Hello everyone who decided to grace this boring page!
I am a native Floridian, recent college graduate, happily married (even though the hubby doesn't understand the obession...)! I have been reading for years, but only recently taken a dive into writing. I'm a proud Hufflepuff and have recently taken to drabbling as well, so some of those might turn into stories as well.
Stories (click for banner on all):
A Life From the Ashes:
Third Task challenge fic, centered on Ron.
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A True Weasley
Why Percy Weasley was sorted into Gryffindor. For the Hufflepuff Back to Hogwarts Challenge.
A one-shot about Luna as a child.
For the Halloween Challenge - Halloween Explained.
This series highlights important, pivotal moments in a characters' life.
It did not start as a series, but has taken flight in my mind, and you can't really tell those things "no", can you?
Each summary is purposefully vague, for telling you the moment ahead of time is anticlimatic, in my opinion.
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A Harry/Ginny story, a missing moment from the HBP.
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A Ron/Hermione story, Post-Hogwarts.
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All reviews are appreciated and cherished.
This story is still very mysterious, but intrigiuing. You are fantastic with descriptions: "Summer still blanketed the forest in an emerald dress..." "...barren tree branches that grasped at each other with skeletal fingers." The first chapter was very heavy on the description as well.
It seems to be picking up the pace a bit, and hopefully we'll start to see some more interaction with other characters and some more light shed on what is going on.
From the short part of the story we have so far, "Soul and Body" makes more sense than the "Quick and the Dead" for the actual content.
Author's Response: I might do that, actually. I think I'm going to edit chapter one a bit, too. The first two chapters really have to happen the way they do, but the pace really does pick up in chapter three.
That was a wonderfully sweet little story!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
It was like a wizard tale. The clever Slytherin helps a hag who later repays the debt. Except that Rose Weasley wasn't a hag, and Scorpius didn't expect to call in the favour.
*Winner of the 2010 Next Generation QSQ award*
I don't really have any constructive criticism, but I think you deserve to know I've been following this story and I really really enjoy it! I'm very glad for the quick updates and I will continue to follow it! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for following the story! I'm a chapter ahead, so it's a shorter wait than if I wrote a chapter, waited for it to post, then put in another one. I'm just glad this isn't a ginormous category flooded with stories! (And I hope I haven't jinxed myself, saying that, lol)
Ohhhh, nice chapter.
Your writing has such a nice flow. I just kept reading and reading and then boom! I was disappointed to be at the end.
I know we've already *sort of* discussed this, but I really like your characterization of the Gryffindor ladies. They are still girls, but they are facing their problems with a sense of maturity they didn't previously possess, because they didn't need to. Pavarti in particular in this chapter was simply a fantastic friend and a wonderfully developed character as she was brutally honest with Lavender. And their conversation about Ron - awesome. :) And real. At least, to me. We women are silly, but we know we know it and we gossip with our friends about our silliness and our men.
I am also liking your characterization of Blaise, he is quite ambiguous but sweet and mysterious...
I loved this chapter, dear. And I can't wait for the next. You are a delightful writer.
Author's Response: Thank you, Amanda. I have to admit to getting ticked off at people dismissing Lavender as a total airhead based on her relationship with Ron. In my experience, most teenage girls are silly at times - or perhaps that was just me. Hermione, in my opinion, is far from the norm - and even she goes silly over Lockhart.
Watch out for more Blaise - especially Chapter four heh heh. Thanks again. ~Carole~
AAAHHH! Carole how is this so ridiculously goood that I'm reading so late at night instead of sleeping again?! Oh, the whole thing, from Snape's conversation with Blaise to Blaise's conversations with Malfoy and Daphne to poor poor Lavender in the RoR. It's just such a delightful read (well, I don't know if reading about Crabbe is necessarily delightful) but it just flows so naturally. Hopefully you feel that as a worthy compliment, because I'm attempting to bestow one upon you...I just might not be making much sense.
