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Real name: Pooja
Member Since: 05/02/06
Website: http://chronic-potterphile.tumblr.com/
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Bio:
Hello!

I'm Pooja, a twenty-two year-old Indian. I'm a die-hard fan of Harry Potter, a Shahid Kapoor Varun Dhawan lover, and very proud Hufflepuff.

I'm in Med college now, and I stay away from home. I really hope to continue writing even after I become a doctor. :)

I'm fond of reading, singing and six years ago, I discovered my fondness for fanfiction writing too. I'm much better now than I was when I came here, but I still think there's much room for improvement as far as my writing is concerned.

My all-time OTP is Ron/Hermione. I love this couple to death, even with my limited number of stories about them.

I am slowly starting to try stuff I've never tried writing before. I find that I quite enjoy writing slash these days.

Anyway, here are some of my stories, sorted out for you:

SERIES

I've got two series out here. The first one is a trio era series (though the sequel to the first novel is OC based) and the second one is next-gen. Here's some information about these:

1. TRIO ERA (PRE-DH)

Ha! I don't have a name for this one. I think I should come up with one soon, though. This series is COMPLETE.

Killer Instincts: Complete, with H/G and R/Hr as the primary ships.

Where Are You? Complete. This is the sequel to KI but it only follows my OCs from Killer Instincts-- Daisy, Chris, Cheryl and Pari. Yes, it's a completely OC based story.

Companion fics (one-shots, all featuring Anurag Krishnan):
a. Mum's the World (pre-WAY)
b. Face Value (pre-WAY)
c. At the End of the Tunnel (post-WAY)

2. TRIO ERA SERIES (POST-DH)
This is a recent series of mine and it complies with DH, as opposed to the Killer Instincts series.

Plum Cake: This takes place during DH. It's Hermione's birthday in 1997, and the trio is camping.

Ready or Not: H/G + R/Hr, and I'm currently writing this fic. It's going to be novel-length. It's a romantic mystery. :)

Lilttle Angel Wings R/Hr story, depicting their marital problems. Complete.

3. YEARS FIVE AND SIX: SCORPIUS MALFOY, ROSE WEASLEY AND ALBUS POTTER

Black With a Hint of Red A mystery novella which was written for a challenge. I must say, I'm rather proud of this one!

Transcendent Affection: The sequel to BWHR, with a few other twists. This is a mystery too.

4. ROSE AND SCORPIUS SERIES

His Hero: Rose/Scorpius one-shot.

I Know Why You Smile: Scorpius and Rose encounter some relationship problems. (Scorpius/ Rose and Scorpius/Victoire)

CHAPTERED STORIES

Coup de grace: Incomplete, on an indefinite hiatus but I don't think I'd label it 'ababdoned' YET.

When the Rose Fell: I'm co-authoring this with my sis, Nadia/majestic_ginny. It's a Scorose. :)

ONE-SHOTS

There are some really old ones here and that is not what I write like now. :p

Trio Era:

Plum Cake (R/Hr)

A Stolen Kiss (Cedric/Penelope)

It's Called Sweet Vengeance (R/Hr)

The Champion (Cedric Diggory)

Flawed (Padma/OC)

The Crush (Seamus/Lavender)

Inside Out (Padma/Penelope)

Older fics--

Inanity Over a Hairstyle (Ginny)

Next-Gen

Battered Heart (Hugo/OC)

Testimony (Scorpius/Hugo)

His Hero (Scorpius/Rose)

Cold Feet (Scorpius/ Hugo)

Eastern Dawn Stars (Scorpius/ OC)

The Maimed Reflection (Albus Potter)

Miscellaneous:

Mum's the World (Anurag Krishnan-- my OC)

Sapphires (Various Pairings)

Rubies (Sequel to Sapphires, various pairings)

Princess (written for an OC challenge, Dark/Angst)

Face Value (Sequel to 'Mum's the World, Anurag Krishnan, other pairings

At the End of the Tunnel (Anurag Krishnan, spoils Where Are You?)

POETRY

Now, I haven't got very good stuff here. My best is 'While He Leaves'. The rest probably aren't even poetry with the haphazardly fashion that they've been written in. Anyway--

While He Leaves (R/Hr)

Fun in the Romantic Rain (R/Hr)






Other stuff:

Trailer for Killer Instincts by the wonderful lunaselenia! --> http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9dDGfpRiw6U



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A Wedding to Remember by mudbloodproud
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: “Hello again. It is your friendly time travelling witch. I have once again decided to take you on a trip through time.

Today we will be travelling back to the day Lily and James got married.

I must once again ask you to buckle your seatbelts, it may be a bumpy ride.”

This is a companion piece to my story, A Torn Photograph. Though each can be read on their own.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1423 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/09 Updated: 03/03/09


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 03/13/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Picture

Hmmm... I enjoyed this fic. It moved fluidly, and captured James and Lily's emotions very well. Your writing style has clarity and sharpness to it, and the flow of words is very good. The plot was well formed and the moods were well captured. :)

However, I think you've missed out on Dumbledore's characterisation. I would have suggested a way of making it better, if it weren't that I'm bad at his characterisation myself. But I think the following line made Dumbledore seem slightly OOC-

“Lily, my dear. How lovely you look.”

Oh, and Sirius being sexy... ;)

 

Vampire - Ghost Child! by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 26]

Summary: Rosalburga Aphrodite Black is no ordinary Hogwarts student. First - she's American. Second - she's only just discovered she's a witch. Third - her mother is a Vampire. Fourth - her father is Sex!God Sirius Black.

Things are about to get very exciting for the new R.A.B.

This is a tale of high dram and passion. This is a tale of extreme cliche's. This is a tale that may never be seen again.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling or even Stephanie Meyer

Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 685 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
04/01/09 Updated: 04/01/09


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 04/01/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue - How they met.

Haha, Carole, good one! Rolling eyes! And I haven't read anything but Twilight in the series, but I do know that Bella is a vampire in Breaking Dawn.

LOL... Can't wait for the rest!

Author's Response: The rest! *gulp* errr... quickly scrawls something in a note book - *gulps again* Okay.... *hides*

Ta, Poozy-darls. love Carole xxx

 

Hermione's in Trouble! by OliveOil_Med
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary:
"I tried a few simple spells just for practice and it's all worked for me."
-Hermione Granger
Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone

My answer to an early plot hole that has always bugged me in this story.



Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2302 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/25/10 Updated: 04/26/10


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 10/31/10 Title: Chapter 1: Hermione's in Trouble

Hey Molly! I really liked this story. It's a good portrayal of Hermione in her childhood. Her characterisation is good-- I like the part where she practices her piano for exactly twenty minutes a day. So typical! And it's nice to know that Hermione, like the rest of us, does get into trouble once in a while. The ending was particularly cute, with Hermione going into her mentally blank state. I would imagine her doing that if she broke a rule without intending to. And this was the law. LOL.

However, I do have a few nitpicks. There's a particular paragraph where you seem to have made a few mistakes.

Hermione exactly what they were talking about.

I think you have forgotten to type a 'knew' over here.

She remember they well...

You have two typos here. It should be she remembered them well.

And lastly-- ...they had been laying, gathering dust...

I think that should be 'lying'.

I guess you should just do a bit of a scrutiny check on the story for typos. Otherwise, it's wonderful! :)

Cheers!
Pooja

Author's Response: That's for the advice. I'll have to fix it all.

