i like this story. it is very well written. you're doing a great job. can't wait to read what happens.
i like this chapter the best. In one of my stories on FanFiction.net I have something along the lines of this. The Marauders are always using operations. I love the way you're using the Operations thing too. Sirius is by far the best character in all fan fictions and you're proving that once again. Very funny..i liked it.
good, funny, chapter. i noticed one tiny little flaw. You said James H. Potter earlier and now his name is James Brian Potter. Maybe it's short for HBrian? I liked this chapter a lot. It was funny. Mrs. Potter can back them up any time anywhere. Keep it up!
:tear, tear: i'm choking up here. not literally but it was still beautiful writing. i like the word epiphany. you should use it excessively. actually, not a word one would find in normal conversation hehe. great chapter. please post soon!
Author's Response: Awww! You flatter me, really. I love that word too! I was planning to save it for a later chapter, but when I thought about it, this was a great time to use it, so what the hell. Yes, I know, not a word one would use in a regular conversation, but in the next chapter, you will find out that Lily is quite a...mature speaker. Ooops! That was a spill! But, yes, I hope that did not confuse you. Just a little hint. Thanks again and keep reading and reviewing!
great chapter. i love the "sweet lily" remarks from james. they're funny. if sirius called her that too, that would be funny. did you know that your chapter 3 is the same as your chapter 2? you may want to look at that
that was a very well written chapter. i like how you established both lily and james's personalities based both on jkr's original characters and added your own little twist. beautiful writing and please continue soon.
Summary: Lily Evans and James Potter agreed on only one thing since they first met: they'll always hate each other. But after five years, James begins to see things, to see her, differently, and wants another chance. But Lily is one stubborn girl. Can he convince her that his feelings are real? Meanwhile, the pair is thrust into many different dangerous and humorous situations with their friends. Will it take a disaster to help Lily believe in true love? Or will a tragedy just push her farther away? How many times does James have to try before he stops messing up? Follows with the information provided by JKR, with some fun along the way.
excellent way of incorporating jkr. your characters act just the way she portrayed them. keep it up and update soon.
great job. keep it up.
i just read this story, although i have been planning on it for awhile. i saw it on fanfiction.net but never got around to reading it. you're doing a great job developing characters and plot. update asap.
i like this so far, It's got a good start. Can't wait for the ball to get rolling. Lots of great potential.
Author's Response: Hey! Thanks! I sure will get the ball rolling soon. The start is something that I did to set up a mood and to begin an introduction that will be relevant to the plot. Thank you for your feedback!
Summary: James has his heart broken after Lily yells at him for taunting Snape and Lily is dealing with the fact that she's actually in love with James at the same time. When they run into each other in the hallway the same day, James pours his heart out to Lily and takes the risk of kissing her that changes EVERYTHING.
*This is my first fanfic online. I'm sorry if it's not that great. I'd like reviews though.*
Also all the characters are J.K.'s except Alanna who was invented by my bff. I'd also like to note that this fanfic is written as if James and Lily got together in 5th year instead of 7th. *I hope you like it*
i love sirius. he's so awesome. update soon
Author's Response: eee thank you! doesnt it always seem like sirius is the best character in fanfics? :)
i like this story..a lot. continue with it.
I am really, really, proud of all the people who wrote faithfully that SMH wrote this story. Did you really think that no one would notice? I mean, SMH has thousands of reviews from so many different people, including myself. I mean, come on! Her stories are so brilliantly written and she so obviously put a lot of effort into her work. The least you could do is try and think of a story of your own to write. I think the people who have been reviewing this deserve an explanation.
Author's Response: These ideas come and go 24/7, even when I sleep.
what a crock of bull as to the authors reponse i read.
damn straight smh! i love her stories by the way. Stupid Romance.. I hope mugglenet does something about it.
aw, I hope they get together. I noticed a lack of Lily/James action here. I do hope you include some in the next chapter. great job, please update soon.
Author's Response: hehehe! I have something suitably EVIL to happen! Might be soon...Might not be...-Tries to be mysterious but ends up being confusing- HEHEHE!!!! There is some more Lily/James action coming soon which is absolutely essential to the plot!! THERE NEEDS TO BE MORE LILY/JAMES!! But I have personal issues with them...Well a boy who looks like James...HEHEHE! Thankyou soooooo much for reading and reviewing!! -huggles- xxxx
nice job. your story is excellent. normally i don't like it when lily falls for a different marauder. this one is pretty interesting. update soon
Author's Response: Thank you very much!!! -Hugs- Sure will!
“That arrogant…arrogant…ARG! That toerag is Head Boy! HEAD BOY! How did he make HEAD BOY! What is Dumbledore on? I mean, he struts around, pranking, pranking, PRANKING, and then Dumbledore says, ‘Gee, this kid really is an irresponsible bad influence, prankster, and all around jerk. Yes! He’d make a fine Head Boy!’”
well, since I am in a good mood, I decided to review every chapter. As to this chapter, you guys had a nice, fresh start. It was a great way to introduce everyone. You pulled it off well.
I like Emmeline. She's funny. Lily and Sirius were pretty funny as well. Can't wait to see what you have in store.
Author's Response: We're so glad! Not only that you like our story and characters, but that you're in a good mood too!! Thanks so much for reviewing!!
“It’s why you love me,” Sirius replied.
Remus coughed at this statement, and Sirius turned to look at Remus. “What?” Remus asked innocently, “I had to cough.”
I loved that. That was funny. Nice chapter. Keep it up.
Author's Response: That is one of my personal favorite parts too. We're glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing!