Well well... What could I tell you about me?
I'm 27 years old, I live in Canada.
For as long as I can remember, I've always loved reading and writing; it's been a part of my life since forever! Books have always been there for me to help me get through difficult times, as a way to ease my mind and forget about my problems.
I wrote many fics in French, but on another subject, and now I'm having a great time writing about Harry Potter. I hope I'll be able to communicate to you my passion for fanfictions!
All of my stories, in order of publication:
Eye Contact - A one-shot from Sirius' point of view
The Perfect Time of Year - A glipse at the Weasley family on Christmas Eve
A Thirst To Prove Her Worth - My first Gauntlet entry from Ginny's perspective, in the Department of Mysteries
To His Muse: A Wizarding Tale Of A Desperate Housewife - My second Gauntlet entry, co-written with MrsMcclnt, Gilderoy Lockhart/Molly Weasley pairing
The Second Waltz - George Weasley/Angelina Johnson pairing, at a ball on New Year's Eve
A Solution To Everything - A night with Andromeda Tonks and young Teddy Lupin
Fight With Me - My new chaptered fiction, George Weasley/OC
I want answers too! What happened to the poor Malfoy? By the way, I really like your writing, it's fluid and nice to read. You've got an interesting story here, dear! I want more! And I'll get some with the next chapter, yeah! :p
Ah! Now that's even more interesting! Bellatrix comes in. Malfoy is indeed OOC, we're not used to see him act like that. But you did warn us! It's a bit weird, but I like the way you tell things. It's smooth and easy to read. Good job!
I'm having a fun time to picture Malfoy playing at a Muggle game. Actually, I have never read a AU fic before so I have to adjust a little bit. But you still have a good writing, a funny way to turn your sentences. And your dialogues are good too! Great story! I hope you'll update soon!
Author's Response: *huggles* Thanks for your insights, Viv. I know AU fics are an adjustment for those who are used to sricktly canon stories but I promise I will try to hold your attention the best I can. I\'ll answer any questions you have as well, just let me know! (I have this thing written already well into the 18th chapter, hehe. We\'re in for a long ride.)
Oh my God! You killed Draco! It's, of course, a logical thing to do for Voldemort, but still! The poor boy! Your idea for the challenge was pretty good! Giving a moment of peace to Draco before he has to face his faith and assume his actions was brilliant. You seem to know exactly what to do with Draco; the way he speaks to the bartender, we can feel his usual arrogance. I liked your descriptions too, this dessert Draco ate must be sooo good! :P
It's interesting to think that in the past, Dumbledore found himself completely lost too and came across the Green Dragon. Even great wizards have their moments of despair... Good job Nicole! You did justice to the challenge prompt! I'm giving you two thumbs up!
Author's Response: *giggles* Viv, if you are not a member of SPEW, you should give it a go. I loved your review! Thank you for your kind words. When I saw the first (two) sentences, it was like a South Park flashback, hehe. (OMG, they killed Kenny!) And yes, I was fairly certain that even though he comes off as all knowing, even the great Dumbledore must have had times where he just needed to think and gain insight from someone from the outside. As far as Draco, I have been trying desperately to write him as canon as possible for things like this so I am glad that he came off to you in that manner. Thank you for your lovely review! ~Nicole
Ahh Suzie! I'm trying to find the right word to define your story and yet the only one I can think of is beautiful. But you know, it's beautiful in a sad way, you read it and it grabs you deep inside. There are a lot of emotions involved and you communicate them well to the readers.
They understood that time was precious, time was short but communication and love were essential. They held on tight, afraid to let go and not wishing to let go.
I love the message you're sending, that love and hope are the best tools people have against hard times and darker days. We all need to hang on to something or someone...
The wind rattled the thin windowpanes ominously, as if pounding on the glass for entry. They had been wary for a few days now, jumpy as hell, turning at the slightest rustle, shivering with the slightest chill.
