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Author's Response: Hehe. Thanks!
Good use of sensuality and emotion. The pain and longing is real and felt by the reader. The lingering hope at the end is excellently done. Good work!
Very sad, but not overemotional. Well-written and real. Could do with a bit more background throughout the story, but otherwise, good work.
Author's Response: Thankyou, glad you enjoyed :)
Very real and easy to relate to. My oldest brother is eight years older than me, and even though I love him, he is very difficult to connect with. Good start to a story and nice cliff-hanger and the end!
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought it was easy to relate to - I'm a middle child and have two siblings very close in age to me, so I've always wondered what it would be like having a larger gap. I'm glad you liked the cliffhanger :) and I hope you like the rest of the fic (which will hopefully be up soon).
Good work! A good little piece on independence and morals. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. -Claire
Wonderful! Excellent use of the present tense. very emotional, but not ostentatious. I have often identified with Luna, and the fact that you have given her a real teenage experience and not just some comic scenes is very connectible.
Author's Response: Thank you! I find Luna really identifiable as well; most girls only say they connect with Hermione or Ginny, but Luna is an openly eccentric and fanciful sort of person that I think a lot of us fantasy-reading types can relate with. That's why I wanted to write about her. This originally wasn't going to be a romance at all, actually. :P
Even the jubilance of a Quidditch Cup could become taxing on Percy's nerves, but it seemed almost cruel when he couldn't even take a shower in peace, despite it being well after midnight.
Driven out of his own dorm and to the prefects' bathroom that he scarcely ever visits, Percy finds that the room hadn't yet been vacated by its prior occupant.
Good emotional situation. I like that you made Percy seem like a real person rather than a pompous ass for once. I like the ending.
I never thought Percy was all that bad until he started drinking the Ministry cool-aid. That's what turned him into the raging jackass from GoF/OotP. He was always a bit uptight, but we'd never really seen him around people who he was responsible for supervising. No reason to think he wasn't a decent bloke before that.
Thanks for stopping in, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :)
Well, Miss Natalie, you have written an excellent story. Tom Riddle is very real to me-- not too unemotional. The path he is going to take is made very clear in this story. Good idea for a story... though it is very morbid.
Author's Response: This response is coming too late, but seriously, thanks for the review. :D I'm glad you finished reading it and left a few words behind even though you found it morbid.
Very moving and realistic. I love the way you captured the boys' emotions at having to end their relationship.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and that their feelings came across well. I really appreciate the lovely review! ~Gina :)
Wow. Depressing, but realistic. Second half is a bit confusing, but I suppose that's what you'd expect from the head of a crazy person.
Author's Response: The second half is the drabble I entered. :D Yes, it is meant to be confusing, but I hope there was some logic in the confusion. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Good poetry. Captures a lot in a few words.
Author's Response: Thank you. I enjoyed writing it. ~Carole~
This is a really cute story! I love the idea of Arthur thinking about his princess. The only thing is that Arthur's thoughts seem a little too matter-of-fact and more narration. Some more emotion would give this story a little more shine. But it's a good idea and you should keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad that you liked it! I will really think about adding in a few more "Arthur-like" thoughts. Thanks for the input!
Deep. Inspiring. Good idea!
Author's Response: Thank you. Fleur did take on a lot when she took up with Bill. I'm not sure she gets enough credit. ~Carole~
Beautifully depressing. Good copy of Cummings' style. Very realistic. Love the line "your many faces yet one face."
Author's Response: Thanks! :) I'm happy to hear you found it a good copy of Cummings' style. He's an intriguing poet.
It began with enemiesand ended with the best of friends.
A tale of friendship told in two parts, starring Persephone Andreou and Valiant Bloodmoon
Great start! Love the pranks they're playing and can't wait to find out what Valiant is planning! Did she buy from Fred and George?
Author's Response: Thank you very much! The two are definitely mischievous imps, aren't they? I'll leave you to wonder what Valiant is planning, but it'll be the best prank yet! And you're very clever. She did indeed buy from Fred and George!
Cute. But reusing pranks is always a no-no.
Author's Response: Thank you. And every prank I used is a classic prank that has been around for ages. I didn't copy from anyone.
Excellent story. Very real emotions. I love how you portrayed this relationship.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the story because there's a few more things burrowing away in my mind regarding this trio. ~Carole~
Very adorable. Lily and James are sweet, but not unrealistically so. It's a very real moment and your use of detail makes it even more so. As a debut fic, it is excellent and I can't wait to read more from you!
Author's Response: Thanks for the praise! I knew it could be considered a fluff piece, but glad it seemed plausible. Currently waiting for one of the stories I'm working on to be edited, so hopefully I won't disappoint with future works.
What was in the vault numbered seven hundred and thirteen (it's not spotted earmuffs, for sure)? Who took it? What do Knumples and Flimmers have to do with all of this? Did Lord Voldemort die because of trying to breed Heliopaths with giants?
Xenophilius Lovegood believes that sleuthing is just like reporting-- only with fewer exclamation marks. He intends to find out the answers to all these questions, communicating with a mysterious student from Hogwarts. Will he uncover truths that should be hidden? Will he solve the case? Will the Quibbler break the news? Read all about it in What's in the Third Floor Corridor!?--
*Letters, or in other words, words.
This is Sainy Swiftfoot of Hufflepuff writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 1.
Very clever. Of course Xeno would run a story on the vault. I must admit that your anagrams didn't register, though I had a suspicion that it would have to be the twins to come up with something that clever. Your bogus letters were pure comedy with enough intelligence to be believable. Very good story!
I love the characterization of the Friar. He is a ghost we never give much thought to in the books except that he seems a lot more cheerful about being dead than most of the others. Your story gives a wonderful life and death to the man. I love the story of the baby and the idea of three boys running into the forest on dares. Very well done indeed.
Author's Response: G'day Thank you, I worked hard to get the fellow Hufflepuff correct. It was the fact that he is a cheerful ghost that I wrote him like that. ...xXxLove SandyxXx...