Penname: megan_lupin [Contact]
Real name: Megan
Member Since: 11/26/04
Website: http://dark-princess17.livejournal.com
Beta-reader: Yes
Status: Member
Bio:
UPDATE:

22 July 2008: It's been quite a while since I've updated this, so I'm giving it a shot, trying to do it without all the banners/links. You can, however, see all of the banners for my stories by going to the profile for my LiveJournal community, fics_by_megan:

http://community.livejournal.com/fics_by_megan

There are the pretty banners made by the artists here on MNFF, as well as those made by the artists over on TDA, since I also post my stories on HPFF.

As of today, I have 40 stories posted on this account, and I don't plan on stopping anytime soon. (Even with starting university in a few months.) Another one-shot, as a matter of fact, is with betas right now.

Lately, I've fallen in love with reading and writing Sirius/Hermione stories, although of course, my current WIPs are still, definitely, being worked on.

~Megan

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Hello. The name is Megan, and the age is 19 (though I'll be 20 quite soon).

My Award-Winning Stories:

-- Thousands Say Farewell (Third)
-- Are You Brave Enough? (Second)
-- Fortune Favours the Brave (First)
-- Messages of Heart and Mind (Honourable Mention)
-- Recolitus Optimus (First)
-- Never Leave You (Second)
-- Adoris Integare (First)
-- Justify (Third)

My Upcoming/Planned Stories:

1) "Untitled": a chaptered fic, it'll be the largest part that tells the overal story that I have planned for Sirius and Hermione. Both "Come Back To Me" and "Watching Him Remember" are parts of this story, and there are hints in both of them about the overall mystery, but it's in this longer fic that everything will be told. [Expected Release: TBA]

2) "Once Upon a Time": a short story, this is another Sirius/Hermione story that's being planned out right now. It's written in response to a challenge given over on the HPFF forums. And of course, it will star Sirius Black and Hermione Granger. [Expected Release: TBA]

3) "Untitled": a short story, this is an idea that's been in my head for ages, though I haven't gone much further with it than dwelling on the basic plot. Will be an Alternate Universe fic, using canon up until around mid-OotP. Mainly starring Sirius Black and Lord Voldemort, with plenty of appearances by the other characters of the books. [Expected Release: TBA]

4) "Caught": a one-shot, it will be the sequel to "Brothers", and will basically pick up right where that one left off. Currently in the planning stages, and starring Sirius Black. [Expected Release: TBA]
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My Father's Path by the nutty imp
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Draco thought that his destiny and path to greatness lies in following his father's footsteps...

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1063 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/19/05 Updated: 09/19/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/18/05 Title: Chapter 1: September 2005 Monthly Challenge # 2

Really great, and the story really does a wonderful job getting into the mind and thoughts of Draco. Until HBP, he had always seemed like a slightly shallow character, but after that book, his characterization developed a lot, and we (the readers) were able to see just how conflicted he is. You did a wonderful job in portraying that aspect. Good job!

Also, I absolutely love your writing style in this --- having the whole thing done with dialogue. It's a very unique way to write something, but it's also so easy to cause the story to get confusing (knowing what character is currently speaking, for instance). However, your story did not cross that line, and for that, I applaud you :) .

I also really enjoyed the pieces of the poem that were interspersed (sp?) throughout the one-shot. I think it added and improved to the story, and was a wonderful way to show Draco's inner feelings and thoughts. Great job!

Normally, I'm commenting on typos or problems of a story that I found at this part of a review, but nothing jumps into my mind with your's. It truly was an excellent piece of writing, and definitely deserves a score of ten.

Signed,

Megan



Author's Response: Thanks Megan. I just thought this sort of style gives more in pace ... anyway given that this was written for the 'shattered glass' challenge - I thought that a poem would express it better.

Thanks for the review and glad to see that I didn't scare too many people away by writing in this poetry-dialogue style. :)

 

Death of the Unexpected Hero by WinkeeJR
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 18]

Summary: When he spoke, his voice was thin, weak, and hoarse. “You want to know where Harry Potter is?”


The paused wand hand lowered. A keen, eager expression washed over the ugly skull like face. “Yes,” he hissed fervently, triumphantly. Almost desperately.