I like the beginning of your story, like if you're warning us that what we're about to read will be intense. It sets the mood right away. Also, it feels like even Mother Nature knows that an inner storm is raging inside the hearts of the characters. She accompanies them through the war.
I like the couple Remus/Tonks a lot and I think that you portrayed them justly. Even if we know that in canon, they didn't survive the war, this story reassures us that their love was strong and that they were in this together, no matter what could happen. Great job dear! :D
Such a beautiful story this is! I am very touched by what I just read, which makes it a bit difficult for me to organize my thoughts and write something solid for a review. I could relate a lot to Bill's thoughts and insecurities because of his scars. He knew they made him different, he could feel it, and people could see it and judge him because of it. People are often scared of what they don't know or don't understand and judge others as a defense mechanism. I know the feeling as I am a bit different from others, due to a health condition that I have, and people are, unfortunately, extremely quick to judge you, especially when they don't know you or don't know what you're going through. It hurts sometimes, mostly when you're younger and have to learn how to deal with the gaze of others on you, but you get used to the pain. But deep inside, you can't kid yourself; it always hurts a bit. So that's why I fully understand how hard it must've been for Bill to face his reality and why he couldn't explain to his wife what he was going through. The fear that she might, just like others, not be able to understand...
But I believe that love can be stronger than anything else, and that's why I really love your story. Because you showed us that when we bring down our intern walls and let others reach us, they can do a lot to help us. Bill knew it wouldn't be easy to open up to her, but he took the chance anyway. So I'm glad Fleur gave him another chance, that they gave themselves another chance. Because they're perfect for each other. And we all need somebody to lean on.
You have a nice writing style, it flows well and you make good descriptions too, especially when it comes to emotions. I forgot I was reading a story at some point, it was like I was simply spying on their life through the keyhole of their door house. Usually, I'm not fond of stories written in the first person and in the present tense, and that's what I was thinking when I started to read, but as it went I totally forgot that it was bothering me. So this means you did a great job! Bravo! :)
Oh my God! Frank is just so mean!!! How can he be so cruel with Cassie?? What Bella did has nothing to do with her, he can't put the blame on her! You have no idea how I hate Neville right now! And Harry too! Of course, Bella tortured Frank's grandparents to insanity and I guess I would hate her too being this situation, but the poor girl! I just want to hold her in my arms... Quick Hermione, show up and do something with this mess! (Who's her benefactor???)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Viv.
Yeah, Cassie is having a hard time. As for Frank, he\'s angry. Neville pushed him to be hateful. He\'s going to be nasty to anyone who has the gull to offer Bella even the slightest amount of compassion.
Hermione will be along soon, but there\'s not a whole lot she can do when no one wants help.
And I can\'t tell you who the benefactor is. That wouldn\'t be any fun.
Thanks again for the review.
*waves at Elle*
Here I am, finally! First of all, I want to say that I'm honored that you consider me as one of your friends. I'm touched, really. For the title, it's my pleasure dear! You did a good job with this chapter, so I'm even more happy that you named it Eye Contact. :)
This training the Ministry imposed to the Death Eaters is really cruel. It's totally typical for them to do so though. They always come up with "solutions" like that. It's like they don't think or something... Anyway! I mean, I can understand to a certain extend, when people suffer a lot, they want their assailant to experience the same pain as they did. But is it really the way to go here? Again, it's bringing themselves down to the level of those "criminals" they despise so much.
To look into Bella's eyes would've shocked me too, I'm pretty sure. But what happened to her aunt isn't Tonks fault; she did what she had to do, her job as an Auror. She didn't know they would torture Bella like that. And maybe Bella did deserve to be punished for her actions, but not that way. It's not a punishment anymore, it's... I can't even find the word! It's evil. That's it.
Anyway! Once again, I must say that I loooove your story! Each time, you make me go through many emotions it's insane. I'm really reacting here. But it's a good thing, don't worry!
