~LucillaJoanna (LJ)aka lucilla_pauie (here) aka Dayang Lucilla (dramione.org/ff.net) is busy-busy with original fiction. But every now and then she gets a fit of fan fiction, like allergy. A beloved allergy.
I'm a Filipina, living in the Philippines, spending my waking hours reading and writing. I have high hopes, like most everyone, but for now, I relish writing and being read here.
The stories you'll find here are a mad medley. I love the HP-universe in its entirety, and so write vastly within this vast world of people and eras. However, I don't stray far from romance-- you know, pairings and life lemons. I love those quotes that more often than not end up hackneyed in email/SMS forwards. If I don't quote them directly, they inspire the pieces you'll see here.
I don't think there's one I can't or won't write (except slash, younger generation/older generation, OC's). I was hooked into fan fiction for these snippets of sweets we don't get to read from the HP books. Even though I write horror in RL, I'm a very girly girl, the kind that squeals while reading the Twilight series even for the nth time. Incidentally, unless they're Joyce Carol Oates or Neil Gaiman or maybe William Faulkner come back to life, I scoff at those who scoff at Twilight (friendly&fond scoffing, now. ^_^ Everyone's entitled to their own tastes and opinions, aye?). Back to topic, it's a disappointment to shippers to favorite me because I write Dramione this week, and then write a Ron/Hermione the next. Hee.
Asked what my OTP is, I'll say it's Ron/Hermione, but that's only because I love Hermione and I'm loyal to what JKR decided. But I think I don't have an OTP. I ride, I ship, I bike and even cook them all. I have Haxime and Frangelina. I also have a list of the pairings I have yet to try, but I'm too immersed in three WIP's, both here and in RL.
If not in the Romance subcats, my stories go here. They're all dear to me. They're mostly Challenge entries, so they were written with motives. ^_^ Five are Post-DH yarns, and two of these (Little Things; A Shower of Stardust) concentrate on the white noise after the War.
Great Lady of Magic was originally five chapters, but due to the Challenge deadline, became a one-shot instead. The cramming and compression seemed to have worked nonetheless; it's my first First Place since I started joining the Challenges in New Year 2007!
The Prince's Unshared Tale: Uncut is my little peace offering to Snape, whom I have slandered until July 22, 2007. Still, you have to admit he's been very stubborn and stupid.
The Art of Weaselling: I enjoyed this one so much. I liked Neville's grandma's inveigling tactics and Great Uncle Algie's slyness. What is One Picture Worth? is my stab at a historical. Loved the research and the flowery, courtly English I had to use, though I tried not to make it a la Shakespeare too much.
Bonds of Magic has been solicited into someone's blog during the DH fever. It still comes up when I google my real name. I'm embarassed, LOL. It was too fluffy compared to the book. Phew.
Dark/Angst, I won't; Humor, I can't. I think Ron's Best Friend can be classified as the latter, but to be safe from sneers, I just put it into Ron/Hermione. AU is the only other cat I have here. How to Hold Sway is very much at the top of my favorites and I'm thinking of expanding on some questions it triggered from readers. I originally posted it under Dramione after the Challenge finished, but shippers complained. Hehe.
At the Forums:
This will be the "Beta Forums" you see on the Nav Bar to the side. I haunt General Fan Fiction Discussion, Madam Pomfrey's Character Clinic, The Reference Desk, The Beta Guild, and of course, SPEW (the Society for the Promotion of Proper Evaluation for Writers by Readers). I'm a very loyal Hufflepuff, redundancy intended. I'm not active in the common room (because if I join the games, I'll be addicted!), but I do my small part.
I've had my first book, so to speak (hehe), in December 2007, when my story was included in the third annual run of the anthology, Philippine Speculative Fiction. That's the name for the genre of fantasy/horror/scifi and the cracks in between. My story's title is Hamog (dew).