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1446 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/20/05 Updated: 09/20/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/15/05 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Great job on this story! At first, I can honestly say that I hadn't expected the encounter to take place with Ron, but it was a pleasant surprise, and it really worked in the story.

You also did a wonderful job with keeping Ron in character --- His thoughts and statements were very realistic, and it was quite easy to picture Ron thinking and saying those things. Terrific job on that!

I particularly liked the ending paragraph of the story: He died the way he had wanted to die. He died without betraying the ones he cared for the most, the ones he loved, his family and friends. He died in silence and with dignity. He died the brave person he had always wanted to be and he died having had the last laugh. He also died a hero, (I really liked that phrase; :) because that was how the ones he left behind thought of him. He died to save them all, to allow Harry the time to discover the way to end it all. It was an excellent way to sort of "sum up" the feelings, and it expressed some definite "Gryffindor Bravery."

I'll also comment quickly that I loved the parts where Ron was thinking back to Hermione. (Again, very true to his character). And other than a few typos, this story had very few things wrong with it.

(Hope you don't mind slightly longer reviews.) Again, great job. This story deserves a definite score of 10.



Author's Response: Thank you!

 

I Am With You by RagingStorm71117
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Harry tries desperately to cope wth all the deatth he has seen. One-shot. I'm amazed I didn't cry when I wrote this... HBP spoilers.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2859 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/30/05 Updated: 09/30/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/14/05 Title: Chapter 1: One

Fabulous! This story was so sad; I actually got tears in my eyes (which is not an easy thing for a story to do.) You did a wonderful job in keeping everyone in character, without having the emotions seem too overboard. Again, great job!

Author's Response: :) Hehe.

 

Nothing More or Less by RagingStorm71117
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Harry tries to cope with the death of someone close to him. HBP spoilers.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2275 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/13/05 Updated: 10/13/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/14/05 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Beautiful! I think I will never be amazed at how well your writing envokes the right level of emotions. Great job.

 

Summary: James finally asks Lily out. The problem is, he chose a roundabout way of getting to her. Plus, he stands a high risk of breaking his neck in the process. Told from Remus Lupin's POV. Rated 3rd-5th years for slight language and mild innuendo on James's part. One-shot.


A/N: Quick note to all: I am sorry, but there are no plans for a sequel for PC. I hate to disappoint you all, but I feel that the story is better standing alone, leaving the rest to your imaginations.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2497 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/22/05 Updated: 10/22/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 03/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Prongs Complex

First off, congrats on having this one-shot featured in the chat. It truly was a wonderful read, and one of my definite favorites. I think one of your best things in this story was the POV. Using Remus was a wonderful choice, in my opinion, and I want to congratulate you on pulling everything off realistically and belieavably.

I also think your story has just the right amount of humor, and I really enjoyed reading it. Another of my favorite parts was the ending; it truly was sweet and hilarious at the same time, and I found myself laughing hysterically when I read the last line. It was wonderful!

I definitely look forward to reading more of your work, and again, congratulations on being featured in the chat. (It was also great talking with you in the Mod/Author chat.)



Author's Response: Thanks, I was really honored! It was great talking with you, too. I always seem to articulate my thoughts better in text than in real life, which I suppose is why I'm here right now.

 

One Last Tender Lie by GringottsVault711
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Siobhan revisits her past, in his prison cell. Companion shot to 'Year Seven: Harry Potter & The Blood Debt', Pre-HBP Warning: This story contains a pairing between a young woman and a significantly older man. If this isn't your cup of tea, I'd advise staying away.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 2959 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/22/05 Updated: 10/22/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 03/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: One Last Tender Lie

Oh my, oh my, oh my. Is there any way to put into words the things I love about this story, not to mention this pairing? Well, I'll give it a shot, anyway.

Firstly, I absolutely love your characterisation of both Siobhan and Lucius. Siobhan is one of, if not the most, realistic and believable OC that I've read in HP fan fiction. There are just enough faults and good qualities/skills that make the mix of her personality perfect -- absolutely believable and in no way phony, if you know what I mean.

Lucius, also, has wonderful portrayal in your writing. You keep that aristocratic and prideful manner about him in everything, while at the same time showing humanity there as well.