Author's Response: *smiles* I\'m glad you liked it and I\'m thrilled that I did your title justice. Thanks again for letting my borrow it. It just fit the chapter so well.
The Ministry seems kind of insane to me. I don\'t know where they come up with their ideas. Wizards seem to think they\'re more evolved than Muggles, but Muggle society, for the most part, has outlawed the kind of treatment that is imposed on criminals in the wizarding world. I just can\'t imagine how they can do the things they do. That is part of the reason this story was born. To really show the disgusting lengths the Ministry could go to.
I agree that this is not Tonks\' fault. I think everyone realizes that--except Tonks. When this happened she was mourning the loss of her mother, who was upset that she had arrested Bella. It would only add to the guilt a normal person would have felt anyone. So no, it\'s not her fault, but I think it\'s perfectly reasonable for her to blame herself.
Did Bella deserve to pay for her actions? This is something that I personally have a problem with. And not just with my beloved Bella. Yes, I do think that the Death Eaters should be held accountable for lives that were lost. But then I look to the other side. Order Members would have committed murders as well, and to me, it seems that there is no punishment for them. I think a life is a life and if one side has to pay, they both should. No one should walk away from murder. But I also believe the situation should be taken into consideration. It was a war. These people were in a situation where they had to kill to survive. They\'re not evil. They shouldn\'t be thrown in Azkaban for the rest of their lives. There has to be another solution--besides the one I dreamed up for this story, which clearly is not a good solution.
Anyway, now that I\'m done ranting about the Wizarding legal system, I\'m really glad that you\'re enjoying my story. I\'m really having a lot of fun writing it. Thanks so much for leaving a review!
Ahh I told myself I would only review at the end of the next chapter, so I could leave a big one, but there's a sentence that I noticed in this chapter that showed exactly what I was thinking about Bella and her slave state.
She has done some horrible things, but she has suffered for them.
She did suffer a lot during 12 years and that's why I agree so much with Tonks. That's enough now. She's so helpless and destroyed that she can rest a bit now. And Harry and Neville should really put an end to their anger. I know, I know, it's more easy to say it than to do it. But, I believe it's time to turn the page. I have to admit that I'm a bit surprised by Harry's behavior; when Sirius died, yes he was really angry at Bellatrix, but we didn't see that anger so much in HBP. He kinda controlled it if I can say so. I see him as a fair guy. So maybe he would want revenge, but after all Bella went through, it should've been enough for him. Anyway, it's just a thought...
I'm going to the next chapter now! :D
Author's Response: *huggles Viv for another review*
Yes, Bella has suffered more than her fair share. I really do believe that most of her actions were not optional. She did what she had to do. You can only be punished for that for so long. She deserves to start over.
As for Harry, I actually disagree that his anger tamed in HBP. His anger towards Bella wasn\'t shown, but neither was Bella. His anger was directed at Severus and it was clear from the first few pages. He blamed Severus for Sirius\' death and I don\'t see any good reasoning behind it. Harry can be fair when it suits him. When it comes to Death Eaters, he is incapable of being fair. He can\'t see beyond his hatred. However, it is time for him to put that behind him. He just needs to realize that.
Thanks for another lovely review!
Wow. That must have been something for Bella to hear all the bad things she had done. Especially from Tonks' mouth. I can totally understand her fear of loosing Cassie's love and trust. It had to be done though, Cassie had to know everything. Here, I have to make a little comment about the way you wrote her reaction. Yes, she was sharp with Bella and that's a logical reaction, but I don't think that at her age, she would've got over it that fast. Okay, she's young, she doesn't analyse things the way adults do, she's more forgiving and everything. But I don't know... I feel like it would've made more sense to make her think about Bella's actions for a few days before saying that it was okay, that she still loved her aunt. But then again, she's just a child, she doesn't turn things upside down in her mind, she just goes with what she feels, with what her heart says.
