Well well... What could I tell you about me?
I'm 27 years old, I live in Canada.
For as long as I can remember, I've always loved reading and writing; it's been a part of my life since forever! Books have always been there for me to help me get through difficult times, as a way to ease my mind and forget about my problems.
I wrote many fics in French, but on another subject, and now I'm having a great time writing about Harry Potter. I hope I'll be able to communicate to you my passion for fanfictions!
All of my stories, in order of publication:
Eye Contact - A one-shot from Sirius' point of view
The Perfect Time of Year - A glipse at the Weasley family on Christmas Eve
A Thirst To Prove Her Worth - My first Gauntlet entry from Ginny's perspective, in the Department of Mysteries
To His Muse: A Wizarding Tale Of A Desperate Housewife - My second Gauntlet entry, co-written with MrsMcclnt, Gilderoy Lockhart/Molly Weasley pairing
The Second Waltz - George Weasley/Angelina Johnson pairing, at a ball on New Year's Eve
A Solution To Everything - A night with Andromeda Tonks and young Teddy Lupin
Fight With Me - My new chaptered fiction, George Weasley/OC
This is such a beautiful story! Very touching at first, because it teaches us a lot about grief and how children can be touched by death, and how they understand more than we think about how life works... It was light and profound at the same time, because we looked through the eyes of a child, who had so much to discover about life.
I liked your point of view about Luna and the fact that she's maybe not as much disconnected from life as we think she is. She's, to the contrary, so in sink with the elements surrounding her. Good idea to use meditation to help her go through her pain and her loss. It fitted with her character perfectly. It kind of showed us how she developped her good nature.
I'm really trying to find something constructive to say, but I honestly can't. Though, I spotted this sentence, and I have a little nitpick...
At the time Luna found it insulting that her mother did not trust her around her potions, but eventually she grew to understand that this was something all mothers do.
I'm not so good with commas, but I believe there should be one after "At the time", and another one after "eventually". (In French, they should be put there anyway... :P)
So I'll wrap this up and tell you again that I really liked your story. You did a wonderful job with Luna and her family! :)
Author's Response: Awww thanks Viv. Ack me and commas don't mix well either. Appreciate it though! -Avery
First of all, I have to say good work! You and I seem to have the same vision of Bellatrix, because the way you described her is exactly how I picture her to be. Ready to do anything to please Voldemort, to give everything so he can value her, and in a way, give up a part of her dignity. Though I don't think she cared, or at least, she wasn't totally aware of it. How you can be that devoted to somebody, that, I'll never understand... but you showed well how obsessed she was about him.
The warm flesh of the woman’s exposed arms felt alive in her hands. However, the opposite was what she should have felt. Electricity pulsed through her fingers and up her arms, electrifying her senses and contorting the images in front of her eyes.
I love that part, mostly because it shocked me to think that she could enjoy killing someone that much, right from her first murder. (and the shock is a good thing, because you made me react) It felt like you were describing someone who was on a drug high. I could almost feel the adrenaline running through her body. That was brilliant!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks Viv! The story actually got rejected the first time through for that line >.<, but then I just sent it again and a different modly approved it! I am very fond of that line as well, though. Thankies for the review and I am supper glad you liked my Bellatrix. I loved writing her.
This was written by harry4lif of Ravenclaw and BE Evans of Hufflepuff for the August Interhouse Co-op Challenge.
I usually don't read much about the Marauders, but this was a nice little one-shot. I liked Seth's character, even if we only see him for a brief moment; how he was ready to risk his own life so he could see the people he loved again was touching. And it felt, with the ending, as if he almost knew how it would end up for him, with this quote he wrote for Lily. Nice quote by the way.
I would've liked to see a little bit more of the Marauders though, to see them react to their friend's death. We each react diffently to a loss, some are angry, others are in denial, etc. James and company sure seemed sad, but showing us how they were affected by the situation could've probably bring more depth to the plot. Of course I understand that the story was more centered around Lily's emotions, and I think you portrayed her well, though I was expecting her to react more "violently" when she was told her friend was dead (knowing her temper).
I spotted a little mistake here: The truth was hard to face, though not as hard as it was going to be to be around the Marauders again. You're repeating the words "to be" twice...
Other than that, I did enjoy your story, it was touching and well written. I think you did both a good job! :)
Here I am, finally reviewing! This is a lovely story my dear. I liked how you portrayed Andromeda and how hard it was for her to get through the holidays without the two people she loved the most. I felt really sad for her, but even though she was desperate, you still showed her as a tough woman inside and that's what I like about her character (well, that's how I imagine her to be anyway). At least, she realised she still had someone by her side, Teddy, and even Harry! That was cute what you did with Teddy's hair, changing color all the time!
