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Hell-o person who has (probably) accidentally stumbled on this page while trying to hack into JKRís computer. For any people interested, I am the writer of Roses and Thorns. And I love Strictly Come Dancing. Didnít know that? Have I got news for youÖ

I live in Birmingham, England in a crazy three-storey house near Cannon Hill Park. My mum comes from New Zealand and is good at making chocolate milkshakes. Oh, and did I mention she teaches Latin and Greek at my school?!?! Dad teaches Computer Science at Uni, and thinks all modern musicians shout be shot, on-site. I also have a sister who helps edit bits of my story and help with knotty bits of plots.

As well as my nutty but cool family, we have cats. Jasper (or Paspy) is a cute, squishy, silver tabby with only one brain cell. I bet it can get rather lonely in that head of his. But we love him anyway! Our other one is called the Ginger Marauder. He didnít like the baby in his house, so moved out and Ďadoptedí us. Mean, moody, evil and will savage Paspy at every opportunity, we do not like him, and remind him of this frequently. The only reason we let him stay is that heís learnt how to pick the cat-flap so we canít lock him out.

Thatís my mad home-life. What about school?

My group (the Society for Odds and Sods, or SOS) gives all our cliques names. We consist of Emily (me), Jo (the Loner) and Lucy (the Pleasant One). Our job is to be strange and worry people. Iím the Fountain of Knowledge for all Classic Books (well, not really) Jo knows everything about Wolves and Lucy is permanently residing in another world.

But anyway, I love English and Art the best, and I canít STAND Maths and PE. I like acting in the School Play, hanging around the Library and trying to convert people to Jane Eyre.

Thatís enough about school. When I get home, one of my favourite things to do is read. My favourite books depend on what I have just been reading, but at the moment itís Jane Eyre, Shirley, Ivy and North Child. I really recommend these books and I encourage you to get them out of the library!

I write a lot, too. I have a Hamtaro notebook which used to be a diary which Iíve written all of Roses and Thorns in. And I draw little pictures to help me with describing people/places. They arenít worth anyone else seeing, because theyíre just doodles. I write very slowly, because I have to remember while Iím doing it to put enough description in, keep sentences short and not repeat words too much.

I also like watching TV. As you already know, I devoutly follow Strictly Come Dancing. Most of the other programmes I like are Period Drama (I canít stand Game Shows, Soaps or Reality TV, apart from SCD, of course,) My favourites are Jane Eyre (Ruth Wilson and Toby Stevens) Northanger Abbey (Felicity Jones and JJ Field) Pride and Prejudice (Jennifer Ehle and Colin Firth) and North and South (Daniela Derby-Ashe and Richard Armitige).

The things I hate most in the world are Maths homework (may it burn in hell), Billie Piper (why is she an actress, seeing as she canít act), Kiera Knightly (ditto) and High School Musical (nnnnnnnnnnnnnnoooooooooooooooo)Ö

When it comes to Harry Potter, my favourite characters are Hermione, Luna, Cho and (recently) Barty Crouch Jr. (If you donít understand why, read R+T.) I donít like James (heís too horizontal) Sirius (the idiot) and Draco (the wimp). I also have a vendetta against Ginny Weasley. Everyone has one, and I donít like her 2-D, packaged Ďstrong and independentí character which is so boring and predictable.

As regards Ships, Iíll read most of them (even if I donít support them) except for the four smellies: Draco/Hermy (how dare anyone suggest it) Snape/Hermy (heís way too old for her) Ginny/Hermy (theyíre friendsÖjust friends) and Harry/Ginny (NO. WAY.)

But Iím a sucker for Ron/Hermy (isnít it obvious?) Harry/Cho (they rocked, and I donít care if everyone else hated them) Snape/Lily (James gave her a love potion. No one in their right minds would prefer him to Snape) and most of the ones in R+T.

My favourite books are OoP and PoA, and my least fave are HBP and DH (just too depressing). The films annoy me in the way that they miss so much out and Hermy wears a pink Yule Ball dress. But sometimes they do characters better than how I imagined: Barty Crouch Jr, Bella, Lockhart and Filch, for example.

Iím a Ravenclaw through and through, but Gryffindor, Hufflepuff and Slytherin are OK, and I donít hate them. Go inter-house unity!

My equivalent in the HP worldÖ

Which HP Kid Are You?

(Apparantly) I am (out of the lesser HP characters)Ö

[i'm firenze!]

...and which lesser Harry Potter character are you?

I supportÖ

[ron + hermione]

[harry + cho]

[lily + snape]

DAVID TENNANT!!!!!!! rocks my world! He is the only person who could make me watch Doctor Who, Recovery, Learners, or any other stupid dramas heís in.

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I Loved Him First by Valentinia

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: For Petunia Evans being at Hogwarts is indeed a magical time. Why? Because there, for the first time in her life, she doesn't stand in the shadow of her beautiful sister Lily. That is until she finds herself falling in love with none other than James Potter, Lily's biggest admirer. And this is only the first of the many trials and tribulations Petunia will have to face in a world where peace is a nothing but a memory.

Note: This fic is mostly canon compliant through DH, but has some obvious AU elements, too, though I hope I've explained them all satisfactorily!
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 09/22/07 Title: Chapter 12: It's Been Her All Along

Oh, you really know how to tug at my heart-strings! Poor, poor Petunia! I want to hang Lily my her stinking red hair from the light-fittings! Stealing her sister's boyfriend is just LOW!

I have to say I think this is the best chapter yet! The emotional power in this chapter really shows how much your writing style has progressed.

I love the way Lily is portrayed! I've never been very keen on her, and she's always shown as someone who's amazing by everyone, apart from you. You've taken her character in a completely different direction!

Just two things:

'I can't believe that I believed your lies. '----- there are two 'believe's. I'd change it to something like 'I don't know why I believed your lies' or something along those lines.

I think when Petunia first sees James and Lily, you should put in more vivid description. Choose a colour, let's say red, and only describe objects that are that colour (i.e. Lily's hair and lips, James' t-shirt etc). That was Petunia's thoughts will seem more garbled and confused.

A terrificly powerful chapter! Congratulations!

Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you liked the chapter - and my portrayal of Lily! :) Thanks also for the great comments! I\'ll go take them right now!

The Swing by tonks442

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A neglected swing in the yard of the Burrow is more than it seems in this fluffy R/Hr short short ficlet. Written Pre-HBP.

Over 3000 reads and only a few reviews! Please, please review! Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/02/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Swing

Sweet...cute...fluffy...everything a R/H story should be!
I am an avid Ron/Hermione fan, and to me, this story was perfect! I liked the beginning because it gave a little introduction to the story. I love the charm on the swing!
Personally, I think that Ron can be sensitive when he wants to be, especially when he's just with Hermione.
It's great, keep it up!

You can't choose who you fall for... by Rachel Lovegood

Rated: Professors •
Summary: You can't choose who you fall for, it just happens. Like it or not, fate will always have its way...

Hermione's had a crush on Ginny for many a year now. And Ginny's just coming to realise her feelings for Hermione, when looking for an escape from the terrible night before. The two might find themselves facing the most wonderful christmas ever. But the real question is - how long can it last?
The story is finished. It leaves on a bit of a cliffhanger, but you know how it ends.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 09/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: Countdown to Christmas

It was good, but I just can't imagine Hermione doing some of the things she did with Ginny. I sort of thought you twisted her charecter a bit too far. No offence meant.

She Walks in Beauty by AshNight

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Valentines Day is supposed to be the most romantic day of the year. However, ever since Cedric died and Harry rejected her, Cho has spent the fateful day alone. This year, things are going to change. Can Ďjust a friendí extend the helping hand she needs? On the other hand, will the swirl of lacy harts and pink bows accent how deep the once reining queen of Ravenclaw has sunk? Written for Valentines Challange 4, "Love Yourself..." by AshNight of Ravenclaw A big hug and thank you to Lauren, the brilliant beta.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/02/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Date

I really like the way you capture Cho's emotions so delicately and so realistically. I thought the way you tied in 'She walks in beauty' was really clever. I think it's nice to have some fan fiction about Cho!
Well done, I think it's brilliant story!

Author's Response: You don\'t know how much this means to me. I really appriciate the review and your kind words will stay with me. I really tried hard to capture emotion in the purest sense of the word here. And I agree, Cho is not some character to be shoved asside! She has the power to be a major point in the plot. Thanks again for the review!

A Game of Wizard by RhondaWeasley

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Cho runs across Ron practicing his keeper skills on the Pitch. When the two quidditch players get to talking they find they have a lot more in common then they ever expected.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/02/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Game of Wizard

Very thought provoking!
I really liked it and I'm a die-hard Ron/Hermione fan!

A Weekend with Tonks by RhondaWeasley

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Girl crushes just happen sometimes. This is something Ginny learns when she and Hermione spend a weekend with Tonks.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 04/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really love the first chapter! I can't wait for the second one! Most SSP stories just don't quite fit with the books, but your's certainly does!

Miss Me by Valentinia

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Merope Gaunt is alone and in love with a man she knows she can never have back. In her loneliness she writes a letter that is never to be delivered to Tom Riddle.

Reviews would be greatly appreciated! Constructive critism is definately welcome!
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 04/06/08 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Wow! I think the phrase 'charged with emotion' springs to mind here!

I really liked the way you wrote Merope. you kept her balanced, without leaning too heavily on the 'phycotic, obsessed' side, or the 'whingey and whiney' side. You got it just right!

Her whole-hearted love for Tom was very apparent. The only way we can excuse Merope's actions is if we remember how much she loved him, and what a miserable life she'd already had.

I really enjoyed it!

Author's Response: *grins* *broadly* Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Standing Out From the Crowd by Valentinia

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: His beautiful black eyes have always stood out from the crowd for her. Even today, when she is the centre of attention, she is thinking of him and wishing things were different...
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 09/01/07 Title: Chapter 1: Charocal Eyes

Such a cute pairing! Cissa and Snape (I'm presuming that was him). It was really short, but very touching, and was just as effective as a longer piece on the same theme.

I can't really think of much else to say. Oh yeah, Cissa and Snape were very well done.

That's all!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I know that this now non-canon, but oh well. I\'m glad you enjoyed the fic!

Harry Potter, the Half-Blood Prince and Mary-Sue by Valentinia

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: What if Ginny hadn't been there after Harry won his Quidditch game? In his euphoria, Harry would have fallen for someone else, of course. And who could that be but the beautiful foreign exchange student, Mary-Sue!

A Mary Sue parody!

Warning: Extreme OOCness follows. All of the warnings this fic has are based on not-to-be-taken-seriously situations!
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/07/07 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Meeting Mary-Sue

Your brilliance as a fanfiction writer burns me!!!
(Just thought you might like to note I loved all Hermy's millions of love affairs, hated Mary Sue, and was very glad Lord Voldy ordered his bunny slippers!)
One last thing. I think you have to check your writing more carefully, because you have quite a bit of word repetition which interupts the flow of the otherwise brilliant story!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Also thanks for the compliment, ;), and the hint on repetition. Mostly I did it on purpose, but I may have overdone it and ruined the effect. I\'ll definitely look over it again!

When The Church Bells Ring by TheVanishingAct

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: What no one else could do, she will, when the church bells ring.

Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 11/03/07 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot


Amazing, I never saw that coming!

I liked your portrayl of Cho. No one ever seems to write stories with her in it, so it was interesting to read one with her in it.

The writing style was beautiful and poetic. Absolutely amazing. You were very minimalistic (I know that isn't quite the right word) and used very few words to large effect. The clever flash backs and symbolism really made this story stand out.

Cho was very well-done. There were bits of her which showed the girl we all know, but she seemed much older and colder than before. In short, she'd suffered and grown up.

Highly original and imaginative. And very atmospheric. I was enthralled!

Author's Response: thank you! :D

For Lily by Valentinia

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Voldemort is at the height of his power. His terrible reign is fought only by the Order of the Phoenix, and they are outnumbered ten to one. Petunia Evans, 19, is fresh out of Hogwarts and a not-so-useful member of said Order. But when Petunia's memory is modified and members are kidnapped by Death Eaters, it is up to Petunia, her childhood friend Severus and the four Marauders to change the direction of the war and save the person most important to Petunia. Along the way, they will have to face old grudges and old crushes that can be just as harmful as the Death Eaters.

Originally an unfinished entry for a gauntlet way back when, this fic evolved from there.

Note: This fic is AU, based on the question "What if Petunia had been the witch instead of Lily?".
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 08/18/07 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

It was interesting. It's nice reading about a main character who ISN'T brave. case point: Harry, Ron, Hermy, Nev-Nev, Loony, Dumbledore, Snape and Moldie Voldie are all brave (in one form or another).

It was quite a poiniant (not quite sure how you spell it) story. I liked the way it showed a slightly different side to smelly old Pertunia Dursley, while still keeping her in character. Well done!

Author's Response: :D I\'m glad you enjoyed this fic! Thanks so much for the nice review!!

Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 04/04/08 Title: Chapter 2: Resignation to Determination

Oooh, you have my interest hooked! I am very interested to see what direction this story is going to go. At the moment, I'm still not sure.

So the prologue wasn't real? Typical Voldermort. That minipulative prat.

At the moment, I'm a little bit confused about what's happened, which of Petunia's memories are real etc etc. But I'm sure that's intended, and it'll become clear eventually.

Two things:
'...but speak sense'----- it sounds awkward the way he says it.

'...messed with...'---- That doesn't sound like Sev talking, somehow.

In particular, I liked Snape's story, the way it was similar to Canon, but completely different at the same time. Just as AU is supposed to be. I also liked the way that even thought she isn't a witch, Lily is far more interesting to Snape than Petunia.

Great story. Looking forward to the next installment.

And remember: Keeeeeeeeeep Writing!

Author's Response: =D Thanks! Writing Snape (especially his dialogue!) always throws me - I\'ll definitely take your suggestions concerning that. And, now the website\'s up again, I should be submitting the next chapter... soon. Hehe. Anyway, thanks for the review!

A Letter Never Read by beauty and brains

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A motherless child. A heart-broken father. A box filled with long lost treasures. And a letter holding all the secrets that have been buried for over ten years. Will Harriet discover why her father has kept her in the dark for so long? Will she finally come to know her motherÖthrough a letter never read?
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 08/11/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Letter Never Read

I didn't think anyone could write a better R/Hr after I read Weasles and Otters, but this story certainly proved me wrong!
Harriet-I didn't like her at the beginning, but I soon warmed to her. A lot of stories about people's children have the kids being either a mini-version of one parent or the other. Harriet was a beatiful blend of both parents, with a dash of individuality. And she most certainly was not a Mary-Sue!
Ron's letter-was so him! It was completely awkward and clumsy, without seeming like it was meant to be so. All the little bits of stuff about Harry, and cakes, and books and children was so...perfect. Perfect is the only word to describe it.
I think you might like to know it took me about ten minutes after I'd read it to stop crying.
You are a brilliant author, and if you don't get published one day, it's a crime. And I'm not just saying that. I really, really mean it.
Best wishes xxx

Author's Response: Thank you! This was my very first fic on MNFF, written way before Weasels and Otters. I\'m so happy you liked them both! Writing R/Hr is such a pleasure for me, so I\'m glad my readers enjoy it too.

Harriet was a hard character for me to write my first time out of the starting gate. Ron and Hermione are almost something of polar opposites, so combining those traits into a believable character was a bit of a challenge. Glad to see she turned out alright.

Ron\'s letter was kind of easy for me. I admire Ron\'s character so much, and see a lot of myself in him. The hard part was making his sound Ronnish, but still have that lovey-dovey tinge. I\'m pretty happy with the results. =]

Your compliments brought a genuine smile to my face, and I am so happy you liked this humble one-shot. You know, everyone who has read it claims to have cried, yet I never once cried while writing it...Weird huh? I am writing an original fiction, and hope with all my heart to have it published one day. Thanks so much for your support! Happy reading/writing!

The Worth of an Uncanny Love by BloodRayne

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Cho Chang is in an abusive relationship with a person she loves more than herself.

2nd Place in the Spring Challenges, *To Laugh or Cry* prompt, by BloodRayne of Gryffindor.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 01/17/08 Title: Chapter 1: Really Worth it?