Oh and I wanted to say: I just love Remus! :P Great chapter again! Can't wait to read the next one! I want to know to whom Remus sent an owl about Harry and Neville. I have my little idea though! ;)
Author's Response: *huggles Bella* It was hard for her. Tonks didn\'t really want her to be there when she saw how much it was hurting her, but Bella wanted to stay. She had a right to know what was happening. And, like you said, it had to be done. She couldn\'t go back to school not knowing, when we all know Neville would be very anxious to tell Frank.
About Cassie\'s quick forgiveness. I thought about this, too. I wasn\'t sure if she should forgive so quickly. But this is why I decided to go that way. She loves Bella beyond any form of reason. It would be very hard for her to hate Bella for any reason. Remus sat down with her, trying to make it okay for her. Cassie loves and trusts her father, and he was telling her what she wanted to hear. She was able to trust his words. Also, if Cassie had stayed upset with Bella for any length of time, it could have seriously harmed Bella in her condition. The story wasn\'t going that way, so it was best for her to forgive her. But yes, I understand where you\'re coming from on that one. :D
Actually, I have had fun writing Remus. This is the first story I have ever had him in. I didn\'t think I would enjoy writing his character, but so far it has been a blast.
And yes, in the next chapter you learn who Remus owled. I doubt you\'ll be surprised, but there are a few other twists in the chapter. ;)
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
I didn't review the previous chapter, so now I can comment both. First, I'm feeling exactly like Snape, my curiosity about the benefactor is growing! But I'm patient! Poor Hermione, I didn't think Harry would be mean like that with her, especially that they didn't see each other for a long time. Of course, it was predictable, he doesn't think he's doing something wrong, so to be told the contrary couldn't make him happy. But still. I'm sure Hermione is hurt too; Ron died after all, she can understand his pain. Let's hope she'll find a way to make him change his ways.
Again, tears touched Bella’s eyes. Her niece was so much like Andromeda. She had such a good heart. Her kindness put Bella to shame.
Tonks just impresses me more and more. She's so kind with Bella. It's good to see that it's not everybody who lost their minds after the war. Tonks is probably more like her mother than she thinks. It's funny Bella had this thought.
“No,” Bella cried before she could stop herself. Fear surged through her. She had just given her mistress an order. She could be killed for such insolence.
I think this is such a good way to show how inhuman and cruel the training was on the Death Eaters. A simple word and Bella thought Tonks would kill her. This is hard conditionning, it's insane. You have a way to make us understand how she feels, it's like I'm the one scared of being punished. You handle the characters so well by the way, everyone's in canon, maybe except for Neville and Harry, because we're not used to see them so mean. We know that inside they're kind persons. But again, like you're showing us, war can really change people and certainely not in the right way...
Again, good chapters my dear! I can't wait to read the next one!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Viv. I\'m really glad you liked it. I\'ve really enjoyed working on this story. Sorry, for the short response, but the review was really appreciated.
I knew it was her!!! I just knew it! So Draco escaped the Ministry... Interesting! Life's been cruel on him though, loosing his wife. At least, I'm happy that his son survived. Snape won't believe it when he'll learn that Narcissa is Hermione's benefactor. But I think she's doing the right thing. Bella needs her sister with her to help her recover. And I liked Snape's idea, how cute to buy Bella a little cat. :)
Just a little thing I was wondering... Did you meant Lucus or Lucius for the baby's name? Because in all the chapter, it's written Lucus... Other than that, I really liked the 2 chapters! Good dialogues between Hermione and Snape. I laughed when he answered her to get out more if she found his company enjoyable! Continue your good work and I shall contiue to review! ;)
Author's Response: *giggles* Yeah, you guessed right, but I didn\'t want to spoil it by telling you. :p
Draco\'s son\'s name is Lucus. I wanted it to be close to Lucius, but not idenitcal. Draco wanted to honor his father, but didn\'t feel right giving his son the identical name.