 

The Hidden Truth by majestic_ginny
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 35]

Summary: Natasha Osborne- better known as Tash- is a perfectly normal girl living in Australia. She's got all the problems that a normal teenage girl has: quarrels, boys, studies, and the list can go on and on. But when her father is transferred to England, she has to attend Hogwarts. When Tash meets the Boy-Who-Lived, her perfect world turns upside-down.

Natasha Osborne learns the secret her family have been hiding since she was a year old.

She learns her whole identity was a lie.

Follow Tash through her seventh, but first year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.

Warnings for violence and self injury are strictly for later chapters.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Self Injury, Violence

Word count: 19887 Chapters: 8 Completed: No
Published:
08/12/10 Updated: 08/16/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 11/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: The Mystery

Hey Nadia!

Yay! I finally got to review this one. I've been meaning to for days and something or the other has always popped up to bother me. :o

Well, I do like this prologue of yours. It has a mysterious tone to it and is written well. I do feel like I really want to read the rest of the fic when I read this piece.

Good job! I like this fic. :D

Author's Response: DI!!!! :D :D :D sorry to reply so late :P Thanks for the review, hon! I'm glad you liked it! *huggles*

 
Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 11/09/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: The Girl

Hmm... Nice first chapter! I giggled throught the chapter when I read Tash and Bri's conversations. Also, I must say you have an innovative way of presenting their school. Hehe. I don't have much to say right now, except that, keep writing! :D

Author's Response: thanks a lot, Di! Bri and Tash's conversations are a lot like my friend's and mine :P. and the school took a LOT of work, and the only reason it's even presentable is because of Emily, my lovely Beta :) Thanks for the review, hon!

 
Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 11/09/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2: The News

You seem to be good at the autobiographical PoV format! I have noticed that all the characterisation you do in this way turns out well moulded. Even your OF is a real pleasure because it's really interesting in the autobiographical format.

And I can't wait for these people to get to Hogwarts! It sounds like there's gonna be so much of fun in this fic. I really want to read ahead and find out what happens! Do update soon! I'm waiting. :)

Muah! :) See ya! Pooja

Author's Response: I do seem to be good at autobiography :). I like writing this way a lot! I'm glad you liked Tasha, she likes you too :P. And Hogwarts.... THAT is gonna be interesting ;). Keep on reading! Updates will be a bit late, sorry hon... :( RL is nagging me a lot. Though I hope you'll come back when the next chappie's up! *huggles* --Nadia

 

Summary:

Albus Potter had what some would call a fascinating job -- working for the Magical Law Enforcement's intelligence department. But when suspicious activity caused the Ministry to think the infamous Knights of Walpurgis were up to something, their leading expert was called into action.

In disguise and out of his mind, Albus embarked on an impossible task, but when things started turning for the worse, why were his only thoughts about the one person he would hurt along the way?

 

This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next-Generation Story AND Best Same-Sex Pairing Story



Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 25947 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/10 Updated: 12/10/10


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 10/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, I had read this a while ago and I've been meaning to write you a gigantic review for it. Forgive me for not reviewing a little earlier but oh my God, Jess, this HAS to be my new favourite fic! I barely have words for this piece-- it is absolutely fantastic. Your prose style is lovely-- it flows without breaks and it is easy to grasp and read. The plot totally kept me on my toes throughout and kept my eyes racing through the story anxiously, wondering what was about to happen next. I love the slight addition of humour-- it made me chuckle a fair few times and made my Mum wonder about what I was up to.

The story was well thought-out and planned. I loved your characterisation. The next-gen characters are almost OCs because JKR hasn't told us much about them. However, your Al stood out from the stereotypical, whiny fellow (who ends up in Hufflepuff sometimes, mind) and Scorpius drew me in with something-- I don't know what to call it, so I shall call it Slytherin charm. I loved how Al reacted at having to disguise as a woman-- it was wonderful. Also, the fact about Al being straight but eventually falling for Scorpius was very, very believable. The emotions, confusion, desire, sadness... everything was well captured. It was realistic. I could be sure that this would be the exact thing going on in the mind of a fellow who is straight but finds himself falling for another man.

Also, I love the fact that Al fell for Scorpius-- his character, and how you described love as being an emotion that you basically develop for someone based on who they are, and without consideration of external appearances. It sounded plausible for Al to be straight and still like a guy because of his character. As for Scorpius, I loved how he managed to finally accept that he loved 'Melinda' for the character, and that he accepted Al when he realised that Al was disguised as Melinda all along.

Jenkins being with the Knights was definitely a shocker-- I didn't see that one coming. The mystery was well kept; the secret well hidden. It was definitely a thrill to read that last part-- but it was a thrill to read your whole story anyway.

I feel no amount of words can describe how much I loved this fic. You are a very, very talented author and this fic deserved its nomination. I don't generally read slash in fanfics because I don't ship any same-sex pair, and even though I don't ship Albus/ Scorpius, reading this fic was a pleasure. You're just too good. :)

I have been only following majestic_ginny's fanfiction for a while now because moving to college and lack of internet supply (the wi-fi doesn't reach my room for some reason) forced me to stop reading fics. I didn't want to read them if I couldn't review them. But this was the best I could ask for after my fic-reading hiatus. Really, Jess, I don't know if saying this much is even enough.

I'll definitely take a peek at a few more of your fics when I get time again. Until then, well, we have LJ, don't we? :D

Thank you for this wonderful, wonderful story!

~Pooja

Author's Response:

I’m going to be completely honest in saying that I LOVE getting reviews for this story more than any others for one key reason: the shock factor. I wrote this story with the knowledge that it could be either completely ridiculous or completely original, if not a bit of both, so it’s always a mystery as to whether readers will love it or ‘wtf’ it and shake their heads. I wanted it to be just bizarre enough for someone to think ‘you’ve got to be kidding me’ but madcap enough to feel bad for Albus.

Speaking of Albus, I tend to portray him in a couple different lights, but this is one of my favourites. I tend to phase out more of his distinctly male habits, but in this one, he is more guy-like in his natural state. It just makes the contrast between him and the persona of Melinda that much more pronounced and giggly.

Scorpius in this is quite different than I normally make him. He’s passive politically, because he doesn’t believe in the Knights’ cause but doesn’t actually do anything to stop it. That’s why he was able to like Melinda, despite her (albeit fabricated) pure-blood ideals. He’s able to like her for her personality (well, rather, Albus’s personality) in spite of it, which is why he’s able to realise he has feelings for Albus even after the guise of Melinda is gone. That in itself makes Scorpius uniquely capable of getting past this deception; he knows it was necessary on Albus’s part and knows that Albus was truly remorseful for hurting him — enough to try sacrificing himself to save Scorpius’s life.

Albus proved to be almost everything that Jenkins had expected him to be upon assigning him the task of ‘spying on the Knights’. He really wasn’t cut out for that sort of field work, so your surprise was Al’s as well. I imagine he felt like a bit of an idiot once he realised he was being played like a chess piece, but all that was eclipsed by his fear for Scorpius’s safety.

Anyway, I’ve run out of things to say (I’m terrible at responding to such lovely reviews; it’s hard to know what to say other than ‘yay’.), so I will thank you profusely for reviewing and reading. I’m glad you took the time to stop by and check out my work, and I’m glad you picked this one. There is a little bit of everything on my author page, so I hope that you will find other works of mine to be agreeable, as well. Thank you again, and have a good night (though when you read this, it’ll be morning again). :D

~Jess

 

Eyes That Know Me by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Having just been dumped by his girlfriend, Hugo Weasley is not in the mood for his cousin's party, even when James assures him that he'll soon snap up a 'wicked-looking witch'. And with Lily hell-bent on fixing him up with the boring Eliza Finch-Fletchley, the evening looks to be taking a sharp turn for the worse.

