IT WAS SNAPE! I'd bet all my galleons it was him! The greasy slimeball!... ooh! a quidditch match! must... watch... quidditch! update soon!
(AU Fic) Two twins named Remus and Rachael Lupin have been inseperable for the eight years they've been on this Earth. But one fateful trip into the forest has changed all of that.
Excerpt from Chapter Twenty Three - A Second Chance
Professor Lupin walked over and sat down at the foot of his daughter’s bed.
“How are you?” he asked, watching his daughter carefully.
“Fine,” she answered, although she could have been better.
“How could you-,”
“Please dad,” Rachael cut him off. “Sirius already gave me the ‘how could you’ lecture.” Professor Lupin smiled.
“Did he now?”
“Yes and he got through to me pretty well.”
“Good, I just hope you know never to do something like that again.”
“I’m not going to, Mum’s not worth it.” Professor Lupin clicked his tongue.
“You can’t say that,” he said quietly, getting up and heading for the door. “Everyone deserves a chance to change. Just as you tried to prove that to your mother, one day she’s going to prove it to you. Everyone deserves a second chance.”
*Warning, some mental abuse and later a little physical, nothing terribly bad, just a warning*
Nominated for 2006, 2008, 2009 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Dark/Angsty Fic
oooh! first review! EVIL MRS. LUPIN! EVIL! EVIL! EVIL! omg i HATE her! she must DIE??? why does she hate Rachel so much to abondone her???????
what the??? only one chapter??? o well... update soon! its cruel that the mother favors Remus... i hope she DIES (just kidding)
wut was Remus' and Rachel father forced to do??? *rereads chapter*
"Love is unexplainable. There are no words for it. You can’t express why you feel so. It just happens," James said. "“Don’t you think that if I had the choice I would have chosen to love someone who didn’t hate me in return?”
“No,” Sirius said simply.
“You’re right.” James said, sighing. “I’m so screwed up, Padfoot.”
The drama-filled romantic tale of Lily and James's mysterious but unfortunate tale. It started with love and ended with death. It makes you wonder about the things they tried to live for. Pre-HBP
why did everyhting suddenly become quiet??? oooh... voldemorts is SO scary! he scares me! *ahem ahem* i mean... he DOESN'T scare me. he's just a little... different...
argh! peter must DIE! he must BURN in he... *cough cough* in a certain underground, fire-ry, burning, and rather unpleasent place. *muh-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha!* i hate peter pettigrew. he's so dumb.
AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH! SNAPE!!!!!!!!!! SNAPE!!!!!!!!!! NOW I KNOW *TWO* PEOPLE WHO MUST DIE AND BURN IN HE...... well you know what i mean.
Author's Response: oh, if only dreams did come true..
It started out nicely. Harry’s lines were in character (I could see him saying what he did), and the lyrics were well chosen.
I do feel it could be elaborated. Why were they fighting about Sirius? Harry just said a simple “We had another row yesterday.” Emphasize on that! Isn’t this argument the reason Harry feels how he feels and the base of the entire one-shot? You need a flashback or another way of explaining to the reader this argument.
Another thing you could add to make this fic a tad bit longer and deeper is to give the reader full knowledge of how Harry feels. The entire fic is basically dialogue and dialogue alone can’t explain the whole story while the lyrics of the song can’t explain all the emotions.
Don’t take this the wrong way; your dialogue was excellent. It’s just missing description and action to back it up.
*dramatic music plays in background* dun dun dun! good! harry wants his old life back! FINALLY! god i wanna smack ron with a beater's bat so hard! and ginny/alice cuzz she is a @#$%.
Summary: The Hogwarts Express brings mystery and mischief in the Marauders' seventh and final year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. James, Sirius, Remus, and Peter are facing a year of N.E.W.T.s, romance, intrigue, and, of course, a little mischief-making. There are plot twists galore! James (in the midst of saving the world) continues desperately to try to woo the incorrigible Lily Evans. Sirius deals with family problems while dealing with his incredible popularity and good looks (the horror!). Remus is provided with a backdoor to avoiding the prejudices of the inevitable real world, but at what cost? (dun-dun-dun) And Peter...well, Peter gets himself a girlfriend (but don't worry: it doesn't affect his hero-worshipping of James...or DOES IT?!)
wow... that was the longest chapter i have ever seen in my entire time on mugglenet... but its gret anyway! ha ha, i wished snape had died...
Author's Response: HA! sirius: so do we all... remus: sirius!
wow, that was the shortest chapter i have ever read in my entire life... o well, MAKE IT LONGER! I know you have something good going on so PLEASE strech it out!
Author's Response: wait till u get to chapter 14..... no does 7000 words sound long to you?
OMG ITS STILL SHORT! MAKE IT BIGGER OR I WILL HEX YOU!
Author's Response: hehe read my other authors response
i closed my eyes while reading half of the chapter because i was so freakin' sad! please have your nxt chapters be less miserable... please? 9/10 because i only read half of it
Author's Response: Aw, thankyou! Don't worry, the next chapter is happier than this one ... but I'll warn you now, this is not a happy story! Obviously I don't want to give much away, but there's going to be quite a few deaths in the later chapters...unfortunately Voldemort doesn't really stop to consider the feelings of others (Very rude of him, don't you think?!)
*growls menacingly* grrr... poor evans family. waht about petunia, will she go to st. mundgo's? lily's mom died in a mall... that's new...
Author's Response: lol it was about the least cliched thing I could come up with! Fortunately...oops, I mean unfortunately...Petunia's a muggle so not allowed into St. Mungo's - the hospital made a special exception for Lily's parents but will not let any more muggles inside. Which is very good, cos I don't think poor Lils could have coped with an annoying sister at the same time!
I LOVE this story! PLEASE ADD MORE CHAPTERs SOON! I'm DYING here! awww... James looks so CUTE in Quidditch robes. I love that line. *laughs evilly*
Summary: Lily Evans and James Potter agreed on only one thing since they first met: they'll always hate each other. But after five years, James begins to see things, to see her, differently, and wants another chance. But Lily is one stubborn girl. Can he convince her that his feelings are real? Meanwhile, the pair is thrust into many different dangerous and humorous situations with their friends. Will it take a disaster to help Lily believe in true love? Or will a tragedy just push her farther away? How many times does James have to try before he stops messing up? Follows with the information provided by JKR, with some fun along the way.
over already???? wow today must be short chapter day.
hahaha... i like magining young Remus baning his forehead against the wooden table. hee hee. *cracks up again* hahaha james acted really stupid/arrogant! so FUNNY! haha update soon!
ARGH! WHO IS IT? UPDATE SOON OR IM GONNA DIE AND HAUNT UR NIGHTMARES! WHY DO I HAVE TO WAIT FOR EVERYTHING? *screams inside* *grabs brown hair and tugs hard, but not harden enough to pull it all out* *don't leave me hanging, in a city so dead, held up so high on such a breakable thread (my happy ending- avril lavigne)*
oooh... conflict with Slytherins, i like... really nice story! this one, i acctually read the whole thing!
ha ha ha "bloody americans" i liked the line. it was such a good mix of what i thought and british...