Anyway, thanks so much for the review. I\'m glad you enjoyed the chapter. :D
I just can't believe what I just read!!! 4 chapters in a row, that's a lot! That's such a strong story you got there, Elle, the subject is well chosen. We saw before how the Wizarding world reacted to the war, how it has affected the people, but to look at how they will go on witht their lives when everything is over is very interesting. Obstacles and ordeals can affect the mind in a way we can never completely imagine...
At first, when I saw the name Ella, I thought it was related to Bellatrix somehow, like she was her daughter, but you got me there! I just can't believe what she has become. She was proud and strong, and now she's just the shadow of what she used to be. I actually feel sad for her, even after all the terrible things she did while being a Death Eater. To be made a slave is a harsh punishment. But I'm not that surprised that Tonks "bought" her. I don't know why exactly, but she seems to me to be the type of person who would want to make things right, even if she has suffered a lot because of the Dark Lord.
And I was so shocked when Harry hit Bella! My God! She may be a slave, but he has no right to hit her. By doing that, he's bringing himself to the level of the people he actually despise.... He probably doesn't realize that though. I'm such a wise girl! :P
Elle, really, I love your story so far!! I can't wait to read the next chapter, especially with the title of it! ;)
Author's Response: *huggles Viv* *dances around happily* Thank you so much for the review.
Well, I have wondered what would happen to some of the characters when the war ended. With Dumbledore dead and Voldie likely to follow, there will be no leaders left to follow. That alone would be a strain for many of the characters. A lot of them have been through two wars of this now. And some of the younger characters haven\'t really known a world without this war. Then when you think about the losses that will be involved and the fact that the Minstry is very liable to do something irrational. Well, when you think about these things, a story like this born. :p
Bella\'s daughter, you\'re not the first to say that, actually. But no, I needed the real Bella. You know how attached to her I am. And, yes, it\'s sad what she has become. But as you said, she is strong.
As for Tonks, she is very much trying to make things right. Remember Bella is her aunt. Her mother would have loved her. Not to mention how much Cassie clearly adores her. And there may be another reason that will come to light very soon. :D
And yes, Harry\'s little hissy fit. You\'re the first to comment on it, actually. It was cruel. It was true that she wasn\'t allowed to speak. She belonged to Harry, and he gave her no liberties. She spoke only when given permission, but she was just trying to help Cassie. She knew Harry would punish her, and that was actually rather mild, but she wanted to offer Cassie whatever amount of comfort she could. She loved the girl and hated to see her so upset.
You are absoultly right, by the way. About Harry bringing himself down to the level of those he despises. That\'s just it. He and Neville have become like the Death Eaters. They thrive on hurting and punishing those they deem unworthy. They just need to see that.
Anyway, thank you so much for the compliments. I\'m glad you\'ve enjoyed it so far. As for the next chapter, I was going to pm you when it was validated. As promised, it has been dedicated to my dear friend, Viv. :D Again, thanks for the review and thanks for reading!
So cute!! That's the kind of story that I like, even if it's fluffy, because it always makes me feel good inside. Kind of goofy happy, you know! Hermione/Cedric is an unusual pairing and I wasn't sure if I could picture them together, but you made me like their couple a lot. Hermione deserves that kind of attention from a man, so I thought Cedric looked like a good husband for her. I didn't remember Cedric being that much of a charmer in book 4 though! Being Hermione, I would've been so annoyed by his paternalistic side! I'm a bit of a sucker for canon, so I don't usually read AU fics, but I really don't have anything "bad" to say about your story! (and I wanted to leave you a good-quality review, I think I missed the point... :P)
Anyway, overall, I liked it! Tiny bits of humour here and there made it even better, so I guess all I can say is good job!!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. I don't actually care for this pairing but as it was a request, I have to say that I tried my best to make it work. =] I'm glad that you enjoyed it. XD
Finally, I read the whole thing! I have to say that you handled all the obstacles very well. I particularly liked the dancing shoes part, as I didn't have this one to write in my Gauntlet. I think Bella had enough dancing for the rest of her life! :P Our brains seem somehow to work the same way, because I saw some things in there that were similar to what I've done in my own challenge. Not big parts, just little details, some thoughts Bella had that Ginny had too... I'm telling you, they're more alike than you think!