But on the other side of the room, one guest is watching him closely. Will Hugo be able to resist?

The Sexual situations are mild and the strong profanity is fleeting (but necessary) hence the rating.

This story was originally written for a Musical drabble exchange in the SBBC. The song that inspired me was 'Falling Slowly' by Glen Hansard. Thanks must go to Lia (Liandrin) for introducing me to the song, Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) for beta'ing the original drabble, and Elene (CoolCatElly) for beta'ing the extended version.

Finally, thank you Natalie (hestiajones) for introducing me to the whole concept of Scugo.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling or Glen Hansard. I just nick bits of their work and mould it into something else.

Nomintated for a 2011 QSQ in the Best Same Sex Category. Thank you.



Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 1794 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/06/11 Updated: 01/06/11


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 10/08/12 Title: Chapter 1: Eyes That Know Me

This was short and sweet, Croll. I really needed this bit of Scugo and am utterly grateful to you for recommending me this. :)

I loved the distinct characterisations of both Scorpius and Hugo. This story had little words, but their characters were very well expressed. It had the right mix-- Hugo was not a carbon copy of Ron, but at the same time, I could relate him to his father. I'll say the same for Scorpius. Also, I liked Scorpius's blue eyes. He always seems to have grey eyes (and has grey eyes in my headcanon) but it really worked well for this fic. Particularly here:

Blue met blue, mesmerising Scorpius and holding him in total thrall.

Blue is a mesmerising colour and this went very well with the situation at hand.

I felt quite sorry for Scorpius, that his grandparents kept pestering him to marry by making him meet girls. Reminds me of the Indian society a little bit. But yes, I can definitely, definitely imagine Lucius and Narcissa Malfoy being like that. :/

I loved the scene from Hogwarts. I totally agree with you-- I'm pretty sure Scorpius and Hugo have a scandalous Hogwarts past (though in my headcanon, they had sex once too). I liked the subtle sexual tension.

Speaking of the Hogwarts scene, I really adore the unity of the houses! Hehe, them having a snowball fight was definitely what I hadn't expected, but it was lovely to read. Rose kissing her boyfriend was so funny. XD That would have happened anyway!

The ending made me squeal with joy. At first, I was sad that they possibly weren't about to be together, but then when Hugo kissed Scorpius... it made me very, very happy! And I hearted the last line. It was wonderful!

If I’m sinking, I want you with me, Scorpius.

So lovely... so subtle and beautiful. I loved this fic. I loved how your minor characters for the fic had their own distinctive personalities. I loved everything about this. You said a lot in very few words and I enjoyed the fic for that.

That said, is there going to be a sequel? :D Hee, I just really loved this!

Anyway, thanks for recommending this to me, once again, Croll! You're an amazing author. :)

Author's Response: Scorpius always hs blue eyes in my fics, it's the one thing, looks-wise, he inherited form his mum in my canon. As much as I enjoyed writing this, I can't see me writing a sequel because Scorpius/Lily is far too firmly entrenched in my psyche now. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing after I nagged you - hee hee. ~Carole~

 

Zeitgeist by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: She was the Zeitgeist Girl – the face of the Spirit of the Age. Beautiful, talented and engaged to one of the most famous men in the wizarding world. Astoria Greengrass had it all – except now she was dead.

Oliver Wood, ex Quidditch professional, is the detective in charge. Tough and experienced, he can break the most hardened criminal, but how will he manage to prise information from the Malfoys?

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt #2.

This is also Carole of a house in London writing a mystery especially for Kara, a visitor to this fair land, because it's her birthday (and not because she's the judge).

Thank you Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this story.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. She would probably come up with something far more original.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 8360 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/16/11 Updated: 05/28/11


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 05/17/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - The Hero Enters

Ooh! A twist in the very first chapter! Wow, Carole! *huggles*

Anyway: I did enjoy reading this piece. I love your portrayal of Daphne Greengrass, especially and the cigarette in her hand does make me wonder. Hmmm! ;)

I was also worried when you said Astoria was carrying Draco's child. I wondered about Scorpius, but you sorted that one out! ;) I also absolutely adore the way you write dialogue. You write a current amount of it and you write it well. :)

Only The Quibbler ignored her (but then The Quibbler ignored anything that wasn’t blibbering)

^That one was definitely lovely! :D

As for the plot, I love how fast moving it is-- reminds me of Dan Brown's books. :)

All in all, you are indeed one of the best authors on MNFF. Your plot, characters, dialogue, language... everything is well pruned and is presented in a very, very interesting way.

Lastly, I love how this chapter introduces questions into your mind, like-- 'Pansy Parkinson? HUH?' and also, 'Where on EARTH is Astoria Greengrass?' 'Who would want to murder her?' 'How was Pansy murdered?'

I sure can't wait to read more of this! Good luck, and cheers! :)

Author's Response: Secret ... it's fast moving because I wanted to get to the end. I am so lousy at mysteries, but I also prefer the fast paced shows like NCIS and CSi to slow moving shows like Midsomer Murders. Hmm, have i sorted out the fate of Scorpius? Maybe I forgot the AU tag ... hee hee - Thank you very much for the review. I am just so bad at mysteries but this was fun to write because I like writing Oliver and snarky Draco so much. ~Carole~

 

God Gave Me You by MJ_Padfoot
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: “Your happily ever after will come, Hermione.” Dad whispered to me one night when I was a little girl. “One day, you will meet him and he will love you. You’ll see. You just need to be patient.”

I never thought it would happen until now.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1124 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/14/11 Updated: 11/21/11


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 06/17/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Hey MJ!

It's been really long since I've read one of your stories; plus I wanted to get a bit of background for your banner (which I'm currently working on) so I was like, 'why not?'

I must say, your writing is as awesome as it always was. I love your Ronmione stories, especially as I love them too. I stopped writing about them a while ago but they'll never ever stop being my OTP. I love your take on this couple.

This story is amazing. It was so in-character of Ron to freak out at the first thought of marriage and cause a break-up, then come up with the idea himself, because he's so scared of losing Hermione again. :p And Hermione was spot-on with her tears during the proposal. LOL. The only weird part was the mention of God. Though I'm sure they must believe in God (they do celebrate Christmas and Easter and all) them attributing it all to God sounded a little... OOC. Just my thought, though. Sorry about that.

Overall, the story was very cute and a nice, short, satisfying read which left me grinning. I'll get your banner to you soon!

Pooja x

Author's Response: Aw! Thanks for such a wonderful review! I haven't really written anything for awhile but one night I got an itch to write and this is what happened. I do agree with you on the OOC part. But this is my justification for it: Since Hermione comes from a Muggle family that lives in England, I'm assuming she grew up in a religious home. So I thought that it was only fair from her Muggle upbringing that she would somehow incorporate God into her marriage. Does that make sense? I hope it does. Thank you for the review again! They are always great. :) ~MJ

 

Last Man Standing by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Charlie Weasley is sitting at his brother's wedding when he meets a beautiful reporter covering the nuptials. Daphne Greengrass is more than she appears, however, and he finds himself quickly entranced. Is she interested in him as well, or is he just another story?

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 3995 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 07/15/13 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

Hey Gina!

I got to this story because it was recommended in the romance class on the forums, and I am glad I did, because I really enjoyed this. It felt different to me right from the beginning, and progressed to a well-plotted, well-spun tale.

