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Friends in Need... by Foxy Wolf

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: It's one week till Christmas and times are rough in the wizarding world. Neville Longbottom is forced to stay behind at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry due to tragic events. Fortunately someone chooses to stay behind with him.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 09/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: ...Are Friends in Deed.

Such a beautifully-written piece. I'm very impressed. You have a wonderful knack for description which is evident from the very first line:

The snow was lightly descending from the indigo sky, laying itself like an ice cold quilt on the grounds that surrounded Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.

It's such a lovely beginning - very simple, but it sets the mood, as well as the scene, and tells us so much.

Your characterisation of Ginny is excellent, which I was pleased to find. I have noticed that many authors fail to grasp her personality and she ends up grossly OOC. Her quiet acceptance of hard facts and love for her friends was a great way to portray her.

All three of them were out there somewhere in the vast darkness, on the search for those horrible Horcruxes so that Harry could ensure the fall of Lord Voldemort.

I'm interested as to why Ginny knows about the Horcruxes. I know that it isn't really crucial to the plot of this story, but Ginny hasn't previously been one of Harry's confidants, especially as he is trying to keep her safe - if Voldemort thought there was even the slightest chance that Ginny knew Harry's plans, she would be in danger. Just my thoughts, anyway.

Another thing I liked was the fact that the reader really got a feeling of Neville's grief, despite the fact that this wasn't written from his point of view.

But she knew he wasn’t ready, he would come to her when the time was right.

What a gorgeous line! It's a nice explanation of why Neville isn't talking to Ginny, and vice versa. Ginny really is being a good friend to Neville, simply by being patient, and realising that he has to come to terms with it in his own time.

She squeezed Luna’s hand under the table; she knew that she had been worrying about her father since the start of term when more and more people had started disappearing.

Whilst this is a lovely interaction between the two friends, I have to ask - why is Luna sitting with Ginny? After all, wouldn't she usually be sitting at the Ravenclaw table?

Luna placed her wand behind her ear and walked over to Neville who was sitting at the far end of the table. She bent down, kissed him on the cheek and swept away her dirty blonde hair from her face as she absentmindedly strolled towards the Entrance Hall.

This is possibly the part of your fic which best characterises Luna. She does something so affectionate, and yet to her it is so perfectly natural. I adore it. It's just so sweet.

Neville smiled and suddenly he drew her closer and kissed her. Their lips parted and Ginny could sense the taste of salt on her upper lip; she looked at Neville. Tears where streaming down his face.

This is my favourite part of the entire story - it's so beautiful and perfect. Even though I don't really like Neville/Ginny, this seems so natural that I can't help but love it. Guh! I adore it. Small error, though - 'where' should be 'were', I think.

All in all - this was simply superb. Apologies for the lateness of this review, and thank you millions for the gorgeous banner you made me!

Author's Response: Wow 0.o

What a wonderful review. It\'s reviews like this which makes the entire writing experience worth while.

You\'re right about the Horcruxes. I hadn\'t really thought about her not knowing until you pointed it out. I\'ll probably keep it like it is but thank you for informing me *facepalm*

This was really worth waiting for. You can be late any time you wan\'t, hun ;-)

*goes to change \'where\' to \'were\'*

Light of Sunrise by rivers of gold

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Many questions remain unanswered about Lily and James. Was James always an arrogant bully? Did Lily really hate James, or was there something more behind her angry reply at the lake? And whoever said Lily was a bossy bookworm? Join the marauders and their friends as they go through Hogwarts, and experience pain and joy, tears and laughter...as they realize that no matter how dark the night may get, the Light of Sunrise will always follow.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 07/03/06 Title: Chapter 9: Beware The Glare

Hiya Roggy!

*blatently ignores the fact that she has already reviewed this chapter*

Okay - my reason for being here. I was just sitting at my laptop yesterday, you know, trying (and failing) to overcome my writer's block, and I had a thought. A very random thought to be sure, but as it relates to your wonderful fic, I thought I'd come and bore you with it.