As always, you seem to know exactly what you're doing with Bella and it makes the whole thing even better. Except for one thing (and Anna mentionned it before me): the ending. I did like what you did with the last prompt, bringing back her father and cousins. *huggles Sirius* But -that's my but- I seriously doubt that Bella would just turn away from Voldemort like that. Maybe you don't think that she's crazy like that, which is being so devoted to her Lord, but in the books, she is an inconditional worshipper. You know that I'm an optimistic person, I tend to see the good side in everyone and I believe that Bella has some good left in her, but I think that it would take more than seeing her family again to make her change her mind completely about Voldy. Just a thought here though, we're in afree country and your story is still great! Nice actions scenes by the way, Bella really has some brain! :P Bravo!
Author's Response: :D I\'m glad you liked it. The dancing prompt was really fun. I\'m glad I got that one.
As for Bella and Ginny being alike. They have similar tempers and a similar lack of sense.
And, I know most people don\'t see Bella turning away from Voldie, but I just see her differently. She has always possessed a strong devotion. Before Voldie came along that must have been directed somewhere. I always believed it was at her family. That\'s why I believe they could be the ones to bring her back.
Anyway, thanks so much for the review.
Sarah, Sarah, Sarah!!! You finally did a one-shot with that wonderful drabble of yours! As I said to you before, this is just so good. I quite can't find the words to describe how I feel, it's just beautiful and touching. I can feel Draco's every emotion like if I was in his heart, because you describe the scene so well. We usually assume that Draco is insensible, but I can picture him being a very sensitive guy deep inside. But it's a bit sad that even in the middle of the night, he still cares about what others would say if they saw him with Hermione. Anyway, I'm in love with your story! You did an amazing job! :)
Author's Response: Viv!! *huggles* Thanks so much, for both this review and encouraging me to turn this into a one-shot. I owe you! Thanks so much!!
Ohh Anna! This is so good! What a good idea you had! Snape who hides a Horcrux without even knowing it! Brilliant! I liked all the parts of your Gauntlet, you handled the obstacles very well! The veil room was my favorite one, with Eileen. I can see Snape get emotional like that with his mother, he must have loved her for sure. But wasn't Snape's father a Muggle? Because Eileen said that Tobias would know dark spells too... but he can't do magic... Or maybe it's me who's confused. It just made me wonder. Also, I want to say that I think you have a nice writting style, it's refined and it felt to me like I was reading one of JKR's books! Really, you did a great job dear! :)
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! :D The veil room was my favorite to write, I\'m glad you liked it. And you\'re absolutely right, Tobias is a Muggle. When Eileen said that line, she meant that Tobias knew Severus could perform dark spells. Not that Tobias himself could perform them. Sorry that that wasn\'t made clear, I had thought it was. :l Anyway, thanks for such a lovely review, Viv! *huggles*
It's a good thing that you explained when and where this one-shot is taking place, because even though the story is really interesting, I have to admit that I was a bit lost while reading it. And I also had many questions forming in my mind, about Hermione's age and how this was possible. But now, I just know that I'll have to wait for the said chaptered fic to see my questions answered. I hope you know that you're torturing your readers Megan, by posting your story in disorder! I didn't read your other one-shot yet, but I intend to soon.
I've never read a Sirius/Hermione fic before, and I have to admit that yours is pretty good. Even though we don't see them interact that much, I can feel how intense their feelings are for each other, just by your descriptions, by the way they act and look at each other. I must say that it's what I noticed first in your writing, your descriptions. It made me feel like I was there, in the little office, watching them behave in front of my eyes. I could almost hear the thunder roar outside my own window, and the ticking of the clock was getting pretty annoying. At some points I was holding my breath from the intensity of your narration. I didn't want her to go either! Poor Sirius, he looked so devastated!