The first thing that struck me about your story was the writing style. It is elegant, just like the story -- just like the setting, in fact. Your narrative is smooth and it flows well with the scenery you’ve given us here. It really set my mood the way you wanted it to be -- relaxed. I was at ease, and I had a vivid mental picture of everything that was going on. Speaking of which, I love how you wrote a detailed description of what the wedding was like, because it really gave me an insight into Audrey’s personality.

I quite liked how the story was from Charlie’s perspective. I wondered why he never got married, and getting into his head was really nice. I agree with the way you’ve written his thoughts -- he simply didn’t feel the need to settle, perhaps. But then, the summary mentioned Daphne Greengrass, and I was intrigued. I really wanted to know how that would work out.

As I read further, I quite liked how Charlie and Daphne got acquainted. I could see that Charlie was quite the smooth talker, and I enjoyed the conversation between him and Daphne. I couldn’t believe how friendly Daphne seemed at first, but I waved it off as Charlie being charming. Of course, we find out the reason for that much, much later. But the way things progressed between Charlie was extremely well written and believable. The sexual tension and mild sexual overtones were well expressed. I could see that Daphne really interested Charlie, and the transformation in his mind from wanting to be single, and then suddenly liking the idea of companionship was well done.

I wish Charlie had worked on his intuition about Daphne just wanting some scoop on him. But then his attraction overrode that, and I can understand. I absolutely loved that Charlie forgot to get back to George because he was trying to pursue Daphne. It really made me laugh, and then harder when George discovered the two of them.

I loved the characterisation in this story. Audrey is different from all the versions I’ve read of her. I never imagined she could be a rich woman with an estate with taste in everything royal, but I can imagine Percy marrying such a woman. And then there was Charlie -- and I think he was written very well -- smooth and engaging. George was spot on. I enjoyed all his dialogues, especially this one. "Yeah, we haven't told anyone yet, though. The little Snitch is due this autumn." And I think George’s ‘new father’ grin was absolutely adorable. I know how hard he can be to write, so really, great job! And then, there’s Daphne. I liked the mystery she exuded, and the fact that she was so Slytherin. She turned out to be intelligent and manipulative in the end, and it for the image you had created of her.

The end really saddened me. I was really hoping that this was it for Charlie, but apparently not. I hope she does go to visit him in Romania, though. A sequel, perhaps?

I really, truly enjoyed this story, and again, I’m so glad I decided to read it. It was a wonderful experience. Good luck with the Cotillion, and hope this review motivates you to write some more Harry Potter stuff! :)

Pooja

 

Truth or Dare by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Cormac McLaggen, a sports journalist for The Daily Prophet is looking for a scoop to make his name.

Zacharias Smith, Chaser for the Falmouth Falcons is looking for acceptance and respect.

Will a game of 'Truth or Dare' get both of them what they want? Or will this collision of two colossal egos leave both licking their wounds?

This is Equinox Chick writing for The Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
This story is dedicated to Ariana (lucca4) because she dared me.
Thanks to Natalie (hestiajones) for betaing this story and also to ma flist for encouraging the impossible.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I hope she doesn't mind what I've done to two of her 'most-loved' characters.

Completely and utterly overjoyed that this won the award for the Best SSP One-shot in the 2012 QSQ's. I suspect my pairing will grab the glory, which is as it should be ;)

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 7983 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/21/12 Updated: 02/21/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 11/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: Truth or Dare

Hey Croll! :)

The ZacMac! You have no idea how long I’ve wanted to read this. Slash is a recent experiment of mine and of late, I’ve really started loving to read slash too. Rarepairs too, are a very recent thing that I’ve started to read and this was just perfect for my recent changes in taste.

First of all, I must comment on how perfectly you’ve written this from a man’s point of view. I think there’s a huge difference between writing from a man’s point of view and a woman’s point of view. With a man, the narrative is often rougher, cruder, and less about details. I find it difficult to write as a guy and you’ve done such a good job with this! It’s like you literally became Cormac for those hours that you wrote the fic, because everything is very well done, with precision.

The entire fic was an easy read and very light-hearted too. I enjoyed the Beer Avoidance part-- you can trust men to come up with something like that! And I didn’t hate either Zach or Mac in the fic for some reason, which, I should say is a huge achievement on your part. They’re extremely disliked by Potter readers and maintaining their characterisation, and yet making them likeable is no mean feat. You have pulled this off with so much ease-- it’s unbelievable, really.

Zach and Mac both adhered to what they were from the novel. It’s difficult to age characters, as I found out from my recent Ronmione experiment. You never know how exactly they might ‘grow up’. Everyone has to mature at some point and in this, as young adults, they were exactly as they were supposed to be. I enjoyed all the events leading up to them finally getting together too.

It was nice to see Cormac dare Zacharias to play well in that Puddlemere match, and I giggled at Wood letting in fourteen Quaffles. I can just imagine his reaction in the changing rooms. Also, the entire conversation about gay people was engaging. There was one line in particular that caught my eye: we don’t have some sort of aura around us announcing that we’re gay, you know. This line so aptly describes how homosexuals are misunderstood by so many people.

I loved the first kiss. I giggled when Zach’s tongue slipped into Cormac’s mouth, because Cormac’s thought train after that was epic. Also, the almost-kiss later on-- when Zach dared Cormac, was lovely. The emotions which built up to everything later on were so well written. The sexual tension was palpable from the other side of the screen, and then there was the subtle (and not-so-subtle) smut which was very tastefully written.

There are also some bits that I found humorous. First was this line: “Potter was an arrogant twat, but it-” I almost forgot how much both these people disliked Harry, and I burst out laughing at this. Also, there was this: “Get your arse parked on this seat and start drinking, you lightweight!” Guy talk can be so funny sometimes! That line just cracked me up. It’s funny how men are the best of friends even with all the obscenities that they throw at each other. It amazes me and makes me laugh. So yes, you managed to make me chuckle quite some bit.

Anyway, summing it all up, I think this fic definitely deserved the QSQ. It was tastefully written, with lovely characterisation and a very engaging plot. I wonder if ZacMac lasted, or if they broke up later on? Hmm…

Well done, Croll, I absolutely loved this story!

Author's Response: I'm finally responding. PHEW! Okay, the reason I think I can write men/boys is because I'm married to someone who is very blokey-bloke and also I do like the company of men - ha ha. So the conversations in the pub - especially the 'beer avoidance' gag - are directly from my husband's mouth - heh heh. Not that he knows any of this. Mwahahahahahaha.

I can imagine Oliver raging in the changing room, but there wasn;t much he could do as Zac was having a blinder and he was having a disaster. I don;t think he'd blame anyone else but himself, because he never seems to do that in the books, so I can imagine him 'drowning himself in the shower' again.

Will they last? It's interesting because the end of the story seems to imply it, but I get the feeling Cormac is not going to suddenly come out and announce he's gay (or bi-sexual). He's simply not comfortable with that side of himself, however much he desires Zach.

And yet .....

I have ideas .... :D

Thank you so much for the fantabulous review ~Carole~

 

'i' before 'e' by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 33]

Summary: Ms A Cadwallader wishes to improve herself and apply for a better job. Unfortunately, despite her impeccable qualifications, she is thwarted by a certain Junior Under Secretary for the Minister of Magic, who has let it be known that basic spelling errors can never be over looked.

This story, written in the style of a series of letters, first appeared in The Battle of the Genres over at the SBBC forum.