I liked the ending too. I felt better for her when she discovered Narcissa's note. It's true that sometimes, there is more hope than we think...
If I can just mention something, I'm not so sure about your time frame though. If it was Teddy's first Christmas, I'm not so sure Harry and Ginny would already be living together. I mean, Ginny would only be 17 years old and still at Hogwarts for her 7th year. So that seems a bit young for her to leave the Burrow. But that's just my opinion. You put her in your fic, that's already something in itself! :P I'm sure there are some nitpicks I could do, I saw some commas to add here and there, but I'm not an expert in that field! Anyway, you did a good job Ella Bella! Nice story!
Author's Response: *hugs Andromeda* I also always thought of her as tough. I think of all the Blacks that way, really. I don't know how else any of them would've survived their childhood.
Well, I've always liked the idea of Black sister reunion. I just hate that Andromeda ended up estranged from her sisters. It just feels so wrong to me...
And Ginny. See why I don't like her? She's even screwing up my simple fic. Sigh. I suppose she would still be in school. I really didn't think of that. The rest of them didn't finish, so I guess in my head, Ginny didn't either. Actually, I wouldn't rule out the idea that she didn'f finish, although Molly would probably have a lot to say on the matter. Harry, Ron and Hermione never had their last year, and after everything they went through, there's no way they'd be able to go back to school for a year. In some ways, I think Ginny is the same. It was a mistake. I didn't think of her being a year younger at the time, but I stilly think it sort of makes sense. I hope. As for her leaving the Burrow, I always figured that happened after her parents started to recover from the loss of Fred. Life would seem very uncertain and short to them. i don't think they'd want to waste it.
And the evil, commas. There may be a few errors in there. I try my best to get them out, but sometimes they get the better of me. I really think they're my weakest point in writing.
Anyway, thanks so much for the lovely review! *hugs*
Look who's here again! Just thought I'd let you know that I started to read that famous entry of yours, just as promised. I never would've thought Harry would try to play the match maker one day! But that made me smile. Shall we go see what Kingsley is up to next? I think we will! (and yes, I'm aware I'm talking about myself with the "we" thing...) :P
Author's Response: As long as you're aware, it's okay. And the next chapter is better. Wait til you get into the flashbacks I told you all about. :D
First, I have a confession to make: I was partial to this story from the moment I understood it was about an English queen. I love everything that relates to monarchy and kings and queens! (I'm a big fan of Eleanor of Aquitaine) So to me, you did a great job at describing the interaction between the queen and her chambermaid. I don't know much about Queen Katherine, but she seemed to me like a fair person, which made me like her. I also liked the insight you gave us on how important it was for Maria to not give away her secret and how everything could be destroyed with only one little suspiscion. Times must have been really hard for witches/wizards at the time...
Your dialogues are well written too. I like the tone you gave to the Queen, firm, royal, but still friendly. I think you captured well the way people used to talk back then, the little twists in the sentences and the expressions. It's when I read stories like yours that I notice I could never write something like this; I still many things to learn in English!
There's maybe one part where I got a little confused... As the queen continued to moan, Maria kept her back turned to the room and pulled out her wand.
“Smart girl,” she heard rasped from behind her.
Does this mean that the Queen knew about Maria real identity? Or did she just mean it was a smart move to close the door? It wasn't very clear to me... Other than that, I had a nitpick, but now I can't find it anymore, so I guess it wasn't very important. Hehe. :P So all I can say is great job my dear. I really enjoyed your story! Can't wait to read the sequel!
You know, even though these kind of fictions can make you feel a bit sad and depressed when you're done reading them, I do like them anyway. Stories about loosing a loved one and about grief are always very powerful, because if you've lost someone dear in your life, you can actually understand the character's pain. And that's exactly what happened for me when I read this. I've lost my best friend 6 years ago, and I couldn't help but feeling guilty for not being more there for her... Even though you know that you did everything you could, the feeling's still there.
And it's also true what Teddy says at the end: when the person's not there anymore, everything changes suddenly. Everything changes, but at the same time, life need to go on and you have to go back to "normal", even though you know it'll never be the same. That's kind of paradoxical when you think about it...