Sorry for the short review but I couldn't resist reading it tonight. :) I have changed my prediction on Blaise's reaction due to this chapter and his new realization of love for her. I think he'll be just fine, if not shocked. Even if he has a not so good initial reaction...I believe in love above all - across Houses as well! :) So sappy me has faith in the lush Mr. Zabini.
Author's Response: I hate Crabbe so much ... far more than I did in DH - ha ha. Thank you for the review, Amanda. Hmm, Blaise's reaction, well it's a secret ... but you may find out a bit more in the final two chapters. Glad you think Blaise is lush, although my beta (Emma, Amortentia x) has a prior claim and will fight you for him ... hee hee. Thanks again ~Carole~
Oh, this is such a great story! Have I said that before? It has romance, character development, missing moments from canon (which might be my favorite kind of story), action….
I had a little fangirling moment when Lavender was admitting jealousy of Hermione and acknowledging her intelligence, all without bitterness. There seemed to be sincerity there. And you know why, we've had that discussion before.
Lavender and Blaise almost seem to have a hot and cold relationship…one will get worked up, and the other knows how to cool them off. I like it; it gives more depth to it, because of the types of things that set them off. Sometimes it even seems like they do it on purpose, to try to gauge the reaction of the other person (such as when Lavender brings up Tabitha Flint in retaliation), but they also use it to lead the other person where they want to go. I'm not sure if Lavender realized why Blaise would have been upset about the girls gossiping about him at the Yule Ball, but as I said above, she knew how to cool him off, and lead him to her observation that that was when she first noticed him.
But they are a hot little couple. And where can I get my hands on some Pourable Paradase?
It's nice to see the hints of canon, the small facts that were barely glossed over in DH but would mean a great deal to the ones still at Hogwarts. It helps highlight those facts for those of us (*cough me!*) that didn't put too much thought into how hearing about Neville's Gran might have affected not only Neville, but the morale of everyone left behind, for example.
Oh my gosh, when Madam Pomfrey thought that Lavender needed the potion for Seamus…I had to pause for laughter. Oh my gosh.
Hmmm…I'm thinking that if she is pregnant, he's not going to react so positively. Seems like a much bigger step than just traveling the country, though I'm conflicted in my prediction of just how he's going to react. I know you've already written it, so I'm going to make a prediction! *albeit a tired, wine-induced one* I think the lack of a fatherly influence has had a bigger influence than he would like to admit than any "Slytherin" or "pure-blood" influences, or whatever else would scare him away from staying with Lavender. And he would therefore stay with her, or at least stay around to be an influence in the child's life.
Though, if she's not pregnant, this is all moot. :p But if she isn't, but she thinks she is…then we'll get to find out how he really feels…and now you can tell I'm just rambling.
Oh! Cliffie! And evil cliffie! Bad Carole!
I feel as if I should be adding more constructive criticism, so if I find any, I'll let you know. :D I think I've left a few reviews in the distant past that had concrit for contrit's sake, but really, that's unnecessary, don't ya think? I'm an evolving reviewer, lol. I will say that the idea of Lavender and Seamus made me go, "Hmmmm…." and make a weird face, but I'm not sure why. And I don't remember if they dated in canon or just went to the Yule Ball together. >.< Just never pictured them together, but I think that's a completely personal preference. As in, I'll never write my own romance about them.
Author's Response: How on earth to I respond to such a fabulous review except to hug and squish you tight. Thank you, very much, Amanda. Hmm, pregnancy dilemma indeed. I have it all sussed in my head (and my notebook) so I know what's about to happen heh heh. Good point about Blaise not having a father figure in his life... I'll just say that he could go two ways with that. Oh, I'm a tease.
Lavender and Seamus, as far as I know, only went to the Yule Ball ... but they could have had a few dates. I know people often write them as a couple based on them going to the ball together, but I don't see it ... well not now - LOL. Poor Seamus, I must find him a nice girl one of these days.
Thanks again for the review.
