In the Battle of Hogwarts, Tonks has nothing left but promises to keep.
I'll be back. I promise.
Good use of second person. Emotions are very real. Good story all around.
Author's Response: Hooray, first review already!
Thanks so much for all of your lovely comments, and taking the time to read and review. It's much appreciated :)
Summary: Remus deals with the aftershocks of living a lie. Remus/Sirius, written for a prompt on The Muse Bunny: "Never chase a lie. Let it alone, and it will run itself to death" -Lyman Beecher
Interesting analysis. You're good at details.
Author's Response: Thankyou :)
Summary: ‘I’m half and half,’ said Seamus. ‘Me dad’s a Muggle. Mam didn’t tell him she was a witch ’til after they were married. Bit of a nasty shock for him.’
You'd love to hear this story, wouldn't you?
Thanks to Emma (Amortentia_x) for the Irishpick! :D And I am not J.K.Rowling, though they all belong to her.
Nominated for a QSQ in the Best Humour category.
Author's Response: Hehe. Thanks!
This isn't love. This is an absorbing, compelling, compulsive addiction. Your thirst for him is unquenchable and all-consuming, yet his presence only makes you yearn for him more. There is no antidote, no remedy to these feelings. He is your drug. You are the addict. And the high he gives you is incomparable to any narcotic-induced hit.
Good use of sensuality and emotion. The pain and longing is real and felt by the reader. The lingering hope at the end is excellently done. Good work!
Summary: "Sirius is slipping, Remus thinks, and it doesn't matter how hard he tries to hold him back, in the end it's no use." Remus/Sirius, written for the LiveJournal community 64damn prompts, for prompt #55, Landslide.
Very sad, but not overemotional. Well-written and real. Could do with a bit more background throughout the story, but otherwise, good work.
Author's Response: Thankyou, glad you enjoyed :)
Summary: Brothers were strange creatures.
For as long as Lily can remember, there has been a gap between her and James which she never felt with Albus. When Lily is kidnapped, will James prove her wrong?
A story about the discovery of what family really means.
Very real and easy to relate to. My oldest brother is eight years older than me, and even though I love him, he is very difficult to connect with. Good start to a story and nice cliff-hanger and the end!
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought it was easy to relate to - I'm a middle child and have two siblings very close in age to me, so I've always wondered what it would be like having a larger gap. I'm glad you liked the cliffhanger :) and I hope you like the rest of the fic (which will hopefully be up soon).
Andromeda Black was never as sweet or quiet as her little sister, nor as clever and bold as her older sister. Andromeda was never anything in particular. She certainly never imagined that she would someday betray her family.
Andromeda is just herself. And for Ted, that's enough.
Character Exploration Fic.
Good work! A good little piece on independence and morals. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. -Claire
Summary: Luna isn't a pretty girl who plays Quidditch. She's just a quirky little thing who loves the color orange and hearing stories; luckily, she's a very good listener. One-shot, LL/FW, character death.
Wonderful! Excellent use of the present tense. very emotional, but not ostentatious. I have often identified with Luna, and the fact that you have given her a real teenage experience and not just some comic scenes is very connectible.
Author's Response: Thank you! I find Luna really identifiable as well; most girls only say they connect with Hermione or Ginny, but Luna is an openly eccentric and fanciful sort of person that I think a lot of us fantasy-reading types can relate with. That's why I wanted to write about her. This originally wasn't going to be a romance at all, actually. :P
Even the jubilance of a Quidditch Cup could become taxing on Percy's nerves, but it seemed almost cruel when he couldn't even take a shower in peace, despite it being well after midnight.
Driven out of his own dorm and to the prefects' bathroom that he scarcely ever visits, Percy finds that the room hadn't yet been vacated by its prior occupant.
Good emotional situation. I like that you made Percy seem like a real person rather than a pompous ass for once. I like the ending.
I never thought Percy was all that bad until he started drinking the Ministry cool-aid. That's what turned him into the raging jackass from GoF/OotP. He was always a bit uptight, but we'd never really seen him around people who he was responsible for supervising. No reason to think he wasn't a decent bloke before that.
Thanks for stopping in, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :)
Summary: There is a boy in this orphanage, and something is not quite right about him.Written as a birthday present for lily_evans34/Rachel, who is lovely, talented and wonderfully funny. :) I hope you have a great day. Nominated for a QSQ in the Dark/Angsty category. Thanks to Kara and Carole for their help! This story would still be full of holes if it weren't for you two. DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling is not me. :p
Well, Miss Natalie, you have written an excellent story. Tom Riddle is very real to me-- not too unemotional. The path he is going to take is made very clear in this story. Good idea for a story... though it is very morbid.
Author's Response: This response is coming too late, but seriously, thanks for the review. :D I'm glad you finished reading it and left a few words behind even though you found it morbid.