*evil giggle*

I'm still dying for the Marauders to triumph in this duel, so... I've thought up an elaborate scheme to allow them victory. What if they win, but just to annoy the heck out of Lily and Co., they tell them that they can keep the space as a 'consolation prize'? Okay; not so elaborate, but I like it. ;)

Anyways, what's all this about a new fic you're planning? What's it about? Who are the main characters? How long is it gonna be? There you go - my persistent questioning for the day.

Author's Response:

Ms. Weasley! \'tis a pleasure!

*can\'t stop smiling and giggling*

LOL, your reviews always make me smile. I\'m sorry that your\'e having writer\'s block, and I can empathize with you since I\'m going through a mild case of it myself. Your review, however, has caused TONS of ideas to come flooding into my head, and now I need to get them all down. I must say, I like your idea very much. I may use it with a twist, but I\'m not making any promises. ;) Time will tell.

Ah, the new fic. Well . . . I\'m still in the process of planning it out. It\'s going to be a historical fic, taking place sometime in the late 18th or early 19th century, so I\'ll be able to stretch canon quite a bit. The main characters are original, but one of them, named Lupin, is an ancestor of the Lupin today, and just happens to be a werewolf as well . . . and he has a friend Potter. Funny how these things happen, isn\'t it? ;D

I dunno how long it\'s gonna be, but it definitely won\'t be short. ;)

And no review you left me has EVER been boring. ^_^ ~roggy :D

Author's Response: Okay, there have already been some changes to my new fic, and that should teach me a lesson. *smack on head*

I need to shut up about this until it\'s completely planned out. Whatever, it\'s gonna be good. *pats herself on shoulder* That is, if you like the historical sort of story. ~roggy :D

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 05/10/06 Title: Chapter 6: An Icy Glitter

I've just finished reading the story so far, and I'm really enjoying it. There aren't many stories that go through James and Lily's story from the very beginning, so I really like that aspect of it. My favourite chapters are 'The Sparkle of Friendship' and 'Flickering Destinies' because they made me laugh. The relationships between the characters are extremely well thought out and written, and the idea that Lily had a friend who knew about the wizarding world all along makes the story seem even more believable. One thing I'd like to see more of, though, is interaction between Lily and James. So hopefully there'll be some soon.

Anyway, if I promise to keep reading (which I will do anyway), and review each chapter from now on, could I have one of those delicious brownies? *drools* :P

Author's Response: Ooh, you have no idea how happy you\'ve just made me. I was hoping some parts of the story would make readers laugh, but I had no way of knowing if they would. By the time I finish editing a chappie for the millionth time, I\'m dead bored and decide the story is absolute rubbish. I don\'t know how I would survive without reviews, especially lovely ones like yours.

Anyway, about Lily and James...their relationship won\'t start for a while, but yeah, you CAN look forward to an interaction very soon. *smirks to self*

Now, let\'s see. *peers into oven* You can have your brownies with melted fudge and choose from five different flavors of ice cream! Thank you so much for reviewing!~roggy :D

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 09/08/06 Title: Chapter 10: A Shadowy Discovery


I'm not constantly refreshing this page in order to read your chapter the moment it's validated. >.>

*looks innocent*

Author's Response: SO glad you came! The party\'s about to start!~roggy

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 06/24/06 Title: Chapter 9: Beware The Glare


Guess what? I just come back from holiday about an hour ago, and I have like six odd emails telling me that you've updated! I was ever so pleased (I ran out of books in Spain and was suffering from serious literature-withdrawal). ;)

So, I can totally understand why you wanted a little action. To be honest, I loved every minute. You can just get too fluffy, ya know? But I'm ashamed to say, I really want the Marauders to win. I know, I know, I'm probably alone on that one.

But, on another note - more Scott-time. A whole heap of yays! I told you I liked him, didn't I? And here you are sticking him in the middle of a feud with the Marauders. You really have a way of keeping my attention!

I don't have any complaints on this chapter, whatsoever. It had some lovely description at the beginning, and I like Scott's artsy side. It was also quite a different chapter from usual. And I'm getting some of that Lily/James animosity. Keep it up!

No more cheese, though??

Author's Response: Hey!! :D What a lovely review.