I love your character interaction in this story, though. The emotions of Siobhan are vividly portrayed, and it is extremely easy for a reader to connect with her -- feel as she's feeling, etc.

The dialogue is wonderful as well. There's nothing that seems too forced or unnatural, in my opinion, and it all just goes perfect with the two characters; Lucius maintains that level of power and arrogance, while Siobhan's inner confusion is manifested brilliantly. There's wonderful use of internal struggle in this piece as she battles against desire, regret, and a whole multitude of human emotions.

I also felt that your ending was especially poignant. It was simple, yet very emotional at the same time, and I absolutely loved it.

(I did, however, notice a few typos through the story, mostly just where a "the" or an "a" was missing, but since that was basically the only criticism I could up with -- and it's nothing major -- then that's saying something about this story.)

See, I told you it would be hard for me to put into words my feelings on this piece. It's written with utter skill and wonderfulness that all I can do is say "Fantastic Job!" once again.

I truly look forward to reading more of this pairing (which I first discovered in Sins of the Father, actually.)

~Megan

 

A Death Eater's Christmas by the nutty imp
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: 12 Days of Christmas - HP Style - Focuses on Barty Crouch Jr.

(Although I don’t really think that this is that disturbing… I think I still ought to post a warning.)
Warning: This is not a happy and humourous Christmas-sy tale. It gives us a brief look at the disturbing deranged mind of Barty Crouch Jr.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 817 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/26/05 Updated: 11/26/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/14/05 Title: Chapter 1: Winter Snows Challenge # 4

Very good! I really enjoyed your view of Barty Crouch, Jr. (It was quite realistic.) Also, the way you had Crouch, Sr. continue on with his version of the song was wonderful, and also very unique. It shows the difference between the father and the son, and adds a certain "something" (not quite sure what, though), to the story. Again, good job!

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad to hear you enjoyed this some-what dark Christmas tale. :)

 

Echoes in the Ice Cold Night by Stormy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Written for the Winter Snows Challenge one – ‘Redemption’.

31st December, 1981

He was alone; the glittering silver of the frosted grounds eerily silent in the darkness. Somewhere, beyond the walls of the castle, someone else was alone with nothing but the shadows of the past and memories of unimaginable horrors echoing for eternity.

If only Hallowe'en had never happened...

A one-shot tale of trust, betrayal and learning to trust again. Please R/R!

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3002 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/02/05 Updated: 12/02/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/14/05 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

All I can say is "Wow!" That was a very wonderful story, and you did a great job in keeping both Snape and Dumbledore in character. (From the summary, I didn't expect those to be your two characters, but the story turned out terrific.) Your details and descriptions are fabulous and really help create a vivid picture in a reader's mind. I have to say I really enjoyed this description: The moon, an almost painful, freezing white shone its eerie glow over the landscape to illuminate a small hut in the grounds and the edge of the towering Quidditch pitch. The lake was as still as glass, fragile and vulnerable. It was a great way to set the emotion in the scene, without being too vague or conventional, and not to mention it was very skillful writing. (Great job on that!)

Author's Response: First off, apologies for taking a long time to respond - life has been insanely busy recently!

I'm so pleased you liked it! I'm happy that you thought I got the descriptions vivid as it was something I was trying to focus on. Also, I was trying to keep it emotional without going completely off the rails and losing the plot completely. As for skilled writing, all I can say in response is that I am honoured :)

Thank you so much for your review - I've got a huge grin on my face now!

~Stormy x

 

Saying Goodbye by potterfan226
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: One late night, Hermione receives a letter that changes her life forever. However, when it finally sinks in, she realizes that saying goodbye to the two people who she loved the most, isn't as easy as it was made out to be.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2065 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/02/05 Updated: 01/31/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 03/04/06 Title: Chapter 1: Saying Goodbye

Great story; I loved it a lot. Reading the summary, I have to admit that at first I thought you would be writing about Harry and Ron, but I can see how the parents make sense. Using the parents also makes the story even more original than it already is as well. It was such a sad story, but the characterization was completely realistic and believable, which I think is sometimes one of the most difficult aspects for writers to achieve, and you've done so perfectly. Again, great story, and sad, just like it needs to be.

I look forward to reading more of your works, as this one was really good.