You know, your story reminds me of a book that I read a while ago, a series actually, written by Diana Gabaldon, I don't know if you read it. The main character, a woman, travels from time periods to another and meets the love of her life while she's aways from home. Even though you don't tell how Hermione manages to travel through time, I had flashes of that series in my head when she disappeared. I hope you'll post your WIP soon, because I want to know now how those two met! You seem to have a great plot! *gives two thumbs-up*
Sometimes it's a form of love just to talk to somebody that you have nothing in common with and still be fascinated by their presence.
On the edge of discovering a long lost document...
On the edge of the greatest adventure of their lives...
On the edge of finding themselves....
They would find each other...
In The Danger That Awaits.
Sirius Black is called for his first mission for the Order of the Phoenix, but he's going to need a little help. Racing Death Eaters on the search for a long lost ancient text, he not only finds himself in danger, but also falling in love.
This is The Marauding Cupcake and hermybabay82 of Gryffindor for the Gauntlet's sixth run.Second Place Winner in the Gauntlet’s Sixth Run!
Only one of the later chapters earns us the higher rating and we'll give you fair warning when it comes up. >.<
Wow! Gauntlet fics are always a bit special, are they? It was interesting to read your story, knowing that you had the same prompts as Marsha and I had, and then to discover how different was the path you took! I've written Sirius once before and he's a great character. I liked his cool attitude and the little remarks he would send to Marlene, just to make her blush, though I'm never sure how to picture him when he was younger and handsome. I didn't know we could use OCs for the Gauntlet! Marlene was definitely interesting and fun to "watch", if I may say so. She surely found out her extrovert side while working with Sirius. They were cute together.
That's so sad though that she died in those circumstances! Loved the epilogue, it was a good idea to reunite them for the next great adventure!
I think you did a great job with the prompts! There's maybe only one criticism that I have to make and it's about the task Sirius and Marlene were given. Even though they were attacked by Travers on the way, it felt like they didn't really encounter obstacles while they were searching for the text. I mean, if it was something very valuable and that could potentially be dangerous enough so that Dumbledore didn't want Voldemort to lay his hands on it, it should've been more difficult for them to get it. I know you mentionned that spells were protecting the items, but it looked like they got rid of them effortlessly... and it kind of seemed too easy to be true. But then, maybe it's just me who was expecting a little more action. I enjoyed it though, you got a great contest story there! :)
This was my first Gauntlet, and I'm so glad it was!! I had the best time writing with Stacy and if you ever get the chance to do so, I highly recommend it! She's creative and is great with the volley of ideas - a true collaborator!
Marlene McKinnon isn't technically an OC. >.> She is mentioned, briefly, in OotP when Moody gives Harry the photo of the original Order. As a matter of fact, Moody's one quote in the story is taken from that scene; he tells Harry how she was killed. Other than that, she's all ours.
We really had so much more in mind with the task and retrieving the book, but the concern about sticking to the prompt - and the romance - got n the way! Action just seemed to take a back seat to the romance blooming... Ah, well. It was fun! >.<
You answered the question I had since the beginning of the story only at the end! So he did recognize her when he saw her thirteen years later! So she returned in her past that night, in Come back to me, and forgot about their encouter, but he stayed in his present and remembered her all this time... This is a bit confusing, I have to admit... But Sirius must be much more confused that I am anyway! :P I feel sad for him; he waited for her to come back for so long, and she never did... The waiting must have been a torture to him, poor thing.
Your descriptions, again, are incredible. You put so much details into your writing, you find different ways to talk about simple things, such as the darkness of the sky at night or a storm that's raging outside. It makes the readers clinge to your every word, make them want to get more and more of your beautiful writing style. I know that's what it does to me. Again, very good story, even if I'm now the one with questions about Hermione's and Sirius' relationship!