I also write book reviews, handling Classics, Contemporary Classics and the Trivia and Quiz sections of READ magazine. I've also landed the On Reading two-page spread and the Seasonal Review (with my pic!). I nearly choked on my chicken burger when I was first included in the masthead.
In December 2005, which is not too long ago, and which is why I'm rather lazy, I won First Place in a nationwide essay contest regarding teen pregnancy (sponsored by The Advocates for Youth Philippines Foundation, Pringles and UNFPA). I never used the theme park tickets, I still have the box of feminine wash sachets and karaoke bar gift certificates, and the first things I bought with the money were books: The Count of Monte Cristo; On Writing; Stardust; The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe; By The River Piedra, I Sat Down and Wept; The Alchemist; Flipped; The Phantom of the Opera; Wuthering Heights...
I dream about shopping for this many books in one go again. I earn bookstore GC's now, but I only get five books at most. *sigh*
I have been deaf since I was thirteen due to meningitis. My mania for books, fan fiction, and scripts is understandable, no? I'm so glad I'm not blind. Meningitis can be that cruel.
It has been kind to me, however. I'm happy. Sometimes people don't take me seriously because I'm too bubbly. So here I did try to be sober. Hemhem.
I have two brothers and one sister. Onchie is a Mining Engineering junior, Josh is in seventh grade and Jouie is in third grade.
I have a mongrel, Jego.
I love egg yolks.
I moderate a local Harry Potter club, MaCofWiz, in which I'm in Ravenclaw, and in which I'm the one who almost always plans and plots the outings.
I was born under Libra, Tiger and the hazelnut tree. ^_^
>>misc. The Weasley War
The Names of the Weasley Grandkids. (I went completely insane and had them all breeding like rabbits. Pun intended again.)
Harry and Ginny~
Sirius James -- 16 (June 21)
Gideon Arthur-- 13 (February 28)
Maynard Harry-- 11 (August 30)
Miguel Ronald-- 11 (August 30)
Stephen Joel-- 8 (September 4)
Gabriel Xavier-- 5 (July 8)
Ron and Hermione~
Juliet Nathalie Clarisse-- 15 (December 25)
Fabiana Claudine-- 5 (December 18)
Robin Cecille-- 4 (December 20)
Ronaldine Cora-- 3 (March 1)
Joshua Laurent-- 2 (April 21)
Sylvia Candace-- 0 (November 1)
Fred and Verity~
Cleopatra-- 14 (March 8)
Mark Antony-- 14 (March 8)
Queen Elizabeth-- 11 (March 8)
William Conqueror-- 11 (March 8)
George and Athena--
Janus Arthur -- 15 (June 28)
Venus Molly -- 14 (July 20)
Charlie and Annika--
Arthur Ivan -- 17 (January 16)
Olga Cristina -- 15 (November 25)
Andrey Sasha -- 12 (September 8)
Eleanore Anya-- 11 (November 8)
Almira Dinah-- 4 (May 7)
Bill and Fleur~
Agatha Victoria Gertrude -- 21 (April 8)
Camilo Arthur -- 17 (May 18)
Xenita Sharon -- 16 (August 4)
Joanna Pierra -- 12 (September 27)
Jonathan Pierre -- 12 (September 27)
Summary: This story is basically how Ron and Hermione find each other, without them becoming friends with Harry first.
Warning- very fluffy!
hello, sophie! this is another nice Ron/Hermione fic of yours, and you have done well incorporating canon facts into this yarn, too. Just one nitpick, isnt Dean Thomas a Muggleborn? You might want to edit that. ^-^
Anyway, good fluff. I've also read Hermione's House and You're Beautiful, you know! Keep them coming.
Author's Response: Hi, Lucilla! (I read on your profile that you prefer Lucilla ;) ) Wow, thanks! I\'m actually working on a story that I think might my favorite that I\'ve ever written. Oh gosh, Hermione\'s House... I wrote that when I was about 13, I cringe at the thought of that story, lol! But the story I\'m working on now should be much better, but I\'m still in the early stages of writing it. Stay tuned! :) xoxo
Author's Response: Oh and I forgot, thanks for pointing out that little fact about Dean. I hadn\'t thought of that. I edited it ;) thanks!