Anyway, I'll stop my reminiscence here, before I make you feel depressed! But your story made me think and it felt good to think about my friend. So I thank you for that. Very well written story, Hannah! :)
Louis Weasley had always assumed that the worst of his problems had been falling for someone he wasn't supposed to. This was, however, until that very someone turns up missing from one the biggest societal events of the century.
He was willing to break every rule and taboo to find her, but could he succeed where the entire might of the Ministry's Magical Law Enforcement Department failed?
Hey Jess! I wanted to say that I think this a great beginning! I like what you've done with Louis and Lucy so far. The flashbacks are done with taste, it's naive as romance between teeanagers can be and believable. It's nice to see that even if he's young, Louis is willing to do anything to find out what happened to Lucy.
And I like what Fleur told him in the first chapter, about the fact that it's not his responsability to fix the world. It's true that when you're younger, you want to save the world, change it for the better, because you haven't lived much... I thought that line of dialogue what great. Though, I have little corrections to make for these lines of dialogue. When Fleur says â€śQuâ€™est-ce que tu penses?â€ť, it should be "Ă€ quoi penses-tu?". And for â€śJe sais que tu sentis coupable de Lucy, mais tu es seulement un fils. Le monde nâ€™est pas tu responsabilitĂ© pour fixer.â€ť, it would sound better like this: "Je sais que tu te sens coupable pour Lucy, mais tu es seulement un homme." (though I would need to know exactly which word you used for "fils" in English...) "Ce n'est pas ta responsabilitĂ© d'arranger les choses."
Anyway, now I'm really wondering what happenned to Lucy, since they didn't find her after all this time! Good job!
This story was actually inspired by Soraya, and I suppose indirectly inspired her to write cousin pairings of her own, so for that reason, I'm proud of it. Also, I wanted to do something new with the NG kids that I haven't done before, so I made one of them a Squib. I read in a study somewhere that it was more likely that pure-blooded magical people were actually more likely to be Squibs than half-bloods due to heavy intermarriage in earlier days, so it makes it statistically possible and even probable that one of the Weasleys would be a Squib somewhere down the line.
Their youthful innocence, to me, is what makes their story so sad. They just don't *know* that the big bad world has a vendetta against their happiness sometimes. I wish their relationship didn't have such...inauspicious beginnings, but here's hoping that my brain box will produce something happier for them down the line.
As for the French...I blame my teacher, lol. We learned stiff, formal French in school, not an easier dialect. It does tend to seem overly-wordy. I will definitely work on fixing that soon.
Thank you for your visit, and *hugs*.
This is such a wonderful story! I love to read missing moments from the books like that. Dean and Ted must've felt so alone in those woods, especially on Christmas, and I think that you captured perfectly this state of loneliness. It's like they were seeking comfort in each other, like they were having a father and son's relationship. Yes, I was sad for them, but the way you told the story wasn't depressing or anything. It kind of made me feel warm inside when I finished reading it.
I like how you put so many details in there, about football and the little joke about the stables being full at that time of year. It's just small things, but to me, it's the little details that count!
Good job Carole!
Author's Response: Thanks, Viv. I was a little worried about this one because it's not an 'exciting' story, as such, but I wanted to write something that wasn't totally depressing for poor Ted and Dean. I also love football (Spurs are my team - ha ha) so wanted to include that in a story. I do see Ted and Dean becoming close when they're on the run and will explore it further when I get back to my other Dean story. (One day when I find my time turner). Thanks again for the review. ~Carole~
Hey Carole! May I say that your story was pretty lovely. Love at firt sight, what an interesting concept. I can't really say that I have experienced it in my life, but it must be incredible when you know just from one glance that you've found THE one person made for you. I just like how you portrait Fleur, who from the books (until HBP) had always left me the feeling of being vain and a bit snob.
If I can just point out something, about the way you translated the two French sentences at the beginning of the story, it doesn't sound quite right to me. For "Il arrive comme Ă§a pour nous, ma chĂ©rie", I would just change it to "Cela arrive comme Ă§a pour nous, ma chĂ©rie". And for "J'espĂ¨re qu'il sent la mĂŞme voie", it would be "J'espĂ¨re qu'il ressent la mĂŞme chose". That's the Quebecer speaking here, not the French girl, but still. :D Good job, dear!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. Hmm, I haven't really experience 'love at first sight' exactly, but there was a moment when I 'looked' at someone and yadayadayada - he's my husband now - ha. So although I'm not saying it was love immediately, there was a definite moment between us.
Thank you for the French help. I used an online translator and I know they're not 100% reliable but my French was sadly lacking at school. I know where to come from now on :-D
Thank you again for reviewing ~Carole~