I am not JK Rowling. She would probably have been more amusing.

This story is for Minna because it was her birthday and she likes this pairing.

Thank you Natalie for liking the drabble and encouraging me to expand.

Winner of the Best Humour QSQ in 2012 - GOBSMACKED!!!

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1538 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/21/12 Updated: 04/21/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 07/15/13 Title: Chapter 1: Letters

Hey Carole!

I just read this a while ago, and I honestly have no idea why I hadn’t read it all this time. I am so glad that you put it in the list for recommended stories in the class, though, because it would have skipped my mind otherwise.

I think what sets this story apart from others, first of all, is the format and the style. I loved the letter-exchanges. I’ve never actually read anything like this, and it was a breath of fresh air, as well as a marvel. I have never seen a Percy/Audrey romance written this way either. I’ve read the more serious ones, but now that I’ve seen this, I think this fits best with canon.

I loved how the letters started out formal. Audrey was patient and courteous in the first two, and then, I could understand what she felt as she wrote the third one. Percy’s pompousness is so visible there, and I’m glad she told him off for ignoring her application. And then of course, was Percy’s reply. He seemed so indifferent to her frustration, I was amused. And then the letters just started getting less and less formal. Audrey seemed so annoyed, and Percy was all the more indifferent, and it got to the point where I was laughing out loud despite myself.

I liked how the characterisation was so spot on, despite the lack of dialogue or narrative. Expressing Percy and Audrey through their writing was no mean feat, I’m sure, and I must applaud you for this. I was amused, and at awe at how Percy was so very recognisable from the books ” pompous, smug and proud. And I was even fonder of how Audrey turned him down for it. She’s confident, intelligent and unafraid of letting Percy know that he’s wrong. They were well matched, and it’s difficult not to ship them at this point.

Then there’s the plot. The letters formed a progressive, wonderful plot, as they got angrier at each other, and then slowly more acquainted. At this point, we discover that Percy has been noticing Audrey at mealtimes, and vice-versa, which makes their union in the end all the more believable. I can also imagine how fond Audrey would be of Arthur if she had worked under him, and the fact that she enquired about Arthur made me like her even more.

The humour component in this story is fantastic. It was mostly the tone that got me laughing, and there was also the way that the insults escalated. This particular part got me laughing so hard, I had to take a breather before I could continue to the next one: I tried boiling my head, but it only made my hair redder and my freckles more pronounced. . Also, the name of Audrey’s book about Wendelin the Weird was unexpected (it fits, now that I look at it). Humour needs a lot of planning and talent, and you now are an all-rounder in my eyes. :)

All-in-all, great story! It lightened my mood considerably, was romantic and funny, and fit snugly into canon. What more could I ask for? I’m not surprised at all that this one a QSQ, because it is that amazing. Great job there, Carole!

Pooja

Author's Response: Wow, thank you. This is probably the story that I had the most fun ever writing (although Zacmac comes close) and it was certainly the one that took me the least amount of time. It has received a fabulous reception, though, so perhaps I should write everything on a whim and a prayer.

Basically this started off as a drabble for SBBC which I expanded for Minna because I knew she liked the letters style of it, and she's also a Percy fan. I very much liked putting them together as a couple, although it doesnt quite reconcile with my version of Audrey in my other stories, who is far more austere. I'm not so sure Audrey was 'unafraid to let Percy know' he was wrong, as just more convinced that she was right. After all, he is actually right and the Minister couldnt employ a secretary with SUCH bad spelling - ha ha.

Thank you, again, for the wonderful review. ~Carole

 

Alive by iLuna17
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A few years after the war, Pansy Parkinson has hit rock bottom. She works in a bookshop, lives above a pub, and was pining over someone she could never have. When bad news hits, Pansy doesn't think it could get any worse.

But then Susan Bones came and changed everything.

This is a birthday present written for the simply indescribable Lily (Padfoot11333). Hope you like it, twin. :)

Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Slash, Strong Profanity

Word count: 2982 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/03/12 Updated: 05/04/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 05/08/12 Title: Chapter 1: Alive

This is a nice piece. I like the story-- it's sweet and nice, soft and pleasing to read. I like how you haven't *changed* Pansy into this kind, generous girl. She's still the bitch that she was-- only, she's toned down now. That was nice. The characterisation was good too. Pansy, I feel, is very well written. Susan was like I imagined her.

There are a few places where you have mixed up Susan's and Pansy's names-- or maybe there's some punctuation error there. You should just read through the fic once and fix that.

Even though Pansy looked thicker than a Warrington, she spent most of her time reading. She hadn’t at Hogwarts. He’d laugh at her if he saw her reading,

In this line too, you've mentioned 'he' without Preamble and I had to read on to understand that you meant Malfoy and not Warrington. If you didn't want anyone to know the name before Malfoy entered the store, you can italicise the 'he'd', so it will be understood that Pansy is talking about someone else other than Warrington. :)

I really enjoyed this story, all in all. Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading my fic! I love, love, love the banner, it definitely just made my day. <3

As for Pansy .... I definitely had some struggles with her. Luckily, Alex straightened me out, and Pansy remained her own bitchy self, but as you said, softer. I think she really would have learned to tone it down after the war. I'm glad you liked her, and Susan wasn't very easy, either. :)

I'll look into possible name mess ups, but I purposely put the 'he' without preamble. I didn't want to confirm it was Draco until they actually met .... but I'll probably italicise it later.

Thanks for the review, though, and I'm so glad you liked it. :)
Ellie

 

The Night Before Christmas by HalfASlug
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: It was the night before Christmas and Ron Weasley's plans for a quiet night in with his pregnant wife and her infuriating cat don't quite go to plan.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 10493 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/13/12 Updated: 06/27/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 12/15/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Hello! :)

I’ve been meaning to read one of your Ronmione fics for a while now and am so glad I actually did it this time round, because this fic was beautiful. I’m an absolute Ronmione shipper and this fic made me so, so happy. The intense emotions, and yet the light-heartedness of it all, and most importantly, the characterisation were so well written, and so beautifully expressed, that I was completely lost in a different world.

I could see it all. I could see Ron and Hermione’s house, Ron’s face as he fought with Crookshanks, and Hermione waddling about, telling Ron off for being mean to Crookshanks; I could make out their expressions, their gestures and everything, and that is because of the way you’ve written this story. It was like watching a movie in my mind. I can shut my eyes and watch your entire fic as a movie. So, I must say, you’ve done a fantastic job with the descriptions.

It is very difficult, I think, to write Ron and Hermione as adults. I have experimented on this, and I found that it wasn’t easy to characterise them as older people. But you have adhered to their characters. They were mature, and yet the same. Ron still had some of his teenage tendencies, along with some of the understanding of an adult. He was so recognisable, and he complied very easily with the Ron we know from the books.

Ha, Hermione was evil! Somehow, I imagine her as a softer person who isn’t always direct with her anger-- she seems to show a suppressed temper; but the way you’ve written her works very well for her. I guess the fact that she was pregnant contributed to her mood, but she was spot-on, I must say. There is no single correct way to characterise the trio as adults, though, and I quite enjoy reading different interpretations of how they would be as older people, or even parents.