Summary: When you refuse to make choices, life has a tendency to make them for you.
Being the illegitimate son of a particularly noticeable wizard, Lucas Malory has spent all of his life practicing the art of inconspicuousness. But when the brutal waves of war break upon the world, every man must make a stand for what he believes in. Lucas, determined to keep his distance and only mind his own business, suddenly finds his options banging impatiently on the door. When indifference is no longer an option, how will he decide where his loyalties lie?
A/N: This story was plotted out before the release of the 7th book, but as I continue writing after having read it, chapters may be inspired by/include spoilers from Deathly Hallows.
The other Malfoy boy.
I loved his conception, the 'courting' Grace and Lucius shared (with Lydia's instigation). It was so inherently Veela. Grace was the dominant female, and Lucius was putty in her hands. You also painted the society they moved in through their dialogue and through Grace's disdain. It was heady; I couldn't help but be drawn in. As early as with Lucas's parents, the story's title was applied. Grace being Volition and Lucius being Vacillation. Of course it was the former that held sway. No blame on Lucius. He was as thread to needle. Though, he still deserved looking on from afar at his better son, instead of being beside him.Now, Lucas. I wonder, if I live with you and Jenna, would your abilities to craft such vivid characters rub off on me? I wish.
I love his love for his mother and grandfather and I love his dignity and grace. His vacillation stems from these latter two, ingrained deeply in his character by his mother. Dignity is what made him beautiful in Lucius's eyes. Grace, in every sense of the word, is what made him come to Lucius. Dignity and grace is what made him conflicted after his talk with his father. Would he remain untainted, or would he ignore the 'woman and her child' mentioned by Lucius? That was it, wasn't it, because he certainly didn't owe, nor was he raised with, allegiance to his Malfoy heritage.This power he has, wow. I'll keep an eye on it. I wonder how you will incorporate that into the plot. And speaking of the plot, who is the woman and child? And how are they doing while Lucas is happily abducted? It's the ace you plan on playing with a flourish, isn't it?
Enter Charlie. Classic complementing of characters. He and Lucas does each other good. Charlie is the one Weasley brother I've only encountered fleetingly. How you've fleshed him out is so natural, Anna. It's also endearing the way Aunt Muriel dotes on him and vice-versa. Which brings me to: like the pureblood elitists' circle, you've drawn the Prewett farm and it's tranquility and charm distinctly, leaving nothing to be desired.As an overall review for now, I can't rave over each chapter's details right now, but I like Charlie and Tonks's slight argument. "I was thinking about how sad it is that it’s our closest relationships that seem to hurt us the most. Put us through the hardest struggles." Aside from the subtle veer of the spotlight to Tonks and Remus's, and everyone's loves, is there a small foreshadowing there, regarding a nipping that would come later on Charlie and Lucas's budding friendship?
And as to this budding friendship, you have made Lucas and Charlie intelligent and compelling men. I can't wait for the next chapters. I wonder what they'll say to each other next. Their banter and the friction before their camaraderie was established is as riveting as the storyline. Kudos and kudos, Anna.
Summary: This is a one-shot written for the First Skele-Gro Challenge over on the MNFF Forums. It actually took first place.
Hermione is getting impatient with Ron. It's pretty obvious to everyone that he has feelings for her, but will not admit it. Frustrated, she begins exchanging letters with an old friend of hers, a certain Bulgarian of Tri-Wizard fame.
Ron is incensed when he discovers Hermione is getting letters from Viktor again. And, now, there's a wedding proposal on the table?