Ooh, Spain you lucky duck. Well, if the Marauders win, that would mean the girls would never be able to use that spot again . . . on the other hand, the girls won once already . . . we\'ll see. ;)

I\'m happy you liked this sort of different style, I wasn\'t sure whether or not to post it at first. Did I mention I love your reviews? I was smiling the entire time I was reading.

And, well, the party\'s over . . . BUT I\'m rummaging around in the fridge here . . . we\'ve got cheddar, parmesan, meunster, swiss . . . and champagne!~roggy ;D

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 06/11/06 Title: Chapter 8: Alight With Mischief

Hey there Roggy!

*takes offered glass of wine and the Cheshire cheese*

Loving the party! Cheese being one of my current cravings. ;)

This chapter was beyond cute. It made me laugh, and although I was secretly rooting for the guys (am I a bad member of the female sex?), the snowball fight was fantastic.

My favourite part was Remus' cravings. Kinda like mood swings, or pregnancy-cravings, huh? But that was such a simple but hilarious idea, that I had to read the whole part again. Also the part about Dani's brother Justin. He sounds fun - I'd like to see more of him.

Concrit? I'd say Dani was a little too quick to realise what was going on (in the snowball-fight scene). But nothing major, so don't worry too much.

Be seeing you next chapter!

*runs off with most of the cheese*

Author's Response: Hey!! :D

I wondered when someone with an appreciation for fine wine and cheese would show up at my party . . . lol.

I must admit, I couldn\'t decide if I should let the boys win or not. It was a tough decision . . . lol. I\'ll just have to create more battles, then, won\'t I?

Lol that you can relate to Remus\' cravings. Although pregancy cravings are usually not for meat . . . ;)

Justin would be fun, and I\'m happy you dragged him out of the corner I\'ve currently placed him in. I\'m afraid to use too many new characters at once, but Justin will probably make an appearance later in the story.

Hmm. Maybe I\'ll go back and edit the snowfight a bit more . . . The pains of not having a beta yet . . . *sigh*

Until next time, ~roggy :D

Hey! *mumbles* Where has all the cheese gone?? Ah, nevermind. There\'s some more in the fridge. I\'m glad everyone\'s enjoying the party . . . ;D

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 05/18/06 Title: Chapter 7: Illuminated

Hello again!

I've been waiting with bated breath for this chapter to come through. Excellent standard, as usual.

Now correct me if I'm wrong, but is Dani's friend Scott going to play a bigger part than just their homework-aide? I hope so, because I like his character, and I think he'd make an interesting addition to the mix.

You handled the issue of Sirius' punishment brilliantly. It is very characteristic that his mother would want to punish him in the most humiliating way possible. And she certainly did that. And the idea that secretly Sirius did care what she thought intrigued me.

I can't wait to see how the Marauders deal with that Slytherin, so I'll look forward to the next chapter. Until next time, and happy writing!

Author's Response: Hello to you too!

Ah, Scott...I really like him, so I don\'t think I\'ll be able to just let him sit in the sidelines. The homework part was just my way of introducing him.

Initially, I wasn\'t going to show Sirius getting punished, but I decided it was important because I feel it\'s an integral part of the teenager and adult he eventually becomes. And it\'s hard for a child to hate his mother, though she might abuse him.

The next chapter is a totally FUN one, see you there!~rog :D

When Is Too Late? by Oppungo

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ron regrets some of the things that happened in the past, but is it too late to change them? As Hermione seems to be perfectly happy with her long-term boyfriend Terry Boot, it would seem so - but Ron has never been a quitter. Although as he strives to make things right, he almost wishes that he was... Will he be able to win back Hermione's heart, or will someone else get there first?
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 09/01/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Wedding

Kiara, love - this was a fantastic first chapter. I'm so glad I decided to read and review. I must confess, though, I knew that it wasn't Hermione and Ron getting married. You were nicely misleading, however.

The banter between Ron and Hermione was fantastic to read, and kept this chapter flowing nicely through the scene. And I loved how you portrayed them both - just right. Not too over the top, which is a mistake many authors make. It was sweet that they were both do excited for Harry and Ginny.