This was absolutely fantastic! I think the characterization was what I loved best about it. Cho seemed like a mature version of the girl we see in the books, which I guess is what you're aiming for? I'm glad you didn't make her hysterical and constantly crying. She cryed a lot in OoP, but she was a TEENAGER then, so has the right to be hormonal.

I wanted to thump Paolo, which I guess was the right reaction. However, he wasn't so evil I couldn't see why Cho liked him.

The only criticism I have to make is their first meeting. It was a little...cheesy, and didn't fit in with the harsh, grittyness of the rest of the story. Love at first sight isn't really something I go in for.

But, apart from that, truely amazing.

Oh yeah, and thanks for writing a story where Cho isn't a Mean Popular Girl. It makes a nice change!

Author's Response: Ah, the first meeting. Yes, looking back, I realize I should have designed a flashback that alluded to their future relationship, instead of so blatantly stating it. It goes against the tone of the rest of the story, in my opinion. And thank you, of course, for your lovely review!

Helga's Journey: A Story of Forgiveness by beauty and brains

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: There are many hidden secrets deep within the Department of Mysteries, few of which we will ever know. Helga thought there might be a room for her to fulfill her darkest wish- revenge. Someone close to her heart was murdered, and she intends to find a way to punish the murderer.

I am beauty and brains of Gryffindor House.

Won second place in the fourth Gauntlet Challenge!
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 08/13/07 Title: Chapter 1: Revenge will be Sweet

Ooooh...very atmospheric!
I loved the way that Helga's journey was both physical, emotional and mental. The rooms in the Dep. of Mysteries were so well described. I have a few minor points I'd like to point out, though....

'Each time her foot left the ceiling, it was as though she was asking it to come unglued.' ----I don't think they had glue in the Middle Ages. Sorry to be so picky. You could just change it to stuck or think up something like tree sap which they would have had.

'...and the door squeaked loudly as it opened for the first time in a long time.' ----'time in a long time' sounds a bit awkward. You could change it to 'time in ages'

'The room changed. It was no longer a dark, cold room of moving shadows. '----you use room twice in a very short space of time. Why not change one of them to 'chamber'?

'It had been nearly two weeks since she had last heard him. He had past from this world into the next, leaving her all alone, for two whole weeks. '----change one of the 'two weeks' to fortnight.

'...this train of hatred that you old against Rowena.'----I think 'old' should be 'hold'.

'ďYou must find it in your heart, Helga, and I know that there is room enough for Rowena again, for I know how large and loving your heart is.Ē '----You use heart twice. Maybe you could change it to 'how loving you are'. ?????

'She felt Godricís hand on her arm as he pulled her a ways off.'----'a ways'=a way?

'Youíre a witch; use your bleeding common sense!'-----no, no, no, no, NO! Any Medieval lady wouldn't even know those sorts of words existed (apart from pig-farmers' wives) and bleending is Victorian cockny, which is quite a big time-leap! (I think it is, at any rate.)

After a few minutes, she hurriedly took out her wand and exclaimed, ďPoint Me!Ē ----Correct me if I'm wrong, but Point Me was invented by Hermione in GoF, wasn't it? So Helga wouldn't have known it.

'Crying out in relief, Helga screamed, ďAlohomora!Ē '-----'Alohamora' needs to be in italics.

Also I think you need to develop the bit when Godric dies. It has the potential for lots of drama and sympathy with Helga (and Rowena). You could do a flash back, or just have the two girls discuss it in more detail. Seeing as it's the driving force behind the whole fic, you didn't dwell on the actual moment, for me at anyrate.

Wow! Very long review. Sorry to be so picky, I just thought you might like to know. But I really did like it! The dark room with no air=disturbing!

Author's Response: Okide dokie, I have a large explanation coming. *takes deep breath*

This was my entry from the Gauntlet Four Challenge, for which I could not use my regular betas, as they were both participating. The rules said we were not allowed to show the different plots ahead of time, as others were receiving them in a seperate order. I think this explains the many mess-ups throughout the story. It is definitely not one of me favourite, and is the first Gauntlet I ever participated it.