Signed,

Megan

 

Summary: This is for the Winter Snows Angels Challenge, and is entered for Gryffindor House. The days have been bleak for our Marauders. Sirius is in Askaban, Peter is *supposedly* dead, James and Lily are *for sure* dead, and poor Remus is spending the holidays alone in his house (if you can even call it that). But a surprise visit from a nearby villager will make Remus realize that, in the words of Albus Dumbledore, “happiness can be found even in the darkest of times.”

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2036 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/06/05 Updated: 12/06/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/14/05 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

Wow! That's all I can say . . . Wow. That was beautiful, just extremely beautiful and heart-wrenching. (It almost reminds me of the song "Angels among us" or something like that. :) The ending was wonderful --- I absolutely loved it! When Remus finally yells out that he forgives Sirius, clutching the picture in his hand, I actually had tears in my eyes (which is not a very easy thing for a story to make me do). That's probably the biggest compliment that I can give to you on this beautiful and lovely piece. :) As soon as I finished it, the story went right into my "Favorites." Other than a few typos and formatting errors on the paragraphs (which didn't really take away from the story too much), the piece was fantastic. I definitely give it a 10, and best of luck in the challenge.

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks! This is only my first story, so I'm hoping it'll do pretty well in the challenge. Thank you again for your support!

 

New Year, New Hope by pandafan81
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Response to Winter Snows Challenge # 1 for Hufflepuff House. The cold and the wet went unnoticed to the lone person wandering the streets. The numbness he felt had nothing to do with the chill. His heart was frozen. For him, this day, of all days, was the worst day of the year. How could anyone see this day as a cause for celebration? Certainly Voldemort was gone, but so was the one person who made life worth living. Seven years had passed since Voldemort’s downfall; but so had seven years since her smile was last seen. How anyone could pluck up the courage to celebrate this day was beyond him.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2985 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/09/05 Updated: 12/09/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/12/05 Title: Chapter 1: New Year, New Hope

EXCELLENT! I really can't say more than that. Your story was wonderful, and the descriptions --- both of the scene after the final battle and the present day with Ron and Harry in the rain --- all were extremely vivid. I could picture these scenes so well in my mind that there were actually tears in my eyes. (Very few stories can actually get me teared up, so the fact that your's did is probably the biggest compliment I can give you.) Honestly, great story: I rate it a ten! Signed, megan_lupin

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Your high praise is a real compliment. I am very honored you came over to read it and leave such a wonderful review!

 

Difficult by orange_balloon
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: After the war, things are difficult for Harry. He has removed himself to a quiet corner of New England with Ron, Hermione, and Ginny. All four of them struggle to get through their first Christmas season together while missing so many of their family members and friends.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3539 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/12/05 Updated: 12/12/05


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 12/18/05 Title: Chapter 1: Difficult ~ one-shot

Hey, I just found and read your story today, and I have to say that it is fabulous. It has slightly humorous parts (such as Hermione scolding Ron with the cookies :) ), but it also has some more serious parts (such as Hermione worrying about Harry and Ron.)

Also, I love the style in which you wrote this piece, showing everyone's point of view at different times. You also did a wonderful job with staying in character with all of them --- Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny. Harry is just like I always imagined him being after the end of the war (sort of withdrawn, and having a lot of things to work through), and Hermione reacts in the perfect way, worrying about her friends and wanting to help them. Ron and Ginny were also written fabulously (and I'm so glad that Ginny stayed with Harry through everything; I always knew she would.) Also, I love Ginny's gift; it was immensely touching, and definitely pulled on one's heart.

I didn't see anything major in terms of grammar mistakes or other typos (everything was done beautifully). Again, great job on this lovely piece.

PS: I absolutely LOVED Mr. Christmas! That was so hilarious, yet so sweet at the same time :) .

Signed,

Megan



Author's Response: I'm glad you felt that everyone was in character as I was very concerned with making sure their reactions were in line with canon. I wanted to make sure they were more grown up, but not too different.

Thanks you so much for the thoughtful review, megan_lupin!

 

The Phoenix Speaks by Slian Martreb
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Fawkes reflects.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1047 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/24/06 Updated: 01/24/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 02/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Phoenix Speaks

The Phoenix Speaks by Slian Martreb

Hello.