I'd like to thank joybelle423 and Phily for their help! I make a ton of mistakes and my work is a mess without the outstanding work of my betas.
i see now why you beat us! hehe! still, three cheers for a Hufflepuff victory! Yay!
very well-chosen title! and i loved Hermione here, she's so wicked smart, wasn't she?
my own story is now in the queue, but i shy away now after reading this ficlet of yours, awww!
maybe im overreacting, but hey, there's the OOTP trailers and then i get to read these wonderful fluffies to bridge the wait, what's not to squeal about, right?
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I\'m so glad you liked it. Also, I hope you post the link to your story when it gets published. I\'d love to see it. Thanks again for taking a moment to tell me what you thought!
Summary: Hermione and her two best friends, Harry and Ron, are on a trip with their sixth year Herbology class to Bodmin Moor. While searching for magical plants, Hermione stumbles on a door in the ground that leads her and the boys to the crumbling mansion of the time-travel obsessed wizard, William Rashleigh. After her encounter with Rashleigh, Hermione finds herself trapped in a time where magic is feared, witches are hunted, and the punishment for being able to do magic is death. Can Hermione survive The Salem Witch Trials?
A/N: This story is not for the faint at heart. The descriptions of death in the fic will be somewhat graphic and not suitable for young and impressionable readers.
I am BeautifulDreamer07 of Gryffindor House rising up to the answer the prompt. A Shift In Time, in the Spring Challenge.
nice one, hallie! i've read this before it got deleted, and I wondered what the Galleon was. A special portkey that also bridges time? Tell us in the next chapters! I notice that all of you here aside from me had made your time-trinkets transport Hermione not just to another time but to another place too.
i can't wait to see the trials. You know i've had some funny visions of it thanks to Sabrina, the Teenage Witch, hehe. ^_^
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! This story has been fun to write. The trials especially. I\'ve always had this vision in my head of what the trials would be like and it\'s great to fimally have a reason to write about it.
Summary: As the Final Task approaches, Cedric Diggory begins to doubt himself. He knows hes not perfect, and he knows he doesnt have all the answers. Afraid of failure and disappointment, he questions his relationship with Cho Chang. Sure, shes the ideal girlfriend, but is she right for him?
I now see why you had the presumptuousness to teach a NEWT class in writing. *grins* I loved that class but time constraints, ya know...
Anyway, the dialogue, the details, the feelings, the thoughts of AAO's characters you have nicely conveyed. Conveyed, not shovelled.I also understand why you like this story so much, Marie. I loved it, too. You made the characters alive for me. You gave them their own back stories... their own traits... Of course all characters in the HP-verse do have these things, but for someone like me who concentrates on the trio, specially Hermione, and Draco, creative juices pertaining to these OTHER characters flow in a trickle. But after reading your story, the trickle became a veritable gush.
I spotted several typos, but of course the other SPEWlies surely have blistered your eyes about them already. LOL.What attracted me (perversely) most here is the knowledge of Ced's fate. While reading, I wanted to thump him and tell him his time's running out and there he is dilly-dallying! In the end, I rather liked his dilly-dallying, though. It was poignant. That he has 'started' with Katie but not 'ended' with Cho. So, the gist is, he left them both 'happy'. *frowns and flails* Argh! The title is so fitting! All at once indeed.
Summary: London: Four murders have taken place under bizarre circumstances, for what seems to be an equally bizarre reason.
Harry, a happily wedded man with a wonderful wife and a cute daughter, is an Auror at the Ministry of Magic and is now given a new case to solve with Ron and four other Aurors. Incidentally, the four Aurors include Ginny, Harryâs âschoolboy crushâ; and it turns out to be much more than a crush when Harry sees her again. Whatâs more is that Harry is working upon a case that seems to connect to him directly. And once again, it opens up old fears: fears of losing loved ones.
Ron, on the other hand, seems to be tired of Hermione. Tempers are running high and fights are breaking out more often than usual. Are they really falling apart? Or can they sort this out before it is too late?
Then there is the case itself. Who is trustworthy, and who is not? Who is deadly enough to murder four people in cold blood?