The only thing I would criticise is Ron's calling Hermione 'beautiful', at the beginning of the chapter. Besides the fact that it almost gave away that they weren't getting married (since the groom can't see the bride before the wedding), it also seemed a little out of character for Ron - too bold. Especially since they aren't actually a couple. Well, I'm assuming they aren't, judging by your summary. I realise that it was said in a teasing way, but I think Ron would be a little more touchy - he's always been a little awkward about personal subjects with Hermione.

But I must say - I simply adore your use of Luna at the end. She was superbly characterised, and, I imagine, left this nagging thought at the back of Hermione's mind. Besides that, it made me smile, which is always a good thing.

Congratulations on a lovely job - I'll be off to review the next chapters in a moment.

Author's Response: Kate! *huggles* Thanks for such a lovely review! *Giggles* I do like misleading, but I knew that most people would have there doubts over this one - I mean, what sort of story starts with the happily ever after? Hmm - what sort of story does start with happily ever after...*plot bunnies attack* But make sure you watch out for any signs of misleading in the future chapters...I\'ll say no more...!
I always have fun writing conversation between Ron and Hermione, so I\'m really glad you enjoyed it, and that they were well in character, as I\'m always a little afraid of OoCness. You do have a point about Ron\'s comment there, thinking about it, he would be a lot more gaurded over his feelings and with comments such as that - even though he was just teasing. I\'ll see if I can alter something there. No - they\'re not a couple. (Notice how I avoid saying \'yet\' - you can take that to mean whatever you like!)
I do like Luna, how although she can be a little absurd at times, she can also come out with the most truthful and honest things - and does make people think. And yes - smiling is always great! Thank you so much for a lovely review dear, I\'m so pleased that you\'re enjoying it!

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 09/05/06 Title: Chapter 2: Well, Why Not?

Ooh. Another nice chapter. I must say, it didn't quite have the impact that your first one did - it was very different, but it certainly was intriguing.

Do you know what makes your writing so lovely to read? Those little hints and subtle suggestions which either make the reader puzzled or desperate to find out more. In this chapter, you had a nice amount of both. There were two sentence which particularly interested me:

“I went down to Hagrid’s, but they told me you’d left. I, um, needed to talk to you,” she admitted, her voice quavering a little, though Ron thought that this time it probably wasn’t much to do with the cold.

It really makes me wonder what more Lavender could have to say. Leaving it at just that one line was genius. Knowing you, Kiara, I'm sure you've come up with something that won't fail to surprise me. Especially since Lavender and Ron weren't on the best terms the last time we saw them.

Ron looked around his surroundings to see that he was slumped down in a corner of the Great Hall.

I have to say - I can't imagine what this is leading to. Why the corner of the Great Hall? And why did he fall asleep? I suppose it's a good job that the next few chapters are already written, isn't it? ;)

I liked that you included Mrs. Weasley, and you do seem to have a nice grasp of her character. The beginning was probably my favourite part, but the flashback was very nice indeed. My favourite line is:

“Well, why not?”

And judging by the use of it as a title, I would suspect that you like it too. It also sums up nicely what the readers want to know.

My only criticisms would be slight OOC-ness with Harry. I'm not sure whether he would tease Ron quite so much. A little, sure, but he seems a lot more like James in this chapter, whereas in the books I always saw him as more like Lily. I would have been tempted to tone down his taunting a little.

But it doesn't really detract from the chapter, so I wouldn't worry about it too much. I have to tell you - I'm really enjoying reading and reviewing this fic, despite the fact that I don't have much time to do now that we're into September.

Good job, love.

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, this chapter was more of an explanation chapter, but I tried to keep it with at least a level of intrigue! *Giggles* I must admit one of my favourite parts of writing is leaving hints and red herrings. It\'s always funny to notice people picking up on things straight away, and also in later chapters saying, \'Oh, I remember when so and so said or did that - now it makes sense!\' Yup - luckily for you the some of the answers are there for you - but so are a lot more questions! I\'m so pleased you like my characterization of Mrs. Weasley, as she\'s not a character I\'m used to writing, but I\'ve come to including her more and more - often without meaning to! Yes, I thought the chapter title summed it up quite nicely, as it\'s a question that everyone\'s wondering - readers and characters alike! You know, Harry is quite an awkward character for me to write, and I do need to work on him. I might have been thinking of James more, as I have been getting into Marauder era fics recently! But I do think that with teenage boys there will be a certain amount of teasing - there certainly is among the ones I know! I\'m so happy you\'re enjoying it, Kate, and thank you so much for your wonderful reviews, they always make my day! Thanks!