First off, I wanted to say how much I enjoyed this one-shot. It was a very unique point of view to tell a story in, and I think that was one of the best aspects of this tale -- its uniqueness, really.

Overall, I think it was very good, and I particularly liked the first few paragraphs of the story. The imagery created in such simple lines is wonderful, and employing the opposites, for lack of a better word, to describe the age was fabulous. Lines like I am as old as the sun and the moon. as well as many others, just really help in creating a feeling of weariness, yet wisdom at the same time.

I did, however, notice a few minor typos, (and some of this might just be me reading too much into something).

he allowed himself be led on -- he allowed himself to be led on

Dumbledore was dead and the phoenix flew. -- Most of the story is told in a first-person point of view, and I'm not sure if you meant to use phoenix here, or if it was a slip into third person. To me, it felt out of place, like it was a slip up.

not even one as myself -- should this have the word "such" in it? -- not even one such as myself -- Personally, I think the "such" makes it flow a bit better.

Other than that, and to reiterate what I said earlier, I think this one-shot was very well-written, and by using first-person point of view, it made the story even deeper than had it been written in third.

Well done, overall.

~Megan

Author's Response:
Thank you. I do try to tell stories differently than anyone else....

Thank you for the lengthy review and the concrit.

 

Summary: As Harry begins his quest for the remaining horcruxes, his world is turned completely upsidedown by the return of Severus Snape, and Harry learns more than he ever thought possible about Snape, his parents, and the burning question of Dumbledore's death.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Self Injury, Violence

Word count: 90000 Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Published:
01/30/06 Updated: 08/09/08


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 02/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Other Side

Hello, Stacey.

For weeks, I've seen the banner to this story, and wanted to read it, and now, I'm glad that I started reading (though I can't finish tonight due to school work). If the rest of the story is as good as this first chapter is, I can easily see this as becoming a great favourite of mine.

First off, I love the way that you start off right in the beginning with Snape and Draco, yet names aren't mentioned to much later on. I really like that sort of unknown factor (though most know that it's Snape and Draco near the beginning, just with the other descriptions and such), but I've always liked it when authors sort of hold off on revealing the name of the character right off in the story.

Secondly, I really like a lot of your descriptions in this chapter. They're just strong enough to create a vivid picture and tangible mood, yet it isn't overkilled or anything negative like that. I especially liked the descriptions of Spinner's End; you did a wonderful job on that.

Now, for a little nitpicking: I noticed a few typos here and there, though nothing drastically major or anything -- it's just the grammar and spelling nazi in me ;)

The dark-haired man lead his companion to the very last house.

The "lead" is this sentence needs to be "led," as I'm pretty sure you're not referring to the element.

the wounds on my arms with due to a duel with Draco,

I believe you meant to say "the wounds on my arms were due to a duel with Draco," rather than using the word "with."

Like I said, the little criticisms are nothing major or anything to get concerned about.

Finally, I just want to congratulate you on the wonderful and skillful characterization of all the characters used in this chapter. Snape and Draco were done so well, I would have believed Jo herself had written them in here, and everyone else -- Voldemort, Bella, Peter -- were also portrayed well. Characterization is a big thing for me, and I love reading stories that get the characters so well. Congratulations on that.

Last little comment: Great ending to the chapter. I loved the connection of going back to Harry; it's just perfect.

Okay, I think I've rambled for quite long enough (and I need to be doing RL school work). I definitely plan on reading more of this story, though.

~Megan



Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much :) Yeah, I noticed those things on my file on the computer, and fixed them there. I just forgot to fix them here. Thank you for reminding me, though :)

 

The Long Way Home by Seren
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: There have been lovers, and dreams, and plans that were made, but nothing will come of those particular ashes. Blaise waits at a train station. Blaise/Hermione

Categories: Hermione/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1863 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/08/06 Updated: 02/08/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Long Way Home

Hello.

Firstly, I just want to say that I found this story very enjoyable. I've only read one other Hermione/Blaise in the past, and it had sort of turned me off of the pairing, but I figured I'd give this one a shot, and I was DEFINITELY not disappointed.

Perhaps one of my favourite parts of the whole story was the beginning description. The way you described the train station, as well as lend evidence to memories and such (in the first paragraph alone) was a great way to start out. It was extremely well-written, and I really enjoyed it.

