I no longer write fanfiction, and this account will not be updated. For the time being, I have decided to leave my stories online. Thanks for your interest, and have a lovely day!
That was very, very good! I've always liked the idea of Snape liking Lily. At first I had thought it was Draco/Ginny and then about half-way through I thought, "hmm..maybe it's Severus/Lily," and then I'm like, "No, definitely Draco/Ginny." Ha ha, you definitely kept me guessing till the end. Great fic. :)
Absolutely fabulous! Although we all know Remus did turn out okay, I was on the edge of my seat the entire time! Excellent, Excellent, Excellent! This is positively one of the best fanfics I've ever read. :)
That was hilarious! I loved it! I don't really know what else to say other than "ha ha ha!" Sorry, I usually try to give better reviews, but I'm laughing too hard to think. :)
3.) Bewitch a herd of llamas to follow her around all day (wow, that was random…) 5.) Haha…..llamas….. You have no idea how hard I laughed at that. Honestly, I practically fell off my chair laughing. Llamas....ha ha ha.... Anyways, not exactly how I imagine Hermione's personality, but it was so funny, and these ARE her secret thoughts...who KNOWS what goes on the brain of a genius? (certainly not me...) 10 because it was SO funny. I'm off to read the other chapters...ha ha...llamas...
This was beautiful. Really, you have a wonderful way with words. I loved the way the reader got a sense of everyday life going on around Lily, but you still had the sad mood portrayed in your writing. Also, I loved the way you wrote in the bracelet throughout the whole story, sort of metaphorically following her around. In short (to cut to the chase after all my gibbergabber), this was a beautiful story. It made me smile. Congratulations! You made me smile on a Monday! :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much, you made me smile on a Monday (and one after NINE hours of babysitting at that)! You're just wonderful.
Haha -- poor Peter. :P Wait, did I just say that? What's gotten into me? e_e Anyways, I love this story. It amused me immensely. More! More, I cry, more! Update soon, please, or I might just go crazy. :)
Hello. :) I read this a while ago, but I have just now gotten a chance to review. This is very good so far! The only thing I can really think of on the constructive critisism mode is that your point of view (third person omnicient, yes?) can be a little confusing in some areas. Just because, really, when you have several people's thoughts (ie Lily, James, Shay) right after one another, it can be kind of confusing.
But it's a great story so far! I liked it a lot. :) Tehe, Shay will use her wonderful persuasion to convince Lily of her love for the fabulous James Potter. *dances*
Author's Response: ahaha yes dance the night away! thank you for being my beta!:)*gives thumbs up* yes, i need to work on my POV i think..maybe just be more clear..hmm we shall see...
This was a cute story! I love James...he's so cute in his wonderfully arrogant way...;) Anyways, great fic so far! The tripping thing made me smile. xD Update? :D
James is so mean!!
'Do you believe in magic?’ Suddenly Lily pulled away and said in a disgusted voice ‘Ew! You’re not going to kiss me are you?’
That was funny ^__^
I think Lily's reaction might have been a little more shocked, and disbelieving, but it was good. :)
Author's Response: i think that Lily probably was one of those people who is open to any opinion, so James beleiving in magic is fine for her
Even when you rumple your hair.
I hate that I’ve come to expect,
That life without you I can’t bear.
(Inspired by Kat's poem in 10 Things I Hate About You )
This was so adorable. I loved the poems! I'm adding this to my favorites :)
Oh dear smurf, Peter is rather annoying, isn't he? Poor Ron, he's so oblivious. He needs to TELL her...lol. ;)
Cute so far! Peter reminded me of Justin Finch-Fletchy in the second book. And...VOLDEMORT. Oh dear, is Peter Voldemort reincarnated? ha ha... that would be interesting. ;)
Author's Response: Ron is pretty obvious, and he really needs to tell her. Yes. ;) Thank you very much for reviewing!
Author's Response: About Peter: I think that he could be much like Tom Riddle in LOOKS. I didn't realize that I had made Peter almost exactly like Tom (in his LOOKS, don't forget that!) before I finished first chapter...
Hello! It's a good first chapter! Very cute. I liked how both Ron and Hermione were arguing with themselves. I can't wait to read the other chapters, but alas, I have to go and do dreadful homework. Happy trails
Author's Response: i'm glad you liked the first chapter...please come back for more...hope the homework works out ok =)
I thought it was a lovely first chapter. Your descriptions of the thunderstorm were splendid, I felt as thought I was sitting in one right as I read it, thought it's bright and sunny here.
A description of the children would've been nice. I'm not sure how to picture Maggie. Does she have her mother's red hair, or Harry's? DId she get Harry's green eyes, or Ginny's?
I also quite liked how you portrayed Harry. His character is quiet, and somewhat mysterious. Knowing the back story and that he must've by now defeated Voldemort makes this all very interesting.
I was alittle surprised by the first day of school coming so quickly, I hadn't expected it. As I think someone else mentioned, you might want to talk about it a bit more and make it clear that it is the night before she goes to school.
All in all, I thought it was great, and I can't wait to read more. :)
Author's Response: Thanks, I wrote it in a thunderstorm and I'm glad I was able to capture that. I did say that James resembled his father but I'll try and include more in the next chapter. Maggie has red hair in hazel eyes. Anyway, thanks for the review, I'm so glad you liked it.
You only have one review for this? I can't believe it, this was excellent! I thoroughly enjoyed it. You wrote Harry excellently, and I thought you captured Petunia wonderfully. I really liked the comment about Harry looking like James father; it makes us think she might've known him better than she lets on. Superbly structured and wonderfully written, I'm adding this to my favorites. :)
For all of you who wanted an update, I have a proposition. You may or may not like it, but it's all I can offer.
Check review challenge for the last chapter. details there!
James and Lily Potter were possibly the most famous parents in wizarding history. We know alot about their adult life, but what do we really know about their childhood? Even Harry never knew about the Drama, jealousy, danger, friendships, happiness, sadness, resentment,confusion and love that his parents went through as children. Here, their lives, from when the two of them were eleven to when they were brutally murdered at only 21, is recorded. Lily and James Potter were unsung heros. This is their story.
Hello! i just finished Chapter One of your story, and I thought I'd give a review. I liked it! Nice cliffhanger, there. (Cliffhangers rock ^_-) I thought it was a lovely first character, and I liked how Lily and James don't hate each other right now, and Lily even seems to have a little crush on him. It's cute! One thing, though: You spelled "Beggining" wrong in the chapter title. It's spelled "Beginning."
Other than that, excellent story, and I'm going to go read the next chapters. :)
Author's Response: Wow, thankyou for your reviews, btw, I luv your stories!! Thanks for your tip on the chapter name, I changed that right away, i didn't even realise! And I'm supposed to be a good speller, I should be ashamed of myself, just joking. OMG, your like the first person to actually like cliffies, most of the time i have just seen people get hate-reviews for them lol! Thanks again, keep reading and writing!!
Janet Ross was my french instructor's name. *giggle*
Anyway, this was really cute. I like how Lily and James still fight though they're engaged. And James's rambling about Sirius...that was cute. ^__^
Author's Response: no way! : ) anyway thanks so much! I am honoured to have a review (and positive, too!) from you when I myself simply LOVE your stories!!! THANKS!!
Hello! I thought this was a really cute chapter! The scene with the first years at the end was adorable. "I think he likes her." Hehe. ^__^ Very cute. I applaud! :)
I enjoyed this very much. :) I really liked how you described Lily. Brava! :D
Author's Response: Grazie mille! ;)