Wow... so One Last Golden Day won Runner-up for a Quicksilver Quill! Thanks so much to those that gave it a nomination. It's one of those stories I've always been rather proud of even if it didn't get alot of attention at the time I was posting it.
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NO!!!!!!!!! Sequel, SEQUEL!!!! Heather and Charlie should find a way to be together! Please?
Author's Response: Sorry, I\'m not much of a sequel person, but maybe a prequel ;)
This was a very sad story, probably more so for me because I can see this being a reality after book 7 finally comes out.
Ginny is a difficult character to write in these situations. It's hard to pin down the emotions she would be feeling, and how she would express them. For the most part, I think you did a fantastic job. The only emotion I didn't see conveyed that, in my mind, would be heavily present for Ginny at some point or another, was anger. It's a typical emotion in the process of grieving, especially when the death seemed senseless, like Harry falling after defeating Voldemort. Just my thoughts =)
I found a few typos, but I noticed your comment about not having the edits when this posted, so I won't point them out. Fantastic job!
Author's Response: \"This was a very sad story, probably more so for me because I can see this being a reality after book 7 finally comes out.\" <--That\'s really sad. I hope it doesn\'t end that way! *Writes JRK to ask to use as sequel* Lol, like THAT\'ll happen in this lifetime! And I get what you mean about her being angry. A lot of people go through anger when they mourn. And for the record, of all my fics, this is the most be-typod. Yay, I invented a word!
Haha, very funny, I look forward to round 3!!
That was a very powerful story, and very very sad! I think you captured Cedric beautifully, his voice and thoughts seemed right on to me. Picturing winning the tournament over and over in his mind, his thoughts just before he died, realizing what was coming and knowing there was nothing Harry could do to stop it. I loved his recognition of good and evil near the end, suddenly seeing Harry for what he really is (the savior of the wizarding world!), and urging him to hold on. I think the last paragraph was the saddest, with the imagery of fading into the darkness. *tear* I only found one mistake. Cedric says Harry is "writing" on the ground, and I think you meant "writhing." Once again, fantastic job!
Author's Response: No, I meant \'writing\'. He\'s writing a secret message ;) Lol, kidding, I\'ll be sure to fix that! I never have typos unless I use the wrong word in its place so that spellcheck doesn\'t pick it up! Anyway, I\'m glad that you liked this; I\'m quite proud of this piece. Thanks again for the nitpick! I\'m surprised that no one else found it...
Nice touch with the ten pin bowling thing. A very funny little addition on something that 99% of readers probably never noticed (myself included) *chuckles at Dumbledore's quirks*
I only saw one problem with this. The door to the room of requirement only appears if you walk past it three times, and it seemed like it appeared the moment Harry walked up in this story. Also, I always assumed that Harry had placed his book on top of the vanishing cabinet. I thought Jo made him choose that spot on purpose, as a way of showing us that the cabinet was there, so that we could think back later and say "Oh yea, clever Jo had it laid out for us all along..." Just what my brain assumed though =D Lovely writing as always, dear! Very creative idea for a missing moment.
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for reading this story! This is my little oddball, I think, but I like it. :) Thanks for pointing out a few things. I will definetly think about how I can get Harry to pace the hallway in front of the Room of Requirement. As for the cabinet, I thought there was a line about Harry walking by the Vanishing Cabinet, but I did not get the impression it was the same cabinet he hid the book in/on/next to. I don\'t have my book with me (I don\'t actually carry them with me all day, in spite of how attached I am, lol) but I will definetly check it out at home! I am curious! I am glad you enjoyed the story anyway - thank you for reading and reviewing!! ~Gina :) PS. Do you think he will get the book back and use it?? Just curious :)
I really liked how you slowly built to telling the reader who the narrator was. In the beginning it could have been anyone from Hogwarts (I actually thought of Hagrid upon reading the summary). As the story progressed it became clearer who was speaking, and the spacing out of this information was wonderful. I was a bit confused during the him, her part, though I can't think of any way of doing it better.
I think the best part of this one-shot is your portrayal of Slytherin. Most people make him out to be this evil, heartless person (kind of hard not to after learning about the Chamber of Secrets...), but you painted him in a very different light. You could see why he and Gryffindor might have been friends, so excellent job there! Also, the detail to imagery you used in the flashback where Slytherin first meets Gryffindor was beautiful =D Fantastic job!
