]