Both Ron and Hermione’s emotions through the fic were handled very well. No man would really be prepared to deliver his baby at home, and if it came to that, I’d imagine his emotions and reactions would be exactly like Ron’s. The rush of emotions that followed once the baby came out were so beautifully described. He leant forward and kissed his baby on the forehead, taking in its unique smell, knowing full well he would give his life for this piece of perfection without batting an eyelid. This line in particular, is so lovely-- I remember watching 17 Again, and reading this reminded me of Zac Efron’s dialogue about holding his baby for the first time. I loved both that dialogue and these lines, because it’s so difficult to put those emotions into words, especially since you aren’t a parent (they have a whole different set of emotions we can never understand unless we experience it, I guess), but you’ve written it perfectly well. That line touched me and made me think of my own parents.

The narrative was hilarious--mostly because it was Ron’s point of view, of course, but then again, making people laugh isn’t easy. It’s been long since I’ve read Ron like this: light-hearted and nervous, and it was lovely to see him that way again, especially since I’ve written a very angsty Ron in my own fic. Oh, I could just discuss Ron with you for ages, he’s my favourite character to read and write, and you’ve done him so much justice. Narrating the story from his point of view was a definite risk and you took it, and succeeded in making it work. Also, the situations were so funny-- Hermione wanting to sleep, Ron telling Hermione that he isn’t crying when he really is, Crookshanks and Ron in general, and the last line-- oh, the last line: "Yeah, but she takes after you." This had me cracking up! I loved that Rose hit Ron, and that Ron cracked this line. Ending the story on this note was a good choice, because it left me grinning for a good while even after reading the story.

Finally, the medical details. Well, being a med student myself, I must say, it was very well written. You certainly didn’t make mistakes-- perhaps Ron asked her to push a little too early, but I never thought of it as your mistake, and I still don’t think so. I think it fits in naturally with the character and the situation. He’s not a medical professional, and he’s not Hermione, so he’s bound to make mistakes on this one. :) Anyway, I don’t think you should be worried about any incorrect medical facts, and you have researched well!

All in all, this was a fantastic story. I absolutely enjoyed it and am delighted to have read it. You are a wonderful author, and I will remember to check more of your Ronmione delights once I have some more time. Good job! :)

Pooja

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! This actually started out as a straight forward humour fic but it soon became clear that it needed to a be at least a little serious. As you said, no one expects to go through this so I had to bring in everything that went with that - glad you think the mixture worked well! Saying this was like a watching a movie is an amazing compliment so thank you! Hermione is definitely one to suppress her anger but she always seems to lose control when Ron is involved - especially when she is this stressed! Like you said, there is no right way to write the characters as adults but it's nice to know that you liked my versions. It is a bit like 17 Again, isn't it? I'm not a parent so I have no idea what that moment must be like so I probably have subconsciously copied it from some film, haha! It would've been hard to have written it from anyone else's POV! Hermione was a little bit distracted and Crookshanks was probably a bit bored by it all. Ron is my favourite character too - especially when he is this kind of situation. He is doubted himself, but is still strong and his humour is still ever present. Getting another Ron fan's approval is great :)T

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! This actually started out as a straight forward humour fic but it soon became clear that it needed to a be at least a little serious. As you said, no one expects to go through this so I had to bring in everything that went with that - glad you think the mixture worked well! Saying this was like a watching a movie is an amazing compliment so thank you! Hermione is definitely one to suppress her anger but she always seems to lose control when Ron is involved - especially when she is this stressed! Like you said, there is no right way to write the characters as adults but it's nice to know that you liked my versions. It is a bit like 17 Again, isn't it? I'm not a parent so I have no idea what that moment must be like so I probably have subconsciously copied it from some film, haha! It would've been hard to have written it from anyone else's POV! Hermione was a little bit distracted and Crookshanks was probably a bit bored by it all. Ron is my favourite character too - especially when he is this kind of situation. He is doubted himself, but is still strong and his humour is still ever present. Getting another Ron fan's approval is great :) Good to know that I didn't make any major medical mistakes either! Even if it is a story about magic people giving birth in crazy circumstances, a sense of realism is always useful. Anyway, thank you so much for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story :)

 

Summary: Lily has always had a picture in her head of her future -- a wistful, far-too-good-to-be-true image of happiness and sunshine and flowers, of her and James walking off into the sunset, unencumbered by the darkness within the most evil of people who walked this earth.

Of course, of course she should have known that things weren’t going to be that simple.

This is babewithbrains of Ravenclaw entering the first round of Madam Alex’s Character Clinic Triathlon: Major Characters.

ZOMG. This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance. Thank you!


Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 3640 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/29/12 Updated: 07/01/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 12/15/12 Title: Chapter 1: Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion

Hey, Soraya!

So once I’d read your other James/Lily fic, I was curious about this one. I must say, I should read more of their fics. As I’ve told you before, I’ve read very few Marauder Era fics and it seems interesting, now that I’ve read your take on it.

This fic was sweet and sad and very beautiful. What James would do for Lily is touching. He wasn’t very nice when he was fifteen and he’s grown up naturally and his maturity has progressed well in your fic. He’s very recognisable from the little we got of him in the books and I really loved how you characterised him. And then a look of worry flashed on his face. “Did I... hurt you?” This line, in particular, shows how much James has changed and matured. He’s so concerned, so caring, I couldn’t help but love him in the whole story. He’s progressed from the arrogant toe-rag to the man who would die to keep his family safe, and fight against Voldemort.

Lily was like a feminine, softer version of Harry-- Dumbledore does mention that Harry is really like Lily, and you’ve used that in this fic. She was such a loving, considerate character, and her love for Harry, her love for James-- they portray her the way I’d always imagine her to be like. The whole time James is in the hospital, she’s thinking about him, and after Harry is born, the love she feels for him is very evident-- you’ve written her emotions perfectly, and I loved that you chose her point of view for this story because it brings out all the emotions very well. She doesn’t want to let him go, afraid that the slightest slip-up, the tiniest mistake, the smallest betrayal from anyone will jeopardise Harry’s safety. This line, in particular, proves what I want to say here. She regards Harry as her whole world, she’s ready to do anything for him and it validates the sacrifice she made for her son later on.

I think your choice of the present tense was good. Somehow, it made everything ten times more realistic and the emotions more intense than they would have been in the past tense. I felt like I was with the characters, experiencing what they were going through. It brought me closer to them and made me feel for them much more than past tense would have. I liked the Shakespearen pattern of the story too, and the quotes from As You Like It, which happens to be my favourite Shakespearen tale.

The last few paragraphs, I must say, gave me a heart attack. I knew at the back of my mind that Harry would be okay, but I was still very anxious. I gasped aloud when Lily couldn’t find a pulse and I found myself mentally egging her on to resuscitate him successfully. It was very well written-- Lily and James urgency during those few minutes, and Lily’s inability to conjure a Patronus was well described. The story was slow and sad at first, and then it suddenly picked up pace, it was rapid, and it made my heart race. Well done on that!

All in all, I really loved this story, and it definitely deserved the QSQ nomination. Lovely plot and characterisation… and the last line, Harry starts to cry, and she has never, ever been so relieved to hear his wailing in her life. This was very nice. It made me smile. It’s so true! Lily must be tired of Harry wailing, and this one time, it would have been such music to her ears. I liked the irony of it and it was a very good way to end the story too. So yes, well done, and do write some more of Lily/James, because both your stories have been lovely! :)

Pooja

Author's Response: Pooja! D: Sorry I've taken a while to get to this -- I've been busy basically just wasting my time for the last two weeks, lol, and I therefore have no good reason for taking this long to reply to your beautiful review. *grovels at Pooja's feet*

I do like this story. Kind of. I am so glad you chose this to review, because it was when I was going through my should-I-shouldn't-I phase with smut. (Of course, you know that I *did* write it in the end XD) It was also when I was contemplating deleting my chaptered J/L (which I have since done), but there were a couple of scenes that I wanted to expand on, hence why this kind of happened. :)

I have always always wanted to write someone's first time purely because I've seen it done so badly both in fanfiction and OF before. I mean, of course, I haven't had sex, but I do know that it's not easy the first time, especially for the girl. I wanted James to see that, and I think, in spite of his bravado, he would care about how Lily felt -- hence why he asked her if he had hurt her.