Indulge into the gut-wrenching action, combined with warm romance and tingling suspense; while I tell you a story of love, ambition and obsessionâŚ a story of what those killer instincts can do. EDIT: MAJOR revamping going on, with regard to plot, characterisation, and general style of writing. I would urge you not to read this until I've removed this notice because I wasn't very good six years ago, and this is as bad as I was. *Places traffic cones*
the beta speaks: so nice, isn't it? just enough intrigue and suspense brewing to promise a whole lot more? ^_^ can i even review? well, too late now, im too fond of Pooja, hehe
Author's Response: LOL, Pauie, you\'re sweet! Thanks for reviewing my story!!! :)
Summary: A year and a half after the end of the war, everything is going well for Tonks; shes newly married and has recently been promoted. But is all the hard work beginning to take its toll? Mindless fluff. RL/NT.
I loved this! Both of them (and Arthur!)were very in-character. Fluffy, certainly, but sweet and all the canon facts nicely laid in.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it; there\'s room for a little fluff in everyone\'s lives I always say!
Summary: A mission gone all wrong...a trail of terror in the Department of Mysteries...What awaits Hermione around the next darkened corner?
I am Colores of the Hufflepuff House and this is my entry for the Gauntlet.
Nightmare is reminiscent of the pace and style of Matarse, which I love. No expositions here, though, just food for the senses, simple and unfettered by pomp, making the elements even more involving and vivid.
You've also turned this dream into a subtle and spot-on character study. For instance, the eerie breeze... a small thing, but something Hermione can't control, and which surprised her, and we know Hermione likes being on top of things, prepared so she can be unperturbed. No one can be warned from a breeze, however. The same way they had no way of being warned about the trap they'd walked in on in the Ministry.The room began to spin at once. Hermione closed her eyes and tried to stand as still as possible; she didnt realize how hard it was to keep her balance without someone else to hold on to. This is Hermione's difference from Tom Riddle and her similarity to Dumbledore, the other two geniuses Hogwarts has taught. Hermione can cope alone, but only just. She's in her best when she's with friends, and it's for her friends she strives for the best, both in and outside of schoolwork.
Ron being the only other person in the dream is telling, needless to say. ^_^The climax of the nightmare: again, spot-on, Fresca. For someone as goal-oriented as our Hermione, that will definitely be the limit, rather than being at the end of a Death Eater's wand, and only a notch under seeing her loved ones already passed over by said wand.
Summary: Fred and George Weasley are bored, now that their brother's wedding is over, nothing is worth staying. But when Mr. Weasley brings in another Muggle artifact called, Computer, and the twins learns to operate it, things are about to get interesting.
But once they managed to "hack" in the site called Mugglenet, the issue of who's the funniest came up, they decided to battle it out.
Once the results is up, things are about to get dirty.
Author's notes: I have fixed this fic: verb tenses and all. Thank you to those who made reviews and comments, you made me realize my mistakes, now I fixed it.. I am still waiting for a beta for my next fic but I don't think it will take too long. *throws confetti*
hey there, joselle!
Or should I say A.J? Nice name, nice fic! Very funny! Nice ending, hehe. Poor Ron! Anyway, here's a tip: next time, when you edit, be sure to erase the "/br", it's what makes these big, big paragraph spaces.
Author's Response: I tried to do that once before, but then I my internet connection got disconnected and I got tired of doing it again *giggles*. Funny, my real nickname is A.J. *giggles more* Thanks Ate Joanna! *hugs*
Summary: My version of the first chapter of book 7. The war continues without pause; Voldemort moves more boldly after the death of the only wizard he ever feared.