Letters by Sarah Kavanagh

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Lily thought she was in for a boring summer... but James Potter had other ideas. Love Letters, with a rather bizarre twist.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 04/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: Knitting needles, a fun accessory

Oooh! Excellent! I just had to review when I saw that you only had one so far, because this story is absolutely fabulous. The letter-format is pure genius, it has humour (which I always look for in a story), and, of course, my favourite pair, Lily and James. Congratulations on such a great fic, I shall keep my eyes open for more. :-)

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 05/07/06 Title: Chapter 2: Knees, a fun body part

Excellent, excellent, excellent!! I was thrilled to bits when I got an email saying you had updated. I promise to review each and every chapter. The letter from James to Lily's mother was pure genius - I always wanted to know what Lily's parents would think of James, and I'm glad you added some parts in with Sirius and Remus. Excellent ending - Lily is gradually being forced to admit her feelings. So here's what you have to do - update quick, and keep me laughing. I'd be terribly distraught if you didn't :P.

Let The Rain Fall by lily_evans34

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ginny's thoughts now that Harry is gone. One shot.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 07/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: Let The Rain Fall

This fic simply proves that you don't need to waffle on to create a stunning piece of writing. Short and captivatingly-written - you've done a wonderful job.

I enjoyed reading this immensely. Ginny's memories of Harry and her confusion, doubt, and pain all come across strongly in your writing. All the beautiful decription and language are used spectacularly.

But my favourite part, unsurprisingly, was the last line. It summed up the piece perfectly, and left the reader wanting more. It truly brought a tear to my eye.

I must ask - how did you come up with the wonderful title? Did it come from the last line, or vice versa?

Author's Response: Hm... well, the last line came to me, so I decided to use that for a title. I do that a lot; using my last lines for titles, that is. I\'m really glad that you liked this! A little cliche, but I\'m proud of it, none-the-less. Thank you so much for the wonderful review! It made me happy! :) <--Happiness

A Forbidden Connection by whittyleah

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: It is three weeks after Dumbledore's death, and Hermione Granger is dealing with the betrayal of the man she is secretly in love with, the man who is now her enemy, Severus Snape.

The character death and violence are for later chapters, which cover the final battle.

Chapter 4 is up!
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 07/31/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

An interesting first chapter. S/H isn't something that I usually read, but I actually quite liked this. It seemed... realistic.

The flashback was nicely done, and the idea that Hermione met him whilst she was upset about Ron is very plausible. I have to say, though, I'm as surprised as Hermione about Snape's attitude.

A small nitpick:

Hermione looked up slightly shocked that he would care about her emotional outburst.

I think you need a comma between 'up' and 'slightly'.

But nothing much to worry about. This was a very admirable prologue.

Author's Response: Oh..Thank you! Happy birthday to me! I will fix that, thanks! Why Severus acted the way he did is explained later in chapter 2!

Once Again, My Love by comewhatmay

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: A poem by Ginny who is going to see her lost love again.

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 05/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: 1

Hmmm... Very moving. I love the way the poem is structured, and it paints a picture of the entire scene. Although it makes me sad for Ginny, it is also a comfort that she is happy and whole again with Harry. The last line perfectly sums the whole poem up, bringing together every emotion. The issue of suicide can be a very difficult subject to write, but the poem flows beautifully. I am very impressed.

Author's Response: thank you

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 05/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: 1

Hmmm... Very moving. I love the way the poem is structured, and it paints a picture of the entire scene. Although it makes me sad for Ginny, it is also a comfort that she is happy and whole again with Harry. The last line perfectly sums the whole poem up, bringing together every emotion. The issue of suicide can be a very difficult subject to write, but the poem flows beautifully. I am very impressed.