Yayyy, you liked Lily :D Yes, she is loving and considerate, but she's also rather snarky :P and she has her faults, just like James does. In my head canon, Lily is actually suffering from post-natal depression after Harry is born; the only thing is, everyone's so concerned for Harry that they don't really realise/pay much attention.

I seem to have a love/hate relationship with present tense. I hate it because it restricts my writing, sometimes, but I also think it can be effective. Yay to that seeming to be the case ;) And really, the Shakespeare thing was honestly just the only thing I could think of to find a title. My sister had mentioned that passage to me before, so it was her fault, really :P

Haha, I can imagine it would shock you. I think I should have finished the story properly -- I did think it felt unfinished, but tbh, I was so sick of this thing by the time I'd finally finished it that I just wanted to submit it. I was thinking one day that I would like to add an extra scene at teh end. I might. We shall see. But yay to your heart racing, lol.

Awwww, thank you. I pretty much died when it was nominated for a QSQ because I seriously did not think it was good enough, lol, especially with the ending.

Anyway, thank youuuuuu for the lovely lovely review. You are lovely, too. I do want to write more James/Lily, but it maaay end up on ClickySmut instead of here, lol, depending on what the content is :P I heart you lots for the review, and sorry for taking a while to respond and for using far too many emoticons!

Soraya xxx

 

If I Leave You Now by silverlining95
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary:

'Even in a castle this huge, with as many cousins as I have there’s always someone with a map to come and scoop me out of my tear-stained reverie in a dark corner.'

Molly Weasley Jr cannot leave Hogwarts, for she cannot leave her best friend behind.

This was originally written for the Illustration for Inspiration challenge over in the Great Hall, however it wasn't long enough and I didn't have time to rework it in order to post it in time to qualify.

The title is inspired by the Chicago song 'If You Leave Me Now'.


Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill in the Next Generation category.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders

Word count: 1472 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/07/12 Updated: 07/09/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 07/09/12 Title: Chapter 1: I Never Can Say Goodbye

This is a wonderful piece. It was such a beautiful read... short and yet bursting with emotion. I really loved it and it also made me sad for Molly.

It is true that when you're at a boarding school/ college hostel, your friends there tend to know you better than your own family and sometimes, your friends back home. It's an amazing experience, though. So in the beginning, Molly's grief for leaving the school behind was sad and understandable and then when Fliss was mentioned... I felt terrible. I wasn't expecting it, really and it suddenly made the fic so much deeper. Unfortunately, I have experience there too-- I have lost a good friend (though not my best friend) here and I'm sure I'd feel terrible leaving this place after college because of the memories. I remember when I'd got the news that he'd died-- I was home for my holidays and I suddenly couldn't stay there anymore and I just wanted to come back to college because this is the place that I've known him alive. And then when I came here, I couldn't stand the memories and I wanted to go back home. But now, all those small memories just make me smile. When I'm at class, or at the cafeteria, or near the hostel gates... I remember some of those moments and the good times.

Basically, what I'm trying to say there is that you were very realistic with Molly's emotions. Often, when we write about stuff that we haven't personally experienced, we don't get the magnitude of some of the emotions involved in these situations and it's either overdone or half-done. Yours was just perfect and the autobiographical narrative made it better.

Without too many words, you've created an amazing, poignant picture of what's going on in Molly's mind. And I wish she'd get the job-- it was so sad that she didn't. I hope she does get it later on and that she has her closure soon enough.

All in all, this was a fantastic story. I have no nitpicks and I really loved it. Great job! Pooja :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, it's lovely to hear such positive feedback! Like Molly says, when you spend seven years of your life somewhere, it's bound to become your home, and I'm glad that you felt that was true. I'm lucky enough to have never really lost anyone close to me, so I drew upon my experiences with depression to write this. So the fact that you found the exploration of her grief to be perfect really means a lot to me, as I desperately wanted Molly's sadness to resonate. I think that Professor Vector was right to refuse Molly a job, as Molly really wasn't in the right state of mind, regardless of her age. I think the thing I most wanted to convey is that depression/grief knows no bounds, whether you're a teenager or an adult it can overwhelm you just the same. Even now I feel like I want to help Molly to find her own kind of closure... which I guess means I'll have to write a sequel! Thank you so much for the review, it means a lot that you took the time to write such a lovely and in depth review, and I'm really touched that Molly's story resonated with you. Fenella x

 

My Love Is Always Here by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Lily is awoken yet again in the middle of the night by Harry, and this time, she's close to snapping.

Written for the amazing Gina/Gmariam, a wonderful friend and fabulous James/Lily writer ♥

(Title taken from My Love Is Always Here -- a bonus track on the Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows Soundtrack, by Alexandre Desplat.)

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 923 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/19/12 Updated: 08/02/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 08/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: My Love Is Always Here

Soraya! This was such a sweet little fic!

I loved how there was so much in such little. Lily getting a tad irritated with baby Harry was so cute. And hmm... I never wondered if Harry was premature and all that stuff. Although, I did read in a fic years ago-- Remus told Harry that Lily was in labour for like 24 hours before she delivered him. :p

This describes early parenthood very well, yes. It's not be easy to manage a baby (though I really have no clue). I hear these babies crying in these public places and I'm like, O.o

You know what, this is like the first James/Lily fic I've ever read. I have always read only trio era or Next-gen fics and I so, so loved this. I loved James's characterisation too. Sounded so much like him.

And so, I'm off to make your banner. :D I'll download some pictures tonight and start on it after college tomorrow, ok! Fabulous story, Soraya! :*

Author's Response: POOJA! Thank you so much for the lovely review :)

Haha, I'm quite close to my aunty who had her first baby at the end of last year -- and she's thirty-one, lol, and yet she found it hard, too, so I wanted to portray the problems with being a mum as accurately as possible. My aunty was a good place to start ;) And a lot of the babies in my stories tend to be premature. I'm not sure why.

Oh, 24 hours isn't *that* bad -- my friend, who was only fifteen when she had her baby (*sigh*), spent a week in labour before she finally had a Caesarean. :-/ Anywho, I'm not very good with babies either, excluding a cousin of mine in Bangladesh -- he wet himself on everyone, everyone except for me, lol. And he never used to cry when I carried him :P

O.o I didn't know this is the first J/L fic you've ever read! Whoa. You should definitely check out Gina/Gmariam's J/L stories -- they're wayyyy better than mine, haha. As are Croll's. And I LOVE James, though I've now divorced him and took Louis instead, lol. I'm glad you liked James's characterisation, anyway, especially as he didn't appear in it much.

Take as much time as you need with the banner -- no rush :) I hope you didn't mind reading it, lol -- it just means you get a better feel of the story for the banner :D Thank youuuuu for the fabulous review, Pooja! I appreciate it a lot :)

~Soraya~

 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Here in the dark
In these lonely hours
I will lay down my heart
And I’ll feel the power
That you won’t

--I Can’t Make You Love Me by Bonnie Raitt

Albus realises just how much Rose means to him -- and how much he doesn’t mean to her.