Now, this is a tad late; it's been half a year since you posted this fic. But better late than never, eh?Your story is linked at the SPEW Category Patrol. The title lured me in. It was most unique among the others in Abigail's Harry/Ginny links. I must admit I'm a little disappointed at your summary though. After seeing the story itself, I'm sure you can give it more body and charm. ^_^
I wrote a First Chapter to Book 7 myself for the Forum Challenge... I think it was for the New Year Extra Credit... so my curiosity was piqued to read how you did. Something in me agreed that it would have been nice if the last book picked up right where The HBP ended. You captured the post-funeral atmosphere of the Hogwarts Express like a brilliant photograph. I saw it in my mind's eye, how the train rattled loudly externally, but went past the countryside like a ghost because of the silence within. It's also nice to see it from the perspective of the trolley lady. Your paragraphs need some slimming, that's all. They are too chunky. It's best to keep paragraphs slim, especially in the beginning, so as not to intimidate readers.You also have grammar and punctuation rules down pat, except for 'times like THESE'. Your Ginny is a little too mercurial though. One moment, she's grinning (and how could she grin after the funeral?), the next, she's internally whinging... it doesn't match her maturity and eloquence at the end of HBP.
But you've shown her fierce love and care for Harry with finesse and through this picturesque battlescene. I love the patronuses vs Dementors match. And I agree that nuw255's idea about Ginny's patronus change is excellent. You've used it well.~Joanna
Summary: 1692. A landmark year for wizards with the passage of the International Statute of Wizarding Secrecy. The Statute and concurrent negotiations in Paris are at the fringes of every wizard's mind as wizards across the globe must change the way they interact with Muggles. But for three young students, a much more important event is at hand: The Triwizard Tournament.
One is an observer, torn between two worlds. One is a determined competitor, willing to do anything to make his father proud. And one is a shunned outsider, his family name fallen from grace.
These Three Remain.
Written by LuthAn of Gryffindor for the Summer Challenge: TriWizard Tales. Tied for third place in the Challenge!
Hello, Anna! It's been so hard reading other fellow entrants in this Challenge, (we made such tomes!) but your story has its attractions. I love how you made a theme out of the three biblical virtues, and many might have already told you this as well: Those were nice verses, I love it when fics have some metre and rhyme the way the real books do. Now I know you're in another house, but I still say, good luck with the challenge! ^_^
Author's Response: Hello, Joanna! I\'m so glad you like my story! I agree, though--I have yet to read anybody else\'s because I\'ve been spending every waking moment typing away at this one. :-)
The biblical virtues quite literally just popped into my head, so I knew I had to run with them. I\'m glad you like them, and the verses as well.
I can\'t wait to finish this thing and read the other entries! Yours looks so clever--I love the idea of a bunch of Weasleys from different parents taking over the Tournament!
Thanks again for the review, and good luck in the challenge!
Summary: This is a companion piece for my Triwizard Tales fic, hence the use of the same OCs. Sparks searches for her "Happy Memory" in order to produce a corporeal Patronus.
This is Poppet of Hufflepuff and this is for the June One-Shot Challenge: The Perfect Patronus.
*grabs the cookies* *mutters: 'Stale!'*
I see you didn't heed some of the clarifications I advised (hint: incest), but it worked anyway. I think it made this story sparkle more.
Good luck for the challenge, Sparksie! The rest of my comments you know already. *pokes*
Author's Response: To clarify is to kill, Luci (see, I can come up with annoying nicknames too!). And I made those cookies myself. Ungrateful wench... *mutters*
Summary: On Valentines Day when Lily and James are in their seventh year, Lily is waiting anxiously for James's annual embarrassing Valentine. But maybe this year it won't be what she expects ...
What were you talking about and what were you thinking, planning to take this gem down, Jen?It's sweet and funny and sweet. I love how Lily seemed unsure and confused with her feelings for awhile. Her inner argument strikes as in-character, too. Fiery and fierce. It made me giggle. I also loved James's perseverance and the 'sincere fluff' of the note. Lily is such a denial queen, isn't she? I'm glad she finally acted on what she is denying. Contrary to what she thinks, the note did woo her. There will undoubtedly Lily fans who will frown at her display in the Great Hall, but for me, it suits her just fine. I think it's a fitting reward to James, to have a public kiss after years of his very public valentines.