Another thing that I particularly liked was the telling of the story in the present tense, rather than the past. It was very interesting; I haven't read many stories like this, and the few that I have stumbled across usually don't hold my interest, and I have trouble getting into the tense. This one-shot, though brief, did not have such a problem, I'm glad to say.

Now, for just a bit of criticism:

As he leans back on the bench, resting his arm on the black, steel lace Victorian designs that the designer loved so much, he stole them from the Muggles, he taps his foot in rhthym with the rain that's falling on the roof overhead.

I found this sentence a bit lengthy, and the wording was a bit awkward in parts, in my opinion. "[T]he black, steel lace Victorian designs that the designer loved so much, he stole them from the Muggles, he taps his foot ..." This part is where I think the awkwardness comes in slightly, with the insertion of the thought concerning how the designer took the designs from Muggles and such. Right off the top of my head, I can't think of some exact way to change it, other than to maybe use a dash to sort of separate that thought: "[T]he black, steel lace Victorian designs -- The designer loved them so much, he stole them from Muggles -- he taps his foot in rhthym with the rain that's falling on the roof overhead." Or something like that, anyway.

Finally, another thing that I loved, though, was Blaises's characterisation, and how the story was told. It was basically just a lot of thoughts of Blaises's, yet such works extremely well, and I enjoyed it because of that. The scenes were described realistically and vividly -- It was very easy to visualize the arrival of the train, for instance, and really connect with Blaise at those sorts of points.

Overall, I congratulate you on a one-shot story that was an enjoyable read, and very well- and skilled-written fic.

~Megan

 

Summary: Tom believes he can seductively coax secrets from Dumbledore's most trusted student...

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 989 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/13/06 Updated: 02/13/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 03/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Dumbledore's Favourite Girl

Firstly, let me just say that I found this one-shot utterly fabulous, regardless of its short length. And now, onto a little more substance.

Your characterisation of both Tom and Minerva here was wonderfully skilled, and perfectly in-character, in my opinion. The manipulation, cunning, twisting, and such is present in Tom, and you don't have him go OOC in any way.

Minerva, too, was spot on, in my opinion. You had her still have that sort of Gryffindor-ness that one would expect, yet at the same time, she feels herself, for a moment, be caught up in Tom's twisting web of Slytherin-ness, if you know what I mean.

Another thing that I liked a great deal was the description that you used in this one-shot, particularly in the beginning of the story. Those opening paragraphs were wonderful, and my favourite part of it was probably the images of the candle and its flame being blown out by the wind before Minerva runs into Tom. It's like she lost the light before meeting the epitome of darkness, if you will. I thought that you achieved some wonderful symbolism and imagery right there.

Oh, like I said earlier, the characterisation was probably your best part in this story, and I just cannot get over how well you portrayed both characters. But I'm sure you don't want me stating the same things over and over again, do you?

To wrap up this review, I'll just congratulate you on a beautiful and wonderfully skilled piece of writing once again. You never disappoint.

~Megan

 

Prisoner 21431199 by Morwen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: He was innocent. That much he told himself over and over as he sat in his cell, and years later, it seemed that that was enough to keep him sane. But despite this, Azkaban left scars on Sirius that could never be healed. Part I is set when Sirius was in Azkaban.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4202 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/04/06 Updated: 03/04/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 10/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Part I

Gah, first off, let me say that I've had this one-shot in my favourites for lord knows how long, but never seemed to review -- and I've even read it multiple times. (But I'm always so *very* bad when it comes to leaving a review.)



Anyway, here's one for all the times that I've read this story, yet never managed a review. (And please forgive me if it sounds slightly disjointed, as I'm typing most of it up as I read through the fic.)



Firstly, I'll say that the very beginning is nice. The sort of general emotion in it, it almost seems mundane, in a way -- the guard's actions being robotic, really, and it's like nothing out of the ordinary.



I also like the way it's told in present tense, personally. Normally, I'm not a huge fan of it (as I've seen it done poorly one too many times), but you pull it off very well here. It makes the piece even stronger, in my opinion, and I don't think past tense would have worked half as well with this fic as the present tense does.