Oh! I forgot to mention that you left me wanting more. I really wanted to get more details from their past, more on Slytherins thoughts. Maybe even a few more moments of their friendship before everything went south. You write the Founders very well! I'll have to see if you have written about them in other fics as well ;)
Haha, very clever! I really enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m so happy that everyone is enjoting it!!
Author's Response: :D Thanks very much!
Aw, sad chapter with Ginny and Harry, but thanks for not getting them back together. It won't happen right away in the book, and I'm glad you stuck to canon =)
Author's Response: I agree. I think it will take a lot longer for Harry to give Ginny that chance. And, I think she cares too much about him to try and force herself (or trick herself) upon him. They really have grown up by this time, haven\'t they...
Author's Response: P.S. I think the wedding may be some other couples\' debut night ;)
Hi Ozma333! Let me congratulate you on your first fanfic, and tell you it's really great so far! I'd love to read more chapters. Your writing style is a little similar to my own, I think, which makes reading this even more fun =)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I haven\'t read Harry Potter and the Dark Lord yet, but I plan to. Your story Senses is one of my favorites! Keep up the good work yourself, and thanks for the review!
Haha, Dudley pinching Hermione! PRICELESS!! Great job so far, keep writing!!
Author's Response: Ha Ha, I had a lot of fun with that scene! Thanks for the review!
I'm really loving this so far. The story is growing nicely, and the scene with Harry hiding on the couch was priceless. Keep up the beautiful work!
Author's Response: Thanks you so much! I loved writing that scene! One of my favorites! It was hard to find a way to have Harry (and subsequently us) view Ron and Hermione\'s first...eh...moment. I finally settled on this way, I glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the support!
I can't wait for the queue to be fixed so I can read more of your work. Very enjoyable, keep it up!
Author's Response: I know...stupid hackers...right! The next chapter is still with my beta but it is due back soon. I\'m glad you enjoyed it and thanks for sticking with the story!
I loved your descriptions in the first paragraph as Hegwig flies towards Hogwarts in the distance. Gave us a real birds eye view (pun intended) if you know what I mean ;)
Her descriptions of Harry's strength and bravery are great. It's true that Hedwig is rather displaced when things go wrong for Harry, so she might not really understand all the horrible things he's been through. But, being his faithful pet and friend, she can sense that something is wrong.
"And I realized that I, too, am bound. Not by the many cages that have held me, or by the fate I was born into. I was bound by love."
I loved that line. It was a fabulous way to end the piece, almost a heart-wrenching look into Hedwig's psyche. Poor thing, she really has had to deal with alot. Excellent story!
Author's Response: Thank you for all of your reviews! They mean a lot! And yes, poor Hedwig has so much on her mind! Thanks for the wonderful review!
Here is the story of Edward John Hoe, ex-Seeker of the English Quidditch team.
As a boy, I was an idiot. I am dropping my ego in saying this, because it is true. I was an idiot because I almost got taken in by Shirley. Shirley is the woman who almost ruined my life. But I didnít let her. I won our pathetic little contest in the end.
GO BADGERS!! That was great! You really captured his character well with the way you worded his thoughts and speech. I think we are the only two Hufflepuff's with stories right now, but I think we have a shot after reading yours ;)
Author's Response: Thank you, fellow badger!! Oh my, are there just 2 Puff entries? :( Oh, I really wish we had more! Good luck to you! :)
I really liked your description of Cedric's appearance in the beginning of the story. I could actually picture him in my mind, handsome and seemingly care-free. I thought the rest of the story was very interesting. You don't usually see this side of Cedric, unhappy and struggling internally, but you painted the scene really well. This creates a whole new sentiment when you consider what happens to him in just one years time. He dies without ever knowing true happiness. Without people reading his stories!!! There were a typos (like in the last paragraph it should be "he thought" instead of "he though") and one or two run-on sentences, but other than that it was lovely! Excellent work =)
Nice job for your first attempt! It did feel a little rushed, but timing and flow improve with experience, I think. Keep writing, you have a nice plot bunny in the making, and I'm curious to see where you take this =)
Author's Response: Thanks Griffinpuff!!! I really appreciate the review and all of your helpful advice. Chapter two is a bit boring, but it explains things and I\'ll try and update pretty fast with chapter three which will be more interesting!
Way to go, Chlgoe =D Keep writing, dear, it will just keep getting easier with every chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so very much, Gryffinpufgf! I really appreciate it! <3