Author's Response: thanks

Shame by roman_soldier

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Lily Evans still hasn't forgiven herself for the famous lake incident of fifth year. Can she find a way to repair the damage and allow herself be won over by the love of her life?
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 06/04/06 Title: Chapter 1: Rediscovering Old Emotions

An interesting take on the Lily/James realationship. I liked that Lily already has feelings for James, as the whole 'I hate him... Oh, no, I don't!' bit kid of annoys me sometimes. The N.E.W.T-banter between Liz and Lily was very cute. On the whole, an excellent standard - well written and a great introduction to your fic. Good job!

Author's Response: I agree. I don\'t think anyone changes their mind that quickly. Maybe I\'m just a little cynical about the whole \'love at first sight\' thing. Thank you for your review, it was very appreciated!

This is Where by Gemma Hawk

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Narcissa returns to an Island of her childhood to say goodbye one last time before she surrenders to the Aurors.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 07/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

You know what they say - quality not quantity. I much prefer short, beautiful pieces such as this one, to over-long fics that make me yawn.

I so enjoyed seeing everything from Narcissa's POV, especially her relationship with her sister and her memories of the beach. You managed to paint a picture of her life in... less than 1100 words. And that is no mean feat, I tell you.

I absolutely adore the last three lines. I have an addiction to finishing pieces of writing with simple lines, and I love seeing someone else do it, too. And do it so well.

The transition from the long descriptions of her memories to merely a simple summary of them really gave a feel of her urgency, and the fact that she doesn't have a lot of time left.

Okay, to be honest, I thought it was wonderful. There is nothing that I dislike, so if you wanted constructive criticism, then... I got nothing. Sorry. Even my desperate nit-picking has abandoned me. You have written a simply gorgeous fic.

Author's Response: Kate! *tackles* I heart you to death! Thank you sooo much for the review. I\'m not into long stories either, to tell you the truth! I\'m more into small character studies such as this one! I\'m glad you like it short, I was a bit worried that I didn\'t have enough. :) Thanks!

Buying Day by Gemma Hawk

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Third Place in the One-Shot Challenge-Owls!

Have you ever wondered what exactly happened the day Hedwig was bought? All the books offer are a few lines. But find out what really happened- from Hedwigs point of view, that is.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 07/12/06 Title: Chapter 1: Oneshot

Hi, I'm back again!


You know, I'm not surprised that this piece won third place. It's certainly interesting, and I enjoyed it immensely.

I would say the strongest aspect of your fic was the way each owl had a distinct and individual personality. I liked that Hedwig was disdainful and sarcastic (how I always imagined her), and I'm actually rather fond of her 'cage-mate' too. Poor thing; I hope he was bought eventually.

Also, very well written. I couldn't find any mistakes, other than that you are missing a period (.), at the end of this sentence:

“Yes, definitely!” he said

But you did a lovely job with, I imagine, a tricky subject.

Author's Response: Kate! *extremehuggling* Eep! Missing period! This is why I should get a beta... Owls should have personalities too! I\'m a big fan of giving animals personalities. Thanks, dear, for a lovely review!

Bound by lily_evans34

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Hedwig reflects upon her life, and her relatioship with Harry. Written for the One Shot Owls challenge by lily_evans34 of Ravenclaw.
Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 07/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Bound

Oh, how beautiful! This was such a wonderful insight into Hedwig's thoughts.

I love that the changes in Harry were told through Hedwig's eyes. It is a logical way to do so, too, as she is possibly the creature that sees most of his private side. And the way that she pities him (and humans in general) for the fact that they cannot fly away. They cannot move on.

This fic takes us through Hedwig's views of Harry, and her views of her own situation, onto the realisation that she too is bound. Honestly, such an inspired piece of writing! And the fact that it is love itself that traps her - I absolutely loved its irony.

This was moving, but without the darkness and angst that so often go hand-in-hand with moving pieces. Such a refreshing read!

Author's Response: Why thank you! That meant a lot to me! I think that you captured everything I was trying to say wonderfully! Like... perfectly! And yes, I quite liked the irony of the fact that she was talking about how she could leave, but that she was trapped not by a physical restraint, but an emotional one. Thanks for the marvelous review! It made me happy! :) <--Happiness

Black Raindrops by Periwinkle

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: She can stare, talk, and think but she cannot feel. She can hear, taste, and smell but she cannot feel. She wants to feel. She wants to feel pain or sadness or hurt, something other than her one emotion. She can only hate.