In that life he had been Sirius Black; now he was only prisoner twenty-one, forty-three, eleven, ninety-nine. Very good line, here. There's a level of hopelessness, I guess, in it, and for so short a line in the fic, there's a good deal of power behind it, in terms of a loss of identity, really. *Hopes that makes sense*



But the memories flee like water in cupped hands. The image that this line produces is great, as well. I just really like the imagery here, and equating memories to water is interesting; it works well.



James’ glasses were lying smashed beside him. I like this, because the glasses seem like such a small detail, yet it's something that he remembers. People do that all the time, in terms of remembering those minor details to things.



Remus, eyes sought out in the crowd surrounding him and Peter, in the hope that he, at least would believe him. That look, of utter disappointment, of sorrow, disbelief, and hatred at what he, Sirius, was supposed to have done. This, too, is a great image/emotional scene. It has that one-last-hope-is-dashed feeling to it, if that makes sense. And the fact that, at this point, Remus is that last one who could/would believe him, and Sirius sees it destroyed; it's just an emotional image, I think.



I like your bit on Peter here, too. Sirius's views here are sort of the way that I've always felt he viewed the relationship of the Marauders, and with Peter as well. I can easily see him thinking that it had to be a joke, that what happened *couldn't* be real.



Adding in the bit about Peter pelting the others with snowballs was a nice touch, too.



How could anyone believe that he had killed James? I like this, just because it's the one, main question that I, myself, have always had about the whole thing. *What* happened to make everyone think that Sirius would betray James? It's like no one questioned the matter, no one looked for something that they might have been missing, and I've just always wondered *why* they didn't.



He stopped counting the days months ago. This line, too, reflects a sense of hopelessness, a sense of loss, if you will, and I think it really helps to capture Sirius's emotion and character very well during this time. Too many fics don't show this part of him -- It's almost like they'll write Azkaban as not really affecting Sirius much at all, but a line like this shows the descent into that area, shows that Sirius didn't just immediately fight off the Dementors' effects and cling to innocence. It's a good thing, I think, to show this side of him.



Sometimes he wonders if he is losing his mind. Same thing with what I said about the previous line. That descent into hopelessness, that wondering of sanity/insanity, etc. works really well in this fic.



I like the way the fic is divided in by the repeating numbers, and that the numbers *are* the "21431199". It, like the hopelessness and whatnot, help to show that level of emotion, that slipping further and further from his past, if you will.



Sirius had been vain about his hair. Snuffles doesn’t care. It seems you were going for portraying a sense of losing identity, a separation from the past. You're really achieving these levels here, I think, and hitting Sirius's character perfectly.



They used to bother Sirius though. Again, that separation, that idea that Sirius is the past identity, Snuffles (or Prisoner 21431199) is the present identity. Like I said earlier, I really think it works well, extraordinarily well.



Ah, I do like the fact that Fudge confered "with the assistant" before giving Sirius the paper. It's a bit of humour in this story, and it's just something that seems *so* Fudge-like.



The only thing that doesn't seem to work as well is Fudge's attitude. I guess he just seems a little *too* jovial, a little *too* light-hearted, for being in Azkaban. At the very least, I'd just see him being a bit more drawn, as well as a bit more distant (or even slightly cold) in talking to Sirius. After all, to the entire world, Sirius is nothing but a mass murderer and right-hand of Voldemort. I just don't see Fudge speaking as lightly or civily with him, but that's just my opinion.



For the first time in twelve years, Sirius felt alive. The reverting back to "Sirius" here after using "Snuffles" is a nice way to show the change in his character, in my opinion. It's a good way to show the 'prisoner' part of him being suppressed by that of his old self, the 'Sirius' part of him, the part from his past, if you will.



Perhaps he will think it over for another day or so. I like this line, showing a bit of hesitancy in Sirius. Too many writers just want to make the whole 'escape' thing as easy as possible, and don't work through emotions to this degree, but having Sirius hesitate for a bit makes it all the more *real*, makes his character all the more *human*, if you know what I mean.



Your description of his escape, especially the paragraph where Sirius finally gets outside and his senses become overwhelmed with everything, is just wonderful! Using words like "alive" and "heaven" to describe it give a clear separation from those words generally used to describe Azkaban, that of "death" and "hell", mainly. It was a nice thing to use their opposites, I think.