Summary: As his relationship with Lily Evans picks up, James is forced to confront an equally important bond with one of his best friends and the future they face together.
Very moving and realistic. I love the way you captured the boys' emotions at having to end their relationship.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and that their feelings came across well. I really appreciate the lovely review! ~Gina :)
Summary: They were returning to a life full of hope and dreams, but they never got there.Originally written for the TTB Brawl:Round 3. Inspired by the quote ""When we get home, Frank, then there'll be kisses, kisses with dreams in them. Kisses that come from life, not death." - The Postman Always Rings Twice Nominated for a QSQ in the Best General Category.
Wow. Depressing, but realistic. Second half is a bit confusing, but I suppose that's what you'd expect from the head of a crazy person.
Author's Response: The second half is the drabble I entered. :D Yes, it is meant to be confusing, but I hope there was some logic in the confusion. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Summary: What happens when Scorpius Malfoy takes on Lily Potter in the air?
Based on my fic 'High', this sonnet was originally written for The Diamond Challenge in Poetry, Anyone? over at the MNFF beta boards.
Good poetry. Captures a lot in a few words.
Author's Response: Thank you. I enjoyed writing it. ~Carole~
Summary: Ginny Weasley has always been Arthur's princess. As her wedding proceeds, Arthur takes a look at her life from birth to twenty. Will Arthur agree that Harry is the right prince for his princess?
This is a really cute story! I love the idea of Arthur thinking about his princess. The only thing is that Arthur's thoughts seem a little too matter-of-fact and more narration. Some more emotion would give this story a little more shine. But it's a good idea and you should keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad that you liked it! I will really think about adding in a few more "Arthur-like" thoughts. Thanks for the input!
Summary: This was a war she'd had little part in. But her duty lay towards her husband and her adopted country.
How does Fleur Weasley feel when she's departing for battle?
This poem was written for The Copycat Challenge on the MNFF beta forums. The idea was to take inspiration from a favourite poem. I chose The Soldier by Rupert Brooke.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling or Rupert Brooke (who died far too young in a foreign land).
Deep. Inspiring. Good idea!
Author's Response: Thank you. Fleur did take on a lot when she took up with Bill. I'm not sure she gets enough credit. ~Carole~
Summary: Before Remus leaves for the Battle, what goes on in his mind?Winner of the Copycat Challenge; written after the style of e e cumming's it may not always be so;and i say.
Beautifully depressing. Good copy of Cummings' style. Very realistic. Love the line "your many faces yet one face."
Author's Response: Thanks! :) I'm happy to hear you found it a good copy of Cummings' style. He's an intriguing poet.
It began with enemiesand ended with the best of friends.
A tale of friendship told in two parts, starring Persephone Andreou and Valiant Bloodmoon
Great start! Love the pranks they're playing and can't wait to find out what Valiant is planning! Did she buy from Fred and George?
Author's Response: Thank you very much! The two are definitely mischievous imps, aren't they? I'll leave you to wonder what Valiant is planning, but it'll be the best prank yet! And you're very clever. She did indeed buy from Fred and George!
Cute. But reusing pranks is always a no-no.
Author's Response: Thank you. And every prank I used is a classic prank that has been around for ages. I didn't copy from anyone.
Summary: On the run for nine months, Dean spent his time deliberately not thinking of his friends as he struggled to survive, but he could not control his thoughts at night.
In his final year, Seamus longed for release from the daily torture of the Carrows' regime.
In her room, Parvati had made a list of all the things she wished to do if she survived, but wasn’t sure she could carry it through.
After the Battle, the three of them relax by the lake.
Who knew their thoughts had been so intertwined?
Disclaimer: I am no JKR, JFK, J-Lo or whatever initials are famous.
Jess (ToBeOrNotToHaveTheLongestUserNameOnTheBoard), this is for you. Happy Birthday, mate.
Ta, lots, Gina, for the speedy beta job and Emma for the Irish help.
Excellent story. Very real emotions. I love how you portrayed this relationship.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the story because there's a few more things burrowing away in my mind regarding this trio. ~Carole~
Summary: Lily and James Potter have recently learned that they are expecting their first bundle of joy. Despite the threat that hangs over their world, they each have their own desires for what their offspring will be.
(This is a one-shot in honor of all the parents out there who would lay down their lives for their children. Thank you!)
Very adorable. Lily and James are sweet, but not unrealistically so. It's a very real moment and your use of detail makes it even more so. As a debut fic, it is excellent and I can't wait to read more from you!
Author's Response: Thanks for the praise! I knew it could be considered a fluff piece, but glad it seemed plausible. Currently waiting for one of the stories I'm working on to be edited, so hopefully I won't disappoint with future works.