Reviewer: ms weasley Signed
Date: 08/07/06 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

Only three reviews? Well, we’ll have to do something about that now, won’t we?

She stares out the window at the rain spilling down it, the drops gliding smoothly off the glass.

This is the perfect sentence to start with. I always think that the first sentence is the most important, and it truly is. From this one line, I could tell that I would enjoy this piece - very dark, but your language makes it beautiful. The use of the present tense is an excellent way of creating a sense of Ginny's mood. I always think that the present tense (without use of names) seems cold and impersonal, which works perfectly for this particular fic.

They symbolize so much, all her efforts that have gone to waste.

This sentence interests me. Her 'efforts' to be with him? I like the imagery that it invokes. In my mind, I can see raindrops washing away her happiness in being with Harry. The only thing I would say is that instead of the comma in the middle of the sentence, I would have used a hyphen. Otherwise, it doesn't seem to read right. But that may just be me.

She watches the sky crying and wants to do the same, but the tears will not come. They stay locked up behind her eyelids, always on the verge of falling, though they never do.

How perfect. I completely adore this part, since it seems to really hit the spot. That’s a very realistic interpretation of how some people feel when unhappy. You just want the pain to stop – to get it over with – but it isn’t nearly as easy as that.

She sits staring out that forsaken window, watching the rain pour in rivulets down the glass and wonders if things will ever return to what they were before.

Once again, a lovely sentence. I think that what makes this piece so strong is your wonderful description and imagery. I’ve seen the ‘rain falling’ scenario, as relates to Harry/Ginny used a fair few times, and I’m happy to say that you have pulled it off spectacularly.

She cannot remember anything before this present moment, even if she tried.

A small nitpick here – your tenses are inconsistent. ‘Tried’ should be ‘tries’.

She wants to feel. She wants to feel pain or sadness or hurt, something other than her one emotion. She can only hate.

Perhaps the strongest part of your drabble – with a very strong emotion to go with it. It startled me. I was so sure that this was going to be a piece about Ginny’s loneliness and unhappiness. But no. You’ve provided some wonderful originality.

Sometimes they make That Face. The eyebrows rise and their eyes soften while they tilt their head to one side. She moves away because she doesn't want to see That Face anymore.

Goodness – how completely spot on. Your capitalisation of ‘That Face’ makes it all the more realistic. Just how I imagined it. When you’re really, really down, you don’t want sympathy, do you?

She likes to look at the sun during the day. She does not listen to their warnings about her eyes going blind.

I like this idea, because it is very fitting with the way that Ginny no longer cares. But for some reason, the second sentence doesn’t sound quite right to me. It’s probably just my pickiness kicking in, but I think that either someone goes blind, or they damage their eyes.

But when he left her, she started to wear black.

I won’t quote the entire paragraph here, but once again I applaud you for your use of imagery. It’s quite fantastic. The use of colours red and black to contrast. And also, something that jumps out at me is that you used red as a colour symbolic of happiness and comfort. Very different from other authors. I like it.

Your ending is simply gorgeous, summing up everything, but without repeating it all, which I think is a mistake that authors quite often make. Above all, I adore your title, which is quite fitting for the piece, and yet is never directly mentioned in the text.

Well. Ahem. I think I have waffled on for quite long enough now that I have completely picked your wonderful fic apart. But I do feel it deserved a lovely long review, since many people overlook Dark/Angsty for Humour. And this is a stunning piece – quite worthy of a thousand reviews.

In other words: I love it.

Author's Response: Kate dearest, you\'ve got me speechless, staring at your beyond amazing review and loving you like crazy. And squeeing. You can\'t forget the squeeing. *huggles madly*

All those wonderful comments! It\'s nice to hear that this story differs from others\'; it would have been a shame if it related somewhat.

Above all, I adore your title, which is quite fitting for the piece, and yet is never directly mentioned in the text.

That\'s rather interesting. I was going to include it in the story, but decided not to. Now I\'m glad I didn\'t because that would have messed it up, lol.

You are absolute love, Kate! Thank you so so much for your review! It means a lot to me! *huggles again* =)