This is babewithbrains of Ravenclaw writing for Round Two of Madam Alex’s Character Clinic Triathlon.

:) This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation.

This story has also been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation. Thank you again! ♥



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 5066 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/19/12 Updated: 07/19/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 07/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: I Will Lay Down My Heart

Ha, we've both written the same character for the same prompt, I guess, though you haven't hacked Albus to as many pieces as I have. :p But you did make me feel terrible for him. I was mentally apologising to him as such, while I was writing my own fic and now I read this...

This was so well-written, Soraya! This is the first fic of yours that I'm reading (whilst wondering why I didn't come up to your author page earlier) but I was waiting for this one to get validated because the pairing really, really interested me. How Albus, in the beginning, struggles over the fact that he is attracted to a cousin is so... well written. I know a lot of people who are marrying their cousins and all, but the thing there is-- they're already told in their childhood that they have to marry each other. They never look at each other like, "OMG, he'she is my cousin!" so there is no such struggle. So Albus's feelings here were very well done. And the topic was very well handled.

Albus's character. Oh my God, you've written him in such detail-- every little snippet of him is so clear! You developed him very, very nicely! He was such a clear-cut picture in the end. As for Rose, I liked the mystery surrounding her, as much as I loved the little bits of information about Al.

Yes, Rose. God, I hated her. I don't generally hate her, but I did this time. How can she be so mean? :'( I felt terrible about the way she used Al just for sex. That really wasn't fair because Al is so sweet and loving in this story. And she was also mean when he asked her why she hadn't been present for Harry's birthday. You did make me really dislike her in this fic. I'm not sure I can handle her in my own fic for a while now. :p Though, she's very different there. :D Ha! Well done on writing her, though. It takes a lot more than making a character murder people about and be evil to get your readers to hate him/her.

The smut was good. You handled the awkward sex well and I remember you were having trouble with that. :) But yes, you wrote it well and I particularly loved this:

Though Rose had changed substantially, he could still see the suppressed tears in her eyes and smell their mingled sweat and feel the indentations her fingernails had left when they had dug into his back.

It's sad... and sexy and awkward. LOL. That was very nice.

The theme of the story was rather soft and... I don't know how to put this-- silent. Um... meaning, it was not noisy... er... I don't know how to describe that, it was just a feeling I got in my head. :D The rain in the beginning made it gloomy and I somehow know that this wasn't possible going to end well.

So, Soraya, you entertained me entirely with this fic. It was a wonderful, wonderful read! Have a pleasant Ramzan! See you around!

Pooja

Author's Response: Really? I thought I would have hacked Albus to quite a few pieces in this, considering how pathetic he appears and everything. I hope it's a good thing that I made you feel terrible for him, lol. And I know what you mean -- a lot of cousins in Asian culture are betrothed from a really early age, so I do see what you mean. That's why the dynamics of British cousin pairings fascinate me so. I'm glad you thought I handled the pairing well :)

I'm really flattered with how much you liked Albus! Ultimately, it's more focused on him than Rose, hence why Rose remained a mystery, and you knew far more about Albus. And, ha, you're the second reviewer to say you hated Rose. Ngl, she annoyed me too, even in Blood and Roses (my chaptered Scorose mystery), but like I said, she was in a bad place, and Albus just happened to be there, lol. And Rose is generally rather snarky -- understandably so, though. She did just dump Scorpius, after all.

Awkward smut is SO HARD to write. I'll be avoiding that one again in the future, haha. And I'm very flattered to hear that it was, um, sexy, lol.

Oh, no, I do see what you mean about the story being kind of silent/soft. Because the thing is, the story is almost entirely character-driven (even their banter/interactions generally) rather than plot, which is probably what would make the story noisy. I so get that -- great way to put it, actually :)

I'm really flattered that you liked it this much! I wasn't entirely happy with it, and I still am not, so it means a great deal to me that you liked it. Thank youuuuu for the review and for the banner which I shall now wear in my siggy <3

~Soraya~

 

Family First by majestic_ginny
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: When Andromeda Black joined Hogwarts, all she wanted to do was please her family. But as the years passed, she wasn't sure whether what they had been teaching her was right.

This is majestic_ginny of Hufflepuff writing for Round 2 of the Character Clinic Triathlon - Minor Characters. I chose the Parent prompt.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 2920 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/23/12 Updated: 08/02/12


Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter Signed
Date: 08/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

*fingers crossed*

Hope the whole thing uploads now!

Here you go:


Thank you so much, for this fic! I love youuu!

This is a wonderful story. I like that you chose Andromeda, she's a rather interesting character to write. Your first person format too was interesting, as we got to peak into Andromeda's mind directly.

The writing is good and so is the plot. I really loved how each aspect of her predicament came up, clear cut and well sorted out. I never considered the possibility of Andromeda being a Slytherin. I always automatically assumed it was Gryffindor because... I don't know why. Also, her pleading with the Hat was unexpected. For some reason, again, I thought only Harry did it, ever. Didn't think there would be others too.

Bella's characterisation was spot-on. The b**chy character, the blood-lust, it makes sense when she was like this since school. And Narcissa. Ha!

I swear her beautiful face would get wrinkled earlier than us because she did that so much.

This was so cool! I loved that line. And so canon compliant with why Narcissa always looks like there's dung under her nose. :p Haha. Just kidding. That was very, very funny and I giggled for five minutes. And yes, interesting turn on Cissy being interested in beauty. Someone in that family had to be interested in how they looked, after all (they need it).

That said, I think you should mention something about Ted before you bring him out again in the 1973 piece. It just came out of the blue that they were in a relationship. I mean, sure, we all know that Ted and Andromeda ended up together, but you should have mentioned her thinking at the dining table or something, that she was with Ted.

This was a very, very interesting take on Andromeda's story, Nadia. It shows familial pressures so well. I really, really loved this! Good luck with the challenge!

Pooja xo

Author's Response: Love you too, hun! I'm glad you enjoyed this fic :) Andromeda was a Slytherin, because Sirius was the only member of the black family to have been sorted into Gryffindor. She wasn't like the rest of her family, though. That kind of made me wonder why she was in Slytherin in the first place, and when I saw the parent prompt in the challenge things just kind of clicked and I knew I had to go for this one :D. I thought it kind of made sense that Andromeda initially tried to follow whatever her parents said despite of knowing deep down that there was something wrong somewhere. As she grew older and learned to differentiate right from wrong, she just couldn't follow them anymore. I've always wondered how all that happened so I ended up writing this.

About the sorting hat, I think there would always have been some people who would prefer to go to a certain house. Ron, for example, would have definitely wanted to be in no other house except Gryffindor, and I can see him subconsciously pleading with the hat. Hat must have seen that as well (along with his obvious bravery and chivalry and occasional pigheadedness :P) and placed him in Gryffindor - he would have been placed there due to the aforementioned reasons anyways.

I'm glad you liked Bella and Narcissa! I've always known that Bella would have been mental from the very beginning, and I always took Narcissa for the more material type. I really loved writing that line, too, so I'm glad you found it funny, hehe :P

And about the line, I had thought of giving it first -- it was in my initial draft, but then I forgot to add it in the final version >.< I'm sorry about that! Hopefully once the challenge is over and judged I'll add that in :)

Thanks for the review, Di, I'm glad you enjoyed the story! It was really fun to write and I'm relieved to know that it was good enough. Best of luck for your own fics as well, hun! Love you!

 
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