Summary: The first time Sirius broke into the castle wasn't the easy time. Not even close...
Written for joybelle423 as an assignment in Transfiguration, Spring of '07.
He had already broken in unnoticed to the cellar. Why not go ahead and use the passage then? Since when was permission needed? I thought 'you three and Dumbledore' were the only ones who knew of Sirius's Animagus state. What's with the 'old habits die hard' part? Maybe Hilda used to give them food in their Marauder days Hogsmeade romps? Still, didn't they all romp on four legs then to keep Remus in check?I never thought of that, that the proprietors knew of and even checked the cellar passage. I even thought the passage was secret to all except its discoverers and originator which might well be a certain gifted wizard fond of sweets, hehe. ^_^
I also thought... what with the evidence of Peter's finger and the wreckage of that unfortunate Muggle Street, that the Flumes would have sounded the alarm at the mere sight of Sirius-- in his human form, too, not Animagus, because it was a secret, right?I've always imagined those days as dark and silent for Sirius. It's refreshing, if not altogether convincing (forgive me, dear Shanae) to see he also had some friends, too, who talked. Which brings me to compliment your nice doggie detail, Sleeping in the shack was much more comfortable when you had to turn around three times before you lay down. and the very IC banter with Crookshanks. I love this cat, and you have him spot-on. Mee-ow.
Back to the subject of friends: through the actions of the Flumes and the Fat Lady, even though I think there are plausibility issues, you did succeed in highlighting how the Marauders' tragedy caused a ripple that didn't begin and end in Harry's becoming an orphan, but in loss of fath and betrayal. There are parallels beneath the surface and between the lines.~Joanna
Summary: Draco Malfoy is unpacking with his wife to start his new life at Malfoy Manor, but is angered when bad childhood memories fill his mind. Will Draco be able to let go of the bad memories in order to make happy ones?
Written for the June One-Shot Patronus Challenge by Sarakime of Slytherin (even though the summary does not imply that).
Wow, this was beautiful, Sarakime. A poignant one-shot. I love how you integrated Draco's childhood, Slytherin upbringing, redemption and his lovelife into this. There was just this one lapse in POV, or maybe you just forgot to italicise it? "...after many bottles of Veritaserum to make sure I was telling the truth."
This goes to my favorites. I haven't read the other entries in this challenge, but I think you did the prompt uniquely, and Draco's making a Patronus just to send a message to Hermione was lighthearted, fitting the current time when peace was at last in the Wizarding world. ^_^
Author's Response: Yay reviews! Thank you for this great review! :) Yes, his thoughts were supposed to be in italics - thanks for pointing it out!
Summary: This fanfiction writer laments the loss of her favourite dark lord in a re-donk-ulous poem.
This is not very complimentary to Volders, so don't tell him about it if you see him around, okay?
Deathly Hallows spoilers.
Four times nominated for Best Poem in the Quicksilver Quills Awards!
Wonderful! Should be his epitaph! Would delight kiddies! ^_^
Author's Response: It would certainly delight this kiddie! (Though the headstone would have to be pretty darn huge.)
Wonderful! Should be his epitaph! Would delight kiddies! ^_^
Author's Response: Double post...
Summary: The war is over but the lives of Hermione, Ron and everyone else in the wizarding world are just beginning. Hermione and Ron must come to terms with the deaths of so many people they love while trying to figure out their exciting but terrifying new relationship. Readers know that they end up together in the epilogue. This Hermione's perspective of the untold story of how they get there.
Jennifer, welcome to MNFF and three cheers for your first story!
It's wonderful. You have Hermione's mindset down pat. This is a rather long chapter without a dialogue, but it got to the end without being burdensome like most stories starting with back-story and character thoughts.