I don't blame you for crying. I teared up. That so emotional. So...just...wow.
Author's Response: Thank you, Amanda. But sorry I made you cry. *lip wobbles at thought of Remus, Tonks and little baby Blaise*
EEEK! Gushing praise indeed! I'm dreadfully exhausted but I finally got to read this chapter. Points of note:
Blaise = delicious and yet still in canon.
Lavender = wonderfully complex.
Neville = great characterization, especially right at the beginning when he's confronting Lavender and Blaise. And the part with Hannah is super cute.
You = awesome. And you know when it's used what it means.
Author's Response: Thank you so much.I'm pleased this is going down so well with you. This is what Haylee's Charatcerisation class does to someone - LOL. Next chapter needs a bit of work (ie typing up and beta'd ha ha) so I hope you enjoy that. Thanks again ~Carole~
What a lovely story!
James is such a…boy. Does that make sense? And Lily is such a girl, lol. He is afraid to let her know how he feels, while she is jumping to conclusions. Complete picture of what happens frequently in almost all relationships. As the reader, we are egging James to take Sirius' advice when he tells him, "‘What I don’t get is why you don’t have a serious talk with her and stop acting as if it doesn’t matter whether she refuses you or not. If you did, she might come to take you seriously." We emphasize with James while still understanding, and maybe even identifying with, his flaws.
I liked the repetition in the second paragraph. It showed his sincerity and earnest nature; how passionate he was, and how important it was.
I also liked the dynamic of the relationship between James and Sirius; they were honest with each other, almost like brothers. It was touching.
I'm definitely going to read it's sequel - great story!
Oh my goodness this was awesome. It was extremely amusing and I would actually look forward to reading more
Author's Response: Hmmm, actually their child could be interesting, in a weird way. NO! I can't go own that route... (or can I?)
I thought this was a lovely little chapter.
I like your...style?...of writing. Little bits of humor here and there, little bits of magic or wizarding society spicing things up without being overwhelming. It feels like a nice addition to the universe we've already got.
And the mystery builds slowly...I like that Albus got some information from Bill. I'm not so sure that his parents would have given it to him, lol.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the chapter, Amanda! I gave Bill the exposition because I thought he was an unusual choice and he rarely appears in fan fiction. I'm very flattered that you like my writing style. I do try to keep consistent with canon and to build it up a little bit when I can. Anyway, thanks for reviewing!
I'm still reading I'm still reading!!
I love you style, it is reminiscent of Jo's. The story is great, and I will keep reading, even if I'm a bad reader and I don't review. You've got me hooked on Al's journey.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you're still reading, Amanda! This chapter has been so long coming that I wondered if anyone would remember the story at all! This story is now more than half done and I really want to wrap it up this winter. There are scenes coming up that I've had planned for more than a year, so it's pretty exciting. Oh, and reviews are all well and good (okay, fine, they're GREAT), but I what I really want is for people to like my story, so you're a great reader if you're still following it! :)
This is a great story! It is well-written, nicely paced and characterized, and very interesting! I wonder if they will tell their parents about the DA...different ages (they are so young!) and the need really isn't as great (as far as we know) so I'm curious as to their reactions.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story! The New DA was something I wanted to drop into the story very early because it's a very important plot point in this and later books. I reasoned that after hearing stories about the DA from their parents, the second generation would want to try it out for themselves, a decision that will become. . . . advantageous in the years to come ;) Anyway, thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!
Al was pretty clever on asking the Room to show him who was talking out in the Forest, and he obviously takes after his father with his ability to question (and perhaps obsess?) after things that no one else cares about. I'm very interested to see what Harry has to say...will he encourage Al, and see himself in his son and believe? Or will he understand why adults were constantly frustrated with him as a child, lol?