Another thing, seeing as this is a Gauntlet entry, I will not be able to go and add to the story, as you mentioned to add more drama around Godric\'s death. That is, however, a nice idea for a seperate one-shot...

Well, I\'m glad you at least liked it a bit in the end, and I whole-heartedly agree with every one of your nitpicks. Hopefully this won\'t turn you away from any of my other works. =]

Chatting with Werewolves by beauty and brains

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: I, Ashley Elizabeth, Special Correspondent and Junior Assistant to Rita Skeeter, am about to embark on my first ever interview with one Remus Lupin. My task is to document the life and troubles of how a werewolf copes in these dark times. I only hope that this Lupin isnít a good looking chap, because I have been known to go on tangents with the male species. Let us pray.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 09/01/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chatting with Werewolves

Entertaining! I think it should have been longer, though!

It was very sweet! Lupin and Ash went well together, and there was a perfect mix of playfulness and shyness between them both. It was somehow....very intimate, with lots of understanding between them even though they were so different.

However (and this is just my opinion) I've never imagined Lupin being 'muscular' or anything along those lines. Sorry to burst your bubble, but he isn't a pin-up, and Lupin-who-has-suddenly-become-perfectly-toned-and-muscular doesn't really work for me. But I'm just weird and do not find Lupin attractive in any way so ignore me if you want.

Please write more soon!

Author's Response: Yay! I\'m glad you liked this one as well! I was thinking about writing a sequel to it, but I\'m not sure. With high school starting again, my life is just completely caotic right now. I\'m not even sure I\'ll be able to have time to do any writing at all. =[ Oh yes, the little stage I went through about Lupin. *rolls eyes* I have always held a little crush on Remus, but when I just read over and actually saw I had written him as \"muscular\", I cringed. I now think of him as cute in an amemic sort of way. Too skinny, but still handsome. Which Marauder do you take a fancy to, if not Remus? Again, thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 09/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chatting with Werewolves

Ha ha ha ha!

I am in love with no Marauder! If you look one my user page you will see only one guy's name written in capital letters with millions of exclaimation marks. He's my life! (And in December it will be my 2nd anniversary of being head-over-heels-in-love with him!

Author's Response: I see you and I agree that James is a complete and total idiot. Well done! No one else seems to accept the fact that he was truly a complete prick. Grr...but then again, I have odd tastes and don\'t get on too famously with Lily either. Congrats on that 2nd anniversary, however! *applauds, wishing I could go longer than a week without getting bored of the person I\'m dating* *growls in frustration*

As You Lie Sleeping by msbigbad

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Post HBP -- The horcrux search has begun. Will the new dangers make two friends realize thier love before it's too late?

Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/09/07 Title: Chapter 1: As You Lie Sleeping

The sadness overwhelmed me *sob* *sniff*.

Rose Tinted Glasses by PheonixStar

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: It has been 6 weeks since the death of Lord Voldemort, and Ron looks back at the most important year of his life.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/07/07 Title: Chapter 1: Rose Tinted Glasses

Great! R/Hr is one of my favourite ships and you certainly captured all their emotions well. I loved the just the little things which added to the story so much. But I did think Ron was a bit well-spoken (I'm not saying he's a moron, but he needs more slang and abbrieviations).
But all in all, BRILLIANT!!!!

Author's Response: I do agree, but so rarely does he speak in the fiction. Most of it is internal, and slag looses its effect when you don\'t actually say it. When he does open his mouth (be it a memory or otherwise), it is usually at an emotional moment, so relaxed slang wouldn\'t come into play. That was the choice I made anyway: and besides, slang has a habit of being misinterpreted. By keeping to plain english, my meaning is clear.

Guilt by beauty and brains

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: If James Potter had been a Slytherin, what would he have done to make Lily hate him?

I am beauty and brains of Gryffindor House for the May One-Shot Challenge.
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier Signed
Date: 06/07/07 Title: Chapter 1: Guilt

I thought it was really interesting! I like the OOC of James, it was very effective. But I did think you didn't show Lily's feistyness. Couldn't she have said a witty come-back? And there were a couple of grammar and spelling mistakes.

Author's Response: Yes, this was basically the reason behind her temper. I\'m glad you liked it! And I am editing the mistakes now, thank you!