I also love the point when the memories return. You wrote it in such a way that makes it sort of emotional, in a way, and it just makes the reader give a cheer when that moment of happiness, of relief, of freedom comes, if you will.



But, perhaps one of my favourite lines throughout the whole fic is that ending statement:



Sirius is alive once more, prisoner twenty-one, forty-three, eleven, ninety-nine left behind in the foaming surf.



I think this line works perfectly, not just in the story, but is a GREAT way to end the piece. All through the fic, there were those moments with losing the identity; things like "Snuffles" or "Prisoner 21431199" replacing that of "Sirius". Those things were like a running theme throughout the story, and to end it with a line like this, with the 'return' of "Sirius", is just brilliant.



Now, since I wanted to make this a bit more rounded, there are a few nit-picky things that I noticed:



watching at the light through his small window I think the "at" should be "as" here.


laughs at the sheer insanity of it all, A bit nit-picky, perhaps, but I wouldn't have used "insanity of it all" so soon after using it in the previous paragraph. Just stopping with "insanity" or something perhaps would have worked better, in my opinion.



forgotten corner of his mind Again, a bit nit-picky, but the repeated use of "mind" after using it at the beginning of the sentence, just a few words back, isn't really needed. Something like "head" might have worked better, just so as to change it up.



the same small cell for the past twelve, Um, do you mean to have a "years" after the word, "twelve" in here?



Yes, some are typos, of course, but the beta in me just couldn't let these pass without mentioning them ;) .



Like I've mentioned repeatedly, though, I love this story, and it remains to be one of my favourites! The writing is absolutely superb (and I'm jealous at times with it), and your characterisation of Sirius is just great, without question. You seemed to hit all the aspects of his personality in terms of portraying him at this moment in his life, and I applaud you on that.



Well, I hope this (lengthy) review is enough for all the times that I (forgot) to review this fic!



~Megan

 

Only Rain by Noldo
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: Sirius had always hated rain.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 845 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/17/06 Updated: 03/19/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 02/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Only Rain

First off, allow me to say that I absolutely love your writing, not just in this story, but in your other works as well. You have a great talent in telling the story very powerfully and . . . Oh, I'm at a loss for words to describe this story and what I think of it.

I guess I'll just say that I think this story is wonderful. Very powerfully told, yet you don't drag the things out until they become dull, in a way. You're characterisation of Sirius is so insightful, and I just love the connections made to the rain. I've always felt rain is a great detail to include in stories, though it does tend to be in danger of being overkilled at times. This particular stories holds all the power in the symbolism of the rain and how Sirius feels towards it.

Like I said, this story is just wonderful. I really don't have any particular criticism about it. Though it's short, I think it works, and it probably would have hurt if made longer.

Again, and I can't seem to say this enough, I loved it, as well as all of your writing. There's a reason that you've been on my favourites for a while, after all!

~Megan

 
Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 02/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Only Rain

First off, allow me to say that I absolutely love your writing, not just in this story, but in your other works as well. You have a great talent in telling the story very powerfully and . . . Oh, I'm at a loss for words to describe this story and what I think of it.

I guess I'll just say that I think this story is wonderful. Very powerfully told, yet you don't drag the things out until they become dull, in a way. You're characterisation of Sirius is so insightful, and I just love the connections made to the rain. I've always felt rain is a great detail to include in stories, though it does tend to be in danger of being overkilled at times. This particular stories holds all the power in the symbolism of the rain and how Sirius feels towards it.

Like I said, this story is just wonderful. I really don't have any particular criticism about it. Though it's short, I think it works, and it probably would have hurt if made longer.

Again, and I can't seem to say this enough, I loved it, as well as all of your writing. There's a reason that you've been on my favourites for a while, after all!

~Megan

 

The Ravenclaw Common Room by Slian Martreb
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: The war is done and a young girl finds herself in what will be her home for the next seven years. What she meets there will amaze, astound and...confuse?

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1710 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/30/06 Updated: 04/30/06


Reviewer: megan_lupin Signed
Date: 06/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Ravenclaw Common Room

Great story. It has some good aspects of humor, but the story doesn't lose anything else in the process.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I\'m glad you enjoyed my little crack!fic

 
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