Author's Response: It was interesting to play around with the limits of what the Room of Requirement could and couldn't do. Clearly, it didn't give Al quite the conclusive answer he wanted, but the presence of the Foe-Glass is obviously a big hint. As for Harry's reaction, you'll get that in Chapter 7 and he and Ginny will get to be on the opposite side for once! :) Anyway, thanks for reading! I hope you like the rest of the story!
Oh Hermione!! Be the genius you are and figure it out already! Lol, I just wonder what her reaction will be when she does...but it's obvious she wants him, too, so....hmmmm....they can't avoid each other, though, so more juicy encounters to follow, yes? :) Great story, love the quick updates, and the balance between the 17 year old and Prof. Snape.
Yes! Yes! Good ole fashioned snogging and some Hermione genius! Love the story, it's great, and I can't wait to see how he explains that, lol.
What a lovely, lovely story. The time period immediately following the Final Battle is on that I am usually the least satistifed in general for some reason with canon compliant stories, and this was great! The time period right after the final battle to the transition to their careers was nice all the way to their marriage - everything felt nice and...real. I also related to this story on a personal level having been in a long-distance relationship for several years, so I definitely identified with Ginny's frustration, lol. Even if I hadn't though, the "waiting" theme was wonderfully done and this story was a delight to read.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you found it realistic -- that's always something I strive for in my stories. I've read a lot of fanfictions that take place right after the final battle, and while I have read a lot of good ones, I generally -- like you -- aren't very impressed by them. It's good to know you think mine does a good job! :)
Oh my, I must admit that I thought it would make things easier for her to turn to Albus if Thomas were to do that, but I didn't think he would. For shame! "I have needs." Blah, men!
I must say, I just stopped reviewing this evening and read right on until the end. :) I am completely drawn into Elizabett's tale and I cannot wait for the next update! I would very much like to see what Professor Dumbledore thinks of this new development in her life...
Author's Response: Oh…that’s coming. The next chapter is in queue…but it’s not one you’re expecting. *Snort* Thought I’d throw something else at you guys. :-) Dani
Oooohhh, what a lovely and dark transitional chapter. I'm calling it that because I felt like we really didn't find out any new additional information except for the introduction of Gellert and it was quite short.
It still contained the same charm and poetic-ness of the language.
Elizabett's character keeps becoming more appealing to me and more complex as well. Her relationship with Albus moves to greater heights with this information, as I'm sure as the story progresses and his relationship with Gellert changes this information is already known or will become known. Either way, it will add greater depth.
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review. Yes, this was meant as a transitional chapter. Just enough to introduce Gellert, and a hint of possibilities to come. This story has become much longer than anticipated, and much is covered. I hope you keep reading. Dani
Ohhhh, what a delicious chapter. I never thought I'd be describing a nice little snog fest with Albus Dumbledore as delicious, but there you have it! It was!
I could really picture the scene out by the lake - viewing the night sky as I rarely get to view it anymore, too close to civilization. Though they've both felt something before, this whole scene felt like a build-up…I got a little more tense until it got to the end and I was like, "Do it Albus!"
It always starts out innocent: "Oh sit down here!" Then he lays down, then a confession, then they turn to talk more comfortably…then BAM! It's snog fest time, and it was good. I personally didn't think it was overdone. It seemed right for Albus to make the move and then step back and say, "Hey. Do YOU understand what just happened?" And as soon as he is sure, he just took control of the situation after letting her make her own conclusions. Does that make sense?
It did a little fluffy! at the end…with the wishing on a star line. It seemed to me like it could have ended on the long paragraph, "both happy and content."
Anyway, I hope that made sense…yea for some romance! Though I doubt this is the end of their tale, or that they have a super!happy ending, at least not right away. I know the ending is alternative universe, and I am not trying too hard to analyze what part of it is alternate; is it just Albus' sexuality?
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the chapter. Short and sweet, and yes, okay, I got a bit corny at the end. We'll deal with Albus' sexuality in the future, and his relationship with Elizabett will take time to develop. So far, this story is a lot longer than anticipated - 47 chapters!! I hope yo're up to it. ;-D Dani