PS: Have you joined the forums yet? I'll look out for you there!
Summary: Draco's redemption after sixth year takes a lifetime to come full circle.
O, Ebil One, I henceforth entitle you also as the Goddess of the Dragon. You know the Dragon so intimately, and so irrevocable are the truths you speak about him.
*sigh* Shades of Grey should be broadcast in the whole fandom as THE best Draco-centric story Post-DH. I'm so glad it is featured. And I'm so glad you wrote it.
"...the cold fear of death and harsh reality of war grasped my parents by the throat and they became true parents; protecting not only a legacy of Malfoys’, but their only child. And for once, we became a family during that pitiful time of existence..."
*nods fervently, awed* Up to this point, I have only ever read the Malfoys as either quite-affectionate-in-private,really or detached-and-sneeringly-devil-may-care. But in the few sentences above, you have succinctly pointed out how their relationship must truly be. For yes, status and wealth and preserving that status and wealth may well have distracted them at the same time as blinding them to the egregious distraction.
"I had helped the war progress in only one summer." My Godric, see where I come from dubbing you Goddess of the Dragon? The 'despair and desolation' Draco must have felt over this has never before been rememebered, realized or written in the many fics I've read. And believe me, I've read countless Draco/Dramione fics.
Usually, I shy away from Dark/Angst, AND expository fics like this. But you reeled me in with 'spoiled child', kept me riveted with 'a traitor and a coward' and rendered me in devoted thrall with 'took my first breath of life at the same time my own child did'. Now, I'm not gonna lie, I'm a hopeless romantic who wrote a Draco/Astoria fic and I was dismayed a little that in here, too, Draco is in a loveless marriage, but your own brand of romance-- love between father and child-- satisfied me without snag. Though you never mentioned it, it's there between the lines, that colors have erupted in between the shades of grey while Draco relished raising his son.
Toward the last paragraphs, I was biting my lips to keep from cooing. Bittersweet, this. I'm really so glad you wrote it. It's food for more fiction for us less enlightened about the Dragon, Goddess.
Oh, and of course, I can only be gushing like this because your writing is so flawless I am able to concentrate on the emotional compass of the story. So kudos on that as well.
Author's Response: Wow Joanna! You truly flatter me! The Goddess of the Dragon it is! XD Thanks sooo much for your lovely review! I love Draco and I try to do him justice. And the case of this story...some redemption.
Summary: After the war's end, Ron and Hermione's happy ending is shattered by depression and loss. In an effort to find what she's lost, Hermione travels Europe alone, while Ron writes letters that he doesn't send, waiting for her return.
Wow. *fans self*
Katie, this story warmed me to the tips of my toes.You know, I read it with misgivings, because your summary hinted of an unhappy or unresolved ending. You might want to tweak it, hon, so that more people will discover how lovely this is.
I love Hermione. Most of my fics have her as the heroine. As I opened HTS, I was scowling, because my Hermione isn't supposed to be weepy. But then the scowl turned into an awed expression, because you gave my Hermione a wonderful new aspect. *grins at proprietariness* We perceive her as a tenacious character, after all, but here this dent in her 'strength' only emphasised all that she has gone through.You've made her depression feel real and plausible. She was not weepy at all, only heart-rendingly sad. The kind of sadness that doesn't dissipate in tears. And then of course, you resurrected Hermione's resilience in her decision to battle her sadness alone. That's what she did, really.And then, Ron. He's so sweet here. So tender. So generous. I think it will have been better if he has struggled through some hurt and anger toward Hermione, though. Ron is a little possessive of my Hermione, isn't he? But then, maybe seeing Hermione's depression made him giving. He has matured. And believably so.
I love, love, love the ending! Another 'but': but I thought they'd meet back at home, when Hermione has come back to stay. Still, I pictured the scene in the Hungarian Ministry, with all those happy and 'aww'-ing audience. *sighs happily*I see why this story's special to you, Katie. It is to me!